Well, I think it's a great drawing, and doesn't need anything major done to it. But here's a few suggestions (and I'm not really the best person to be giving out tips, but anyway
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My overall impression is that she looks a bit butch. I think this is because her head's turned very slightly, so it's hard to get the angle of the face right. So the neck needs to be thinner, and her left cheek needs to be a little softer to compensate for the slight movement of her head. Her forehead seems a bit small, but it might just be that the eyes or eyebrows are slightly too high. I'm not sure, but her right shoulder might need to be higher up. As for her nose, Aly's nose (and noses in general) I find very difficult. My suggestion is to try sketching things you find difficult on a separate sheet of paper. I have a few sheets in my sketchbook comprised almost entirely of noses. As for pencils, I've got the whole set from F to 9B but I mostly only use an HB, a 2B and a charcoal.
Hope this helps.
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Maybe we should focus on the gobbledygook?
Tara, 'The Yoko Factor' shooting script
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