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First Fic: The Chronus Spell

Postby RedIshtar » Mon Dec 01, 2003 7:59 pm

Hey kittens, this is my first attempt at a fic, I have been reading so much here that I decided to give it a try. I don’t know how it is and if I will ever finish this idea, but I’m putting it here so you can maybe give me some pointers.



Title: The Chronus Spell

Author: RedIshtar or Kay

Pairing: W/T (duh!), B/F and X/A

Rating: PG for now

Settling: This is a little after Will and Tara met and Faith never went psycho, I will explain how things happened in the fic.

Summary: I suck at summaries, so you will have to just read to find out. :wink

Feedback: PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE!!! :pray

N/A: The Prologue may be a little vague and short, but you will understand better later, I promise. Oh, and I’m not very good in English, so if there is any mistake please correct me!



Prologue – The Spell



The redhead looked around the laboratory one more time making sure everything was in ready for the self-destruction operation. No way in hell she would let those fucking bastards put their hands on her Mama’s lifetime work, as soon as they were out, no one else would ever see the laboratory again.

She trained her eyes on the computers, machines, chemical samples and everything her Mama had been working on before-Not going there, so not going there. She shook her head to clear her thoughts; she needed to be concentrated on the mission at hand.

The sight of her companions finishing getting the supplies and weapons ready brought a small smile to her lips. They were a team, best of friends since they could remember as had been their parents. She was suddenly flooded with they in this same laboratory playing with her Mama’s invents and being half-heartedly scolded afterwards. The girl smiled once more remembering all their mischiefs, her smile turning to a frown as she took the cold and hard reality they were in now.

The girl turned when she felt a hand slip into hers, facing the vibrant green eyes on the blond boy by her side, her own blue ones glistering with unshed tears. He squeezed her hand lightly before letting go, silently telling her that everything would work out.

The blond offered her a lopsided grin that was so familiar to her. She grinned back just as another boy joined them, this one with shaggy brown hair and a little bit younger than his two companions.

The younger boy greeted his two friend and sat on the ground beside the bag of supplies he had just put there to wait for the others to finish getting the weapons all set.

After a few minutes the last two missing members of their team showed up carrying a chest of weapons. A blonde girl about the same age as them and a much younger little boy, neither seeming to have any difficulty in carrying the heavy chest around.

The redhead opened the chest and took out the weapons, a silver double edged axe for herself, a pair of sais to the blond boy, a Japanese sword to the brown haired boy, a short sword to the other girl and a crossbow to the youngster. And, of course, each of them took a couple of nice pointy stakes.

Having the weapons and supplies ready the redhead and the blond boy prepared to do the spell that would hopefully end their nightmare. They drew a magical circle on the ground around them and took an urn off the supplies bag. The urn was golden with a Greek symbol on the top. They put the urn on the center of the circle just as they heard the steel door of the laboratory being forced.

Hurrying the team joined hands and as the redhead and the blond started chanting in Greek the urn glowed bright golden. In a couple of seconds all the lab was glowing with the urn’s power.

The friends blinked out of existence just as the door came tumbling down and from far away everyone could see a bright explosion as the laboratory exploded with everything and everyone in.



TO BE CONTINUED…



Soooo how it was? Should I bother to write more? :D



=> Kayleen <=



Edited by: RedIshtar at: 12/1/03 7:01 pm
RedIshtar
 


Re: First Fic: The Chronus Spell

Postby kindagay » Mon Dec 01, 2003 9:11 pm

Okay, you've got me all intrigued, please continue :pray

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I am perfectly normal in my abnormalities

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Re: First Fic: The Chronus Spell

Postby Maccoda » Mon Dec 01, 2003 9:12 pm

I really like the concept, the Second Generation of Scobbies. Please get yourself a beta reader to help with your grammar and punctuation, that will make it easier on your readers. I, for one, would like to see where you take this.

Maccoda
 


Re: First Fic: The Chronus Spell

Postby Marilda » Mon Dec 01, 2003 9:13 pm

Write more? Definitely. This was an intriguing start. There were a couple of minor errors that I'm sure could be caught by a beta.



I'd be willing to do that for you if you'd like. Either way, fascinating start. I look foward to reading more.

Marilda
 


Thanks!

Postby RedIshtar » Tue Dec 02, 2003 3:36 am

Hey kittens!

Thanks for the support and yes, I'm in need of a beta. What can I say? I'm used to write just small compositions in English, I can read pretty well, but writing is another thing. :blush

I will try to write some more later, I'm really glad you liked my Scoobies New Generation. I can say that the original Scoobies are in for a few surprises :D

Marilda, I would like very much if you could be my beta, God knows I need help with this. :bow



=> Kayleen <=

RedIshtar
 


Re: Thanks!

Postby Marilda » Tue Dec 02, 2003 8:03 am

Cool!



Email me at marildaoviedo@yahoo.com



I'd love to help.

Marilda
 


Re: Thanks!

Postby sam darls » Tue Dec 02, 2003 8:42 am

Hey Kayleen..I love your mane btw..cute. Anyway, I love this so far, yeah, please continue. Love sammi xx

sam darls
 


Re: Thanks!

Postby TaraBaby77 » Tue Dec 02, 2003 4:33 pm

Hey Kayleen -



Your killin' me here, heehee. I'm interested!!! Now, please, stop with the suspense and feed us an update, :D . Sounds great. I just wanna know where you are taking us... =). Great stuff.... =)

Aaron

'TaraBaby77'

"It's about two people, regardless of sex, who love each other and treat each other with compassion and respect."

Edited by: TaraBaby77 at: 12/2/03 3:35 pm
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Re: Thanks!

Postby FIRESIGN » Tue Dec 02, 2003 5:30 pm

Nice start! Can't wait to read more!



Cin - aka FIRESIGN:applause

FIRESIGN
 


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