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Huginn & Muninn (Thought and Memory)

Postby Kieli » Sat Sep 23, 2006 7:19 pm

Huginn and Muninn (Thought & Memory)

In my thoughts…

Walking side by side, we make our way down
to the Japanese Gardens in the park that
you know I love so much
With each step planted in the new-fallen snow
our boots crunch loudly in the frozen quiet.

Everything seems so picture perfect
even the unearthly glow of frost crystals
that Nature's loving brush painted on the trees
and park benches.

We settle on a stone seat nearest to the water's edge
so the canvas of infinity would be laid open before us
unobstructed
unsullied by humanity

You surprise me by taking my hands in yours
and sticking them into one of your large coat pockets.

"It's really cold out here," you murmur in response to my
raised eyebrow. Blushing slightly, you turn your head towards
the first rays of light. "Look."

Icy tears slide down my cheeks as the canvas fills
with hues of red, gold, blue.
Gossamer strands overlay the deepening colours.

"Perfect," I say, the word nearly caught behind
cracked, bleeding lips.

"I wanted to show you...you know, find the best time,"
you whisper, "Since it's your last."

We say nothing for a long while; just enjoying the stillness
and each other's company. You squeeze my hands tightly
with one of your own, using the other to tug your hood
down low over your face. I know you hate for others to
see you cry.

"It's the best gift I've ever had."

In my memory…

Later, as the breath of life
slowly drains from my body
I realised that it was true.
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Re: Huginn & Muninn (Thought and Memory)

Postby SJ » Sun Sep 24, 2006 3:26 am

Great writing.
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Re: Huginn & Muninn (Thought and Memory)

Postby DreamLover » Sun Sep 24, 2006 11:48 am

I don't know what to say, it's so beautiful and it gets me really emotional.
Thank you for sharing it. It's just perfect.

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Re: Huginn & Muninn (Thought and Memory)

Postby Boschi » Sun Sep 24, 2006 7:46 pm

Oh, but you had me with just the title.

I will give a second nod to the image of hands being placed in a coat pocket, the narrators surprise and the other blushing and looking away towards the beauty she (?) intended the narrator to see.

Thanks for posting this. Has your own poetry related grumpiness waned a bit in the last few months then? ;-)

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Re: Huginn & Muninn (Thought and Memory)

Postby Kieli » Sun Sep 24, 2006 8:58 pm

Boschi wrote:Oh, but you had me with just the title.

I will give a second nod to the image of hands being placed in a coat pocket, the narrators surprise and the other blushing and looking away towards the beauty she (?) intended the narrator to see.

Thanks for posting this. Has your own poetry related grumpiness waned a bit in the last few months then?

- Boschi


LOL! Eh well sorta. I've been beta reading for several people (sometimes all at once) and have been randomly writing here and there. This came as a result of a dream induced by a conversation between a dear friend and myself. It was odd, 5:30am and my brain felt the need to kick me out of bed to write it down.

I'm rather pleased that those who posted enjoyed it. It's sad and melancholic....sort of like my mood as of late.

Be well,
T.
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