funkyasian's random poetry and other writings...

[The Pineapple Head]

Steph - I am so not biased...thank you very much. I call it like I see it, good or bad. Your writing is definately of the good and I have said as much for months...even before we were really friends.....hence only obligated to be honest. I'm glad that you're posting, because if I'm on the money here, you're doing it for you, the best reason.



As for my writing, just like myself, a work in progress I suppose. But I do thank you for your encouragement as far as that's concerned, because I respect your opinion both as a writer and friend.



Diana



By-the-by - When exactly did you tell me NOT to get the flu shot and have I mentioned how much I positively hate typing with one hand?

Early one morning the sun was shining, I was laying in bed - Wondering if she changed at all, if her hair was still red.

[SquishyTrishy]

Hey Guys, This is a poem that i wrote for my baby, *grins*

this is for you honey.



For Always

By Trish



Slide your fingers up inside

Slide them through my slick soul

Let me feel your smile

Brush against my cheek

Nothing was ever this good

Not in the heavens

But in these eyes

Breathe me…



HEy..just wanted to thank all you guys for reading your poetry *grins* hope you like mine. Huggles..

~I am my beloved's and my beloved is mine!~ Soul Shatter

Edited by: SquishyTrishy at: 11/21/02 6:57:40 pm

[funkyasian]

quick responses:



ninjitsugrrl - well, the posting fiend has come to a stand-still...unfortunately, rl is kicking my ass...12 hour work days...*shudder* hopefully i'll get some time soon...Thanks!!



diana - - you know...flattery will get you everywhere... - i'll keep writing, you'll keep critiquing (is that spelled right?) - and you'll tell me when my writing begins to suck...deal?

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and last but not least, feedback on my trish's poem...



...i think that says it all...oh wait... *swoon*



steph



p.s. - i'll post soon...just have to get through a really rough week at work...sorry to all that's waiting...

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[TheWhiz]

Its been a long while since I was here so I missed the unveiling of a new poet!!

Well done to you for posting and sharing your work

I like the mixture of styles you have used in your poetry and writing. Your imagery is very vivid and your words convey many emotions- great work

Hope you continue to post your work.

[Tara22]

beautiful poem Trish!! Really!!! I loved the imagery



and the last line

Quote:

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Breathe Me

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*grins* love it!

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"Oh, sorry. Uhh, I forgot that that doesn't seem normal, to the rest of society. It's just, we, well, we both really like cows. Really like them. To the extent of wanting to buy one, when we're older." - The Crying Game (by Vix84)

[SquishyTrishy]

Hey



I am leaving this weekend and i am gonna be missing my baby lots. So i was trying to think of a speacil way to let her know that..so i thought maybe i could do this.



Missing

By Trish



I try to move

I try to breath

I try to see into your soul

I try to move closer



the need to feel

the need to love

the need to hold

the need to taste



you draw me forward

past the heavens

into your arms

into your love

into you..





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See you soon love..





Ps. I aplogize for any spelling errors..if you know me..u know my spelling is like dirt. Nice to walk on, bad to taste! (does that make any sense?)

~I am my beloved's and my beloved is mine!~ Soul Shatter

[SilverWingedNemesis]

Okay, that nightmare was just...... *shudders*



I like the poems... keep up the good work!!





~NICKOLE~

[ExtraFlameyWT]

Trish, that was beautiful... I'll talk to you soon.



Love,

Aimlet

Watch out for ankle-biters.

[funkyasian]

hi all...sorry i've been absent for so long...work has been absolutely kicking my bum...anyway, here's something new i wrote up while my beloved is off galavanting on the slopes posing as a snow bunny - Anyway, this is kinda rough but figured i'd post it...enjoy!



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A fleeting glance

A stolen touch

A timid smile

The desire to be close

The need to be one

Desire passes through feather kisses

Understanding flashes across visage so pure

Soft sighs resonate

The world in balance.

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thank you all for reading, i really really appreciate all the incredibly kind words you've given me (and trish)



~steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

Edited by: funkyasian at: 11/30/02 9:34:43 pm

[ExtraFlameyWT]

Hehe, Steph...you don't know what I'm laughing about!!! muahaha...



Anyway, as for the poem..beautiful as always...and if you don't believe it, I'll kick you in the knee!!! (and run) hehe



Wonderful job!!!



Love,

Aimlet

Watch out for ankle-biters.

[barnabasvamp]

As much as I love the poetry, I can't believe I missed the "coming out" party for our 2 new poets. Welcome..



The words thus far have been so expressive on both parts.

Steph- a little trip to the dark side never hurt anyone, and helps ease the burden.



Trish- you express your love so beautifully, wonderful to read...

BV

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[ExtraFlameyWT]

How about another poem? Pleeeeeeease? I won't kick you in the knee, cuz it would hurt too much for me to try and run away...stupid muscles being sore...*sigh* But, how about another poem?



Love,

Aimlet

Watch out for ankle-biters.

[funkyasian]

i've made it into an artform...so instead of doing what i'm supposed to, i'm writing thank you's...



TheWhiz - thank you so much for your compliments. i'm not very used to writing poetry so all feedback kinda boosts my confidence about this new direction i'm heading.



SilverWingedNemesis - i'm sorry if the nightmare piece was a little too graphic...i think i really felt those words as i was writing them...i'm glad you like them though...keep coming back...we promise we will try to not disappoint!



Aimee - hi aimlet...sweetie, i might not know what you're laughing about, but i do know that you can't kick me in the knee and run...hahaha...you're too sore to even move!! hahahaha...



barnabasvamp - *makes a sweeping bow* - thank you for your compliments, definitely much appreciated. i'm still fairly new at this whole poetry thing so any validation is a boost in my confidence. and you're right, a journey to the dark side does give good release...thanks for reading.



Aimee - hey aimlet again...hee hee...of course you won't run...you won't kick me either...cuz...you know i do have a protective trish to shelter me... - as for another poem, i'll try for something soon, promise!



anyway, that's all for now...thank you all for reading...



~steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[The Pineapple Head]

Steph - Tsk tsk tsk, bad you. I know a certain someone who is supposed to be working right now. As for me becoming an english teacher, not bloody likely. Educational institutions genrally perfer that members of the teaching faculty have degrees in....well something *grin*



The poem is definately of the good. It's like a delicious secret between two lovers. These ever important moments that mean everything. Definately liked it.



Diana

Early one morning the sun was shining, I was laying in bed - Wondering if she changed at all, if her hair was still red.

[ninjitsugrrl]

Like the latest poem. It is, I must say, a bit sexy! And I'm a sucker for sexy poems.

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[funkyasian]

is kicking my ass...sheesh i came into work at an ungodly hour...but i wrote something new...so i guess it balances out...first a couple of thank yous...



*pineapplehead* - hee hee...i do work...i just know how to temperate it with equal amounts of not doing work - anyway, you know a degree is optional right? hee hee...that's what i keep telling my boss



*ninjitsugrrl* - sexy is good isn't it? personally that's the way i prefer it...although some of the more sexy stuff i want to write...well...would make me blush too much



okay...and now, on with the show...



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Through the darkness

A shaft of light

A huddled mass

Desperate for warmth

Crawling towards salvation

Icy hands

Meets

Warmth unbound

Fingers entwined

Eyes closed

Future uncertain

Deep breath

Leap of faith.

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hope you enjoyed it...



~steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

Edited by: funkyasian at: 12/5/02 3:59:07 pm

[ExtraFlameyWT]

wow, Steph...I loved it

Quote:

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Eyes closed

Future uncertain

Deep breath

Leap of faith.

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i like those lines a lot...



beautiful job



Love,



Aimlet



p.s. Look! I'm first!

Watch out for ankle-biters.

[ninjitsugrrl]

Oooh, I could hardly pick my favorite lines. This was such a good one. It's short but so dense with meaning. I really liked, "Icy hands/Meets/Warmth unbound". I also liked the idea of an uncertain outcome and a leap of faith. Well done!

As for the more sexy stuff, go ahead! We'd like to see you blush.

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[tiredsoul]

Wow Steph, this was really good. I like the uncertainty that surrounds it. You've got a knack for the dark stuff. I like that.



--celia

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[TheWhiz]

This was a wonderful poem, you said so much in so little words. Its hard to pick any favourite lines as they all work together in the poem as a whole so well.

Keep up the great work!

[SquishyTrishy]

*WALKS UP TO HER BABY FROM BEHIND AND I WRAPES MY ARMS AROUND HER. LEANING DOWN KISSING HER NECK* I COULD LISTEN TO U FOREVER

~I am my beloved's and my beloved is mine!~ Soul Shatter

[funkyasian]

woohoo!! new font styles!!



anyway, first things first...as always, thank you's...



*ExtraFlameyWT - hey aimlet...as usual, i thank you for your kind words...heehee...look at me all formal...but i do thank you...it makes me feel all warm and fuzzy...



*ninjitsugrrl* - sorry, no sexy stuff this time...just me stuck in the boring world of corporate america...but soon, promise...i'm sure my muse will inspire something very soon...



*tiredsoul* - hi celia...i like to think i have a knack for the dark stuff...it may be easier to write than the happier stuff...but i'm glad you enjoyed it...



*TheWhiz* - thank you so much for your compliments...i'm always so scared to post things...you know...that "what if they hate it" kind of sentiment...and it means so much that i get positive feedback...much appreciated...



Again, thank you all for reading...



~steph

Edited by: DrG at: 12/19/02 2:10:33 pm

[SquishyTrishy]

my beautiful..urs words, u know how i feel..i love them..

~I am my beloved's and my beloved is mine!~ Soul Shatter

[The Pineapple Head]

Steph - I know you hate the beach, but your poem reminded me of something. I remember sitting on the stairs to the beach, had to be October or November...cold and rainy. This atmosphere that is normally attibuted to paradise, blue sky, blue water and endless horizons, replaced by darkness (in daylight), sky gray like prison walls, flooding the dull sand and insanely powerful waves, crushing everything. Destruction, violence and no trace of hope. I remember sitting there was hours in that storm, watching the chaos and you kind of brought me back there. Very powerful words.



Diana

Early one morning the sun was shining, I was laying in bed - Wondering if she changed at all, if her hair was still red.

[ExtraFlameyWT]

hi, steph...well, it WAS dark...but also great. umm... the line Oh god what have I done. really hits me...great poem...when do we get another?







that's just a cool smiley sorry...okay, i had fun with this post...now i think i'll stop before someone feels a distinct desire to kick me in the knee.



great job, steph...can't wait for another!



Love,



Aimlet

Edited by: DrG at: 12/13/02 2:39:40 pm

[tiredsoul]

Oooh Steph, another one. Yay! See, I never believed you actually listened in those meetings



This was great. I love

Quote:

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Tears from heaven

Doom looming just beyond

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Great lines there.



--celia

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[ninjitsugrrl]

Wow. Wonderful description and imagery!

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[bulldog tidnab]

Quote:

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Screams of agony breach the heavens

Desperation seeps through

Blood soaked hands

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Circles I say! Round and round me!

Truly amazing my dear.



*howl*

"Usually when people are sad, they don't do anything. They just cry over their condition. But when they get angry, they bring about a change."

- Malcolm X

[funkyasian]

- so here i am again...with a bit of thank yous...



*SquishyTrishy* - hi there beautiful girl of mine...well, it's about time you made an appearance in the thread...and here i thought we were sharing?! ...i'm sure we'll discuss this later? love you baby girl...



*The Pineapple Head* - hey diana...hmmm...what the hell were you doing at the beach in october/november? but you're right...i don't really like the beach...you know, the whole sand in my shoes thing really bothers me...but i'm glad you liked this...



*ExtraFlameyWT* - hola aimlet!! you think you can make the font just a bit smaller?? sheesh...and not to mention brighter?! - i'm glad you like this one...i know you like the other one better...but maybe i'll post that another day...maybe...and as for something new soon, actually i have a new one just on the horizon...so maybe it'll get posted today?



*tiredsoul* - celia - it's always nice to see you...so does our deal still stand? i post a new poem and you post an update to kali?! okay, not reall that fair of a trade off since my poems are only 10 lines...yours are...well, a whole lot more...okay okay...work is important too i suppose...i'm still trying to get my project working too...*glares at the stupid server*



*ninjitsugrrl* - - hee hee...i get a 'wow' - i'm so glad you liked it...hopefully the next ones i post will also elicit the same reaction...it's always easier to write emotions and images if you put yourself "there" and that's what i try for most of the time (and seemingly with some success). Thanks for reading.



*bulldog tidnab* - hola andi...no running circles...none, i can't even imagine walking circles around your poetry. your song by far beats anything i've written...but hey...i'm resolved to catch up at least...so watch out for me in your rearview!



okay...i suppose that's all for now...i do have a new poem i just written...it needs a little fine tuning, which is waht i'm probably going to be doing this afternoon instead of doing work. but i'm not sure when i'll get a chance to post it since i have an office party to attend tonight...anyway...stay well friends



~steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[ExtraFlameyWT]

WOOHOO FOR A POEM!!!



later, you say?



*looks at watch, waiting patiently...or rather IMpatiently*



love,

Aimlet



p.s. how's that for small?

Edited by: DrG at: 12/13/02 2:04:03 pm