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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby spells42 » Sun Dec 31, 2006 4:34 pm

Cam
Well, that's a nice way to start off the new year. I love this story, and look forward to reading how they defeat the Mayor and the Sherrif, but mostly how Willow reveals her true self and she and Tara reach their happy ever after.

Willow's life appears to be about to get a whole lot more complicated, with Rayne's mysterious actions - treasure hunting? - and Finn closing in. I wonder what happens with the Sherrif cheating - maybe they split the pot between them, except for the saloon of course.

Hope you have a great 2007.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby wimpy0729 » Sun Dec 31, 2006 5:12 pm

Woo Hoo! Hey Cam, thanks for giving us an end-of-the year present.

Now it looks like the fun is just getting started. Can't wait to see what Red has in store for skanky Warren.

Happy New Year!

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Chummy » Sun Dec 31, 2006 5:39 pm

wawawawawawawawawaw that was great end of the year cant see what will happpened next. plz update soon I am so greadi :blush
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby starcomed » Sun Dec 31, 2006 6:05 pm

Cam, I can remember discussing this fic with you over a year ago, so I'm very happy to see it's back on page one again.

Interesting set-up for the next chapter or two. Given that some readers would now know how the fic ends (via other fic offerings), it will be nice to see how you eventually get us there.

Like others, I am happy to wait for future updates when you get time to focus on it.

In the meantime.....Happy New Year to you too!

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby JustSkipIt » Mon Jan 01, 2007 12:49 pm

And then all Hell broke loose? What the hell kind of an ending is that? Ha ha. So well done. I love the shifting action and the impression that it's all converging on the salloon. We know because this is KB and because of your Christmas story that all will be well but at the moment it's hard to see how that will happen. I mean unless someone casts a magical spell or Buffy shows up to kick vampire ass (ok, that's unlikely), it's hard to see how any of this is going to turn out for the best.

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Willow~Rosenberg » Tue Jan 02, 2007 6:55 pm

OMG an update!!

And what an update. So tense. I can't wait to see what happens after that cliffhanger!
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Artemis » Wed Jan 03, 2007 12:15 am

Classic! The high-stakes card game in the saloon, everyone on edge, bluffing and cheating and keeping their nerve, and then someone edges over the line (in this case Warren, getting caught) and it's six-shooters a-blazin' and chairs flying around. I really like how you're doing such an original Western tale, but hitting all the conventional Western story points nonetheless.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby guitar_girl » Sat Jan 06, 2007 10:39 am

Hey I just read this fic and let me say wow hope u update more often.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby thebardgirl » Wed Jan 10, 2007 12:33 am

Hey, Cam. I just wanted to stop in an say hello, it's been a year and a half but I came back to the board to find you updated and it 'twas wondrous to read.

Cheers and lots of love.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Alcy » Wed Jan 10, 2007 7:28 pm

Hi Cam,
Just finished reading through 'Green-Eyed Red' completely as one of my New Year's resolutions was to spend more time at work reading all the W/T fics that I didn't manage to read last year and I'm happy to say that today I set myself upon the path towards fulfilling this resolution!(If my real work starts to suffer then I can just blame it on all the excellent writing that is here for me to read)

From beginning to end of this tale I was hooked, from the easy flow of the narrative I felt myself being transported to Dusty Hollow and riding alongside Willow on that ol' buckboard of hers. I'm enjoying so many elements of the plot that I just want to list a few but first and foremost W/T's relationship. I love fics where the two meet and gradually fall and this one is one of the best in its pacing. While we may cry out for more action in the bedroom department, I'm loving the chaste kisses and courting that is happening. And then there's the fact that Tara thinks Willows a man, and she's terrified of coming out to anyone...just fantastic.

The cast is superb, each character slotted into a role that seems just perfect for them, it's great to read about so many famiilar faces in this environment. Things are heatin' up fast, what with all hell breakin' loose and Riley arriving in town...and I for one am waiting with baited breath to see how this all goes down.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby watty » Mon Jan 15, 2007 3:49 am

Ahem. Good. Good god. You wrote that one in 2 hours? Gulp.

Lots happening here, this is a great setup chapter for the climatic end game, isn't it. Putting the necessary characters where they should be when the hell breaks lose. But you know what, it didn't feel like a filler setup chapter, it was like riding a horse at full gallop through town. I won't list all the good bits cos it'll be the whole update.

I really like how we know what will happen through the Christmas story, but all I want now is to read about how it all went down. Come on, get back on a roll, please.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Reallybigpineapple » Mon Jan 15, 2007 9:53 am

(Sound of gunshots randomly fired)
Geez, real sorry about that ma'am. Juz got real excited about this here fic bein' back!
All the gals and the critters send their best and thank you for this here entertainment! Much obliged!
Exits.
Stepping back.
Oh, by the way? We'd all be mighty grateful if y'all continued writing these here chapters, Ma'am...
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby tazraven » Mon Jan 15, 2007 3:27 pm

You know, I have to be honest. I didn't want to read this fic for the longest time, mostly because I really hate westerns. But, finally, I decided to read it, and guess what. I loved it. Willow is great as a cowboy/girl and Tara is so sweet. I especially love your Donnie. He's much improved from canon =). Once again, awesome job. I'm sorry I ever doubted this fic. :peace

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby writerfreak » Sat Jan 20, 2007 4:44 pm

I don't think I have ever posted feedback for this before, and you have my sincerest apologies for that. I remember reading the first half a long time ago and apparently somehow lost track of the thread. Now I have caught myself up and find it absolutely worth every second I spent looking for it. Wonderful!!!

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby sinkinghearts » Thu Jan 25, 2007 6:30 pm

i sincerely hope that the updating of this story continues coz i really am a big big big fan! :D
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby sweet_southern_sex_kitten » Fri Jan 26, 2007 1:27 pm

lookin good keep up the good work
Where is my Tara? :depressed
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby tarawhipped » Mon Jan 29, 2007 9:19 pm

Replies to Chapter 18:

Dianneswillowtree: LOL on Warren needing his ass kicked. The first of several such occasions is coming shortly. Thank you.[br]
spells42:
I love this story, and look forward to reading how they defeat the Mayor and the Sherrif, but mostly how Willow reveals her true self and she and Tara reach their happy ever after.
[br]
I’m glad both plots have your interest, and after the next chapter, the story’s going to focus almost entirely on Willow and Tara for a while, up to and including the big reveal. Thanks, Anne, and I hope you have a wonderful 2007 as well.[br]
Wimpy0729: Happy Newish Year to you too, Pam. “Skanky Warren” will get what’s coming to him in good time, and a little down payment next. Thanks![br]
Chummy: Thank you, and more is on the way.[br]
starcomed: Thank you Rachel, and has it really been that long? I was a little worried about giving too much away with my Christmas fic, but that’s one of the best things about Pens…everyone knows there’ll be a happy ending. And since this is a cookie-cutter western (well, except for the cross-dressing and lesbianism, I suppose), it won’t come as a shock that the bad guys will all get their comeuppance. I’m keeping the “how” under wraps, though.[br]
JustSkipIt:
And then all Hell broke loose? What the hell kind of an ending is that?
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You’re right, Debra, my bad…I should have said “all heck broke loose.” I keep fucking forgetting to not fucking swear so fucking much. :D

Good point on the action converging on the saloon. That’s exactly what I wanted to convey. In fact, when planning out the chapter, I made a list of everyone I needed to get there, and then wrote it all out. If it was a movie, I’d have used a nifty montage of split screens to show each one heading toward ground zero, so to speak. This is nowhere near the end of the story, so I’m glad you’re still wondering how it gets from this point to the cozy sleigh ride and happiness of the postscript. All will eventually be revealed (and yes, by that I am implying a full monty Willow). Thanks![br]
Willow~Rosenberg: Wait no more, kind reader! Update next, and thank you.[br]
Artemis:
I really like how you're doing such an original Western tale, but hitting all the conventional Western story points nonetheless.
[br]
Thank you, Chris. That made me think of why I liked The Last Seduction and Bound so much—cause they were so grounded in the classic film noir plot points, but skewed them just enough to make it seem totally original. If I’m doing anything even close to that, I’d be thrilled.[br]
guitar girl: Thank you, and I will do my best to update more often, but I’m so easily distracted.[br]
thebardgirl: Thank you kindly, Miss Elizabeth, and I hope the following is to your liking as well. Good to see your nick here again.[br]
Alcy: Thank you so much Alcy. I don’t know if I’ve told you before, but it was reading Captain Red and the Denizens of Mars, and What’s Your Tale, Nightingale? that inspired me to start writing my first fanfic. I’m glad you like the pacing, though it will pick up a bit soon, as I’ll be focusing more on W/T beginning with the chapter after this next one.[br]
watty:
Good god. You wrote that one in 2 hours?
[br]
Well, basically, though I did stew over it for more than a frickin’ year, so it’s really not as impressive as it seems.[br]
this is a great setup chapter for the climatic end game, isn't it.
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Umm…actually, it was more of a setup for the next err…setup. Heh heh. Seriously, everything that has happened to this point was originally only going to last a few chapter before the real story started as I planned it out. There just always seemed to be more to add in, and I hope people will continue to be patient as I mosey along with mah lil’ ol’ tale. Thanks for everything, Wattster.[br]
Reallybigpineapple: I’m ever so pleased to see you back at the saloon, ma’am. My regards to the critters, and hope you like the next bit.[br]
tazraven:
I didn't want to read this fic for the longest time, mostly because I really hate westerns.
[br]
No apologies necessary, Sara. I’m not really a fan of them either, though I have to say writing one is a hoot. Willow and Tara seem to make anything more interesting, though. Ahh…if only my calculus book had featured W/T, I might have read past chapter 2 all those years ago. I explained a long time ago that I made Donnie nice ‘cause I already had so many bad guys, and really wanted Tara to have some supportive family. I wasn’t sure it would go over at all, and love that everyone’s taken to him so well. Thank you![br]
writerfreak: Thank you so much, and no worries on not leaving fb before. I’m glad you’re enjoying it.[br]
shane: Oh, there will always be updates, just maybe not very quickly. Thanks.[br]
sweet southern sex kitten: Thank you![br][br][br]
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The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby tarawhipped » Mon Jan 29, 2007 9:31 pm

Title: The Legend of Green Eyed Red
Author: tarawhipped (Cameron)
Email: tarawhipped@hotmail.com
Rating: R (just to be safe)
Disclaimer: All characters are the property of Joss Whedon/Mutant Enemy
Feedback: Yes please!
Distribution: Take it, just tell me where to visit it!
Summary: A redheaded stranger rides into a town full of trouble and meets a blonde barmaid. Can they save each other and the town?
Setting: AU (the Old West)[br]
Thanks to my official beta, Carleen, and my unofficial beta, Watty, for all the friendship and support and good ideas.

Author's note: Once again, passages set in the 'present' (i.e. 1918), are separated by *******[br]
Thoughts in italics[br][br][br]
Chapter 19[br][br]
“What happened then, Miss?” one of the girls asked breathlessly.[br]
The storyteller sat back and looked around at her rapt audience. Each wide-eyed girl sat on the edge of her chair, some gripping the seats or each other’s hands.[br]
“Well now girls, twas’nt a pretty sight, what with all the violence and hollerin.’ I don’t reckon you wanna hear that part.”[br]
“Yes we do!” a chorus of voices piped back.[br]
The white-haired lady covered her mouth with one hand to muffle her sudden snort of laughter.[br]
“I suppose I could tell you a little…but don’t you go repeatin’ any of this language.” Several girls shook their heads vehemently, while one or two made a crossing motion over their chests. “Sheriff Mears and ol’ Will was in the midst of a mighty fine stare-down, and just when it seemed it coulda gone on ‘til the rooster crowed, that snake of a deputy reached for his gun.”[br][br]
[center]***************[/center][br][br]
Donnie saw the movement and shouted out a warning. In one smooth motion, Willow’s hand shot out, grabbed the nearest bottle of gin, and whacked Andrew on the side of the head. He dropped like a stone, followed only a split second later by the mortician, who fainted clean away at the sight of Andrew’s head gushing blood. Seeing his conspirators fall on either side, Warren turned to flee the room. Before he’d gone two steps, Donnie intercepted him with a strong right hook to the jaw.[br]
The two men staggered through the curtain and out into the barroom, where the fight was joined by a dozen others coming to the aid of one side or the other; in some cases simply hashing out their own issues amidst the chaos. Willow saw Xander and Larry enter the fray before her eyes fell on Tara, standing at the far end of the room, clutching a tray to her chest.[br]
“Tara!” Will shouted above the din, shoving a drunken brawler aside and craning her neck over the mob. “Get outta here!”[br]
To her immense relief, the blonde heard and immediately headed for the front doors. Willow saw a glass sail across the room and shatter against the wall where Tara had been standing. Her ease was short-lived, however. Over the cacaphony of glass and wood breaking, fists colliding with faces, and curses, Willow heard one sound that made her blood run cold.[br]
“WILL!”[br]
The redhead looked through one the large plate glass windows just in time to see Tara’s terrified eyes staring back at her. A large man dressed all in black covered the screaming barmaid’s mouth with one hand and dragged her to a waiting carriage, where he shoved her inside before climbing onto the seat and driving away in a cloud of dust. Willow frantically pushed her way through the crowd, indiscriminately throwing punches at anyone who got in her way. Time seemed to slow to a crawl as she crossed the floor, her vision blurring with tears. By the time she lurched through the swinging doors and onto the porch, the carriage was gone.[br]
Willow’s eyes followed the trail of settling dust to where it disappeared down Main Street and around a corner. Pulling out one Smith & Wesson, she checked the cylinder, spinning it sharply and slamming it closed. She stalked off the porch in a fury and took off at a dead run down the block, but barely made it twenty yards before skidding to a stop.[br]
“Halt!”[br]
Willow sprinted back to the saloon, the sound of the cavalry horses’ hooves thundering behind her. The fight was already starting to wind down when she raced up to Xander, who was in the midst of punching a rejuvenated Spike.[br]
“I need my cart, now!”[br]
“It’s all hitched up and waiting for you by my shop,” the carpenter replied, gingerly flexing his right hand and wincing.[br]
“Thanks,” Willow hissed, searching the room for Donnie, who was leaning heavily against the piano. Warren lay facedown in a heap at his feet, groaning miserably. Willow grabbed Donnie by the arm and dragged him through the back door.[br]
“What’re you doin’ Will? Hey, did you see me beat the tar outta Warren?” Donnie grinned.[br]
“Yeah, that was great,” Willow said. “I gotta problem, Donnie. There’s some men who’re gonna be walkin’ in here any second lookin’ for me…lawmen.”[br]
Donnie regarded his friend seriously. He looked back at the door, and could hear an unfamiliar voice demanding information. Without another moment’s hesitation, Donnie led Willow through the back gate, into the garden, past the stone wall, and into the sod house.[br]
“Whadda they want you for?”[br]
Willow took a deep breath.[br]
“I’m the Red Bandit.”[br]
Her revelation was met with utter silence, and Willow wished there was more light streaming in through the small window to better gauge Donnie’s reaction. Whatever she was expecting, however, it was not the hearty chuckle that seemed unnaturally loud in the small enclosure.[br]
“Aw hell, Will, I knew that. Xander couldn’t stop talkin’ about it last night, though at the time I thought it was just the liquor.”[br]
“You ain’t mad?”[br]
“Nah, it ain’t none of my business. ‘Sides, I figure you ain’t old enough to be no army deserter, so for all I know, none of that other stuff is true, neither.”[br]
Willow shifted uncomfortably. “Some of it is true, Donnie. I’ve broke some laws, but I swear it’s for a good reason.”[br]
“Well then, that’s good enough for me. You can’t be all bad, riskin’ your neck for me an’ Tara—”[br]
“Tara!” Willow exclaimed. “I nearly forgot, Donnie, they took her!”[br]
“What?! Who? When?”[br]
“Some big guy put her in a black carriage and headed north past the feed store. I was goin’ after ‘em when the cavalry showed up.”[br]
“Darla,” Donnie seethed. “We gotta get her back!”[br]
“I know that,” Willow snapped. “But if I show my face out there now, I’m gonna get arrested. We need a plan.”[br][br]
[center]***************[/center][br][br]
One the girls groaned and shook her head. The storyteller stopped and stared hard at her.[br]
“Something wrong, young lady?”[br]
“Another plan, Miss?” the girl asked. “It seems to me that Will and Donnie’s plans never seem to work very well.”[br]
The storyteller blushed and sputtered, while the white-haired lady chuckled.[br]
“I’ve noticed that myself,” the latter said.[br]
“Well it just so happens that this was a foolproof plan. You see, Madam Darla hadn’t seen Will, so she was gonna march right up to the front door pretendin’ to be a payin’ customer and ask for the new girl. Then she was gonna sneak Tara out the back to where Donnie would be waitin’ with the getaway wagon. And if anyone did try to stop them, she had her trusty peacemaker strapped to her hip.”[br]
“So it worked?” another girl asked hopefully.[br]
“Well, um, not exactly.”[br][br]
[center]***************[/center][br][br]
Knowing they had to do something to throw off the cavalry, and keep the Sheriff from going after Donnie, Willow and Donnie crept quietly back up the pathway to the back door. Willow pressed her ear to the wood and listened as Lieutenant Finn interrogated the people inside. She heard footsteps approaching and flattened herself against the wall just before the door swung open.[br]
“You there! What are doing out here?”[br]
“Just visiting the privy,” Donnie smoothly lied, stepping to the side to draw the officer’s attention away from Willow’s hiding place. “Have those roughnecks stopped tearing apart my saloon?”[br]
The officer squinted past Donnie into the yard, which appeared empty. “You’re the owner?”[br]
“Yes, sir. I’m Donnie Maclay. I owe you gentlemen a drink for puttin’ a stop to that brawl.”[br]
Willow waited for the two to head inside before creeping to the side of the yard and hopping over the short fence. She slithered along the wall and peeked around the corner. A cavalryman stood guard on the porch. Realizing there was no way past him, Willow went back through the garden behind the saloon and out the other side, keeping to the shadows as she made a long arch around the block. When she looked back down the street, the officer was peering into the saloon, and she sprinted across the deserted street.[br]
She followed the directions Donnie had hastily given her until she was standing in front of an ornately decorated two-story building. With Donnie keeping the cavalry occupied, she and Tara would have to make a run for it, but luckily it wasn’t too far from the saloon.[br]
She could see lights flickering through the red draperies in the front windows as she edged up the walkway to the front porch, where she paused to look behind her. The street behind her was empty; and there was no sound coming from within the house. She pulled the chain and heard the clang of the bell inside. Snatching off her hat, she smoothed down her hair and tried to look nonchalant. Just as she was reaching for the chain again, the door swung open.[br]
“Hi!” she said, then coughed and lowered her voice. “Hi, I um—”[br]
“We’re closed,” the haughty brunette stated, shutting the door in Willow’s face.[br]
Willow blinked several times, shocked. She pulled the chain again, then a third time. After pounding on the door long enough for her knuckles to start aching, the door was jerked open, and she fell forward against the man standing in the threshold.[br]
“The lady told you we’re closed,” he stated in a thick Irish accent.[br]
“But…I’ve got money,” Willow said, trying to peer around the large man. “Come on, give a guy a break.”[br]
“I said beat it, kid,” the man said, shoving Willow in the chest and slamming the door.[br]
Willow fell off the porch and landed on her back in the grass. She ripped out a clump of sod and threw it at the closed door. Her lips quivered and she fought down her tears, trying not to dwell on what might be happening to Tara at that very moment…what might happen if she didn’t rescue the blonde from the house of vice.[br]
The lights on the first floor went out as she struggled to her feet, determined to find some way inside. She walked around the side of the building, ducking down low to avoid the windows, and looking up at the second floor rooms, where some light still shone. The back of the house lay in darkness, and she felt along the wall for a trellis or something to climb up. She was nearing the far corner when her hand fell on something soft. She froze.[br]
“Will?”[br]
“Tara?”[br]
Realizing where her hand lay, Willow jerked it back and thanked the darkness for hiding her blush.[br]
“What are you doing here?” Tara whispered.[br]
“Uh…rescuing you?”[br]
With her eyes adjusting to the dim light, Willow could see the grin spread across Tara’s face, and she looked up at the wall the see the drain spout Tara had climbed down. She was still staring at it in awed surprise when she felt soft lips brush her cheek in a tender kiss.[br]
“My hero,” Tara breathed.[br]
Willow could have stood there for hours, simply gazing at the blonde, but she knew they had to leave before Tara’s absence was discovered. Still, she couldn’t stop herself from kissing Tara once more, her heart fluttering madly when Tara kissed her back.[br]
“We need to go now,” she said at last.[br]
“I know,” Tara replied, though neither stepped away from their embrace.[br]
“They didn’t…hurt you?” Willow whispered, her voice raspy with emotion.[br]
“No,” Tara shook her head. “But…”[br]
“But what?” Willow gently coaxed when Tara did not continue.[br]
“The whole time, all I could think of was getting back to you, and hoping you’d find me.”[br]
Willow took Tara’s face in her hands and looked her square in the eye.[br]
“I’ll always find you.”[br][br][br][br]
Meanwhile, back at the saloon Donnie was fending off questions about Will Smith. Several patrons had already admitted to seeing the young man, but as yet no one had been able to reveal any more information. Xander, Clem and Larry had helpfully provided the cavalry with a description of their card game with the fugitive, down to the tiniest, most useless detail, but no one would admit to knowing where the redhead was. Everything was going smoothly until Warren began to stir. Donnie knew the Sheriff would spill the beans if he didn’t think fast.[br]
“That’s the one who started it all!” Donnie shouted, pointing at the Mears.[br]
“You son of a bitch, I’m gonna kill you!” Warren spat, lunging at Donnie.[br]
Finn stopped him with a firm hand to the chest.[br]
“Get your hands off me,” the Sheriff sneered, slapping at Finn’s arm. In a heartbeat, Warren’s face was pressed against the nearest wall, his arm bent painfully behind his back. “I don’t know who you are, son, but you’re gonna regret this; I’m Sheriff of this town!”[br]
Finn released his hold and spun Mears around.[br]
“If you’re the Sheriff, where’s your badge?”[br]
Warren pulled back his jacket and looked down at this vest, but the brass star was gone. Donnie watched in amazement as Larry palmed the piece of metal to Clem, who casually took off his hat to scratch his head, slipped the badge inside, and placed the hat firmly back in place. The maneuver had gone unseen by Warren and the cavalry.[br]
“Someone must’ve taken it,” Warren sputtered. “But I’m the Sheriff, ask anyone!”[br]
As luck would have it, everyone still conscious enough to answer questions had ample reason to dislike Mears, and not a single one spoke up.[br]
“Last I saw,” Donnie told Finn, “that redheaded feller you’re lookin’ for was playin’ cards with Warren here, and accused him of cheating. That’s when Warren started the fight.”[br]
“That’s a damned lie!” Mears retorted, again making a move toward Donnie.[br]
Finn’s lips curled in disgust and he nodded to two of his men, who each grabbed one of Warren's arms. The Lieutenant stared bullets at Mears.[br]
“I don’t know which is worse—impersonating a Sheriff or cheating at cards—but right now, I am the law in this town, and you would do well to keep your mouth shut.”[br]
Unfortunately for him, Warren was used to having things his way in Dusty Hollow, so he did the natural thing under the circumstances: he broke out of one officer’s hold and aimed a punch at Riley’s head. It never landed. Just before he blacked out, he heard Finn’s booming voice.[br]
“We will tear this town apart if we have to, but we are not leaving until we have Will Smith in custody!”[br][br]
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Alcy » Tue Jan 30, 2007 1:43 am

DIBS!! Ha-ha...I don't think I've ever dibbsed a fic before!

Edited to add: No Western is complete without a good ol' fashioned bar room brawl! I can just see the chairs flying and the glasses smashing!
And then we have our brave Red Bandit riding off to rescue her girl, just perfect. And Warren getting put in his place was a nice way to round out the chapter. The soundtrack to this fic is really good by the way...I don't know if anyone else hears it but I certainly do, it just pops into my head with the fantastic imagery.

And although we're supposed to be commenting on your excellent writing here, thanks very much for mentioning mine! I'm really chuffed that my little fics had such an effect.

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby viximon » Tue Jan 30, 2007 2:53 am

another update!! yahoo! thank u.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Willowtree252 » Tue Jan 30, 2007 8:34 am

:pinky WooooHooooo an update I,m doing the snoopy dance!!! I love this story. :kitty
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby db » Tue Jan 30, 2007 9:12 am

This is a great story -- and I am so tickled to see Riley take warren down a notch or two. That slimy weasle needs to go *down*.

But Riley's after Willow? That's no good... they've got to get out of there.

The only solution is for Willow to take Tara and run... *drifting off* ...something about sleeping under the stars and moonlight smoochies.

And I must say that I like butchy Willow -- but I am still nervous about the gender revelation (funny, 'cause we already know Tara likes girls). Huh.

Anyway, great update! I look forward to reading more!

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby hermitfish » Tue Jan 30, 2007 2:07 pm

YEEEHAW!

I had missed an update, so I got two for the price of one...yay. The action sequences are really well done...not too long, not too short. And full of energy. Yay for baddies getting some of what they deserve. The cutting between past and present is paced correctly and provides great little moments of wit and comedy. All that and romance to boot...you have too much talent, my friend. Glad to get the pleasure of some updates.

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby sacinema » Tue Jan 30, 2007 3:04 pm

Clap, clap, clap. Fine move Donnie Maclay. I hope this will be enough to end the rule of Warren Mears. At least Faith' father could come to his rescue. Faith won't, I'm sure of that.

How sweet: "My hero." Tara surely knows how to sweet-talk her honey. But she is right, Will is cuter than a bunch of puppies ever could be. But they should get out of Darla's backyard or soon they will be discovered. And that Darla is a nasty one.

So maybe it's time for Will to reveal everything to Tara even that she is not a boy at all. She could dress in women's clothes and actually get away with it. I think no soldier would suspect her being the Red Bandit in disguise. If she holds up the charade long enough maybe they will be gone and after Ethan and Warren are abandoned from town … The redheaded woman can secretly disappear and out of nowhere Will Smith comes back. I don't think anyone else will betray him again. It just depends on Tara. Will she accept her honey being no man at all? We know she will. But Will doesn't. Will, will, Will …

Clap, clap, clap. Very fine update. Thanks for that and I'm hoping for the next soon. You see, I'm insatiable.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby JustSkipIt » Thu Feb 01, 2007 2:00 pm

Cam - Yay. Not only a new story this week but an update to LGER. It's our lucky week I'd say. What stands out for me with this update is not so much the feeling of convergence (again) although that is quite wonderful but the feeling that Clem, Larry, and Xander are like a very effective group of Three Stooges. The picture of them passing around Warren's badge is just great! I love that Donnie is like, "well yeah!" about Willow being the GEB. It would be nice if the revelation that she's a woman goes as smoothly but I'm not sure it's reasonable to hope that. But maybe...

Anyway, so nice to see Tara shimmying down the drain pipe to free herself from danger. Ha ha. Willow is so sweet and now...

Can't wait for more.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Safuega » Thu Feb 01, 2007 9:10 pm

Did someone put something in the water? All these wonderful fic authors are coming back with a vengeance! Excellent!

This is story is so much fun and your action sequences are like watching a well orchestrated comedy skit. I really liked the subversion of the 'damsel in distress' notion when you had Tara be pretty much rescued. Yes, it is romantic to think that Willow would rush to rescue her but it is downright wonderful to see that Tara needs no rescuing.

And Riley, all that boy needs is an order and he's off, isn't he? You know, I never thought much about him in canon, but in this fic I can see how he can be a really ugly character because he does not question the orders he receives. If there is anything dangerous in this world is a fool with a purpose.

Thanks for returning to this incredibly amusing western escapade.

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Krokador » Fri Feb 02, 2007 6:27 pm

WOOT! I've been lacking on updatey-readness lately, but i finally caught up and i was sooo pleased when i saw there were 2, 2! new chapters to LGER!!!

And good updates too, only big flaw is that they're way too short lol. More soon, right?
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby watty » Tue Feb 06, 2007 5:20 pm

okay, I got it all wrong, there's oodles of GER chapters to come and all this is just the setup. Ha! Didn't peg you for someone needing 19+ chapters as setup, Cam, but if this gives us lots and lots of GER goodness I ain't complaining. So, as promised you give us the bar fight to end all bar fights. Yay to Donnie socking Warren one. But, oh writer of packed action, where is that "W/T have hot sex on the poker table" you mentioned? Okay, Will rescuing Tara only to find her ... soft parts ... count a little bit, but we'll have that tryst on the table sometime, right? :P

“I’m the Red Bandit.”

“Aw hell, Will, I knew that. Xander couldn’t stop talkin’ about it last night, though at the time I thought it was just the liquor.”

Yeah, would have loved to see Donnie's deadpan face. And glad that Donnie doesn't mind. Guess the law in those days doesn't have the gravitas as nowadays. I'd be interested to see Tara's face when she learns of it, and Will's reaction to that reaction.

Anyway Donnie, Xander and Clem do seem to give off Three Stooges vibes, and I can almost see them in grainy black & white passing Warren's badge around in those faster than normal film speeds that we get with old Chaplin or Buster Keaton films. Talking about faster than normal, I'm just wondering ... no pressure, mind ... if the next update will show up soon.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Artemis » Fri Feb 09, 2007 6:56 am

Brawl! Again, the classic Western shines through, the old story given a well-earned polish and shine from being retold in a new way. I loved the reveal that Willow's big secret wasn't such a big secret after all - I have no idea whether it's got any historical basis, but it struck me as very much like the way people now (in Australia, I mean) look back on Bushrangers, with this romanticised view of them as larrakin-rogue-adventurers, Robin Hood mixed with Han Solo. But of course, even with some of the townsfolk aware of who Willow is, and ready to back her, the law's here, and we all know that there has to be a reckoning in a Western between the good outlaw and the lawman. Hopefully they'll figure out some way for everyone to get a bit of what they want - I haven't got it figured out yet, so I'm really eager to read on.

Oh, and I loved the return of the narrator segments, especially the little dig at Willow's plans ;-)
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Chapter 19 replies

Postby tarawhipped » Sat Feb 24, 2007 6:42 pm

Replies to Chapter 19:

Alcy:
No Western is complete without a good ol' fashioned bar room brawl!

Absolutely, and I am nothing if not a shameless hack…I mean, a purveyor of the classics. There will be many more clichés before this is over, I can assure you. It’s just so hard with genre fic not to go there, you know? Congrats on the dibs, and thanks for your kind words, Alcy….whoa, wait…Anna? You have a real name! Cheers right back atcha. ;)[br]
viximon: Thank you, and I hope the wait wasn’t too bad this time. I already have the next two chapters done, and can easily be bribed into the posting the second one soonish based on feedback (I’m such a whore!).[br]
Dianneswillowtree: Thanks so much. That pink elephant always seems to be doing the Flashdance dance to me, not the Snoopy dance, but I’ll take your word that you are, in fact, doing the correct one.[br]
db: Slimy Warren will get his in the end…heh heh…okay, bad visual. *bleaches eyeballs* The ‘get-outta-Dodge---err---Dusty Hollow’ plan will be coming to a computer near you over the next several chapters.[br]
sleeping under the stars and moonlight smoochies

Awww, that sounds nice. Not gonna happen for a bit, but hold that thought. It’ll help get you through the um…ah, I don’t want to spoil it. >:) Thanks, db![br]
hermitfish: Cyd, it’s good to see you here…almost as good as seeing you update one of your many fics. :D I’m glad you liked the action…could you tell I was just avoiding actually showing the poker game ‘cause I write it even worse than I play? Seriously, picture this: “And then Willow laid down a pair of threes—no! They were aces!…yeah…‘cause who in their right mind would go all in with a pair of threes?” Thanks, pal.[br]
sacinema: Willow or puppies…Willow or puppies…nope, can’t decide, but Willow AND puppies would just blow the whole cuteness meter to smithereens. I have to say that several of your observations are spot on. Warren won’t be out of the picture for long, but we won’t have to look at him for a little while. Still a ways til Willow’s big reveal, though one of her other not-so-secrets will be pretty fully out there by the end of this next one. Thank you.[br]
JustSkipIt:
Clem, Larry, and Xander are like a very effective group of Three Stooges.

Yes! I love that image. Isn’t there an old routine where they’re tossing something hot back and forth, like a burning chunk of coal or a baked potato or something? Hehehe…I love the Stooges…even Shemp…but not any of the Joes. Huh. But I digress. Glad you liked Donnie’s ‘whatever, dude’ reaction to Will’s rep…in a town where the law is so corrupt, I thought it made sense that an alleged criminal might not be seen so badly, especially when he’s been such nice young men. We’ll see if Donnie handles a potential sister-in-law as well as a potential brother-in-law. It’s not up for a while. I really liked the idea of Tara rescuing herself, but still appreciating Will’s effort enough to stroke his ego, so it was nice to see it mentioned. Thanks, Debra![br]
Safuega:
I really liked the subversion of the 'damsel in distress' notion when you had Tara be pretty much rescued. Yes, it is romantic to think that Willow would rush to rescue her but it is downright wonderful to see that Tara needs no rescuing.

And you just summarized what I was saying to Debra, only much better. :D And on a side note, if you haven’t read Artemis’ Princess Tara and the Dragon, you must! That completely skewers the whole ‘damsel in distress’ myth.[br]
And Riley, all that boy needs is an order and he's off, isn't he? You know, I never thought much about him in canon, but in this fic I can see how he can be a really ugly character because he does not question the orders he receives. If there is anything dangerous in this world is a fool with a purpose.

Well, not to defend him too strongly, though he never bothered me too much in canon until he started seeing that vampwhore (sheesh, OOC much?), but Riley really does have a good reason for going after Willow. She really did do some of what she’s accused of, and while she also has her reasons (which, once revealed, may seem either good or painfully misguided), he’s really not in the wrong here. I left a massive spoiler of sorts in my Christmas fic Sleigh Ride by including Riley, which I meant to show which side of the fence he comes down on eventually. I hope that doesn’t give too much away, since obviously everyone knows Willow’s not going to end up in jail or separated from Tara or anything. I made Riley a supreme jackass in my first two fics, and felt the need to make him a good guy here…but he is still Captain Cardboard: Defender of the Status Quo. And I didn’t mean to go into such depth defending a minor character…and for the record, I completely agree with your statement about a ‘fool with a purpose.’ *coughgeorgebushcough* :D[br]
Krokador: Thanks, Kro, and I hope you’ll be happy to hear that there are 2 chapters ready to go! First one coming up next, second by next weekend, if not before (see above r.e. ‘feedback whore’).[br]
watty:
Didn't peg you for someone needing 19+ chapters as setup, Cam

Sigh. Me neither, but all the extra stuff kept coming out, and hey…it’s the journey, not the destination, right?[br]
where is that "W/T have hot sex on the poker table" you mentioned?

Umm…I was drunk? Oh crap, I don’t drink. Now watty, I know this is hard to believe, but sometimes I’m sarcastic. :p And if you think I’m going to write that scene for this fic, you’re high. Maybe it’ll turn up somewhere else. Maybe.

I’m so glad everyone’s enjoyed the supporting cast so far, especially Clem…I love Clem. It’s going to feel weird to leave them behind after the next 2 chapters, but there will be some more ‘characters’ appearing. I’ll just let that comment stew for a bit. Thanks, WattyBoss![br]
Artemis: I really liked your comments about ‘the good outlaws vs the bad lawmen,’ Chris. There’s definitely some of that in the States…I still don’t get how some people are turning Jesse James into a folk hero. There will be some of that here, certainly. Obviously Warren=bad, but Willow’s plan (the one that her overnight stay in Dusty Hollow sidetracked) is not necessarily all of the good. There will be a reckoning, yes. But not yet. It’s nice to hear support r.e. the narrator segments, as I wasn’t sure they wouldn’t interrupt the flow of the story. I really like writing them, and there’s more coming up…not in this part, but soon, and it’s my favorite so far. Thanks, Chris![br][br][br]
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