was AWESOME! (Imagine that awesome in a Barney Stinson high pitched voice)
!!Tara has a temper, isn't shown often, but when it is watch out!

a Goddess in my book
Thank you for this amazing story.
coming!!I like how it shows how Willow is not willing to let her chances pass by her and further solidifies the fact that she's ready to be happy again.
(Imagine that awesome in a Barney Stinson high pitched voice)
Willow is so clueless sometimes



She was brought back to consciousness sometime later by the feel of soft lips against hers. There was a contentment she had never felt before that settled itself inside her as their lips pressed together; all that existed was her and Willow, everything else fell away. They both smiled into the kiss.


I will wash the earth of your evil, wash it away with the blood of witches. Just like your mother. Your mother was the first. The blood of witches is on my hands. My life will be washed clean, and I will be clean again.”
His eyes burned with rage and a fevered insanity as he watched their lips meet. “Willow. I was never done with you. We will not be done until one of us is dead,” he growled out as he looked down at the bag of weapons at his feet. Donald Maclay was not leaving this time, not until both of the women were dead. He took the weapons out, one by one, cleaning them and sharpening them when needed. Donald Maclay was going hunting, and he was prepared.
I think that just about says it all...I hope Willow gives him a lightning strike right in the ass!!

Really sweet moment and shows that Tara respects Morgan's memory that was nice.“Thank you, Morgan, for everything. For showing Willow what love is, and…f-for letting h-her love m-me.”


Willow saying everything she owns is Tara's, and then by the grave when Tara tells Willow that she owns her heart. I wanted to melt right then and there!!! Such a beautiful moment!!

Then a HILARIOUS babble-attack with Tara concerned about Willow’s breathing!
maybe she also has different coloured quills
Also I wonder how many of the 'wicked witches in fairytales were really victims of society, they have power they must be evil sort of mindset.
then she's like "Dude, why am I impatient? I got me a fine lady up in here."
I can't wait till he gets his! Make sure it's slow and painful, nothing too quick for this bastard.
But her insane and bloodthirsty father is just scary

Dark, atmospheric and a real stench of evil; GREAT job nailing this in a way that’s both effective and poetic.The rain beat against his skin as he dragged the body of the fawn towards the doors of the castle. Night called a lonely song to him, crying out the loss of one of its young. Laughing into the dark, Donald used his knife to slice the corpse, watching as the rain pelted a dark red stain into the gravel walkway.

I love this. It gave me such a warm, happy feeling inside – I can see Willow’s gentleness and love and Tara’s happy confusion so clearly.Tara blushed and looked down, her hair sweeping low, hiding her face. Willow quickly pushed back her own embarrassment and tilted Tara’s jaw so they were eye to eye. “Don’t hide, baby. Please? You’re so beautiful, inside and out. I look into your eyes, and I swear I could see your soul. You are the most beautiful soul I have ever met. Please don’t hide from me.”

This captures that beginning love, the stirrings of deep passion and the confusion/fear over the strength of the new feelings. I also loved, “Willow met Tara’s demand, need for need.” It doesn’t spell out every exact detail (not needed in this moment) but perfectly captures the progression of Tara’s increasing desire for a more physical relationship. Personally, I like them taking their time, especially the way your write their growing awakening.Tara felt love blossom inside her, drawing her towards Willow. There was a pull inside her, no matter where she was or where the red head was, Tara always knew which direction to look; because the pull always brought her to her love. Tara softly touched her lips to Willow’s; only expecting a gentle moment, and what she received was her own hunger. Willow did not force anything on her, asking for entrance with her tongue, which was granted. As their tongues explored, Tara could feel something akin to the hunger of a starved man growing inside herself. She wanted, no, needed, more of Willow. The blonde reached up, threading her fingers into the red hair, pulling Willow closer, plunging her tongue into Willow’s mouth, conveying her need, demanding more.
She set her jaw tight, her eyes steeled over. At that moment, she was no longer the scared little girl, watching her mother die in the woods. She was no longer the young woman who took the beatings, who didn’t speak for the fear of being shut up. She was a grown woman, who was prepared to die for her love, who could face the monster of her nightmares with no fear for herself, because she had Willow.
“Tara?” Willow whispered, seeing the range of emotions on the blonde’s face. The look she now had was one she had never seen before. This look was fierce and strong, and she imagined her own face to be set to something much the same.
First, love how you show Willow seeing and understanding the expressions on Tara’s face; another way you show their deep connection growing. Then the real moment, Tara’s transformation from victim to survivor and survivor to defender of herself and her love. TREMENDOUS use of their magic – I could see it and it gave me a shiver of fierce joy imagining their love blazing across the sky in fire.
genius! They are being honest with each other and I like that. I also like that Willow know's enough to wait and not let things go too far. Dark, atmospheric and a real stench of evil; GREAT job nailing this in a way that’s both effective and poetic.
I could see it and it gave me a shiver of fierce joy imagining their love blazing across the sky in fire.

Geez, that guy has some serious issues..a la Charles Manson Helter Skelter serious. I mean the dude is certifiable, Tara was right when she said that he'd snapped
“I’m a bad girl,” she whispered as tears fell down her face. “Mama, why does Daddy think that magic is evil? You did magic and you weren’t evil.” She tried to get her eyes to adjust to the lighting but the dark was so thick that she couldn’t penetrate it. “Mama, its so dark,” she cried. Her cries were met with silence, always with silence.
What’s different about this nightmare, she wondered. And why can’t I wake up?
“A red head with power will lead them, the blonde at her side will make her stronger. I only warn you, because any life lost is horrible, even a life such as yours,” the stranger replied cryptically. “You will lead an army of bigots such as yourself, and you will lose.”
“I don’t think it was him,” Willow replied softly, her mind spinning as she realized something. “I think we were meant to watch it…to hear the message.”
“About the red he- you! The stranger was talking about you, Willow!”
“And you. Morgan was blonde, but we lost, and I wasn’t leading anyone, he set upon us in the middle of the night. This time…”
“I’ll get an army,” he said grimly.
The woman finished placing her things in her bag. It wasn’t heavy, because she traveled light. She knew what she needed, and carried only what she needed. The moonlight coming through the window reflected off her black hair as she looked up, the blood red streaks almost indiscernible in the dark.
“It’s going to be a long night,” she sighed. “Long few days, in actuality.” To an outside observer, the woman was talking to herself, but in reality, she was talking to the large tiger that now slinked out of the nearby forest, waiting at the edge. She stood tall, fur white with black stripes, a proud bearing set into her stance.
Is it time, Astron, asked a voice in her head. The voice had a sensual tone to it, distinctly feline, she had always thought.
“Yes, we start traveling tonight, Pura,” Astron replied. She ran her hands along the soft fur of her familiar, and moved on, the soft padding of her companion comforting her as she walked into the night.
“W-what?” Tara asked, peering over Willow’s shoulder. Being taller than the red head, it wasn’t hard for her to see what had been left on the steps. She gasped as she felt fear and grief grip her heart, but it was quickly extinguished by something far greater. She set her jaw tight, her eyes steeled over. At that moment, she was no longer the scared little girl, watching her mother die in the woods. She was no longer the young woman who took the beatings, who didn’t speak for the fear of being shut up. She was a grown woman, who was prepared to die for her love, who could face the monster of her nightmares with no fear for herself, because she had Willow.

Brilliant!His abuse is so insidiously evil; masked in calm and phony logic. Striking at a little girl's sense of self-esteem and personal power and doing his best force her to betray her inner magic.“I told you, Tara, we will make you better. We’ll face this thing together, but we can’t do that if you keep giving in to the magic,” he told her calmly as he opened the wooden door. Below them gaped a hole in the earth, a ladder leading down. Tara knew what the hole meant for her and she didn’t like it one bit.
“Daddy, please! I’ll be a good girl, I promise!” Tara begged.
“Climb down, now, Tara,” he said calmly.
I'll admit that the idea of a little child embracing death to find love kind of broke my heart. Then a moment later, hope . . . I liked how Willow and Tara figured out the meaning of the dream, the hope, the message from a sister.Tara’s hunger burned inside of her. She didn’t know how long she had been in the hole, but it had been a long time. Her father and her brother occasionally came by, dropping scraps into her earthen hell, ignoring her cries of “I know I’m evil, please let me out” or “I’m done being a bad girl!”
“Mama,” she whispered. “Can go be with you now? I’m ready.”
LOVE this character already (and I know your bestie is doing a mega-happy dance!!!The woman finished placing her things in her bag. It wasn’t heavy, because she traveled light. She knew what she needed, and carried only what she needed. The moonlight coming through the window reflected off her black hair as she looked up, the blood red streaks almost indiscernible in the dark.
She had been feeling an unrest building in the balance for some time, and last night, staring into the sky, she had known that it was reaching its peak. Off in the distance, colors had danced against the blanket of darkness. It was time.
) The visual, black hair with dark red streaks and the imagery of the portents. Imaginative and amazing. And her familiar - Pura is awesome!

I PM'd once and I will again sometime this weekend.

Glad you liked it! I don't really like prophecies either, but I always think its amazing how hard people will try to change it.“I have a name for friends, but you, sir,” he said with disgust. “You may call me Ripper.”
“Tell me, pet, tell me what they’re saying,” William pleaded. His Drusilla seemed completely insane to others, but he knew that she often had further meaning behind what she was saying. Her visions had driven her insane, her magic pushing it further. But to William, Drusilla was perfect. She loved the same things he did, murder, mayhem, and the things of nightmares.
“Well, you know why I have cast off my surname. We have been close for years, and on the first day we met, you found that out. Why do I not know why you have no surname?”
Why do you assume it is a man? Pura laughed, a strange growling chuckle mixed with a purr.
Don’t worry so much, Pura said, nuzzling into Astron’s side. We’ll be okay.
“I know,” Astron sighed, chewing her food slowly. “I love you, Pura. You’re my best friend.”
If cats could wince, that would be the expression that Astron thought she saw briefly on the cat’s face, before she looked away with those intense eyes to look at the sky. She let out a huff, the breath shaking her whiskers gently. Astron thought for a second that the cat-eyes changed. For a moment, they were chocolate brown, human eyes. Astron shook her head. Fanciful thinking.
I love you too, Astron.
Willow sighed, “Yes, I know, Tare. I feel it, too.” She ached to take the blonde’s hand, but wouldn’t until the “filth” was washed away. “We need to be ready. How do we prepare for something like this?”
“Multiple someone’s, and multiple good feelings,” the blonde said with a smile. She leaned forward and pressed her lips to Willow’s, a gentle reaffirmation of their love amidst the chaos. Tara wrinkled her nose playfully. “You need to bathe.”
“My girl,” Tara repeated, her smile growing even bigger.
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