Poetry

[sapphicpoet]

I've only been posting here for a couple of weeks, but have been reading stuff on these boards for a few years now. I figured maybe my writing is now somewhat worthy of gracing these boards and if it's not, don't hesitate to tell me, but be gentle, my gf and I just broke up, so my heart is a bit tender...





She looks past me

Sometimes I wonder if she’s blind.

Can’t she see what stands before her

Is she not artistically inclined?

So why is it then

So hard for her to find

The convolution that lies in me?



She touches me,

But her fingers only graze flesh.

What of that which lies beneath?

Does she not feel the death?

Can she not feel

The cold breath

That falls upon her neck?



She whispers to me,

But she hears not my replies.

She turns away from my pain

And buries herself between my thighs

Ever hopeful to drown out

The sounds of my demise

By eliciting ones of pleasure…



She holds me tightly,

But her embrace is halfhearted.

My sorrow surges with the knowledge

That she will soon be departed.

Leaving me to ponder

The emptiness imparted

By this lonely encounter.



~Sapphic

"Humanity is measured by the soul, not the flesh." ~ Layla

[onyxsundrops]

Never doubt your writing, I thought your poem was very good. You've definately shown how it can be before a break up- the calmness before the storm, when you realize it but she/he is subtly trying to deny it.



Yvonne

[Wired vixen]

You've captured the break up kind of inner turmoil, i liked this alot.

I hope you're doing ok.....

*huggles* for you...



Thanks for sharing.



Stace xXx

"Um...dont mean to ruin the sexcapades...but we need the chips out there. Xanders being a chip whore." -She's my always by spikeizmine87

[angel of salvation]

*huggles* Don't feel bad, you're writting is good. Hope you're doing ok...



I like your poem, it shows your emotion really well.



Jess xxx

'You're my angel of salvation, and hope, and strength...your my multi-angel'-Jay (My baby)

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[StrangeQuark]

There's an interesting perspective to this piece. The narrative voice is detached-- physically and mentally-- from the circumstance. It's that detachment that puts both the narrator and the reader in a unique place. A place that frees us to observe and feel, realizing that any control over the situation has long since been lost, and sinking into a dismal puddle of acceptance. This is accomplished through the 'showing' of the emotions and insulation rather than the somewhat hackneyed 'telling' of thoughts and impressions. The narrator and I were both watching and thinking about the experience instead of wallowing in it. I like this a lot. Great poem. Original delivery.



-SQ

[barnabasvamp]

Please do continue to write, it helps to express your feelings and pain. It also lets us all know we're not alone.



BV

It's the passion in a kiss that gives to it its sweetness; it is the affection in a kiss that sanctifies it.

[SJ]

Great poetry,thanks for sharing

[Renee85]

I second SJ, great poetry! Its one of the best that I've read, there's just something about it and of course it's very well written and full of feeling. I hope you feel better soon and if you have any other poems laying around I'd love to read them too. Thanks for sharing.

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"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." -Judy Garland

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