Ramblings...

[reyjawk]

Title: Ramblings

Author: Reyjawk

Rating: PG

Spoilers: None

Summary: This is my first time posting on Pens. This is just a brief, and I mean brief, story. Last year, I suddenly had a vision of this scene and had to write it down. Can you guess whose POV it is?

Feedback: Yes please. I know it is extremely short so if you find something to write feedback on then that is good. Be gentle please...

Thanks: Thank You Paul!



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Her hair is tightly pulled up revealing her long graceful neck. She brings her hand up to her face to flick away hair that isn’t there. She catches me watching her and awkwardly lowers her hand back down to her side. It is as if she doesn’t know what to do with her hands. She will start to bring them up to her face and then stop halfway. This I recognize as a nervous habit. She is not comfortable being so exposed. She prefers to hide under her hair and baggy clothes. She cannot believe that anyone would want to look at her. In away she is right. I don’t just want to look at her I want to gaze upon her. I want to memorize every last detail of her face, neck, and hands to satisfy a manic fear that I might blink and she will be gone. She is looking down again trying to avoid my gaze. Her painfully shy insecurities are having the opposite effect on me than she intends. Rather than looking away and submitting to the awkwardness I find myself staring harder. My heart is pounding in my ears. I can hear my blood rushing through my body. My hand is shaking as I pointlessly try to keep from reaching out to her. I am pulled to her as a river is to the sea. I need to touch her to feel that she is real. I find my fingers reaching out and lifting her chin up and my hand is brushing her hair away so I can clearly see her eyes. I am hoping to see passion reflecting back at me. I need her to see me the way I see her.



Finis



Toni

"Reality is nothing more than a collective hunch"

Edited by: reyjawk at: 12/24/02 7:54:34 am

[Chewster]

Hey Toni,



I am so happy that you finally posted this. It seemed a shame for you to have it and for hardly anyone to see it.



It encapsulates that first look is such a sweet way, getting at the thoughts that went through Willow's mind, and Tara's as seen through her eyes.



The focus on the details is so very Willow and the fact that she wants Tara to reflect her own feelings is lovely. Reading it I like to place it into Hush, the Wicca Group, but it needn't be. This could be any of the early meetings between them prior to them actually being together and getting used to each other.



The early days, and especially looking inside their heads like this, always entice me and I wonder if, perhaps, you would consider showing us Tara's thoughts at this same time in another piece? It would be nice to see what you thought of her... erm thoughts in those same moments.

Paul




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Oooo!



*shiver*

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love and kisses

Still Waters



..... she wears secrets in her hair......

[Cindy Lou Who]

I ususally shy away from fics written in a single condensed-paragraph format. They can wreak havoc on CPU-tired eyes and are haunting reminders of 19th Century English Lit Dickens classes.



That said...this is beautiful. I was captured by the imagery of it. And Tara's awkward and exquisite shyness having an opposite effect - so nice.



I'm very glad you brought this out and dusted it off in order to share it here. I'm better for it.



~~~Suse (A.K.A. Cindy Lou Who)

[reyjawk]

I am sorry if this inspired Haunted memories. I thought about breaking it up but I didnt know if that would make sense cause it really is one paragraph.



Yes Paul I have thought about writing from Tara's point of view...Perhaps I will make this a holiday exercise...



Thanks guys! You dont know how hard this was for me to post...



Toni

"Reality is nothing more than a collective hunch"

[tiredsoul]

This was great. Loved it. I especially liked ...

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I need her to see me the way I see her.

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Lovely thought and beautiful last line.



I'll put a vote in for Tara's POV!



--celia

[Katharyn]

I am ashamed to say that I did not "discover" this for myself it was pushed at me by one of those kittens that scratches all the time, but I am so glad that I was*S*



Not usually my sort of fic this, but every so often I read one and usually (as with most things on Pens) I am pleasantly surprised. A lovely little part.



As others have said this would be well-complemented by a Tara PoV. I am a big fan of PoV based/focused fic so that has a definite vote from me.



A nice first fic.



Katharyn

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If I want a little pussy, I got my own to play with.
Chance in Chance.




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[reyjawk]

Your responses mean more than you can possibly know. I am deeply touched. I am working on Tara's PoV. Hopefully, I will have that done soon.



Then maybe I will actually complete a full length story! You never know...



Merry Christmas and Happy New Years!



Toni

"Reality is nothing more than a collective hunch"

[reyjawk]

Title: Ramblings II

Author: Reyjawk

Rating: PG

Spoilers: None

Disclaimer: All characters belong to ME/J. Whedon.

Summary: This is a sequel to Ramblings. It was written from Tara's PoV. The first part was much easier for me to write. This one I had to work at. I am really interested in whether you think I got Tara "right".

Feedback: Yes please. I know it is extremely short so if you find something to write feedback on then that is good. Be gentle please...

Thanks: I want to thank my beta reader, Paul. Thank You Paul!!



Ramblings II

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She is staring at me. What is it she sees? It can’t be me. Is my hair out of place or is there something on my face. What is so captivating her stare? Why does she continue to look at me? What can she find so appealing? Will this be a game or an experiment to satisfy her scientific curiosity? Am I a class for her to pass? What can she see when she looks at me?



Those gentle eyes of green burn right through me. The intensity of her gaze is disconcerting. I’ve gotten so used to hiding that I don’t know how to be seen anymore.



She’s moving closer and I subconsciously back away looking for an escape. I just don’t know what to do with my hands. So, I run them through my hair, down my sides, and bring them to rest across my breast. Briefly, I wonder what her hands would feel like chasing mine across my body. A flush rises on my face and grows redder under her gaze. Does she realize what she is doing to me? I can’t think clearly my mind is in a daze. My heart is pounding in my ears. Surely, she must hear the beating and see me shaking. Why does she not turn away? Am I dreaming? If so, please can this one come true?



She catches her breath, tilts her head as if listening, and then nods. She’s made a decision. She moves towards me with some determination. I know I am her destination.



She pauses before me, perhaps in her own moment of insecurity. My breath is trapped within me. As is my spirit, I feel as though this moment will make or break me. I leave the next necessary step up to her. Crossing this, final, line must be her idea for I crossed it weeks ago. My lack of movement is the only consent I can offer. She reaches up to caress my cheek and then runs her hand through my hair. Oh what gentle touch…



I close my eyes for a moment time is standing still. I am ecstatic to have just this much from her. I lean my face into her hand and she does not pull away! I open my eyes and smile. She is staring at me. I know what she sees. It is me. Oh God how can this be! So I do what I must I raise my head and let her see the love in me.



Finis

"Reality is nothing more than a collective hunch"

[WillowWatcher]

Fantastic. We want more...

Chris





"I may be love's bitch, but at least I'm man enough to admit it." Spike

[Populnaeus]

Sigh,

This is the line that got me.

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I know I am her destination.

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I like the fearful/hopeful tone you've given Tara, and I would like to read some further Ramblings. please? + always. Laney

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Waffles, Waffles, Waffles! This thing better have an off switch!

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