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Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby Lantaris » Sat Dec 20, 2003 2:10 am

Erm... Hi! :bigwave As the threads title says I'm a lurker coming out into the open grounds of posting... I've never writen anything 'bout Will and Tare before, or published anything in english, But I ain't asking you to be soft with me. I'm asking you to tear my writing apart and criticize (sp?) anything you thing should be.



So... :paranoid please read?



Okay done now :) hope someone enjoys...



Title: Finding Always

Author: Well... me :)

Feedback: All welcomed

Spoilers: For now none. But it's set in an "ideal" season seven, meaning no Tara dying.

Summary: Souls come together everyday, around the world people split up every second. Some souls are made simply to fit with one another, and that is something nobody can get in the way of. Trouble has finally gotten Sunnydale, aparently for good, and as a group of people try on scaping trouble follows them.

Disclaimers: Don't own any of the Buffy the Vampire Slayer characters or places. I wish I ownd Faith though :drool

Rating: G, for the present moment

Couples: It'll be obviusly W/T... in a while

Note: Hope I didn't forget anything... :pray hehe





Prologue

The Fall





Dark clouds covered the sky above, silver blue lightings struck the ground every second. Nine shadows made their way thru the chaos, running with all their might as the ground shacked forcefully beneath their feet creating cracks and mountains and canons, all at the same time. Behind them a horde of demonic creatures followed, hunting them, getting closer with each step they took.



The demons where now upon them, and the shadows fought them off, and after what seemed like an eternity one of them, one of the nine escaping shadows loudly chanted something that was pronounced in some ancient tongue that most have probably never hear of, chant all creatures that were on a two meter radius from the runaways disappeared. All nine shadows, wounded by the battle, reassumed their way, positioning themselves in a straight line while running. None of them dared turn back, for they all feared that one of their friends was not behind, that if they turned and found one of the others was missing they’d go back, and if they did so the knew they wouldn’t survive.



Exhausted and in pain, the shadow who had chanted the spell started slowing her pace. Her right arm was broken and bleeding, she had a huge cut on her forehead and most of her energy was being drained by the protection field she had placed around her friends. Since she happened to be the last in the line none of the others noticed until she tripped and lost control over the spell, and as the ground in front of her opened, the one that had been running in front of her turned around, just in time to see her fall on her knees. As the shadow was about to go back for the spellcaster her arm was grabbed by the next in line who forced her to look ahead and keep up with the others while the witch fell onto the seemingly endless hole that opened ahead of her.



And as she fell she closed her eyes, thought about each one of her friends and concentrated on pulling up the protection field for them, it was the least she could do. As magic coursed trough her veins and power surrounded her, causing the speed of her fall to decrees unnoticed to her. Her skin got paler and her hairs turned black; and as her body came to a stop suspended in mid-air she felt that her companions were save, she stopped the flow of power and opened her eyes surprised to discover that she was hovering three inches above from the reddish dirt floor. So then as she fell those last inches towards the bottom she opened her mouth for the first time since she started to fall, only to say:



“WHAT THE HELL?!?!?!”







After the shadows had awoken and stood up two thoughts entered her mind: the first was the fact that she could fell the blood steadily dripping from her arm and that it didn’t hurt anymore, which probably wasn’t a good thing, and second that the pounding on her head was most likely only going to get worse. She placed a hand on her head only to aggravate the pain and as she looked at it afterwards she found blood. Then she decided to listen to her third idea, which resolved around the lines of starting to move so she wouldn’t get spotted.



So slowly but steadily she limped her way out of the hole in which she was trapped all the while keeping her mind in blank, trying real hard not to think about her injuries. And once she felt she was safe, away from danger, away from the once that were after her, she collapsed onto the floor and passed out.



As she woke up for the second time minutes later, she took in her surroundings, in front of her there was what seemed to be your regular inter-state highway with no cars passing by at the moment, and on the other side the outsides of your regular small american-dream material California town, weakly limping once again she walked across the pavement, approached the town and enter the first building she stumbled across; it looked like an old styled diner.



The little bell on top of the door was the last sound to be heard before the whole room went silent for some moments. This silence was finally broken seconds later by the squeaky voice of a waitress.



“Oh god!” she said as she acknowledged the wounds on the spellcaster “Are you okay?!”



“What kind of question is that woman, of course she’s not okay!” responded a man as he stood up to look at the young woman who still at the door “Stop staring at her and call an ambulance Emma!” he told the waitress. And as Emma ran to the backroom to get the phone he approached the wounded woman “What happened to you?” he asked



“I… I-I… I’m n-not real-lly sure” she said in a weak voice. She felt so tired, she wanted to sleep. Her body hurt so much. As she started to drift off towards the land of the dreaming the man panicked.



“No, don’t fall asleep!” he gasped, catching her before she fell to the floor. “Please stay awake, we don’t know if you could have a concussion or something like that, so come on, please, talk to me… tell me your name”



“I…” she stopped herself to think for a second and then continued “As dorky as it may sound, I have no idea” It was then that for the first time she noticed that she had no idea of who she was or what she was doing wherever it was she was at. And that, as it would any normal person, scared her, it scared her a lot.



“Okay, don’t worry” the man didn’t seem really calm himself “I’ll search to see if you have a wallet or something.” Trying to keep his cool as to not freak the woman out he looked through her pockets until he found some ID. “So, if this is really yours, and so it looks like by the photo, then your name is Willow Rosenberg”



“Heh, Willow. Funny name” that was the last thing she said as she became unconscious once again, while she was already able to hear the sirens in the distance.







Willow now stood outside the hospital, two months after being admitted in the ICU with no identity, no memories and no place to go. Since the police hadn’t been able to locate anyone who knew her, or for that mater any record that she even existed, she didn’t have anyone to turn to. She felt lost and alone in a world full of people she knew nothing about, but she also felt that there was something she had to do, someplace she had to get to, someone she had to find.



She knew little to nothing about herself, but she was aware of her own power, a potentially great power of the mystical variety. She was also aware of a lot of things she was sure not many people were lucky, or unlucky enough to know about. She was aware of the creatures that lurked in the darkness of nights. Those things she hadn’t mentioned to anyone because if she had she would most likely have been transferred to the psychology ward.



She was afraid and had no idea what to do, but somewhere deep inside her soul she had this corny warm and fussy felling that told her that everything was gonna be alright. That everything would turn out fine in the end. It was mostly comforting.



And yet, she felt like part of her was missing, like she had to find her other half in order to be whole again.











Edited by: Warduke at: 12/20/03 8:32 am
Lantaris
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby sam darls » Sat Dec 20, 2003 4:18 am

I like this so far..Sounds really interesting. I want more!! Love sammi xx

"Sometimes things happen between people that you don't really expect. And sometimes the things that are important are the ones that seem the weirdest or the most wrong. And those are the ones that change your life." - Jessie Sammler (Evan Rachel Wood)

sam darls
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby TaraBaby77 » Sat Dec 20, 2003 8:45 am

Yeap, and oh yeah. Ya sold me. I like it, totally. First time writing something about Willow and Tara??? Well, if that is true, you are pretty darn good at it!!! WAHOO!!! This fic sounds like something I will have to bookmark here in a little bit. Great work, very very interesting beginning. Definitely caught my attention..........and I am noticing that I am repeating myself. I'm going to stop talking. Great stuff, keep those updates comin'. =)

Aaron

'TaraBaby77'


"It's about two people,
regardless of sex, who love each other and treat each other with compassion and
respect."

TaraBaby77
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby TexanZeppo256 » Sat Dec 20, 2003 4:31 pm

Howdy Lantaris!



Well, aside from some spelling and grammar problems your story was pretty good.



However, content-wise, I have some contentions regarding the first half of the fic: I refuse to believe that those 9 people that you were talking about in your fic were the scoobies: They never leave ANYBODY behind. Besides which, you'd also have to be insanely stupid to leave behind the one person who can keep you safe from all of the magicky badness going down around you.



But aside from the intro and the errors, I kinda like your fic so far. Get a beta and update a lot more, and I'm sure that it'll shine like a brand new penny and be a fic that is regularly checked for updates.



Later.

---------------------------------



There she is! There she is... ahh... Not so wounded as we were led to believe... So much the better.
--Khan, "Star Trek II: WOK"



From The Land of Tolerance,

---The Texan Zeppo

TexanZeppo256
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby Arron CFF » Sat Dec 20, 2003 6:32 pm

Ok wow

So the scoobies were leaving a battle and will was doing a protection spell and what fell into another dimension this fic has a great number of possibilities and I think you have a great start going here I can't wait to see where you go with it.

Keep up the good work

Arron

Arron CFF
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby Lantaris » Sun Dec 21, 2003 1:33 am

Hiya!



sam darls: I’m so happy somebody is liking this, and thanks a bunch for being the first to review.



TaraBaby77: Gonna work hard to make myself worthy of a bookmark. And.. me? good? really?



TexanZeppo256: This is the kind of feedback I love. First thanks for your comments, they are inmensly aprecieted. Now… whoever said I was talking of the scobies… or just the scoobies… or even our scobies… you do the math.



Bout the beta, I know I need one just dunno how to find one. Does anyone offer?



Arron CFF: Not gonna tell you where your wrong or where your right just that your both W & R…



Thanks, I can’t belive people are reading this!!!







Title: Finding Always



Author: Well... me



Feedback: All welcomed



Spoilers: For now none. But it's set in an "ideal" season seven, meaning no Tara dying.



Summary: Souls come together everyday, around the world people split up every second. Some souls are made simply to fit with one another, and that is something nobody can get in the way of. Trouble has finally gotten Sunnydale, apparently for good, and as a group of people try on escaping trouble follows them.



Disclaimers: Don't own any of the Buffy the Vampire Slayer characters or places. I wish I owned Faith though.



Rating: G, for the present moment



Couples: It'll be obviously W/T... in a while



Notes: I’m seriously rethinking where I was headed with this story…





Chapter One

Thought Processes and Voices in my Head
       



The permanent sound off raindrops against the floor was all that could be heard in that dark alley, it was the kind of place any sane person would avoid even in daylight, it was the kind of place where one would expect to get jumped at or robbed, maybe striped to your underwear by some shady character. Definitely not the most ideal place to be taking a careless nightly walk. And yet, here she stood, and some how managed herself to not look even nearly as scared as she felt… but her fear differed from that of dreading the previously mention situation. Muggers she was sure she could deal with, stop them, wound them; other stuff, vampires or different demon species did not exactly terrify her, she had the power the strength and the knowledge (with no idea where those had come from). It was that what scared her, not only the not remembering even herself part, but her own strengths and weaknesses, her… well… magic… because that happens to be the precise word for it and the lack of control she seemed to have over it, she did not like to not be in control, it opened place for errors and mistakes which (as she was sure she knew of from experience) could bring upon disaster (as she somehow knew it had occurred before).



        She was seated on a dark wooden bench which creaked at any movement from it’s occupant, said bench was located in the exact middle of the twelve feet long one-way back alley. The wall she happened to be staring at right now belonged to some sort of factory, there seemed to be a lot of those in this particular part of town that obviously was the small industrial fraction of it. She’d come this far from the place she was staying at because Crooked River had an unbelievably active night live, incredible for a town it’s size. This place though, it was silent, utterly and completely silent, and once you got used to the rain, the easy going soft sprinkle which had been falling almost none stop for the past three days, you could just sit there and think. And she happened to be in need of a lot of thinking.



        It was weird, how her mind raced with itself, ideas that came in an out, sometimes barely registering, an unstoppable flow of consciousness that seemed to confuse her even more. And she knew that other, supposedly distracting factors only widened that river, so she came here, to think for lack of a better word. In the silence, she wished she could stop thinking, wished she could shut down completely and reset her brain, but… she couldn’t, even if she was able of getting it to slow down a bit.



        Willow (and it just still seemed like a funny name) took out her wallet, the one she had fought to reclaim at the hospitals front desk along with the only outfit she owned, and began to look through it. The one I.D. it carried was a drivers license, from which she knew her age, name, birthday and birthplace. Her current addressee was printed as ‘1630 Revelo Drive, Sunnydale’ a town that apparently had never existed… inside the stuffy brown leather wallet there where originally six one hundred dollar bills, one of those had been used to pay for the rent of the motel room she was currently staying at and the supplies she had consumed in her almost-week there… it’d left her with a couple of tens, right now money wasn’t an issue but it would eventually be, and also, the amount of money she had found in herself made her wonder what it was she had been up to, other than running. She’d also found a small piece of regular white crumpled paper, something, no more than one line, had been written in it with liquid ink but it become blurry for some reason and was now illegible. Last but not least, most definitely not least, she’d found a photograph, half the size of a regular picture and in it was the one thing that had brought all her thoughts to a halt, if only for just a second. The bluest blue eyes she had ever seen looked back at her from that photograph as the woman that could only be described as a Greek goddess smiled the most marvelous smile to ever be smiled. When she stared at that woman she felt as the whole world stopped turning, only to continue a second later, faster than before.



“If you're worried, you can be worried. “



That voice… it came from inside her head, like a memory, words she knew she’d heard before comforted her now. And the voice was as beautiful as was the woman who owned it… because it was the voice from the woman on the picture, right? It had to be… she heard it while looking at it, and still she wasn’t sure, couldn’t be not under the circumstances.



The redheaded stood up then, she didn’t own a clock but knew it must have been past midnight, she should head to the motel, get some sleep, see if she could find a job in the morning. One that preferably didn’t involve any amounts of fast food.



She walked slowly, still thinking, still hearing the repetition of the same phrase in her mind.



“If you're worried, you can be worried. “



        And she took the advice and worried, worried about herself, her lack of memory her excess of knowledge, her loneliness and fears; worried about others that she could not remember because she felt that they where in danger, about the woman smiling inside her wallet, about the owner of the voice in her head… And she tryied not to be worried that she was worried





To be updated sometime tomorrow with more of the first chapter

       



       





Edited by: Lantaris at: 12/21/03 12:34 am
Lantaris
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby justin » Sun Dec 21, 2003 8:05 am

This is certainly an interesting, and different, start to the story.



I'm not sure what's going on but I gues that it'll get clearer as the story goes on.



I'll go out on a limb and guess that the woman in the picture is Tara. So who were those other shadows? Where is Willow and how did she get there.



I'm looking forward to reading more.



BTW you were asking about finding a beta reader. There's a list of people who are williong to beta here



I find it kinda funny, I find it kinda sad
The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had.
- mad world

justin
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby TaraBaby77 » Sun Dec 21, 2003 11:09 am

Good update. Very interesting. Sounds like Willow as a ways to go until she finds out who she is and what her purpose is. Keep up the great writing and keep those updates comin', kay??? =)



Once again, great work!!!

Aaron

'TaraBaby77'


"It's about two people,
regardless of sex, who love each other and treat each other with compassion and
respect."

TaraBaby77
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby sam darls » Sun Dec 21, 2003 5:32 pm

That was really good, and soo lovely. Love sammi xx

"Sometimes things happen between people that you don't really expect. And sometimes the things that are important are the ones that seem the weirdest or the most wrong. And those are the ones that change your life." - Jessie Sammler (Evan Rachel Wood)

sam darls
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby xeembiote » Thu Apr 01, 2004 9:10 am

interesting story. hoping for an update soon...

xeembiote
 


Re: Glup... lurker steping outta the shadows...

Postby Guinevere » Thu Apr 15, 2004 12:10 am

I just read this, its good, and I'm looking forward to reading more of it.

Guinevere
 


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