Ooh ominously setting up a big bad.Bellalocke wrote:I think that he has somehow found out about her and is trying to stop events written in the fabric of time since magic came to this realm. There is no doubt that hispowers would allow him to influence her feelings.
Anyone else getting breast feeding images in their head from this? Just me? Yep that Easter morning google about breastmilk products has stuck. Yes you can get breastmilk Easter eggs.Bellalocke wrote:Kathryn felt the goddess pick her up and cradle her as though she were a little girl again. As she slept, Gaea gently infused the woman with her energy
Two options when faced with the why game, you can go full in heavy details so the why asker doesn’t want to ask anymore or reply with the because game. Why? Because, Why? Because. And on and on it goes.Bellalocke wrote:how am I going to explain things not only to Willow but to Tara as well without raising too many questions?
Good Willow.Bellalocke wrote:I will tear the pages out and give them to you.”
Nice Canon nod.Bellalocke wrote:anchor
Declare squatters rights!Bellalocke wrote:Please don’t make me leave.”
Faith is her kid! That makes Tara and Faith kind of step sisters. Looking forward to how you play that relationship.Bellalocke wrote:Ms. Lehane,
Strong combo, although I think peanut butter instead of Nutella has a higher combo ranking. Biscoff spread is its own independent country of deliciousness. I wonder if you can make breast milk pancakes. I need to stop talk talking to first time uncles on bottle duty.Bellalocke wrote:bananas and Nutella
Let your fingers do the walking.Bellalocke wrote:leafed through the yellowing pages until she found the entry she was looking for.
DUN DUN DUUUNNNNNN. Twilight zone music.Bellalocke wrote:Tara shuddered at the mention of him.
Jeopardy.Bellalocke wrote:Why does it have to be this ritual? Why not another?”
I wasn’t going to but now you say that I kind of have to ask.Bellalocke wrote:I need you to not ask those questions
Naturally want to see this in the form of the fresh prince of bel-air theme tune. Should have read ahead first, definitely not a story to be told in the fresh prince of bel-air theme tune. But this one is.Bellalocke wrote:I cannot tell her the story of all of this and how it came to be.”
Preach.Bellalocke wrote:Expectations hurt people and squash their spirits.
Priorities.Bellalocke wrote:“Try ten hours.”
“Oh, well that explains why I’m so hungry.”
Bellalocke wrote:the consequences would be disastrous.
Bellalocke wrote:Are you sure she can handle it?”
Bellalocke wrote:The blonde recognized the feeling immediately. “It was you…”
Bellalocke wrote:The redhead whispered. “Yeah. It was really bad. I promised her that I would stay beside her. Please don’t make me leave.”
Bellalocke wrote: don’t think you are getting any of my bacon!”
Bellalocke wrote:but you know her in this life as Kathryn.”
Bellalocke wrote: I don’t know the name of my spirit yet
Bellalocke wrote:“You were mumbling her name quite a bit when you were meditating.”
Dub wrote:Wow, thank you for that and I completely agree, even with 8 chapters in I haven’t seen a fic like this one with everything you are exploring and looking through. But then again I give up on many stories when they turn into smut for smuts sake and completely forget their plot. I don't foresee that happening here.
There are three main reasons why I’m sticking with this:
1 – I really like your exploration of their trauma because so much that happens and effects them on the show is glossed over (mindless Tara being my biggest gripe) but yet we get a whole 3 episodes of Buffy coming to terms with having a little sister but nothing is mentioned again about Willow being nearly burnt at the stake by her mother or learning about the Maclays and their abuse. They are a large part of unexplored characterisation, in Canon at least.
2 – The magic, I’ve seen a few that go into the practice of magic and spiritual aspect for it but they are often short stories so no world development. In Canon it is part of the foundation of their relationship at least to begin with. Definitely later on a branch of conflict.
3- It is set in the UK – Home comforts meaning I can make absurd remarks and people might believe that it’s a common thing in the UK.
Ok three is kind of a joke but not a joke. The main third reason is how much you care about this story. The amount of thought put in. you’ve clearly planned it through and it has a purpose to you, which will no doubt be revealed more to us as it goes on. This isn’t writing something to fill time. The way you talk about the story it’s like talking to someone in their element and they get that look in their eye which completely controls the discussion and it doesn’t matter if it’s about dish soap because the person talking is so excited and caught up in it all, that the listener is right there for the ride no matter their thoughts on the subject.
There are three main reasons why I’m sticking with this:
1 – I really like your exploration of their trauma because so much that happens and effects them on the show is glossed over (mindless Tara being my biggest gripe) but yet we get a whole 3 episodes of Buffy coming to terms with having a little sister but nothing is mentioned again about Willow being nearly burnt at the stake by her mother or learning about the Maclays and their abuse. They are a large part of unexplored characterisation, in Canon at least.
2 – The magic, I’ve seen a few that go into the practice of magic and spiritual aspect for it but they are often short stories so no world development. In Canon it is part of the foundation of their relationship at least to begin with. Definitely later on a branch of conflict.
3- It is set in the UK – Home comforts meaning I can make absurd remarks and people might believe that it’s a common thing in the UK.
Ok three is kind of a joke but not a joke. The main third reason is how much you care about this story. The amount of thought put in. you’ve clearly planned it through and it has a purpose to you, which will no doubt be revealed more to us as it goes on. This isn’t writing something to fill time. The way you talk about the story it’s like talking to someone in their element and they get that look in their eye which completely controls the discussion and it doesn’t matter if it’s about dish soap because the person talking is so excited and caught up in it all, that the listener is right there for the ride no matter their thoughts on the subject.
Ooh ominously setting up a big bad.
Anyone else getting breast feeding images in their head from this? Just me? Yep that Easter morning google about breastmilk products has stuck. Yes you can get breastmilk Easter eggs.
Two options when faced with the why game, you can go full in heavy details so the why asker doesn’t want to ask anymore or reply with the because game. Why? Because, Why? Because. And on and on it goes.
Good Willow.
Declare squatters rights!
Faith is her kid! That makes Tara and Faith kind of step sisters. Looking forward to how you play that relationship.
Strong combo, although I think peanut butter instead of Nutella has a higher combo ranking.
Which parts were meant to be flashbacks in this chapter? All seemed to run smoothly and could tell overlapping time schedules of what was going on. Kathryn and Gaea happening overnight which is the same time as Willow soothing Tara’s nightmare. The conversation between Odessa and Tara at the same time as Kathryn and Willow.
Best part of the chapter for me was the nightmare soothing. A nice intimate moment which shows their character progression. Both still completely vulnerable but yet starting to see the strength they get from one another.
CK_Mako wrote:AHH I missed the previous chapter. Luckily, you already know my reaction to the majority of this due to the beta process.
ruh oh
Of course she can. It is Willow we are talking about here
Good on her for recognizing it quickly.
awww
Willow not keeping kosher?
Of course it is.
Willow-mumbles
My thought process is, if I don’t completely get it there is likely a lurker or future reader who won’t either, so I’m happy to look dumb asking a question to help myself and others understand. It’s your fic and what you say goes, I see no reason to argue with that. It’s a great feature of the KB that writers can interact with readers during the story, which enables readers an opportunity to ask, instead of giving up on the story.Bellalocke wrote:willingness to ask questions when you don't understand something. The fact that you listen to the explanations and accept them as they are
Not the first time to be called that and won’t be the last. One of the more polite ways of saying it though hehehe.Bellalocke wrote:You are an odd one
More people need to learn the second part. Silence doesn’t always need to be filled.Bellalocke wrote:I will listen to you when you need to talk and sit with you when you can’t.
It’s cool, Series four made Tara an Olympic champion at opening doors for you.Bellalocke wrote:Willow felt as though a door closed
Beats a matching tramp stamp for a tenner at any tourist destination at 2am in the morning.Bellalocke wrote:at least we’ll have matching ones.
Depending on how low, they might have just been given a matching tramp stamp.Bellalocke wrote:Gaea moved to Willow’s back and inscribed more words in Latin.
The Gift, nice.Bellalocke wrote:Tara spoke softly. “I was so lost, Willow.”
The redhead took both of the blonde’s hands. “I found you, Tara. I will always find you.”
Charming the future in-law.Bellalocke wrote:I would have sworn that you were sisters had she not told me otherwise.”
At this point you might as well come out and say Willow stinks or admit to trying to soften her flesh to eat her later. I know your game Odessa, its kindness but I have to make it sordid for my own amusement. 100% Odessa gives homemade bath bombs and pampering kits to people at Christmas.Bellalocke wrote:Another bath is needed
Kathryn showers then.Bellalocke wrote:“Only cute blondes and redheads.”
The general weekend at the parents/in-laws experience.Not that I haven’t enjoyed being here, but I feel emotionally exhausted.
Dub wrote:My thought process is, if I don’t completely get it there is likely a lurker or future reader who won’t either, so I’m happy to look dumb asking a question to help myself and others understand. It’s your fic and what you say goes, I see no reason to argue with that. It’s a great feature of the KB that writers can interact with readers during the story, which enables readers an opportunity to ask, instead of giving up on the story.
Not the first time to be called that and won’t be the last. One of the more polite ways of saying it though hehehe.
More people need to learn the second part. Silence doesn’t always need to be filled.
It’s cool, Series four made Tara an Olympic champion at opening doors for you.
Beats a matching tramp stamp for a tenner at any tourist destination at 2am in the morning.
Depending on how low, they might have just been given a matching tramp stamp.
And yes, later in the story you will learn what was written.Charming the future in-law.
At this point you might as well come out and say Willow stinks or admit to trying to soften her flesh to eat her later. I know your game Odessa, its kindness but I have to make it sordid for my own amusement. 100% Odessa gives homemade bath bombs and pampering kits to people at Christmas.
Kathryn showers then.

The general weekend at the parents/in-laws experience.
The ritual felt tense and there was a lot of build up as to how dangerous it was but yet I didn’t really feel they were in danger at any point of reading it. I don’t take it as a negative though because the way I see it we are learning about the magic from Willow and she doesn’t understand the magnitude of what has gone on so it makes sense we don’t. As Willow learns more, I assume that ritual will become more significant in what danger it actually posed.
SameBellalocke wrote:Reader interaction is definitely one of my favorite features about the KB.
I know it won’t be but I’m holding out hope that they think it’s something deep and meaningful when in fact Gaea is a messing with them and wrote lamppost or something pointless on them, bonus points if she spelt it wrong. I already suspect Gaea is messing with them but that is probably because of the Percy Jackson series.later in the story you will learn what was written.
Thank you for replying and explaining.Bellalocke wrote:Thank you so much for commenting
Kathryn should have said within context and reason. Now she is going to get a phone call every time Willow is stuck on the loo without any paper.Bellalocke wrote:should the redhead need anything, to give her a call.
Again general after spending the weekend at the parents/In-laws feeling.Bellalocke wrote:silent but mutual agreement, Willow and Tara would spend a few days apart to process their feelings
WYU2, NM, MUTomoz?, K. , I hate text speak so much.Bellalocke wrote:sent Tara a text message.
Kathryn get the loo roll ready.Bellalocke wrote:'The Wind in The Willows'
Winnie knows, probably has a free bus pass too but knows not to use it if she has somewhere to be.Bellalocke wrote:You’ll be waiting for the bus for a long time otherwise.”
U up? Then I imagine a bunch of emoji’s between them. If Tara has got Italian again maybe the eggplant. Some drink to share maybe a few splashes next to it. I hate emoji conversations more than text speak. If you directly contact my number to ask me something make it comprehensible. My phone only shows squares any way, I enjoy messing with them as if I know what images they’ve used. It’s the small things.Bellalocke wrote:Willow received a text message.
Another Gold for young Miss Tara Maclay. Undefeated Olympic champion in Willow door opening.Bellalocke wrote:The blonde opened the door and greeted Willow with a lopsided smile before letting her in.
If it’s anything like one of my maths teachers who I think went to oxford. No but I do know how to swear in Greek with the palm of my hand. They were Greek, they liked to teach in Greek, it was definitely all Greek to me. Not even the worst thing about their teaching style.Bellalocke wrote:your math teacher isn’t doing a great job of helping you understand
Naturally.Bellalocke wrote:a few different colored pens
Ride him like a pony, Tara guarantees safety and fun.Bellalocke wrote:A big boy? Hmmm, I think I can do that.”
It’s a simple exchange but yet it says an awful lot about them. You have the honesty to admit vulnerability with not wanting to ask them. The kindness in trying to dismiss it not to upset Tara but also doubling as a bit of self-doubt, in the sense that her thoughts and feelings aren’t important in comparison to Tara’s feeling. Not wanting to ruin that. Then Tara being the champ she is just straight up, your thoughts and feelings matter, I’m here for you to share.Bellalocke wrote:“I don’t want to ask them… they don’t matter.”
“Yes, they do. Why don’t you want to ask them?”
That hits right in the feels.Bellalocke wrote:I want to be a better friend to you, and sometimes that means doing things that are hard or that make me feel afraid
First came the right hook and I recoiled right into the left. What a line, great line.Bellalocke wrote:I am finally experiencing better days, but they feel so fragile
if the stream is connected to the Thames, cocaine.Bellalocke wrote:she had to wonder if there were magical properties to the water
Magical pay gap. Nature in balance..Bellalocke wrote:Elementals who identify as female are far more powerful than their male-identified counterparts.
She put the cocaine in the Thames.Bellalocke wrote:“Yes. I had to go into hiding for a long time. Someday I will explain to you why.”
Images of a dragon wearing a trench coat ready to flash.Bellalocke wrote:“Yes. Do not be afraid, ok?”
Yes! It says something when a dragon on a mystical plain talk more sense than humans.Bellalocke wrote:I cannot tell you this information because it is not my story to tell. Do you understand?”
That is emotion without saying any emotion. This is what I was on about a few chapters ago and they are two magnificent lines. Relatable, gut punching and progressive.Bellalocke wrote: I want to be a better friend to you, and sometimes that means doing things that are hard or that make me feel afraid
I am finally experiencing better days, but they feel so fragile
Dub wrote:I know it won’t be but I’m holding out hope that they think it’s something deep and meaningful when in fact Gaea is a messing with them and wrote lamppost or something pointless on them, bonus points if she spelt it wrong. I already suspect Gaea is messing with them but that is probably because of the Percy Jackson series.
Kathryn should have said within context and reason. Now she is going to get a phone call every time Willow is stuck on the loo without any paper.
WYU2, NM, MUTomoz?, K. , I hate text speak so much.
Winnie knows, probably has a free bus pass too but knows not to use it if she has somewhere to be.
U up? Then I imagine a bunch of emoji’s between them. If Tara has got Italian again maybe the eggplant. Some drink to share maybe a few splashes next to it. I hate emoji conversations more than text speak. If you directly contact my number to ask me something make it comprehensible. My phone only shows squares any way, I enjoy messing with them as if I know what images they’ve used. It’s the small things.
Another Gold for young Miss Tara Maclay. Undefeated Olympic champion in Willow door opening.
Ride him like a pony, Tara guarantees safety and fun.
It’s a simple exchange but yet it says an awful lot about them. You have the honesty to admit vulnerability with not wanting to ask them. The kindness in trying to dismiss it not to upset Tara but also doubling as a bit of self-doubt, in the sense that her thoughts and feelings aren’t important in comparison to Tara’s feeling. Not wanting to ruin that. Then Tara being the champ she is just straight up, your thoughts and feelings matter, I’m here for you to share.
That hits right in the feels.Bellalocke wrote:I want to be a better friend to you, and sometimes that means doing things that are hard or that make me feel afraid
First came the right hook and I recoiled right into the left. What a line, great line.Bellalocke wrote:I am finally experiencing better days, but they feel so fragile
if the stream is connected to the Thames, cocaine.Bellalocke wrote:she had to wonder if there were magical properties to the water
Magical pay gap. Nature in balance..Bellalocke wrote:Elementals who identify as female are far more powerful than their male-identified counterparts.
Yes! It says something when a dragon on a mystical plain talk more sense than humans.Bellalocke wrote:I cannot tell you this information because it is not my story to tell. Do you understand?”
[/quote]I could try and sum up this chapter but I think two lines you’ve written in this, sells this chapter and story more than I ever could.That is emotion without saying any emotion. This is what I was on about a few chapters ago and they are two magnificent lines. Relatable, gut punching and progressive.Bellalocke wrote: I want to be a better friend to you, and sometimes that means doing things that are hard or that make me feel afraid
I am finally experiencing better days, but they feel so fragile
CK_Mako wrote:I love the aspect of puppy therapy because dogs are better than us. Period. We have them here on my deployment and each time I see them, my day gets better. I enjoyed their self knowledge of needing space after mental and physical exhaustion. It is good to see their interactions are developing further, to include helping in the school work aspect and not just Wicca and Magick. Solana appears to be a big aspect throughout this fic so hopefully we can get into her backstory at some point.
Not to say I did upset you with my feedback previously, just I know ‘take to heart’ to have a meaning of causing upset. Hopefully a language barrier difference than me actually upsetting you. If I did I am deeply sorry. In no way was I trying to insult your work or writing style. If ever I do say anything close to the bone or you find out of order, call me out on it and put me in my place, I don’t realise how I come across most of the time.Bellalocke wrote:I took your advice to heart and now am concentrating on displaying emotion rather than stating it.
Can vouch for this. The hair colour helps a lot, especially when you can get zero proportions or features right. 20 weeks of experience.Bellalocke wrote:They lacked the detail of an actual portrait aside from the color of their hair
That’s a mightily impressive step forward. Tara can blame exhaustion but that was a massive feat of bravery. The lights off as well just elevates it as it shows complete trust and comfort.Bellalocke wrote:She turned off the fairy lights before slipping into bed underneath the covers
The same way she said for Willow to try and wake her during a nightmare. I like this reflection, it shows a strong synergy in their relationship. Really building on their connection.Bellalocke wrote:Tara grabbed Willow’s hand and gently out her name
It worked. However the general practice in the UK if you get a knock on the door you aren’t expecting, is to ignore it. Watch them from the window until they go away if you’re a curtain twitcher. Then if it is a parcel, the neighbour’s would awkwardly take it in and it would take a week or more to go collect it as you don’t want to talk to the neighbours, only moan about them behind their backs. So in theory Buffy’s surprise would have ended up with her sitting by the door in the dorm room that would take her in. Anya. You’re lucky Willow isn’t accustomed to the UK delivery service Buffy.Bellalocke wrote:I decided to come a few days early to surprise you.
This, exactly this. Another thing people need to understand, if you have a conversation/experience with someone it doesn’t mean you can go telling everyone about it. If someone tells you something, they’ve told you. They've not told you, to tell the world. It’s still their information, they’ve just shared it with you.Bellalocke wrote:Everything that she has shared with me and the things that I have observed is meant only for me, and I will not break her trust.
I want to give this a standing ovation but I don’t want to get up.Bellalocke wrote:Whoever has knowledge of whatever happened should be her choice and nobody else's.
Okay I’ll get up.Bellalocke wrote:I totally respect that,
Buffy is full of the surprises todayBellalocke wrote:I was questioning why girls were catching my attention....
And it’s not even solstice.Bellalocke wrote:Odessa had given Willow a basket with various lotions as well as a bottle of each of the shampoo, conditioner, and soap that she always used when she took a bath in their bathroom.
Surprises all round this chapter, Are they testing if Willow can go without a pacemaker.Bellalocke wrote:I guess the surprise is ruined…
Yep. Lucky ducky.Does she only smile like that for me?
The stutter, nicely done. Mentions of the smile, the stutter with Buffy all helping reinforce the strength you’ve built up in the relationship between Tara and Willow.Bellalocke wrote:my m-mom.
Hard not to.Bellalocke wrote: I like her already
Or she. I’m guessing Faith, I think Kathryn said she was out of the country.Bellalocke wrote:Who is he?
Psychic Dub!Bellalocke wrote:That someone is a woman, her name is Faith
Yeah probably for the best.Bellalocke wrote:Best not piss off the big angry dragon lady…
Even Olympic champions need a rest day.Bellalocke wrote:The redhead quietly opened the door
I mean a dog does the same thing and even then gay dogs aren’t even an issue in Legally Blonde 2.Bellalocke wrote:entered your room, before I shared food with you, held your hand, fell asleep in your bed, before you became my friend…
Again a great bit of reassurance in a way that Willow understands. You really are fine tuning a fantastic connection between the two. Which is something I look for intently with any Willow and Tara story.Bellalocke wrote:Still friends?
That’s great because Tara admits what she put down to exhaustion earlier in the chapter.Bellalocke wrote:Would you stay with me tonight? You, um, help with the nightmares.”
Yeah they were.Bellalocke wrote:both of them were brave
Anyone who says that doesn’t deserve any respect in my book. Respect is something to be earnt and never to be cashed in. I can understand it’s the last kick Willow needed to go ahead and do it but it felt like the decision was taken away from Willow and it would have been more impactful if Willow had a nudge from Solana. It doesn’t diminish from the importance of the final scene between Tara and Willow though which makes me think it’s more my personal view than a fault with storytelling.Bellalocke wrote:If you have any respect for me at all
Dub wrote:Not to say I did upset you with my feedback previously, just I know ‘take to heart’ to have a meaning of causing upset. Hopefully a language barrier difference than me actually upsetting you. If I did I am deeply sorry. In no way was I trying to insult your work or writing style. If ever I do say anything close to the bone or you find out of order, call me out on it and put me in my place, I don’t realise how I come across most of the time.
I definitely saw a difference in the previous chapter and it did feel like the emotion was natural and elevated in its intensity to the reader (good thing). You are doing a great job with portraying their vulnerability and unease in themselves.
Can vouch for this. The hair colour helps a lot, especially when you can get zero proportions or features right. 20 weeks of experience.
That’s a mightily impressive step forward. Tara can blame exhaustion but that was a massive feat of bravery. The lights off as well just elevates it as it shows complete trust and comfort.Bellalocke wrote:She turned off the fairy lights before slipping into bed underneath the covers
The same way she said for Willow to try and wake her during a nightmare. I like this reflection, it shows a strong synergy in their relationship. Really building on their connection.Bellalocke wrote:Tara grabbed Willow’s hand and gently out her name
It worked. However the general practice in the UK if you get a knock on the door you aren’t expecting, is to ignore it. Watch them from the window until they go away if you’re a curtain twitcher. Then if it is a parcel, the neighbour’s would awkwardly take it in and it would take a week or more to go collect it as you don’t want to talk to the neighbours, only moan about them behind their backs. So in theory Buffy’s surprise would have ended up with her sitting by the door in the dorm room that would take her in. Anya. You’re lucky Willow isn’t accustomed to the UK delivery service Buffy.
This, exactly this. Another thing people need to understand, if you have a conversation/experience with someone it doesn’t mean you can go telling everyone about it. If someone tells you something, they’ve told you. They've not told you, to tell the world. It’s still their information, they’ve just shared it with you.Bellalocke wrote:Everything that she has shared with me and the things that I have observed is meant only for me, and I will not break her trust.
I want to give this a standing ovation but I don’t want to get up.Bellalocke wrote:Whoever has knowledge of whatever happened should be her choice and nobody else's.Okay I’ll get up.Bellalocke wrote:I totally respect that,
Buffy is full of the surprises todayBellalocke wrote:I was questioning why girls were catching my attention....
And it’s not even solstice.Bellalocke wrote:Odessa had given Willow a basket with various lotions as well as a bottle of each of the shampoo, conditioner, and soap that she always used when she took a bath in their bathroom.
Surprises all round this chapter, Are they testing if Willow can go without a pacemaker.Bellalocke wrote:I guess the surprise is ruined…
Yep. Lucky ducky.Does she only smile like that for me?
The stutter, nicely done. Mentions of the smile, the stutter with Buffy all helping reinforce the strength you’ve built up in the relationship between Tara and Willow.Bellalocke wrote:my m-mom.
Hard not to.Bellalocke wrote: I like her already
Or she. I’m guessing Faith, I think Kathryn said she was out of the country.Bellalocke wrote:Who is he?Psychic Dub!Bellalocke wrote:That someone is a woman, her name is Faith
Despite the fact that Willow did not but took it in stride is a wonderful thing. While Willow is far from perfect, I want to show her unconditional love and support for those she holds close, and I felt that this was a good way to do soYeah probably for the best.Bellalocke wrote:Best not piss off the big angry dragon lady…
Even Olympic champions need a rest day.Bellalocke wrote:The redhead quietly opened the door
I mean a dog does the same thing and even then gay dogs aren’t even an issue in Legally Blonde 2.Bellalocke wrote:entered your room, before I shared food with you, held your hand, fell asleep in your bed, before you became my friend…
Again a great bit of reassurance in a way that Willow understands. You really are fine tuning a fantastic connection between the two. Which is something I look for intently with any Willow and Tara story.Bellalocke wrote:Still friends?
That’s great because Tara admits what she put down to exhaustion earlier in the chapter.Bellalocke wrote:Would you stay with me tonight? You, um, help with the nightmares.”
Yeah they were.Bellalocke wrote:both of them were brave
The only thing I would say that I didn’t like was Solana. It’s this one line that does it for me.Anyone who says that doesn’t deserve any respect in my book. Respect is something to be earnt and never to be cashed in. I can understand it’s the last kick Willow needed to go ahead and do it but it felt like the decision was taken away from Willow and it would have been more impactful if Willow had a nudge from Solana. It doesn’t diminish from the importance of the final scene between Tara and Willow though which makes me think it’s more my personal view than a fault with storytelling.Bellalocke wrote:If you have any respect for me at all
However I can completely get if it isn’t the intent. As a reader Solana is a mystery to us still. She has shown supportiveness but at the same time, she is a dragon and they are powerful creatures. Maybe Solana is pushing with kindness, maybe it’s that power that Willow needs to tame. It’s all part of the mystery which works for that story arc. Just doesn’t work for this chapter’s story arc in my eyes.
This chapter is really nicely done. It starts with their insecurities and you introduce Buffy who gives that bit of nudge but also highlights the connection you’ve built so well between Tara nd Willow. The subtleties only there for each other.
What you’ve done with this chapter is pushed Tara and Willow as the forefront of the story which every story on the KB should be. They have always been a major focus but with all the magical world building it did feel for a bit, like the world building and Tara and Willow were fighting for the focal point. It’s a balancing act which I think you are getting the hang of as you always know to lead it all back to Tara and Willow.
Perfect is over rated. If everything is perfect that means there’s no room for improvement and everything stagnates. Stagnation is not perfection. I like your attitude.Bellalocke wrote:That is not to say that I will always be perfect, but that I will make an effort to do better
Will we see this painting in future? Is it a painting that exists that inspired this aspect of the story or will be going strictly off written description? Not that any of these is a bad thing. The way you describe it, it sounds like a treasure trove of little story Easter eggs/ where’s Waldo-y bits. Might be fun for readers (me, masking it as helping others hehehe) to try and see the different parts to it and match it to the story along with making guesses for future story bits.Bellalocke wrote:there is a great deal that is expressed in the painting that even Tara cannot see at the moment, but will be able to in the future.
Oh I do and it does my head in. In this one line I’ve changed my view of Solana in this chapter. It’s more respect for her sanity than for herself. Which makes sense for how sharp it came across. Definitely more of a nudge than a ‘do what I say’ so the decision was ultimately Willows. Thank you for explaining that and in a way I could instantly understand too.Bellalocke wrote:Imagine how you would feel if you had the same conversation with the same person day in and day out for a long long time
That whole section is fantastic. The thought process and emotion of Tara are spot on. The unknowingness of why but the comfort in doing so, soon replaced with self-hate. Coming to accept the comfort and then being able to return the comfort and it all is a start and finish in a connection of falling for someone. Starts with Tara’s thoughts of Willow, ends with Faiths thoughts of Buffy but yet at both ends it could be held true for both of them. It’s a very well-crafted passage there. Be proud of that because it’s a view I don’t think we are shown enough of in media and it’s a voice that really needs to be heard. You’ve tackled that and displayed it in a soft light of sensitivity rather than a psych review. Really, really well done. Thank you for taking on this subject matter, I know it’s hard to take for some but it’s much needed.Bellalocke wrote:Does she feel the same? … Maybe it was the fact that she was crying, the way her voice conveyed how frightened she felt, or the genuine fear of rejection
Again fantastic continuation here. The thing here touches on what I was saying at the beginning about being intrigued (still doesn’t seem the right word) about the connection between sexual trauma and attraction. So the story under the Willow and Tara story has me double invested.Bellalocke wrote:Why didn’t I hug her then? Why can I not afford her the same level of comfort that she gives to me?
That hits strong because it’s not just a pain for Willow and thinking she is lying/withholding herself from her but it’s a lot of self-hate. It’s almost painful to read which means you are bringing the emotion through so well.Bellalocke wrote:The guilt coiled in her stomach. She sat up and hugged her knees to her chest. She could not stop the tears that came.
How can I not tell her?
Normally I have a problem with this line but here it fits so well, its feels like it means wait for the person than wait for a relationship. We’ve seen both sides to their backstory and this line feels like coalesce of them to this point. It’s heart-warming as opposed to coming off as a pressure or hold back.Bellalocke wrote: I’ll wait for you
Are the refills free?Bellalocke wrote:Go to the creek and drink as much water as you can
No, lying is choice, you are unable to tell her, there’s a difference. A very fine line of difference but understandably Tara doesn’t see it that way.Bellalocke wrote:I’m lying to her.
Dying for the loo too unless the guardian realm has toilets there. She chugged a stream.Bellalocke wrote:She was tired
Water luge. Just without the ice, more bottom scrapings of a puddle-y.Bellalocke wrote:Willow, what did you do?
CK_Mako wrote:Ugh. I cannot wait for them to finally talk about everything. I feel Tara's pain, but she needs to be able to open up to someone or this will keep being a huge burden on herself. I am glad that Odessa and Kat are there for them both. Hopefully they can get over this hump soon. The spell for Willow is an interesting twist. Hopefully it doesn't harm their bond beyond repair.
Dub wrote:Perfect is over rated. If everything is perfect that means there’s no room for improvement and everything stagnates. Stagnation is not perfection. I like your attitude.
Will we see this painting in future? Is it a painting that exists that inspired this aspect of the story or will be going strictly off written description? Not that any of these is a bad thing. The way you describe it, it sounds like a treasure trove of little story Easter eggs/ where’s Waldo-y bits. Might be fun for readers (me, masking it as helping others hehehe) to try and see the different parts to it and match it to the story along with making guesses for future story bits.
Oh I do and it does my head in. In this one line I’ve changed my view of Solana in this chapter. It’s more respect for her sanity than for herself. Which makes sense for how sharp it came across. Definitely more of a nudge than a ‘do what I say’ so the decision was ultimately Willows. Thank you for explaining that and in a way I could instantly understand too.
Sorry Solana.
That whole section is fantastic. The thought process and emotion of Tara are spot on. The unknowingness of why but the comfort in doing so, soon replaced with self-hate. Coming to accept the comfort and then being able to return the comfort and it all is a start and finish in a connection of falling for someone. Starts with Tara’s thoughts of Willow, ends with Faiths thoughts of Buffy but yet at both ends it could be held true for both of them. It’s a very well-crafted passage there. Be proud of that because it’s a view I don’t think we are shown enough of in media and it’s a voice that really needs to be heard. You’ve tackled that and displayed it in a soft light of sensitivity rather than a psych review. Really, really well done. Thank you for taking on this subject matter, I know it’s hard to take for some but it’s much needed.
For me it elevates the piece from being just another story, it’s a story that is meant to say something, it has a purpose and it’s your voice telling this story. Not a faceless narrator which because of the amount you’ve given in feedback and you come across really well, it invests me into the story even more because I want to know what you have to say.
Again fantastic continuation here. The thing here touches on what I was saying at the beginning about being intrigued (still doesn’t seem the right word) about the connection between sexual trauma and attraction. So the story under the Willow and Tara story has me double invested.Bellalocke wrote:Why didn’t I hug her then? Why can I not afford her the same level of comfort that she gives to me?
That hits strong because it’s not just a pain for Willow and thinking she is lying/withholding herself from her but it’s a lot of self-hate. It’s almost painful to read which means you are bringing the emotion through so well.Bellalocke wrote:The guilt coiled in her stomach. She sat up and hugged her knees to her chest. She could not stop the tears that came.
How can I not tell her?
Normally I have a problem with this line but here it fits so well, its feels like it means wait for the person than wait for a relationship. We’ve seen both sides to their backstory and this line feels like coalesce of them to this point. It’s heart-warming as opposed to coming off as a pressure or hold back.Bellalocke wrote: I’ll wait for you
Are the refills free?Bellalocke wrote:Go to the creek and drink as much water as you can
Dying for the loo too unless the guardian realm has toilets there. She chugged a stream.Bellalocke wrote:She was tired
Water luge. Just without the ice, more bottom scrapings of a puddle-y.Bellalocke wrote:Willow, what did you do?
I didn’t feel it appropriate to try and crack the usual humour, the starting passage set the tone of the chapter and while I feel that passage was the peak of this chapter, the tone it set was followed through to the end. It’s heavy in feeling but I think that’s the point.
I rather like the symmetry between Willow and Tara, Willow magically blocking feeling while Tara grabbles with her block of feelings due to being unable to tell her. While Willow wants to give Tara time. It’s a step back of sorts but it’s one they both make for the other. Again while seemingly detached in this chapter their connection is ever present and strengthening.
Bellalocke wrote: You and Willow have known each other for a month and a half. Mind you, it has been an intense period of time, but nonetheless, that is not very long.
Bellalocke wrote:“When you’re ready, it will happen, Tara, and it will be beautiful.”
Never rush things. A proper, strong foundation for any relationship (platonic or romantic) is needed for it to last.Bellalocke wrote:she got this look in her eye
CK_Mako wrote:Goddess, am I glad to be able to get online, even for this brief moment to comment. Final stretch to home!
Prepare to be assaulted with smiles and a present or two Exactly. This is such a short time so Tara's hesitation on letting Willow in on her past is completely normal and to be expected.
Bellalocke wrote:“When you’re ready, it will happen, Tara, and it will be beautiful.”
Never rush things. A proper, strong foundation for any relationship (platonic or romantic) is needed for it to last.
Bellalocke wrote:she got this look in her eye
Haha that is our Willow. When she sets her mind, watch out for that Resolve face.
Willow's Resolve Face: Know it. Love it. Fear it. Also, the fact that Willow is willing to take anyone to task who is standing in her way of doing something for Tara says everything, I think.Overall, good chapter. I cannot wait to see where you take these girls with all of this alluding to something deeper and darker in the future.
Bellalocke wrote:“T, I love you, but you are a dumbass.”
CK_Mako wrote:So apparently I had a technical issue where my comment never posted... So this will be short and sweet. Yay! Faith has finally arrived! Things will definitely get exciting from here on in with her causing havoc.
Yes! Faith is finally here and she will be sticking around for quite a while. I wouldn't say that she is going to cause havoc, but things will definitely be interesting with her around
Bellalocke wrote:“T, I love you, but you are a dumbass.”
I could legit picture her saying this. I love fic that pair Faith as either of the girls' close friend.
I am glad that between Solana and Faith, Tara was able to get the push to tell Willow. Letter writing is always a good way to convey information, especially hard information.
Cannot wait for the next one!
I’ve heard of the saying but never connected it (mainly because I’ve mainly had it associated with sarcasm in comedies) until you brought it up. Yep totally see it, especially in your Tara.BellaLocke wrote:Have you ever heard the expression 'Still waters run deep'? That describes Tara to a T. Her doubts, her fears, and her worries are buried deep, which means that they can be much more difficult to tackle when she finally expresses them.
It’s coming through, looking at the starting chapters and where they are now, the ease they have with each other now, while still on shaky ground in their perspectives, is in a more stable place than it was where just leaning slightly, felt like they would fall off a cliff. They’ve got some stabilising reach to each other rather than seeing each other as isolated wobblers, if that makes any sense. They might not feel able to hold on yet but it doesn’t mean they aren’t trying for the possibility to hold on.BellaLocke wrote:In the end, I want people to see just how far they have come and how they have conquered things that seemed insurmountable at the time.
*Applies seat belt* Strapped in and ready to go. I fear this means something else in America.BellaLocke wrote:I am not going to shy away from the tough
Now I’m going to tell you a serious English tradition, while it sounds made up, I swear I’m not winding you up. Checkout ‘Cooper’s Hill Cheese-Rolling and Wake’ Going downhill is definitely a fun experience, especially if following a big wheel of cheese. It is fast but somehow your mind makes it slow motion, plus the pain of all those injuries last. Worth it though if you catch the cheese, I think you get to keep it. The videos are brutal but you’re safely watching from across the pond. No cheese though, swings and roundabouts.BellaLocke wrote:It is strange that the peak of the chapter happened so early but I am glad that the rest of the ride managed to keep your attention even though it was a slow ride downhill.
She’s been on the lash with Solana, bingeing dragons’ magic. Anywhere other than a gutter or the night bus depot is a luxury. Casual Sunday morning ‘where am I?’ wake up, followed by not caring and trying for five more minutes without being asked to move on.BellaLocke wrote:She furrowed her brow and wondered where the redhead had slept last night.
Kathryn just freed herself and now she has another person in her arms while on a couch. Turns out empaths also double up as human pillows.BellaLocke wrote:Kathryn led Tara out to the living room and sat down on the couch.
Good pillow squish? Not too soft but not lumpy or distorted stuffing. Or is it the arm wrap technique? Sentient human pillows tell us your secrets because you can likely take over the world with ease as long as you outnumber the amount of available couch space because if there’s a space it seems you are made to occupy it pretty quick.BellaLocke wrote:the tall witch was the most powerful empath in the world, and with good reason.
Nah, It’s just another step in your stair case of bravery surrounding it. It’s okay to take a breather while climbing, doesn’t make you a coward.BellaLocke wrote:I am a coward for not telling her about my past
See human pillow agrees.BellaLocke wrote:You are being brave.
And the human pillow, don’t forget the human pillow as they will soon be our overlords.BellaLocke wrote: stretching her arms to try and loosen up after a night spent on the couch.
Yup. did you see her wash them after using the bathroom. I didn't.BellaLocke wrote:“You think me holding your hand is brave?”
Hangover has kicked in. get the Berocca!BellaLocke wrote:A single tear rolling down Willow’s cheek turned into more than a few.
Might be for the best if she’s on a water meter, her bills will be sky high. Serious eye leakage.BellaLocke wrote:Eventually, the tears stopped, and she was left feeling empty.
Come on human finger. A Mrs Lovett special.BellaLocke wrote:Tara figured that there was something hidden in the sandwich that would make it uniquely Willow’s
Four fingers on a typical hand. Come on human finger!BellaLocke wrote:I have to hand it to her,
Not a typical Maclay fridge item huh. Shame don’t they know there’s a five finger discount everywhere.BellaLocke wrote:She was not happy with what we had in the fridge
No doubt, telling anything to queue will get results. But then there’s the reluctant stand off because Brits like a bargain however a new queue will be formed and not in the order they are currently in but if they stay in this queue and others leave, they will be in the most prestigious position, the front of the queue.BellaLocke wrote:She knows where to hit them where it hurts
I was going to call her out for not baking the bread and growing the veg but she made Mayo, I know when to back off.she made the mayo
‘Who Are You’ vibes.BellaLocke wrote:wanted to cheer you up and give you something that was just yours
Again not clinical, it’s all emotion.This is what frightens me; the care, the familiarity, and the ease of being with her. I feel like she snuck past all of my defenses to be there for me and to help me in her way.
Don’t you hate it when people finger your food.Dub Vision wrote:There was a surprise finger hidden in the turkey.
Don’t know if you’ve ever watched Dragon ball Z but the best way I can describe the pressurised time frame with their growth is the hyperbolic time chamber. It’s a place where two people can go in and live two years but in real time, its two days. So to everyone else it’s a short time frame but really they’ve gone years of being only each other’s company and growing together. In this story the time is real time but their emotions and relationship have been in the chamber. Not rushed, a natural progression between them but to the world, zoom.BellaLocke wrote:I have to remind myself of the timeframe because there has been so much growth and progress in their friendship, that it feels like it has been a lot longer.
You heard them. (Thanks for keeping the line warm.)BellaLocke wrote:On with the show!
Practice in front of the books.Author Note: My Latin is a little rusty
Slash human pillow.BellaLocke wrote:she was casting with a powerful empath
Welcome to England!Although the days were becoming increasingly cold and rainy
I know it’s an actual book but I’m just seeing a fart joke every time.BellaLocke wrote:The Wind in the Willows
I was reading the hug and thought Willow won’t be happy, not maliciously as its clear she will wait until Tara is ready, then this line came and it was, yep. Without even having the focus on Willow, my mind was set on how Willow felt to the exchange, nice bit of work that. Shows how well you’ve expressed Willows emotions.BellaLocke wrote:Her heart broke into a million pieces,
Remember this one for public toilets.BellaLocke wrote:“Omnino cincinno. Summa silentium.”
A contrast to Tara in the previous chapter, all her tears brought out with the music and now Willow with tears but in total silence. Tara got a sandwich after, something that was just hers however Willow feels alone. Both sad but uniquely them while being opposite outlets of the sorrow while in the same place. Consistent with how their relationship has been playing out in recent chapters, Tara working of trying to bring out her feelings for a better connection and willow stepping back so she doesn’t get any errant emotion that Tara isn’t ready to share.BellaLocke wrote:The torrent of tears didn’t end even when her voice gave out. No matter how much she willed herself to get up and try to play an instrument so that she could channel her grief, the redhead could not move from the floor.
I go blind but then it’s fine. It happens often, I'm told its called blinking.they could be blind sometimes
Depends on what size shoe she is. My guess uncomfortable.BellaLocke wrote:How would you feel if you were in her shoes?”
That’s one way to summarise a complex situation but it does hit it on the nose.BellaLocke wrote:this whole clusterfuck was fixed
Not sure what’s more concerning, rockaby baby on the tree top or rockaby baby in a dragons arms.BellaLocke wrote:Solana rocked Willow
Is this a bipedal stair climbing or a four limbed crawl up the stairs? I’ve never thought of a dragon using stairs before, It’s giving entertaining visuals.BellaLocke wrote:The dragon left the room and headed upstairs to Tara’s room.
I don’t know, it’s a rational fear to imagine someone sitting at the bottom of your bed but for an actual dragon to be there. That’s a weird mix of aarrggghhh, huh, errr, hi.BellaLocke wrote:Tara rolled over and nearly jumped out of her skin when she was greeted by the dragon
Wow dragons breathe fire and drop middle of the night bombs. Evolution.BellaLocke wrote:Solana did not wait for Tara to answer before she got up and moved out of the room.
Yeah no, a dragon shows up and strolls around the place like she owns it. She’ll be getting a glass of sangria in a minute to reward herself for a job well done.BellaLocke wrote:Solana walked back to Kathryn’s study
Step aside monkey butlers, dragon butlers are now the new thing.BellaLocke wrote:“Let’s get you into the bath, young one, and then I will get you something to drink.”
Rockabye baby in a dragons arms,BellaLocke wrote:quietly sang her a lullaby that she used to sing when Tara was young to help calm her down.
Some don’t.BellaLocke wrote:“I don’t see how you humans sleep in clothes.”
Well, that’s information I didn’t want to know but err point in case Solana. You can be naked bed time buddies. One’s a red head, the others a dragon, together they bond over naked sleeping. A buddy cop movie that will solve what really goes on in mattress shops that have no customers ever. If it doesn’t melt your heart the dragon fire will. Coming to theatres never.BellaLocke wrote: “Normally, I sleep naked
Plot twist, the bath was a brine.BellaLocke wrote:“Dragons can eat just about anything, but meat is definitely my favorite.”
So close but the human pillow is pinned down to the couch yet again.BellaLocke wrote:She placed her head on Kathryn’s lap. The raven-haired witch ran her fingers through Willow’s locks.
She’s free!BellaLocke wrote:Both women moved
Officer Seymour Butts, co-lead of naked bed time buddies.BellaLocke wrote:I suppose there could be worse nicknames
Here we go.BellaLocke wrote:“Would it be ok if we talked alone?”
The use of silence here is rather impactful. Especially in contrast to the forced silence Willow imposed at the start of the chapter. For me the silence of this connects to me. It’s not an exact same situation but to summarise someone vocally told me something, they didn’t have to, they wanted to and it’s a moment I think of at times and what I remember is the silence. It’s not a silence of uh oh. It’s a silence of processing because through my mind I was thinking, how amazing the person was and it wasn’t because of how they reacted but because of they have acted and always acted. What they told me made no definition because the definition of amazing was already there regardless of the information. And with that letter I can imagine the gears going in Willows head and thinking about it I think the way she reacted to Faith is the kind of thought process going on here for Willow. It is sadness but it’s not a rage at the person who caused the hurt but it’s a sad of how the person telling you the information went through it but ultimately thinking how they went through it just makes them shine. Which in regards to faith is Willow could have been jealous but she wasn’t, she was happy for Tara to have a friend. Nicely done.BellaLocke wrote:Willow gently released the blonde’s hand and carefully took the letter. Tears slowly started to fall down the redhead’s face not long after she started reading. Tara wrung her hands and occasionally looked over at her friend. Half an hour passed while the Willow carefully read the entire letter. When she was done reading, the redhead carefully put it down and moved slightly so that she could look at her friend.
She slowly opened her arms and waited. Tara fell into Willow’s embrace and held her tight while the redhead gently rubbed her back. Both women cried as they held each other for the first time.
Made it your own, a very nice follow up to the silence because it explains it. You’ve crafted the canon to your story.BellaLocke wrote:“See, that's where you're a dummy. I think about what you grew up with, and then I look at what you are — it makes me proud. It makes me care for you all the more”
The camera pans to show faith, Kathryn and Odessa fighting to shove their ear on the glass held to the door. A flurry of elbow shoving and mouthed curses. Magical and otherwise.BellaLocke wrote:I do my best to stay out of private conversations, young one.
I can see that.BellaLocke wrote:My hope here is to still capture that rebel, purveyor of shenanigans, and mistress of mischief that was shown or hinted at in the show
A feeling of anxiety or dismay, typically at something unexpected. – Thanks Google, new word added to the vocabulary.BellaLocke wrote:consternation
She’s a sentient human pillow who is planning to take over the world however her greatest weakness is spaces on the sofa. If ones available and a sad person is nearby it’s like magnets.BellaLocke wrote:“Want some blackmail material on your mom?”
This is regarding the whole comedy section, starting with Willow and Tara telling faith about the bed gymnastics and ending with Odessa and Kathryn leaving the room. I think I can see what you’re trying to do but I’m not feeling it.BellaLocke wrote:“So, mom, I hear you’re a real knockout in the sack.”
You’ve completed the bottle opener level but can you now complete level spoon?BellaLocke wrote:The redhead managed to impress herself and Tara when she cracked the three bottles open on the first try
My mind changed it instinctively to CSM, so now Faith is named the cigarette smoking man. I wonder if this works backwards and I’ll see CSM as a cleavage-y slut bomb, he could pull it off.BellaLocke wrote:CSB?
It’s a good thing willow is being tongue and cheek here.BellaLocke wrote:It’s like you want people to look
I assume eye line.BellaLocke wrote:“How did we go from Faith’s cleavage to mine?”
She finds blinking hard.BellaLocke wrote:“How much have you been staring, Red?”
Great section, no judgemental or probing, just a gentle question from Willow not getting heavy into it but enough to learn more about Tara’s feelings and how she can adjust accordingly to make sure Tara feels comfortable.. Nicely done.BellaLocke wrote:“You don’t deal well with sexuality in general, do you?”
If only you knew of the sentient human pillow VS couch intergalactic wars across the universes existence.BellaLocke wrote:Faith was surprised to find her mom sitting on the couch
Its Tara’s boob. How did I work this out? Because you had the set up with the film discussion, then you had the position by saying they were asleep in each other’s arms. Now as a reader we experience the action with Willow which aids the funny because laughter is infectious and best shared with people.BellaLocke wrote:Her pillow was softer than usual
And here it’s the turn, so while you gave us comedy, the joke isn’t the point, the joke leads us into learning Tara being comfortable with Willow to that which no doubt is a big reassurance to willow who was so lost in the last part. You used humour to show us something significant. You have the content and the presentation on this one. Plus with having the Kathryn /Faith scene in between you allowed the seed to germinate so it’s not instantly obvious.BellaLocke wrote:her eyes shot open in horror
Preach.BellaLocke wrote:“Don’t care about them. As long as we know what we are and are comfortable with what we’re doing, that is all that matters.”
Town crier seems a solid choice.BellaLocke wrote:who else am I going to tell all of my secrets to?”
Town crier is crying now.BellaLocke wrote:“You’re mine too.”
Whoa! Hold up, Willow opening a door for an Olympic champ? I guess the grasshopper caught the fly with chopsticks. Learnt from the master.BellaLocke wrote:Willow turned Tara around and showed her the door that led to the cavern. When she opened it up,
Now for Tara to learn from her student, Chug! Chug! Chug!BellaLocke wrote:“Willow, kindly show Tara to the stream and have her drink as you do.”
And cataracts.BellaLocke wrote:with that age came the ability to calm others
Tara shows up to Solana’s place and drinks her beverage offering and then calls the host old and fat. Good thing there’s no toilets here for her to destroy.BellaLocke wrote:Solana was larger than she could have possibly imagined
Nice save Tara.BellaLocke wrote:You are so beautiful and magnificent
That wind left the band.BellaLocke wrote:What do you think of when it comes to earth and fire?
Younger than my tongue but older than my teeth, is an annoying phrase but it is factual.BellaLocke wrote:How old are you?
Social services has been going for a long time, no wonder it’s so run down.BellaLocke wrote:the Mother decided that she would gift magic to certain families who demonstrated the care and respect
So to translate the phrase, younger than the earth but older than you. Which is just as annoying.BellaLocke wrote:I am as old as magic in this realm
From the history lesson, technically there’s an element of nepotism to it. She couldn’t possibly choose you if you weren't related because then there wouldn’t be the mother dragon brand of magic at all. With that in mind whatever this Faith and Buffy power is, I suspect it’s tied to one of these other magical creatures magic, I’d take a gander at Valkyrie.BellaLocke wrote:Why did you choose me?
I feel like this is an RPG and Tara just unlocked fast travel to the dragon realm. Celebration music in the background and a random NPC clapping until you click for more text. So you never click, you stare into those lifeless NPC eyes and listen to the claps. Knowing you’re in control and even though the eyes are dead they can and will somehow grow deader with every passing clap, the strain of pixilated arms weighing on its soulless soul. Clap, Clap.BellaLocke wrote:“One last thing. Tara, now that you have been here, you will be able to travel here of your own volition. You are always welcome as is Willow.”
Do it the dragon way, smash that head full pelt into Odessa’s. Its love not a concussion.BellaLocke wrote:Kathryn smiled and kissed Odessa’s forehead softly
Contact lens cameras and mini earbuds to give instructions. Kathryn and Odessa with VR head sets and a microphone in the next room.BellaLocke wrote:The only thing that we can do now is help her navigate the intimacy that will come.
Dub wrote:It’s coming through, looking at the starting chapters and where they are now, the ease they have with each other now, while still on shaky ground in their perspectives, is in a more stable place than it was where just leaning slightly, felt like they would fall off a cliff. They’ve got some stabilising reach to each other rather than seeing each other as isolated wobblers, if that makes any sense. They might not feel able to hold on yet but it doesn’t mean they aren’t trying for the possibility to hold on.BellaLocke wrote:In the end, I want people to see just how far they have come and how they have conquered things that seemed insurmountable at the time.
*Applies seat belt* Strapped in and ready to go. I fear this means something else in America.
]Now I’m going to tell you a serious English tradition, while it sounds made up, I swear I’m not winding you up. Checkout ‘Cooper’s Hill Cheese-Rolling and Wake’ Going downhill is definitely a fun experience, especially if following a big wheel of cheese. It is fast but somehow your mind makes it slow motion, plus the pain of all those injuries last. Worth it though if you catch the cheese, I think you get to keep it. The videos are brutal but you’re safely watching from across the pond. No cheese though, swings and roundabouts.
Good pillow squish? Not too soft but not lumpy or distorted stuffing. Or is it the arm wrap technique? Sentient human pillows tell us your secrets because you can likely take over the world with ease as long as you outnumber the amount of available couch space because if there’s a space it seems you are made to occupy it pretty quick.BellaLocke wrote:the tall witch was the most powerful empath in the world, and with good reason.
I was going to call her out for not baking the bread and growing the veg but she made Mayo, I know when to back off.she made the mayo
‘Who Are You’ vibes.BellaLocke wrote:wanted to cheer you up and give you something that was just yours
Again not clinical, it’s all emotion.This is what frightens me; the care, the familiarity, and the ease of being with her. I feel like she snuck past all of my defenses to be there for me and to help me in her way.
Don’t know if you’ve ever watched Dragon ball Z but the best way I can describe the pressurised time frame with their growth is the hyperbolic time chamber. It’s a place where two people can go in and live two years but in real time, its two days. So to everyone else it’s a short time frame but really they’ve gone years of being only each other’s company and growing together. In this story the time is real time but their emotions and relationship have been in the chamber. Not rushed, a natural progression between them but to the world, zoom.BellaLocke wrote:I have to remind myself of the timeframe because there has been so much growth and progress in their friendship, that it feels like it has been a lot longer.
You heard them. (Thanks for keeping the line warm.)BellaLocke wrote:On with the show!
Practice in front of the books.Author Note: My Latin is a little rusty
Slash human pillow.BellaLocke wrote:she was casting with a powerful empath
Welcome to England!Although the days were becoming increasingly cold and rainy
I was reading the hug and thought Willow won’t be happy, not maliciously as its clear she will wait until Tara is ready, then this line came and it was, yep. Without even having the focus on Willow, my mind was set on how Willow felt to the exchange, nice bit of work that. Shows how well you’ve expressed Willows emotions.BellaLocke wrote:Her heart broke into a million pieces,
Remember this one for public toilets.BellaLocke wrote:“Omnino cincinno. Summa silentium.”
A contrast to Tara in the previous chapter, all her tears brought out with the music and now Willow with tears but in total silence. Tara got a sandwich after, something that was just hers however Willow feels alone. Both sad but uniquely them while being opposite outlets of the sorrow while in the same place. Consistent with how their relationship has been playing out in recent chapters, Tara working of trying to bring out her feelings for a better connection and willow stepping back so she doesn’t get any errant emotion that Tara isn’t ready to share.BellaLocke wrote:The torrent of tears didn’t end even when her voice gave out. No matter how much she willed herself to get up and try to play an instrument so that she could channel her grief, the redhead could not move from the floor.
Depends on what size shoe she is. My guess uncomfortable.BellaLocke wrote:How would you feel if you were in her shoes?”
That’s one way to summarise a complex situation but it does hit it on the nose.BellaLocke wrote:this whole clusterfuck was fixed
Not sure what’s more concerning, rockaby baby on the tree top or rockaby baby in a dragons arms.BellaLocke wrote:Solana rocked Willow
Is this a bipedal stair climbing or a four limbed crawl up the stairs? I’ve never thought of a dragon using stairs before, It’s giving entertaining visuals.BellaLocke wrote:The dragon left the room and headed upstairs to Tara’s room.
I don’t know, it’s a rational fear to imagine someone sitting at the bottom of your bed but for an actual dragon to be there. That’s a weird mix of aarrggghhh, huh, errr, hi.BellaLocke wrote:Tara rolled over and nearly jumped out of her skin when she was greeted by the dragon
Wow dragons breathe fire and drop middle of the night bombs. Evolution.BellaLocke wrote:Solana did not wait for Tara to answer before she got up and moved out of the room.
Yeah no, a dragon shows up and strolls around the place like she owns it. She’ll be getting a glass of sangria in a minute to reward herself for a job well done.BellaLocke wrote:Solana walked back to Kathryn’s study
Step aside monkey butlers, dragon butlers are now the new thing.BellaLocke wrote:“Let’s get you into the bath, young one, and then I will get you something to drink.”
Rockabye baby in a dragons arms,BellaLocke wrote:quietly sang her a lullaby that she used to sing when Tara was young to help calm her down.
when the dragon yawns
the baby will burn.
Well, that’s information I didn’t want to know but err point in case Solana. You can be naked bed time buddies. One’s a red head, the others a dragon, together they bond over naked sleeping. A buddy cop movie that will solve what really goes on in mattress shops that have no customers ever. If it doesn’t melt your heart the dragon fire will. Coming to theatres never.BellaLocke wrote: “Normally, I sleep naked
Plot twist, the bath was a brine.BellaLocke wrote:“Dragons can eat just about anything, but meat is definitely my favorite.”
So close but the human pillow is pinned down to the couch yet again.BellaLocke wrote:She placed her head on Kathryn’s lap. The raven-haired witch ran her fingers through Willow’s locks.
Officer Seymour Butts, co-lead of naked bed time buddies.BellaLocke wrote:I suppose there could be worse nicknames
The use of silence here is rather impactful. Especially in contrast to the forced silence Willow imposed at the start of the chapter. For me the silence of this connects to me. It’s not an exact same situation but to summarise someone vocally told me something, they didn’t have to, they wanted to and it’s a moment I think of at times and what I remember is the silence. It’s not a silence of uh oh. It’s a silence of processing because through my mind I was thinking, how amazing the person was and it wasn’t because of how they reacted but because of they have acted and always acted. What they told me made no definition because the definition of amazing was already there regardless of the information. And with that letter I can imagine the gears going in Willows head and thinking about it I think the way she reacted to Faith is the kind of thought process going on here for Willow. It is sadness but it’s not a rage at the person who caused the hurt but it’s a sad of how the person telling you the information went through it but ultimately thinking how they went through it just makes them shine. Which in regards to faith is Willow could have been jealous but she wasn’t, she was happy for Tara to have a friend. Nicely done.BellaLocke wrote:Willow gently released the blonde’s hand and carefully took the letter. Tears slowly started to fall down the redhead’s face not long after she started reading. Tara wrung her hands and occasionally looked over at her friend. Half an hour passed while the Willow carefully read the entire letter. When she was done reading, the redhead carefully put it down and moved slightly so that she could look at her friend.
She slowly opened her arms and waited. Tara fell into Willow’s embrace and held her tight while the redhead gently rubbed her back. Both women cried as they held each other for the first time.
Made it your own, a very nice follow up to the silence because it explains it. You’ve crafted the canon to your story.BellaLocke wrote:“See, that's where you're a dummy. I think about what you grew up with, and then I look at what you are — it makes me proud. It makes me care for you all the more”
The camera pans to show faith, Kathryn and Odessa fighting to shove their ear on the glass held to the door. A flurry of elbow shoving and mouthed curses. Magical and otherwise.BellaLocke wrote:I do my best to stay out of private conversations, young one.
That was a lot to take in, dog reading, faith, Silent cries, a dragon using stairs, Tara being brave. No matter how absurd those things may sound together it all had a flow to it and they all hit their beat to build to where they needed to be.
A feeling of anxiety or dismay, typically at something unexpected. – Thanks Google, new word added to the vocabulary.BellaLocke wrote:consternation
She’s a sentient human pillow who is planning to take over the world however her greatest weakness is spaces on the sofa. If ones available and a sad person is nearby it’s like magnets.BellaLocke wrote:“Want some blackmail material on your mom?”
You’ve completed the bottle opener level but can you now complete level spoon?BellaLocke wrote:The redhead managed to impress herself and Tara when she cracked the three bottles open on the first try
My mind changed it instinctively to CSM, so now Faith is named the cigarette smoking man. I wonder if this works backwards and I’ll see CSM as a cleavage-y slut bomb, he could pull it off.BellaLocke wrote:CSB?
It’s a good thing willow is being tongue and cheek here.BellaLocke wrote:It’s like you want people to lookI assume eye line.BellaLocke wrote:“How did we go from Faith’s cleavage to mine?”She finds blinking hard.BellaLocke wrote:“How much have you been staring, Red?”
Great section, no judgemental or probing, just a gentle question from Willow not getting heavy into it but enough to learn more about Tara’s feelings and how she can adjust accordingly to make sure Tara feels comfortable.. Nicely done.BellaLocke wrote:“You don’t deal well with sexuality in general, do you?”
Its Tara’s boob. How did I work this out? Because you had the set up with the film discussion, then you had the position by saying they were asleep in each other’s arms. Now as a reader we experience the action with Willow which aids the funny because laughter is infectious and best shared with people.BellaLocke wrote:Her pillow was softer than usual
And here it’s the turn, so while you gave us comedy, the joke isn’t the point, the joke leads us into learning Tara being comfortable with Willow to that which no doubt is a big reassurance to willow who was so lost in the last part. You used humour to show us something significant. You have the content and the presentation on this one. Plus with having the Kathryn /Faith scene in between you allowed the seed to germinate so it’s not instantly obvious.BellaLocke wrote:her eyes shot open in horror
So to translate the phrase, younger than the earth but older than you. Which is just as annoying.BellaLocke wrote:I am as old as magic in this realm
From the history lesson, technically there’s an element of nepotism to it. She couldn’t possibly choose you if you weren't related because then there wouldn’t be the mother dragon brand of magic at all. With that in mind whatever this Faith and Buffy power is, I suspect it’s tied to one of these other magical creatures magic, I’d take a gander at Valkyrie.BellaLocke wrote:Why did you choose me?
Dub wrote:Overall this chapter gives some, ease form the upset, furthers relationships but also furthers the readers understanding as to why some relationships are as they are. We get a further look into the Mythos of the world and also have new story threads to follow, the promise of a new Guardian for Willow, Buffy learning she has some kind of power which is similar to Faiths, Odessa’s guilt. It feels like a new page has been turned and the story is moving into a new phase.
GrimCityGirl wrote:I have *finally* caught up haha, I’m sorry dear I’ve been all over the shop.
Really fascinating how this story is coming together, love all the dragon stuff and the Faith banter.
Heartbreaking seeing them go through so much pain but glad they’re getting closer.
Still a little confused why they couldn’t save Tara? Like how they managed to get Odessa out but not her?
Very unique story, I look forward to reading more.
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