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Phoenix Short Story Thread - Updated Snippet (February 4)

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Phoenix Short Story Thread - Updated Snippet (February 4)

Postby Tara the Phoenix » Tue Nov 27, 2007 7:59 am

Hi Kittens,

The next chapter of 'The Lamb' is proving difficult to write and I've had this story rattling in my brain for some time now, so I thought I'd share. Since I do have yet another W/T short story even after this one, I decided to make a thread to house these stories (thanks for the inspiration, Diane).

Title: Lightning
Author: Tara the Phoenix (aka Phoenix)
Distribution: DCP, (Artemis, do you want this one?)
Feedback: Please!
Disclaimer: These characters are not mine and I'm certainly not making any money off of them.
Notes: No Hellmouth, no vampires, no Slayers. Just your ordinary, everyday hotness.



[center]Lightning
by Phoenix[/center]


The door slammed, waking Willow from a thin and uncertain sleep. She knew she had been dreaming, and the dream was lush beyond all imagining, but all unconscious delight left her as she heard Buffy call out, “Willow!”

The urgency in Buffy's voice snapped Willow out of her lethargy, and she looked down in consternation. She had fallen asleep on her books again, and she could feel a crease down the side of her face. She rolled from the bed, looking instinctively at her watch. The room was too dark for only seven pm, and again Buffy's strident voice sounded, “Willow! There's a storm coming!”

Willow rubbed her eyes and swung to the side of the bed even as Buffy opened her bedroom door. “We have to hurry if we're going to catch this one,” Buffy warned as she watched Willow struggle to the closet, tripping over the quilt and half a dozen books.

“Buffy, grab the extra rods from the closet, wouldja?” Willow breathlessly asked, pulling on a pair of blue jeans and a sweater. Buffy left the room quickly, and Willow could hear her stomping back down the stairs of their apartment.

She knew she didn't have time, but Willow quickly used the bathroom, and then looked at herself in the mirror. After six years of waiting, was tonight to be the night? She looked all right for just having woken from sleep; she ran wet fingers through her short curly red hair and wiped her face. Brilliant green eyes stared back at her and they sparkled in anticipation.

“Willow! Come on!” Buffy shrieked from the living room. Willow ran to her dresser and pulled out a strange and large ring, stuffing it into her pocket. Willow pounded down the steps and both girls grabbed their rain jackets and umbrellas. Buffy's arms were already full with lightning rods, so Willow opened the front door.

The sky was threatening, and Willow wanted to crow in delight. “Is it the right kind of storm, Buffy?” Willow asked breathlessly, not wanting to be disappointed yet again. She would need the most perfect meteorological conditions to pull this off.

“Dry thunderstorm, Will!” Buffy said excitedly, waiting while Willow opened the back of her SUV, then she laid the lightning rods on the packs with sleeping bags, tent, and the emergency kit. “How could you have fallen asleep? I thought you'd be tracking the storm on your computer.”

Willow grimaced even as she drove smartly down the streets of Sunnydale, heading for the desert. “I was just reading the text one more time, Buffy. I've never tried anything like this before.”

Buffy chuckled at her. “That's for sure, Willow. And until you looked up all that stuff in your books I thought you were a nutcase. Strange things like Tara don't happen in Sunnydale.”

Both Buffy and Willow chuckled. They met when Buffy transferred to Sunnydale High School eight years ago at the start of freshman year. For some reason that eluded Willow for years, Buffy, a popular girl who was Homecoming Queen at her previous school, sought Willow out and they quickly became friends. Their lives were ordinary yet sublime, going to school, falling in love (Buffy), obsessing about grades (Willow). That all changed six years ago, and Willow's skin tingled as she thought of what she was about to do.

As Willow drove, Buffy turned on the radio, and the girls heard, “Now for your Fox 3 weather update for Sunnydale, California. We have a severe thunderstorm warning for Sunnydale city and county. We've just heard from our affiliates that this is a very unusual storm; it is a dry thunderstorm, with wind gusts and lightning but very little rain.”

“This is it, Willow,” Buffy said, looking over to the redhead. Willow put out her hand and Buffy warmly clasped it with hers for a moment before letting go so Willow could drive. “We're going to get her this time.”

Her. Tara. After six long years.

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Six years previously...

Willow sat, alone, on a boulder in the middle of the desert, cycling her disastrous conversation with her parents over and over in her mind. She was a senior, for crying out loud, she wasn't a child anymore! She had a right to make her own decisions, and she had put off the conversation long enough. The first point, that she had chosen UC Sunnydale as her college of choice, didn't go over very well. Not when she was accepted to Oxford, Harvard, and Yale. Her parents simply didn't understand how important Buffy and Xander were. Her two best friends were her life, and she wouldn't leave them, not now or ever. But it was the second point that worried her.

“I'm gay,” Willow whispered to the uncaring air.

It had taken her a long time to acknowledge that fact. At first she had been afraid of telling Buffy and Xander, terrified that they would abandon her. She should have known better. As long as you're happy, Willow, Xander and Buffy said, and Willow believed them. She and Xander had even begun haunting the Bronze together, cruising for chicks.

They finally convinced her to speak to her parents. It was something she generally avoided, talking to her parents about anything. They never really listened, anyway. But graduation was coming, and Buffy and Xander told her it was the right thing to do. So a few hours ago she had stood in her kitchen and endured her mother's wary acceptance, her conviction that it was just a phase Willow was going through, a statement, if you will. Her father didn't say a word. How typical.

And now Willow was frozen. Her well-intentioned, distracted parents didn't really care about her. They only cared about their image in the academic community and Willow was sure that her mother was already devising some way to use Willow's news to her advantage. Probably a paper of some sort. Buffy and Xander were great friends, but they didn't really understand the great abyss she was facing. Never in her life had she known love. She looked for it, first in Oz, then in Amy, but it eluded her. It always did. She just wished for something from the story books, a tale of romance and love, where she would be pursued, admired, and adored. Not only loved, but beloved.

So she had come out to the desert to meditate, and disconsolately throw rocks at the uncaring sand. And when the storm arose, a dark purple blot on the horizon, she maddeningly decided to sit it out. An eerie calm came over her as the clouds marched steadily towards her, the wind gusting, sending stinging sand into her eyes. The rumbling of the thunder became a constant noise as bolts of lightning ranged closer and closer to her. Curiously, there was as yet no rain, just the incredible cracks of lightning followed by concatenations of thunder. She could feel the thunder in her chest, vibrating along her bones, and it thrilled her.

Ever after she could not say what confluence of events brought Tara to her. Maybe it was the wish in her heart, maybe she said a certain word, maybe it was nothing more than mere coincidence. Fear had arisen in her heart, for the storm was too close, and Willow closed her eyes as a fork of lightning struck the empty desert floor not fifty feet away. She fell off her boulder with the clap of thunder so loud she thought her ears would burst, and she cowered in a little ball, smelling the tint of ozone in the air.

And when she opened them, she doubted what her lightning-blasted eyes saw.

There was a form sprawled on the ground in the exact place where the lightning had struck. Willow rubbed her eyes, and got to her knees. It wasn't just a form, it was a woman. Ever feeling the deep rumblings of thunder in her body, seeing the landscape brilliantly lit with jags of lightning, Willow stumbled over to the prone womanly form.

“Are you all right?” Willow asked, and her breath caught in her throat as she turned the body over.

It was a young woman, about Willow's own age. She had long brown hair that cascaded like silk over her shoulders. She was wearing a thin grey blouse and skirt, almost savage in its simplicity. And her eyes; her eyes were the deep cold blue of a winter afternoon, joyful and beautiful. As Willow looked at her, the woman seemed to realize just where she was, and she bolted upright.

“I'm out?” she whispered frantically, and Willow was lost in confusion. “Wh-where am I?” the girl stuttered.

“Um, the desert outside Sunnydale, California,” Willow replied. She crouched next to the girl, and her mind was shrieking at her. This woman was the most beautiful thing Willow had ever seen, and next to her she felt gauche and awkward and clumsy.

“You are human?” the woman asked, and she reached forth her hand, and stroked Willow's cheek, and Willow felt the touch like fire in her veins.

“Um, usually,” Willow replied, filled with confusion. “You mean you aren't?” Great, just her luck. Meet a gorgeous woman in a thunderstorm and she's a raving lunatic. You really can pick 'em, Rosenberg.

The woman didn't reply immediately, she just looked at Willow with overwhelming amounts of confusion in her eyes. “You called me?” the woman finally asked, and her voice was the soothing caress of silk on skin, and Willow shivered in delight.

And as much as Willow wanted to say Yes, I called you, now we can go make incredible gay love together, her tongue tied, and her mind went over every little awful occurrence she had in her doomed relationships. What would this woman have with her, little Willow Rosenberg, biggest nerd in California?

“No,” she replied honestly. The woman was looking around her, at the lightning blasted landscape, the sand that went screeching every which way with the terrific gusts of wind.

“I don't have much time,” the woman said, looking at the clouds. Then she looked at Willow again, and saw deep into the core of her, and Willow knew she would never be the same again. “So much hurt,” the woman said, her voice deepening with sorrow. “You have so much pain. Why?”

Because everyone leaves me in the end, Willow thought, hanging her head. Because I'm only good for one thing: being reliable. There is no true love for me.

“You did call me,” the woman said, struggling to stand up. Willow helped her to her feet, and they stood hand in hand, staring at each other as the sand whipped along their legs, the lightning flashed, and the thunder boomed about them.

“Where did you come from?” Willow asked. Willow was a sane person, really, and knew that the woman had to have come from somewhere. She must have snuck up on Willow, and decided to on the sandy ground in the middle of a thunderstorm. Brilliant reasoning, Rosenberg. You're Oxford material for sure.

But this time it was the woman who looked on her as if she was insane. “From up there,” the woman replied.

Willow looked up along with the woman, seeing nothing but the raging lightning and boiling purple-black clouds. “An airplane?” she ventured, knowing it sounded stupid, but really not getting it.

“Silly,” the woman chided. “I'm lightning.”

“Your name is Lightning?” Willow repeated inanely.

The woman chuckled. “No, my name is Tara.”

“Tara Lightning.”

“Are you learning impaired?” the woman accused, laughing again, and the sound warmed Willow's vastly confused heart. “You are a human,” and the woman leered lightly at her, perusing her slight frame up and down, and Willow could have sworn the woman stared at her chest. “I am a bolt of lightning.”

Uh-huh. A crazy person. Just her luck.

“You didn't happen to take a buncha drugs now, did you?” Willow softly accused.

“I don't need drugs,” the woman (lightning) responded lightly. “Perhaps you do. Maybe some co enzyme Q10 will help you with mental acuity.”

“Hey!” Willow responded, taken aback. “You're the one professing to be a bolt of lightning.”

The woman squeezed Willow's hands, and Willow smiled in spite of herself. “You shall see soon enough,” the woman murmured. “Once my storm leaves this area, I will be gone with it.”

“Uh huh,” Willow agreed, not letting go of Tara's hands. “You don't mind if I stick around to test that theory, do you?”

“Not at all,” Tara replied gaily. “See, you're feeling better already, aren't you?”

Willow was brought up short. Hmm, she had been brooding rather incessantly until this crazy woman showed up, proving that Willow's life really wasn't too horrible. She could be in this poor woman's shoes, walking around deserts in dry thunderstorms and thinking she was a bolt of lightning.

“Yes,” Willow replied honestly. “I am feeling better.”

“Good,” Tara said. “Now, what shall we do to pass the time?”

This time Willow was certain the woman was leering at her. Ah, what the heck? It's a crazy person. “I could think of a few things,” Willow responded coyly, pitching her voice low and trying to keep from laughing.

“Do tell, um, whatever your name is,” Tara replied.

“Willow.”

Tara's face creased once again into her ever-ready smile. “Your parents named you after a tree?” she laughed.

“It's also a shrub,” Willow protested. “Besides, it's better than...” and Willow stopped. She couldn't say 'Tara' because she honestly thought Tara was one of the most beautiful names she'd ever heard. “Xander,” she pouted.

“A point for you, Willow,” Tara said. “Willow is a better name than Xander.” The woman sat herself on the boulder, ignoring the stinging of the sand of the booming of the thunder around them, then patted the vast expanse of stone next to her. Willow gingerly sat next to her, her skin tingling and her heart beating way too fast.

“Now, do tell me what things we could be doing to pass the time,” Tara said, shifting her body so she was mostly facing Willow.

Willow gulped. The way Tara was sitting pulled the fabric tightly across her breasts, and she could see the hardness of her nipples. Willow was beginning to feel her heart beat down in her core, a warm flush suffusing her muscles. She was undeniably attracted to this woman, this enigmatic crazy woman, and in spite of the conversation she just had with her parents, or maybe because of it, she decided to play along.

Willow shuffled closer to the warm body, then raised her hand and trailed it along the woman's arm. “Do you play games?” Willow asked, lifting Tara's palm and tracing the lines inside it.

Tara had to clear her throat, and Willow could see a rising blush in her cheeks, then Willow watched, amazed, as a wave of goosebumps shuddered along Tara's body. “Are you cold?” Willow asked solicitously, knowing that the woman probably wasn't cold, but was shivering in the same anticipation that cascaded down her own spine.

“Freezing,” the woman murmured.

Willow drew off her outer jacket slowly, then leaned in to drape the jacket over Tara's thinly covered shoulders. So close, so maddeningly close... Willow took the biggest risk of her life and gently pressed her lips to Tara's.

The jacket lay forgotten as Tara responded to the kiss, wrapping her arms around Willow, moving her mouth slowly, deliciously, against hers. Willow lost all sense of reason as she kissed those wonderfully full and succulent lips, running her tongue against Tara's mouth, moaning softly as Tara opened her mouth to let her in. She felt Tara's hands on her back, then one hand lifted to stroke her hair and the other traveled down, down. As Tara's hand cupped Willow's backside, Willow was transported into realms of ecstasy never before experienced by womankind. Their mouths plundered each other, almost savage in their need, and Willow felt the gloriousness of Tara's breasts so tight against hers.

The storm raged.

Willow's eager mouth left the battleground of Tara's lips and went exploring down Tara's jaw, as she laved hot, dry kisses again and again down her neck and throat. Tara's head tilted upward and she clutched at Willow, moaning her name.

Who is Willow the nerd now?

Lost in rapturous delight, assaulted by feelings she'd never experienced before, Willow continued her careful barrage of this woman's body, only stopping when she heard Tara cry out.

Sitting bolt upright, Willow asked, “What's the matter? Did I hurt you?”

She was shocked to see tears in Tara's eyes. “No, dearest,” Tara replied, raising her hands to touch Willow's face. “It's just... my time is over.”

Willow looked around her. It was true, the dry thunderstorm was sweeping off to the ocean, and the sky was clearing. “Where do you live? I'll take you home,” Willow promised, her heart breaking. Just like her, to fall in love with a crazy woman. Crazy or no, Tara was incredible, and Willow knew she couldn't be parted from her, not yet.

“Little Salix lucida,” Tara chuckled. “You don't believe me even yet.” Her face fell a little, and she caressed Willow's cheek. “I wonder if I will ever see you again,” she said, mostly to herself.

“Of course you will,” Willow scoffed, but her heart was racing in anguish. “I'll... I'll come looking for you every time there's a storm.”

Tara's face brightened. “Dry thunderstorms,” she clarified. “I can't come down when it's wet.”

“Okay,” Willow promised, thinking to herself that she would just take this woman to whatever asylum she escaped from and pretend to be her sister or something. Wait, sister, that wouldn't work. Girlfriend? Would they let her visit a girlfriend?

Tara drew her in for another quick kiss, and Willow melted into her. She wanted to memorize her, the silkiness of her hair, the fairness of her skin, her intoxicating lips... Her lover drew back just far enough to whisper, “Goodbye,” and then she vanished without a trace.

Willow believed her then, and didn't see her again for three years.

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Buffy looked over at her best friend, knowing that Willow was reliving her first experience with Tara. She barely believed it when Willow had come to her six years ago with her incredible tale. It was impossible for down-to-earth Buffy to believe. You might as well ask her to believe in vampires or demons or fairy tales! But as Willow began to track storm movements, to chase thunderstorm after thunderstorm, to spend her nights pining for a woman/lightning bolt, Buffy began to believe.

Then, three years ago, Buffy had been with Willow when they found Tara again. That shut her right up.

She had to leave. The moment was too exquisite, and the love they showed each other was monumental, making her reevaluate her own doomed relationships. They had shyly ducked into a tent that Willow and Buffy had put up before the storm, and Buffy was kinda glad she couldn't hear what was going on inside.

Ever since then she had helped Willow with the research, they had visited strange haunts, and read impossible books, and finally had an encounter with a witch (yeah, right) who handed them a strange and heavy ring for the inconceivable price of $600 and three kittens. Buffy shuddered to think of what the kittens were for. Willow almost backed down at the kitten point, but Buffy urged her on.

The SUV bounced its way into the desert as they headed off-road to the solitary massive boulder that would be the nexus of their desperate attempt. This would be the fourth time since their last encounter with Tara that they would try calling Tara to them, dry thunderstorms being rare and all. Willow brought the car to a screeching halt and the two girls hurried out. Filling her arms with lightning rods, Buffy ran to the expanse of sand near the boulder. Dumping them on the ground, she fished in her pocket for the diagram the witch had given her and began thrusting the rods in the ground to create a symbol.

Buffy glanced to Willow while she worked, her red haired friend double-checking the alignment of the rods, laying out certain coloured stones into the pattern. Buffy then looked skyward, a little afraid by the solid wall of storm that was heading straight for them. She grit her teeth and worked on. She'd do anything for Willow.

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They had barely finished when the wind first gusted at them, shrieking in their ears. “Do you want to wait in the car?” Buffy asked her, yelling over the wind.

Willow shook her head, but reminded, “Don't forget to ground the car.” Buffy departed after giving her a quick hug and Willow heard the car door slam, then the faint clashes of music over the wind and the thunder. She shook her head in friendly exasperation and waited.

The lightning was getting closer. Her heart pounded in trepidation and exhilaration.

Would Tara accept her gift?

It was black, yet the frequent flashes of lightning were enough to light the landscape, and she could see the echo in her retinas. Willow waited, feeling strong, powerful, alive! The lightning was getting closer, ever closer.

“Tara!” Willow screamed, raising her fists to the sky.

A terrific blinding white jag of light rocked her skull, and thunder clapped inside her chest, and she fell to the ground. When she opened her eyes, and could see past the searing flash, Willow could see a beloved form curled up on the ground inside the protective circle she and Buffy had formed with their lightning rods.

“Tara!” she cried, rushing to the prone woman on the ground.

“Willow?”

Willow stumbled to the ground as she approached, and Tara laughed through her tears. “Thank God, Willow,” Tara intoned, crawling over to her, wrapping her in her arms. Willow lifted her face and was deluged with Tara's kisses, swooning in delight. “It's been so long,” Tara whispered, embracing Willow tightly.

The two of them sat on the wind-blasted ground, rocking each other, kissing each other again and again. “How much time do we have?” Tara finally asked, looking up at the sky, then looking around the area for their tent.

Willow bubbled with delight, with her secret. “How does forever sound?” she asked, pulling out the large and heavy ring.

Tara's eyes widened with disbelief. “Willow, how did you get this?” She took the ring in her fingers, turning it again and again in her grasp. Was it real? Could this be?

“Well, it involved a shady deal and three kittens, but it's well worth it,” Willow said, helping Tara off the ground. “Do you... do you want it?” Her heart was suddenly chill. What if she was making more of this than Tara was? What if it was only a passing fling with a mortal, some enjoyable lips during a storm and nothing more?

Tara looked at her, her eyes shining. “Willow, I've thought of nothing but you for the past six years. I live for our brief moments together. Now you, you...” and she dissolved into tears, and Willow took her, and rocked her, and held her tight. Finally Tara lifted her face again, her mouth creasing into a full-blown smile that warmed Willow's desolate heart. Deliberately she took the ring and put it on her index finger.

“Can we go someplace warmer?” Tara asked, grinning.

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Tara had not often walked on the earth. She had observed it from the heavens for a millenia, but she had never been able to stride slowly down sidewalks in the sunshine, tasting ice cream, holding hands. She had never had a bubble bath, she had never eaten Chinese food.

She had never been in love.

That night, that most amazing night. Willow had shyly driven her home, and Buffy bowed out of their shared apartment, claiming some excuse or another. Tara barely noticed. She had eyes only for Willow. Willow, who drew her up the stairs to her bedroom. Willow, who deliciously divulged her of her clothing. Willow, who entered her with such passion and need it made Tara's whole existence worthwhile. She could still hear her own ecstatic cries as Willow relentlessly thrust into her, could feel the earth-shattering waves of her orgasm, riding a tidal wave of unimaginable lust. She could remember Willow's own response, as Tara's shy fingers pushed into her core, the way Willow clutched her breasts so tight, the little nips Willow's teeth left on her skin. Willow, her love.

She would often touch the ring on her finger, and marvel at the love Willow must have for her. Willow found the only magic that existed to trap a bolt of lightning. Willow had indeed ensnared her, and each new day, Tara woke next to the woman she loved and waited in breathless anticipation for what mortal marvels Willow would share next.

Like chocolate fondue. And sundogs. And massage oil.

The End



Feedback, anyone?
Phoenix

ps. Salix lucida is the latin horticultural term for Shining Willow
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby Zampsa1975 » Tue Nov 27, 2007 8:24 am

Great story. More please?
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby katjetson » Tue Nov 27, 2007 8:35 am

Phoenix, pardon my early morning lack of flowery praise -- This rules! I'm so happy (truly) to have your writing presence here. The Lamb is a wonderfully dark tale, so it doesn't leave much room for humor, but you totally nail it. Got me smirkin' 'n chirpin' in the morning hours. Amazing!

“You are human?” the woman asked...

“Um, usually,” Willow replied, filled with confusion. “You mean you aren't?” Great, just her luck. Meet a gorgeous woman in a thunderstorm and she's a raving lunatic. You really can pick 'em, Rosenberg.


I love Willow's brain. It's filled with just, uhm... so much.

“Are you learning impaired?” the woman accused, laughing again, and the sound warmed Willow's vastly confused heart...

Maybe some co enzyme Q10 will help you with mental acuity.”


Ooh, Tara's a pistol, huh? I like smary Tara. I like so. very. much.

A point for you, Willow,” Tara said. “Willow is a better name than Xander.”


And I continue with that previous thought...

Who is Willow the nerd now?


Poor Willow. Always trying so desperately to shed her geek skin.

Willow, who deliciously divulged her of her clothing.


I've decided that from here on out I'm going to ask my girlfriend to do this exact thing. That is, "deliciously divulge" me of my clothing. She'll think I'm smart and sexy. Oh, wait... hopefully she thinks those things already.

In conclusion, I'd like to say that this story actually reminds me a little of Chris Cook's "Gold," which is one of my most very favorite stories. If you've not read it, you should check it out. You two seemed to have some cute shared brainwaves.

Phoenix, I look forward to your next story rising from the ashes. I mean, if we get tasty morsels like this in between the goodness that is The Lamb, bring it on! In fact, maybe just write us a little short story every day.

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby Willowtree252 » Tue Nov 27, 2007 9:49 am

:pinky I really enjoyed this it was short but full and poweful in its content. Please more, more, more, more. :kgeek
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby dlline » Tue Nov 27, 2007 10:41 am

Wow, Phoenix.

What a cool idea. While I usually tend to shy away from deep fantasy stories (more of a realist, I suppose), this was fun. Loaded with your usual level of imagery and description, the idea of trapping a bolt of lightning was a good one. Isn't that the basic nature of love? Lightning in a bottle?

Once again, I like the sprinkling of canon that you use, and I actually found myself laughing at the "absurd" notion of witches and vampires. Willow's sadness at her parents' attitude about her coming out was well done and Buffy's level of commitment toward her friend was admirable.

Thanks for the shout-out at the beginning. Short fics are a great way to work one's craft, and I'm really happy to see you dipping your toes in the pool. While I'm certainly not the first one on the board to try this sort of thing, I'm happy to be acknowledged. Once again, you rock, as does your story and your writing. Well done.

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby wimpy0729 » Tue Nov 27, 2007 12:24 pm

Hey, Phoenix!

I really like this idea of short stories for us.

This one is very interesting indeed. A beautiful woman falling from the sky. How lucky is that.

I loved how they hit it off right away, and how she did make Willow feel better. Loved the cute little funny bits, especially "and three kittens". That just cracked me up for some reason.

Of course, really enjoyed the love making. Makes me ponder what it would be like to have a climax caused by a former lightning woman.

Looking forward to more shorts, and of course, more Lamb.


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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby ceridwen » Tue Nov 27, 2007 2:02 pm

That was great!!

I was wondering what the ring was all about, but you cleared that up in the end.

I must say this was a very original piece of writing.

I really liked it, it had all the elements of a great short fic, humor, romance, plot and yummy stuff, hehe :tongue

Great work! :clap
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby spells42 » Tue Nov 27, 2007 3:50 pm

Phoenix
Fantastic fantasy! I liked very much.

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby chance » Tue Nov 27, 2007 4:05 pm

Beautiful. Erotic. Sensual.

Really.

Just wonderfully written.

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby masterjendu » Tue Nov 27, 2007 5:33 pm

First of all, what a lovely idea that lightning gets to hang out on earth (even for just a fleeting moment) once it strikes.

And how romantic to be out in the desert, your empty, aching heart silently beseeching the ether for love, only to have true love fall on you in the form of a beautiful, gay (and somewhat lustful) bolt of lightning who can see into your soul and find your loveliness there.

I love how supportive Buffy (with all of the shrieking and excitement in the beginning and the privacy-providing at the end) and Xander (with the wingman role at the Bronze) are.

I love that kittens are a part of the price in the shady deal for the ring. Perhaps for a little gambling?

I love how Willow's logic for flirting with Tara is based on the fact that she is likely a lunatic.

I love the playful exchange between Willow and Tara in their first meeting.

I love your striking use of puns like bolting upright and an ever-ready smile!

Mostly, I love how the storms are an allegory for the stirrings of love: Willow feels the deep rumblings of thunder in her body as she first approaches Tara, and the thunder clapped inside her chest, making Willow feel strong, powerful, alive (just as love should) as she waits for Tara in the end.

What a beautiful story, Phoenix! Thank you so much.
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby db » Tue Nov 27, 2007 8:59 pm

Bolt of lightning?

You have an imagination... and a half!

Very sweet story Phoenix. I'd love to read more if have 'em in your noggin.

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby JujuDeRoussie » Wed Nov 28, 2007 1:46 am

Hello Phoenix :)

That was really interesting. :) A lighting is so beautiful, it is true it could be a Tara. ^^
Really sweet in any point.
Well done!

I still have to catch up with the lamb... :blush

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby taraslove » Wed Nov 28, 2007 5:36 am

Um, wow. I'm going to go sit outside and wait for the beautiful woman of my dreams to fall out of the sky.

Right this moment.

Thanks for the wonderful story. What an incredible imagination you have. And, as always, I love, love, LOVE your writing style.
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby Zooeys_Bridge » Wed Nov 28, 2007 6:15 am

pheonix, thank you.

this was the perfect pick-me-up yesterday. it was a beautiful and delightful story with the hint of magic that you add like cinnamon.

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby JustSkipIt » Wed Nov 28, 2007 6:06 pm

Phoenix - I love dry thunderstorms. And this story is quite the nice romantic breather. You manage in describing very few encounters to fill both W and T with personality and passion and to make it credible that they would be in love in spite of their very infrequent contacts. Very romantic of Willow to get the ring. Quite lovely.

What's a sundog?
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby magicdanw » Wed Nov 28, 2007 7:16 pm

Great story, Phoenix! It was nice to read something like this right before going to sleep (last night). It reminded me a bit of Stardust, what with the lovely lady falling out of the sky and finding true love. Please, keep up the great work! :)
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby Tara the Phoenix » Wed Dec 12, 2007 8:27 am

I thought I better respond to feedback as I've got another short story offering in the near future. I must say I was so pleased to see such response to my little story: it's challenging at times to write short fic, but it's made infinitely easier by having two starring ladies such as these. On with the show!

Zampsa
I'm glad you enjoyed it. More coming soon.


katjenson
Tara is a pistol. I really enjoyed writing a different Tara than the one in The Lamb, yet I hope it's still undeniably her. I swear, writing the “Are you learning impaired?” line was something I've wanted to do for years and hadn't yet found the right story to put it in. Thanks for recommending 'Gold'; I'll definitely check it out.
In fact, maybe just write us a little short story every day.
That's a tall order, even for me! Rest assured, I am writing every day; I'm obsessed with completing The Lamb.

Thanks for your comments!


Dianneswillowtree
I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. It's been a while, but more is coming soon.


dlline
I really don't know where this idea came from, probably an amalgamation of many things, and the fantasy quotient of it made me a little nervous at first. It's hard to write fantasy short stories because you have a whole universe to share and only a little time. I'm glad you enjoyed my offering. I was also glad to veer away from canon, seeing as The Lamb is canon-centric. My next story is also completely uber. I hope you enjoy it as well! Thanks always, Diane.


Wimpy
Glad the “three kittens” cracked you up. I remember watching Spike playing poker for kittens and I couldn't get the idea out of my head, so I had to borrow it. Let's all pray for the fate of those poor kittens... I'm really glad you enjoyed this story. Enjoy the next one!


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Thanks for reading and leaving feedback, I always appreciate hearing from you. I must admit, I really wanted my first short fic on the KB to be really original, so I hope I pulled it off. I'm glad you liked it. Next one is pretty different, and I hope you enjoy it as well. Thanks so much for your support of these and The Lamb.


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Anne, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting.


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Thanks for taking the time to leave feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I hope you enjoy the next one.


masterjendu
As always, you wow me with your insights. You are always so capable of reading into my words; makes me all gushy. I'm glad I could surprise you with this one.
I love how Willow's logic for flirting with Tara is based on the fact that she is likely a lunatic.
It was fun to write, and it really helped the plot along. She just needed to get rid of her reservations and kiss her and it would be all downhill from there. And striking use of puns? Maybe I shouldn't reveal it and lower your opinion of me, but those were coincidences. Sometimes stuff just comes out of these wandering typing fingers.

I'm soooo glad you enjoyed it, and I hope you like this next one as well.


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I guess I do have an imagination; I'm also shamelessly plagiarizing from a zillion other people, amalgamating their ideas into something new. That's what writers do, right? I've definitely got more in my noggin' and another is coming soon. Thanks for commenting.


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Julia, I'm glad you enjoyed the fic. Enjoy the next one as well!


taraslove
Has a beautiful woman fallen from the sky for you yet? You need to take that 'It's Raining Men' song and alter it slightly for your benefit. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story, and I'm looking forward to more 'Portal'. I hope you enjoy the next story as well.


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it was a beautiful and delightful story with the hint of magic that you add like cinnamon.
Thank you! It makes me sound like a master chef, which is a delicious allegory for writing. I'm so glad you enjoyed this story. Though honestly, when I read the word cinnamon, I immediately thought of poor Marge Simpson mourning for her lost guinea pig. (I'm a Simpsons junkie.) I hope you like the next story as well.


JustSkipIt
Hiya Deb. I'm glad you liked it. Concerning your question...
What's a sundog?
I really shouldn't have put it in... A sundog is a rare meteorological phenomenon here in the far north. It only occurs when it's freaking cold outside and the atmosphere is just right. The sun will be shining, and there will be two little suns suspended on either side of it, like sitting dogs. They are small bursts of rainbow light. Try google images to see one. They're spectacular. And they would never happen in California.

I hope you like the next offering!


magicdanw
You nailed part of my inspiration. I did recently watch 'Stardust' and I was enchanted with the idea of the falling star, and also with the idea of a ship capturing lightning. So yes, that's where I plagiarized a bit of this story. I'm glad you twigged it out. Thanks for commenting, and I hope you enjoy the next story.


Thanks so much, kittens, and the next story will be up soonish, and another update of The Lamb on Friday.
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Lightning

Postby Tara the Phoenix » Thu Dec 13, 2007 7:15 am

Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I own nothing but these words.
Spoilers: None. Completely uber.
Note: This is for Diane. Thanks for everything.

[center]Frozen[/center]

It didn’t seem right that the day should be so blue. Tara angrily stood on the edge of the leaden lake, with her heavy black coat drawn tightly around her; the December air was chill. Before she could stop herself, she tossed it good and hard. High in the air it went, the wan sunlight glinting sharply from it, momentarily blinding her. It seemed to hang in the air for endless moments as she watched, as if recent angel fingers bent to catch it from the sky. With the tiniest of splashes she saw it strike the calm surface of the water and for a moment in the clearness she could see it falling before ripples obscured her vision. Ripples and tears, for her eyes had filled again and she angrily wiped them with the back of her hand.

Tara stood there a long time, alone at the edge of the lake, achingly aware of the void next to her. A void that used to be filled with her auburn-haired wife. She pretended she could watch the ring fall through the water. She imagined how it would look to gracefully fall, the diamond catching the light of the sun, refracting the water into millions of tiny rainbows that the fish would be dazzled by. And then it would rest against a couple of slimy stones and in a million years it would be dug up by scientists and marvelled over.

This is my heart, and I am winter.

She swore to herself that she would never love again.

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The door had jingled, and a gust of winter wind blew her newest customer into her shop. Willow turned to face the counter, wiping her floury hands on her apron, stopping in startled shock. Throughout her life there were some things that she would never forget: storm clouds rolling over the mountains surrounding Denver, an early sunrise over prairie grasses in August, and the look of the woman’s hair. She had never seen such amazing hair. It fell like dark golden waterfalls to the woman’s waist, the longest hair Willow had ever seen.

She also distinctly saw the woman’s arm linked with that of another woman. A young, beautiful brunette who seated her (date?) on a nearby chair and sashayed up to the counter. Willow would have killed for hips like hers. The brunette was unwrapping a scarf from her head, then she peered unabashedly at Willow’s chest, before straightening and saying, “Willow?”

Dashed from her reverent watching of the blonde woman, who had also taken off her long black coat, showing her dressed in boot-cut jeans and a soft turtleneck sweater, Willow squeaked, “Huh?”

“Name tag,” the brunette said, pointing at Willow’s chest, where a little tag said, “Hi, I’m Willow. Ask me about our muffins!”

“Okay,” the brunette said. “How about your muffins?”

Willow forced her attention away from the amber waves of hair to look at the grinning woman. “Um, healthy or not?” Willow replied, trying not to notice the blonde woman anymore.

“Choices!” The woman actually jumped a little and clapped her hands. “Tara, healthy or not?” she called out.

Tara, her name is Tara.

“What do you think, goof?” the woman called out, and Willow locked the memory of her silken voice in her head forever. She thought of other words that woman could say, other noises she could make that woman make...

“The situation calls for chocolate,” the brunette added to Willow. She leaned in to Willow conspiratorially. “Excellent first date,” she said cryptically, before pulling away again to look at the display case. Meanwhile, Willow had frozen. Date. She said date. Oh, crap, she said date!

First date. She said “first date”. I can deal with a “first date”.

The brunette looked meaningfully up at Willow again, then pointed at the display case. Willow found her voice again. “White chocolate macadamia nut, triple chocolate fudge, chocolate chip, and we also have cookies and a delicious chocolate croissant,” she said, stealing glances over to Tara whenever the brunette wasn’t looking.

“One of each of the muffins, and we’ll share a croissant,” the brunette said, straightening up. Willow noticed again how insanely tall the girl was, and her heart sank. Short and stumpy Willow. Why couldn’t she ever be tall and willowy Willow? She obediently got the muffins and put them on the tray.

“What will you have to drink?” she asked.

The brunette was already picking at the triple chocolate muffin. “Jovial equals Java,” she said absently, popping a piece into her mouth, followed quickly by a look of wonder. “So Tara will get an espresso. I’ll get a Latte.”

Willow turned to start making the coffees. “What does Latte equal?” she asked over her shoulder, surreptitiously stealing another glance at the blonde, who was gazing dream-like through the window at the rapidly snow-filled street.

“Lucky, I guess,” the brunette replied, her mouth full of muffin. Willow’s eyes widened as her heart fell. Yeah, I’d feel lucky, too, if I was with her. “Lucky I found this place, I mean,” the girl continued. “This muffin is really excellent.” She picked another hunk and squealed as she discovered the center of creamy chocolate-y goodness, and Willow couldn’t help but laugh.

Willow began ringing up the order as the brunette continued to demolish the muffin. “That will be fifteen fifty two,” she said, taking the credit card that was handed to her, glancing at the name written on it (Dawn Maclay). She swiped it through, then watched the final demise of the ill-fated muffin. Reaching into the display case again, she pulled out another triple chocolate fudge muffin and said, “On the house. Make sure she gets this one, okay?”

The brunette laughed and took the tray over to the table. Willow watched how companionable they seemed, watched their animated conversation, and only turned away when other customers intruded on her.
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Tears still winding their silent way down her cheeks, Tara turned away from the lake and back toward the silent houses. It was mid-morning and cold, and very few people ventured from their lakeside cottages. She had arrived in the pre-dawn darkness and had watched the sun rise over the mountains, feeling the bitter bite of winter air but not caring in the slightest. What cared she for things of this world when her lover was gone?

Her face was haggard and her eyes were as steely blue as the depths of the winter-tossed lake and rimmed with redness. She had had enough forethought not to wear mascara the day before and so only the makeup on her cheeks had clear lines from tears running down. She really didn’t think she could cry much more but the tears kept coming from somewhere. She felt as if she had been crying for weeks.

All she could think about was that ring lying desolate on the bottom of the lake and wishing she could somehow be lying there as well. How much easier it would be, to simply die rather than face the rest of eternity alone. Tara forced herself to think that she had other reasons to live and much to live for. Her life was not over, though her wife’s was.

Once inside the comparative safety of her car she looked around to make sure she was not being watched, then she slowly took off her hat and wig. She looked good as a brunette, her mother had told her. But her mother had said that of every other colour she had tried in the shop, except the skater-punk spiked pink and purple. Mothers are supposed to say things like that. Tara ran her fingers over her smooth scalp. Her mother had also said that she looked good bald. That is also what mothers are supposed to say. She had seen the tears in her mother’s eyes when she said it, trying to smooth out the bald-faced (hah!) lie. Tara had grown her hair for years and years. It was the most delicious colour of amber anyone had ever seen, and her friends would often sing, “How beautiful for spacious skies, for amber waves of grain,” when they saw the hair that fell like waterfalls to her very waist.

Her mother had words back then. Too bad her mother had no words a week ago. Suddenly, no one had a single thing to say.

Only a week? It already felt like a lifetime. Tara didn’t know that it was possible for a minute to be as long as a year. It was something you read in those cheesy romance novels sold for a buck at the grocery store. In those stories the dying ones always got a deathbed conversation, they would speak of their lives together, and their love that would last forever, and yet extract promises that they wouldn’t always mourn, that they would find someone new to share a lifetime with. Never be alone. Liars, all of them. Back then she would read them, and laugh, and give them to the thrift store so someone else could enjoy them.

Her fingers trembled as she sought the ignition. The car was brand new and still unfamiliar. Her father gave it to her the day after. He had known. See, those cheesy romance novels never gave some men enough credit. Her father was sensitive. He had taken her old car, the one that was still filled with her lovers scent, he had sold it and came back with this new one the very same day. He didn’t say a word. Just pressed the keys into her hand and kissed her on the cheek and left.

Why could she only think of those novels? Mediocre tales that seethed in misery, in sickness, in lost love, in finding new love and living happily ever after. What a farce! She was sure that those authors could never write a real story, even if they tried. Clichéd fantasies, all of them.

And her life had turned into one.

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Willow wrapped the scarf more securely around her neck, the harsh Denver wind cutting into her made doubly awful since the bakery she just left was so warm. She was a little worked up herself, if she was going to be honest. Tara had come in today, by herself, and had sat in a little corner by the window for almost an hour, languidly reading a magazine and nursing a coffee. Every time Willow came by to refill her cup she felt like a doofus. Her apron was always covered in flour from baking, and she always wanted to say something charming and witty. Ever since Tara first blew into her shop two weeks ago, she practiced her conversations with Tara at night, you see, in front of the mirror, holding different smiles, trying different lines, anticipating different responses, but all of her careful dramatic rehearsals failed her when the curtain finally lifted up. Tara would look at her, and smile, and Willow would be struck dumb. Both kinds of dumb.

Willow's cheeks burned as she recalled what happened today, weaving her way along the sidewalks to the alternative bookstore that was her destination. Willow had happened to glance down at the magazine Tara was reading, and when she discovered its content her cheeks had flamed. No worries now whether or not Tara was gay. At least that question had been answered. Willow's mind whirled as she walked, hunching her shoulders against the cold. Why hadn't Tara tried to hide it? Did she want Willow to see it? Or did Tara come into Willow's shop twice, sometimes three times a week merely for her chocolate muffins?

A pleasant conundrum, and Willow considered it as she walked through the door, hearing the tinkling of the tiny bell, pulling her scarf from its stranglehold on her neck. She smiled; it had been a long while since she had come to this quaint and comfy bookshop, with its overstuffed chairs between book aisles to facilitate reading, a coffee bar nearby. Willow reminded herself to try to make a deal with the owner to sell her baked goods here.

Transported into a realm of delight, Willow ambled along the shelves, picking up books and reading the back covers, smelling them when she knew no one was looking (I love the smell of new books in the morning!). She was engrossed in a title called, “The Rosenberg Files” when she heard a voice behind her.

“The sequel is even better.”

Willow whirled around and Tara was there, sitting on one of the chairs away in a little nook.

Now for your masterful conversation rehearsal, Willow.

“Ga-huh?” Willow choked.

Bloody brilliant.

Tara unfolded herself from the chair and sashayed (oh, those hips!) up to Willow, picking up the book titled, “The Rosenberg Paradox”. “Have you read either of them before?” Tara asked.

“Uh, no,” Willow finally spurt out.

“If anyone has ever had hot lady cop fantasies, they better read these,” Tara said, placing the book back on the shelf. She smiled at Willow, who stood frozen like a deer caught in the headlights. She was obviously waiting for Willow to say something, but Willow couldn't get over the way Tara's lips had formed the words 'hot lady cop fantasies'. Besides, Willow was enchanted by Tara's hair. She wanted to touch it, she wanted to smell it, she wanted to bury her hands in it.

Tara's face fell as the silence lengthened, and Willow could see her cheeks redden in embarrassment. Say something fast, Willow!

“Woujouliketohavedinnerwithme?”

“Come again?”

Will you make me? Mind out of the gutter, Rosenberg. And slower this time. “Would you like to have dinner with me?” she asked again, her heart pounding fiercely, horrified that she had asked so nakedly. No foreplay at all. Think unsexy thoughts, think unsexy thoughts...

Tara looked delighted. “I'd love to, Willow,” she said.

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Tara somehow drove home. Thank goodness there was no one on the roads with her. She pulled into her driveway and dispassionately noticed that the For Sale sign still swung in the breeze. Her house showed too many signs of wear and tear, scaring potential buyers away. She had had no time in the past year to fix things up herself. It was amazing how a little neglect went a long way. Her garden was overrun with weeds, her shrubs all needed pruning, and the grass was long. Inside was no better. She never really noticed before how bare the rug was in the entranceway. She never really noticed the rust stains beneath the faucets in the bathroom before. And even though her mother and sisters had blitzed through the house, cleaning up a storm, they could not repair the neglect.

Long ingrained instinct had her taking off her shoes in the entryway of the small house. She smiled as she remembered the first time she explained to her American girlfriend (soon to be wife) that all Canadians took their shoes off when they entered a house, especially when visiting someone else. It took a while for her girl to get the hang of it. She walked in her stocking feet toward the kitchen. There she stood for long minutes, not really thinking at all about anything, just standing there and feeling the emptiness. It was like a force that sapped her of strength and willpower. It swirled all around her, holding her in its icy, unrelenting claws. The loneliness and the emptiness of a lifetime.

Minutes passed and she slowly moved from the kitchen to the living room. She ran her hands along the portraits, remembering the blissful arguments about the kind of frame to use. She touched the clock, remembering how it was a third anniversary gift from her wife's parents and ugly as heck. They had no taste whatsoever. She looked at the books in the case, her partner's compulsion to buy them offset by her own compulsion to give them away.

She eventually wandered into their bedroom. There was a rocking chair in the corner with a half-knitted blanket lying on the seat. She had not touched it since her love had put it down two weeks ago. Now she did, running her fingers over the immaculate stitches, remembering how she used to laugh to watch her sit there and knit, as peaceful as a dove. Tara lifted it to her face and imagined she could still smell her on it. But she could not.

To the wardrobe next, where her auburn-haired lover's perfume sat without the lid. Yes. That was her. She drunk in the scent as if she were dying of thirst. Her throat began to choke with sobs. She put down the bottle and hurried outside.

Still in her stockinged feet she stood at the edge of the balcony that led into her backyard. To the left were the stairs that led down to the wood patio. Her girl had tried to build the stairs herself, get herself out of the kitchen, but was finally unable to. Tara ended calling up the local carpenter, John Stash, who had laughed and rectified her mistakes and the two of them banged merrily away.

The sky was still too blue, the air cold, freezing her. She did not care. She stood there, feeling the tears travel from her throat up to her eyes, brimming there. She would not blink. If she blinked, she would open the floodgates and not be able to control them. So there she stood, the wafting smell of her love's perfume still around her and waited to freeze.

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Willow pulled the chair out for Tara, and watched as Tara carefully flicked her impossibly long hair away so she wasn't sitting on it. Willow sat down across from her, a single globby candle flickering on their red-checkered table. It was a proto-typical Italian restaurant, small, cheap, delicious, and perpetually packed with people. Willow called in a favour to have them save her a small table for that evening, and she triumphantly led Tara past the oodles of people waiting in line.

Tara was grinning at her again. Willow loved her smile. She couldn't quite place Tara's age; she knew that Tara must be a little older than she, but she knew far better than to ask. It was a standard get-to-know-you dinner date, and Willow's earlier blockage of vowel sounds was quite overcome by the ravishing company she was with. She discovered that Tara was Canadian, from the city of Calgary, which Willow knew of only by the annual Stampede.

Which led into a fascinating discussion of what brought Tara to Denver. Apparently she was a herbaceous plant researcher with the Calgary Zoo, and had come to conduct hardiness trials at the Denver Zoo. Willow was crestfallen to find out that Tara would only be in Denver for another week; winter had hit the city early this year, and Tara had no work for the winter months.

“You'll be back in the spring, right?” Willow asked in what she hoped was the right mix of concern and nonchalantness.

“Yes, I'll be returning in April and will stay again until next November.”

Willow stuck out her tongue a bit at the good news, smiling like a doofus. Now for the next big question, Willow thought, remembering the tall dark-haired girl who had been seen with Tara a number of times. The easiness to which Tara said yes for their date made Willow believe that she was available, but she had been burned far too many times in the past.

“So,” she asked, trying to be fashionably sensitive yet cool at the same time, “who is that girl who often joins you at the coffee shop?”

Tara's blue eyes twinkled. “That would be my sister, Dawn.”

Woo-hoo! I mean...

“That's nice,” Willow said, sipping her glass of wine. “She's here in Denver as well?”

“She likes to keep tabs on me,” Tara replied. “So she'll visit for a week or two at a time and eat me out of my house and home. You wouldn't believe how much teenagers can consume. I mean, I thought elephants were bad...”

“Do you get to spend any time with the animals?”

“Not so much. I like to eat my lunch by the monkey enclosure. When it's spring, you should come and visit me at the zoo. The gardens are tremendous. I don't know why everyone goes to see the animals, the plants are clearly so much more interesting.”

Willow's heart soared. Did Tara just say what she thought she said? “I'd love to see the gardens, Tara,” she replied earnestly.

The rest of the night passed in a blur of heart-pounding fascination, and as her tongue limbered up, helped immeasurably by the wine, Willow began to speak in her trademark Willow fashion, babbling about this thing or that. She meant to ask Tara more questions, but Tara had been asking more and more about Willow herself, asking how Willow got in the bakery business, what schooling she had. Before she knew it, Willow was telling Tara about her mother's latest dissertation in the Middle East, her friend Buffy's recent wedding to Riley, and the heartache of her dog dying.

There were no awkward silences. Just flowing, easy conversation and Willow became convinced that she had known this remarkable woman forever. As coffee after dessert lingered, Willow wanted to kiss Tara. She wanted it more than she had ever wanted anything. So Willow offered to drive Tara home. Tara gave her a strange look, tilting her head to the side, her eyebrow raised.

“No, thank you, Willow. I'll take a cab.”

“Can I call you?” Willow felt like she was in high school again, daring to ask the most beautiful girl in school for her phone number. She then remembered how that had turned out, with the girl laughing in her face and her butch girlfriend (hey, I was new at this) threatening to stuff her into a locker. Willow turned red with the memory, turned her face away from Tara and whispered, “Forget it.”

“No, Willow,” Tara replied quickly, grabbing her hand. “I had a good time tonight. I hope you call me sometime.” Tara wrote down her cell phone number on a napkin, and handed it to Willow.

Bemused, tingling with the touch of Tara's hand, Willow retained enough presence of mind to help Tara into her jacket. As she pulled out her vast expanses of hair, Willow wanted to kiss her again.

And then they were outside, standing in the falsely bright light of the entrance. Above them was the green and white sign of the restaurant, one of the lights flickering and dying creating a noisome buzzing sound. The haze of the busy city streets reflected off the close clouds above them, and Willow could smell fresh snow in the air. She was just about to tell Tara how much she enjoyed snow (an important point to make when successfully dating a Canadian) when her cab pulled up.

Willow heard her voice say, “Good night, Willow,” before Tara's cool lips were on her cheek, her hand squeezing Willow's hand once more before demurely slipping into the waiting cab.

“I'll see you again soon, Tara, at the shop maybe?” Willow said as she shut the door behind her. She could see Tara nod in approval as the cab slipped away from her. Willow clenched her hand around the napkin in her fist, the one with Tara's number on it, and wondered what it would be like to have Tara kiss her on the lips instead of on the cheek.

She stood too long in the frigid air, her cheeks burning with Tara's kiss, her extremities frozen.

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It was cold. In the storybooks when someone was dying of sick heartache, it was always raining. Why couldn't it rain for her? Why couldn't it even snow for her? Why did it have to be this bubbly beautiful blue sky? It was freaking cold, after all, why couldn't there be snow? Tara surmised that she didn't need to be swallowed by the lake after all. Maybe this was enough. She could catch pneumonia and die and join her beloved wife sooner than later.

No. Because some people are just too stubborn to die.

So it was there, just there in the watery sunshine of a frigid December day, that Tara decided she needed to live. She needed to watch her garden grow. She needed to learn to knit like her girl had. She needed to bake chocolate muffins and read books and give them away. She would make mistakes, but a life with no mistakes is no life at all. Even the books agree on that.

Maybe she didn’t need to sell the house. Maybe she could stay here in the shadow of the mountain and begin her life as if it was new. Maybe she could learn to smile at the memories and not grow bitter from them. She no longer needed to be superwoman, nursing her wife through her illness, shaving her long golden hair so she could be like her, still trying to work for the money they needed for her expensive treatments. Maybe she didn’t have to be a desperate heroine, trying every day to overcome the sadness of her life, trying to reconcile herself to God, a Being who tore from her the very reason for her existence. Maybe, just maybe, she was allowed this. She was permitted to be sad, to be depressed. She was permitted to miss her love so much that she thought her heart would break. She was permitted to cry when thinking of so many years ahead of her, years where her girl would not be.

Tara could hear her wife's voice in her mind. Lovers lectures, she would call them. The age-old platitudes with a new twist. “It’s always darkest in the belly of a cannibal,” she would laugh, and then, “Every refrigerator has a silver lining.” Her wife would invariably make her laugh, which would sometimes make her even more angry because she just couldn’t stay mad at her longer than a minute. Except when discussing those blasted frames. Tara won that argument by saying she inherited her parents flair for interior design. Her love was so mock-offended that she backed off and told her to do whatever she wanted.

She could stay, and let herself remember. And as time went by, she could allow herself to forget. Her hair would grow back, and maybe, just maybe she would be like the books after all and meet someone else and not be alone anymore.

But not now. So she stood there until she was so cold she was trembling from head to foot and only then did she walk inside to stand by the door, shivering all over the floor her mother had washed a couple days ago.

The phone rang, jarring her, snapping her from her reverie. She listened to it ring several times, then decided to answer it.

“Tara, honey, how are you?”

“I’m ok, Dawn. Everything is going to be ok.”

[center]***[/center]

The quality of Willow's baked goods increased, and her customers made sure she knew it. It was a definite perk of her almost-relationship with Tara. She never knew when Tara would be coming, so she wanted to make each and every batch perfect, just in case. She was often so chipper that her employees grumbled at her. Every day Willow waited for Tara to return to her shop, and after a few days passed without her long-haired angel appearing, Willow decided to take matters into her own hands.

That evening in the comfort of her flannel pajamas and a cup of hot cocoa, Willow took out the napkin that she had placed so very carefully on her fridge. Fingers trembling with anticipation, Willow dialed the number and listened to it ring, her heart pounding so hard she could barely hear the tinny ringing of the phone.

And waited. And waited. And on the sixth ring she was about to hang up when she heard Tara's decidedly female voice say, “Hello?”

Surprised, Willow dropped the phone. As she fished desperately for it, she heard Tara ask, “Anyone there?”

Willow finally had the phone again in her hot little hands. “Hi, Tara?” she asked.

“Yes. Who is this?”

“Um, you may not remember me, this is Willow -”

She was immediately cut off by Tara's, “Of course I remember you, Willow. How are you?”

Grin. Play it cool, Rosenberg, play it smooth. “I'm doing good, would you like to have dinner with me again?”

Sheesh. At least it came out right this time.

Pause.

“That would be difficult, Willow, as I've already returned home to Calgary.”

NO!

“You're gone already?” Willow asked, her mind quickly adding up the days.

“Yes, there was no more work for me, so I came home. I left a note at your shop, did you not get it?”

“Um, no.” She left a note? She left a note!

“I miss your muffins already.”

Ah, she misses my muffins! “I'll come up.”

“What?” Tara's voice sounded shocked and delighted. “What did you say?”

“I'll come up to see you.”

“You're joking.”

“No, I'm not.”

“You're going to fly up to Calgary?”

“Unless you'd prefer me to walk,” Willow joked. “Though that might take a while.”

“Ah, it wouldn't take too long,” Tara teased. “Though you'd have to eat tree bark and squirrel meat.”

“Well, see, I know this horticulturist who can tell me about all the nummy things to eat. I'm sure there are a million ways to stew poison oak...”

Tara laughed. “You'll have to find your own accomodations, though,” Tara said near-regretfully.

Willow squashed a momentary despair. Too soon to be staying at her place, Willow, that's all. She still wants to see you, doesn't she? “That's okay. I'll be an expert at creating lean-to's out of spruce branches and deer hides by then.”

“So you will. When would you like to come?”

“How about this weekend?”

Pause.

Great way to make with the smoothness. Where's a pit to fall into when you need one?

“Oh, Willow, I've missed you,” Tara choked. “I'd love to see you this weekend.”

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Tara flipped her cell phone shut and cradled it in her hand for a moment, leaning against the kitchen counter. She was astonished to find that she was trembling. From the table, Dawn called, “You okay, Tare?”

“Yeah, I'm okay, Dawn. Do you remember the girl from the bakery?”

“Ask me about my muffins girl when we were celebrating my first date with Dan? The one who took you on a dinner date? The one you haven't stopped talking about since you got home? I have no idea what you're talking about.”

“Smart aleck. Stop eating my food,” Tara said, swiping at Dawn with the kitchen towel. Dawn's hand retreated from the bag of chips. “She's going to come visit this weekend.”

“I gathered that,” Dawn said drily. Her face softened as she looked around the house. “Is she going to replace your wife?” she asked softly.

“You know that no one can replace her,” Tara replied wistfully, looking at those damned frames, the books in their shelves. The knitted blanket had long since been put away, the perfume had gone to Goodwill, Tara's hair had regrown to it's earlier glorious state.

“But I like her, Dawn, so very much,” Tara whispered. “And it's been so very long.”

Dawn came up to her and pulled her into a tight hug. “Tara,” she said, drawing back. “You've been frozen for so long. Now you've finally found someone who's willing to come to Calgary in the middle of the winter, just to see you? You can't let a person like that get away.” She stroked Tara's hair, and continued, “You are such a wonderful person. You deserve happiness. She would understand that.” Dawn retreated back to the table.

“I wanted to kiss Willow,” Tara admitted slowly.

Dawn simply smiled once more and dug her hand back into the bag of chips. “You'll be able to this weekend, won't you?”

“Cheeky,” Tara smirked. Foregoing another slap on Dawn's wrist, surrendering her bag of potato chips to the teenager's gluttony, Tara slipped on her coat and boots and stepped on to the back porch.

Tara stood at the railing and thought of that day, five years before, when she had thrown her ring into the lake. It was a hard five years. The 'For Sale' sign had been taken down, at her behest. Her wife's clothes and the knitted blanket had been packed away. She had gone back to school. For a long time she merely skirted the abyss left by her love's passing, but then the abyss began to fill again. With work, with friends, and now, finally, with new love. Her memories of her wife never left completely, they merely faded, until they were blurred and softened like the cheesy romance novels she still read.

But after all pain, all sadness, there comes an end. Never a complete end, but more like a line that starts out so wide and black and terrible and thins and thins until it is just a whisper of a line but still there, and will be there for all eternity. She understood that. She knew her wife did, too.

Life did not need to be precious again. It already was.

Precious this time because of Willow. Tara recalled the redhead's eyes, voice, the softness of her hands. She remembered the hot way Willow had looked at her as their dinner ended a few nights ago; she had been nearly convinced that Willow was going to kiss her. And she was going to like it. Tara was dismayed not to find Willow at the bakery yesterday; she hated to leave a note for the girl who had so completely captivated her from the moment she first ate that muffin, but there was no other alternative. As she left the warmth of Willow's shop, she wondered if Willow would ever call, or if she would have to wait until April to stroll back into the warmth of Willow's shop, and Willow's life.

So Tara stood at the balcony and imagined, merely imagined what it would be like to have Willow as her girlfriend. Willow's hands on her breasts, tangled in her hair, Willow's lips pressing against hers with an aching, animal hunger. Lost in these pleasant ruminations, Tara suddenly realized something.

She was frozen no longer.

THE END
(though an epilogue may be in order...)

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby Zampsa1975 » Thu Dec 13, 2007 8:46 am

Wow! Beautiful story... and yes epilogue would be nice pleease :pray
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby WillowRulez » Thu Dec 13, 2007 9:43 am

Just read both stories! They are both so beautiful and very well written. The second one was tugging at my heardstrings. I hope you do write an epilogue and many more stories! :smash
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby katjetson » Thu Dec 13, 2007 12:46 pm

Ga, Phoenix, that was breathtakingly beautiful. You had me... I thought Willow was the one that had died. Instead, she was the angel.

A few quotes:

She had had enough forethought not to wear mascara the day before...


Really vivid. Nice detail. I do that when I know tears are a possibility. Wow. It's these simple things you do with words that blow me away.

"I love the smell of new books in the morning!"


I shook my head and smirked at the image. So perfectly Willow.

Thanks for warming my heart with this piece of writing. Damn, girl... You're good. Really, really good.
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby ceridwen » Thu Dec 13, 2007 1:37 pm

You know, you leave me so speechless each time i read something you've written, that i've considered several times to just not say anything, cuz anything i could say would be inadequate, but it wouldn't be fair to not let you know how much i enjoy your work.

At first i thought the person with Tara in the shop was Faith, until the credit card revealed the name. And like everyone else, i also thought that it was Willow who had died, i was wondering if the story would have a happy ending at all.

An epilogue is most definitely needed.

I apologize for not being able to leave better feedback.
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby wimpy0729 » Thu Dec 13, 2007 1:45 pm

Oh, Phoenix, you totally had me going at first. I was thinking she had lost Willow, then about half-way through I started going "hmmm, maybe not." And then I was not as terribly sad as I was at the beginning. You know you made me cry there a few times, and her sadness was heartbreaking, even if it wasn't Willow she lost. But it seems it's time, and Willow can be her new beginning. That part was very well written, where she told Dawn that no one will replace the wife she lost. Very sweet, very sad, but very joyful at the end, where we know they're getting together.

And definitely a big yes to the epilogue. Can't wait.


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ETA: Even amidst all the sadness, my mind made a trip to the gutter:

“Hi, I’m Willow. Ask me about our muffins!”
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby dlline » Thu Dec 13, 2007 9:22 pm

Hey Phoenix!

Sorry for the delay in posting my feedback, but it's been one of those days.

First off, I'm not sure that I have the actual words necessary to express my gratitude and thanks for this story. Imagine that! Diane is speechless. Congratulations... that's not easy to do. I'm both touched and flattered for the dedication as well as the awesome references to my work. I couldn't help but also notice that Willow cruised Tara and made her decision to ask her out based on the magazine that Tara was reading. I did that once too, and it's really fun, isn't it?

This part was my favorite:
Willow ambled along the shelves, picking up books and reading the back covers, smelling them when she knew no one was looking

The sniffing of the books is one of those delightful little touches that you add, a hint of something small, yet oh so very significant to the character. That's so cool how you do that. This monument to misdirection was so wonderfully done... I can't help but think back to my first reading, shaking my head and thinking, "She's never gonna get away with this." But of course, you had already sucked me in, and I fell for it. Good on you, Missy!

As I said before, you certainly know how to stroke the ego of this middle-aged lesbian. Thank you so much for a great story, made even more wonderful by your thoughtful dedication. Touched and flattered (again), so thank you.

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby db » Thu Dec 13, 2007 10:22 pm

Excellent.

You with the crafty misdirects and the angst that turns out was the foundation for the good stuff. Man, you had me going there for a while with the auburn haired wife and the sadness and stuff. It reminded me of that Dar Willams song where she throws her keys in the water in February.

Oh, but it all led to the good tentative happy Willow and Tara stuff. Have I ever mentioned that I like the good stuff? Well I do. Speaking of good stuff that I'd like, I want one of Willow''s chocolate muffins with a chocolatey center. Pretty please? mmmmm


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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby taraslove » Fri Dec 14, 2007 6:03 am

Phoenix.

Wonderful, wonderful story. You have such a way of pulling us right into the emotion of your characters. It's not easy and you do it beautifully. Now, some random observations:

1. Tara certainly seems to like redheads. First, her wife and then Willow. I'm sure she probably even had a few red-headed girlfriends in high school and college. Nice touch.

2. The title. Frozen. It's almost like you've got an elemental theme going on here (first with Lightning and now Frozen) without being too cheesay. Did you plan that or was it just a super-excellent way to describe the metaphor for Tara's pain? Great job.

3. Tara throwing her ring into the bottom of the lake was heartbreaking. Completely and utterly. I've never lost anyone that close to me, but I could feel her pain.

4. I really like that you gave Tara sisters in this one. And that Dawn is one of them. And that her mother is still alive and super supportive. And that her dad is a nice guy. No Donnie, huh? It's funny, I don't think I've ever seen a truly nice Donnie. In most fics, even if he's a small level of nice, he's got some other serious issues going on. Most fic writers tend to leave him out completely if Tara's life isn't the hell that it was on the show. Interesting to note.

5. The nod to The Rosenberg Files and Paradox. Bloody brilliant.

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Tara the Phoenix wrote: “Not so much. I like to eat my lunch by the monkey enclosure.


For some reason, that totally made me laugh! I know it probably wasn't supposed to be funny, but seriously. Where else would Tara want to eat? The monkey enclosure! Ha!

7. It was hard for me to imagine Willow knitting. So I think that's what gave it away for me, just a little bit. Though I was still immesely relieved to find out that Tara's wife was not Willow. Still sad for Tara, but relieved. Great storytelling, that.

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Tara the Phoenix wrote: “Ask me about my muffins girl when we were celebrating my first date with Dan? The one who took you on a dinner date? The one you haven't stopped talking about since you got home? I have no idea what you're talking about.”


That is so totally Dawn. Jeez. Nice job.

9. I agree with Tara. Five years is a long time.

10. Wonderful, wonderful story. I know I say this every time, but I just love your writing style. You're a great storyteller, your characters are real and flawed and rounded out really well, and you have a damn good gift for language. Masterful, Phoenix.


I can't wait for the update tonight! Stay well!
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby JustSkipIt » Sat Dec 15, 2007 8:26 pm

Phoenix - Well, what a delight this was to find on the thread a few days ago. I love the W/T interactions. They were so very smooth and endearing and even thought there was very little of their conversation, it was easy to imagine their connection. I particularly liked the phone conversation where Willow offers to come up and Tara regretfully but formally tells her she has to stay in a hotel. Clear but harsh too.

And Tara's wife and pain. So touching with the imagery of being frozen. It really touched me.

I enjoyed this.
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby Tara the Phoenix » Sat Dec 29, 2007 7:44 pm

So I have another short story ready to go up, so here is the latest round of feedback response!

Zampsa
Congrats on the dibs! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I hope you like the next one, but it's a bit dark.


WillowRulez
I'm glad you enjoyed both stories. You hoped for more stories, so here is another one! Enjoy!


katjenson
I love it when you say “Ga”. It's a great word, or pseudo-word, or small sound that looks like a word. It's like “mui” in Romanian. I use it constantly, but it has no real translation. Drives my friends nuts. Anyhow, I digress. I'm glad you enjoy the little things I do with words; it's all a question of style, isn't it? I hope you enjoy the next one.


ceridwen
Never apologize about quality of feedback, I just appreciate you taking a minute to let me know you've read it. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I knew while writing that some people would think it was Faith with Tara in the shop, so I was happy to put in the plot device of the credit card to let people know it was Dawn, and that Dawn (not Donny) was Tara's sibling. I hope you like the next one as well!


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I bet you were wondering how I was going to pull it off, huh, with Willow dead in the beginning? Sorry, it was a deliberate deception and maybe too much, but it was fun to misdirect everyone. Thanks for commenting.


dlline
I was more than happy to refer to your work; it fit perfectly with what I was writing. I'm happy to stroke someone's ego! I'm glad you enjoyed the sniffing of books; it's just a little writing technique that you also use to great advantage, such as Tara picking off the label of her beer in your latest chapter. Big stories are made of little things. Thanks for previewing the following offering. I'm glad you liked it.


db
Got you too, did I? I should check out that Dar Willams song on YouTube. I'm glad you liked the story, and I hope you like the next one. Thanks for commenting!


taraslove
I'm chuffed. (Irish word meaning puffed up with pride.) Thank you for such good feedback. I'm looking forward to more of your stuff as well. So you figured it out when I mentioned the knitting? Good on you. I hope you like the next one, it's a little disturbing, but hopefully not overboard disturbing.


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Thanks for the email with comments. Your points were very constructive, and I appreciate them. I hope you like the next one, and I look forward to hearing your thoughts on it as well, but take your time... you're a little busier now, aren't you? Take care, my friend.


That's everyone! Now, the next story is disturbing and a little different from the others. You are warned. After writing it, I began to think that I just cannot write comedy, because this next one is even darker than The Lamb. So, I've begun work on a comedy story, and we'll see how it comes out.

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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Frozen (Dec 13)

Postby Tara the Phoenix » Sat Dec 29, 2007 8:16 pm

Rating: R for violence and disturbing content.
Distribution: The Kitten Board (Different Coloured Pens), Looking Glass
Disclaimer: All things Buffy belong to Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy. I'm just borrowing Tara and Willow, and I promise to return them in better-than-new condition.

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Tara couldn’t stop looking at the wedding ring on the dead man’s finger. She saw it now encrusted with bile, blood and dirt, the slightly translucent skin puffing around it, seeking to encapsulate it. Scott had maintained the ring had been royal at one time, eight carats of antique gold and a purple square cut diamond the size of a dime, the 5 million dollar price tag perfect for a wealthy man’s finger. Tara wondered what kind of ring Scott gave his wife or if she was obliged to frost herself.

Yet Scott liked to spit, chased rye with water, and sported a nasty prison tattoo on the small of his hairy back.

And because Scott liked to foreclose mortgages on a whim, destroying whole families, a corn farmer from Iowa murdered both him and Tara. Scott, deliberately.

Tara? Just in the wrong place at the wrong time, doomed to death because she always did the right thing.

There was a cloud of no-see-ums and midges surrounding the fleshy puppet that was so recently playboy Scott. From time to time advance scouts would leave the cloud and venture toward Tara as she lay propped up with her back against a boulder, her mangled legs in a tangle of debris and clotted with pain. Tara barely had the energy to wave her hand against them. When the blazing summer mountain sunshine shone directly on her she felt cooked.

Tara’s cracked lips split into a freakish grin. “Soup’s on, boys!” she screamed, or thought she screamed. It came out a mere croak and died quickly in the water-laden air.

Her gaze wandered up the rock fall. It looked surly and bruised, tinged with Scott’s “blue” blood.

“Royal, indeed,” she muttered. The midges, feasting merrily on Scott’s eyes, paid her no mind. A feast fit for a king. How's that for service, Your Majesty? You've glutted yourself on sin, sated yourself on the misery of others, and now you've discovered that you can't pay the bill. No washing dishes in this establishment, your penalty is death.

Near the top of the rock fall there was an open wound in the stone and dirt where a small tree had once enjoyed its precarious yet sublime existence. Scott had been holding on to it with his surprisingly callused hands (not a rich man's hands, but the hands of a man who liked to spit and chased rye with water) as Tara dove to her stomach to rescue him.

“Don’t let me fall, please, Tara!” Scott had screamed, one hand holding his lifeline of leaves and pith, the other stretched out to her.

Never mind that she secretly detested the man, loathed his incessant teasing and aristocratic airs. He had hit on her the first day, right in front of his girlfriend/mistress. Tara took pleasure in letting him know she was far more interested in their green-eyed female tour guide (oh the stars, the pearls) than in him. He turned spiteful and malicious, then. Blue blood indeed. Scott was about as royal as Jeff Foxworthy. She was constantly stunned by Scott’s callousness, the ease by which he boasted of the lives he destroyed, counting them up deliciously in his mind the way a serial killer might. Never mind that she had been doing the right thing for her entire life, often to ill consequence.

“In saving the world have you ever discovered how to save yourself?” her older brother Donnie had once asked.

So solid, predictable (reliable) Tara had held out her hand to scrabbling Scott, steeling herself for the yank in her shoulder. There was crunching noise of boots on shale and Tara turned around hoping to see red hair and green eyes, yet somehow knowing it wouldn't be her erstwhile hiking companion (and kissing buddy), it would be her murderer instead. Scott had latched on to Tara's hand, which was already slippery with (terror) sweat. The solid, blocky massive growth that was Terry, a farmer from Iowa, knelt down next to Tara, and even in her terror she couldn't let go of Scott's hand, even though it was Terry who had broken up their group and began hunting them like he hunted gophers on his farm. Terry had grinned, in a kind of feverish maniacal way that reminded Tara sharply of her father.

“Where are your homies, now?” Terry spat at Scott. Only then did Tara recall the story drunken Scott told of one of his ‘acquisitions’ of four years ago. Scott had turned a pretty penny in foreclosing the mortgage of a man's farm whose wife had died of cancer. He had turned a deaf ear to the man's pleas, save my farm, please!

Not a chance, not while there are five million dollar rings to display so arrogantly on well-pampered fingers, not when there's a piece of fluff in the sleeping bag and a wife at home. He showed no remorse then. He sure did now.

“I’m sorry!” Scott screeched in terror. “Please, I’ll give you anything! I’ll give you my ring!”

“Rings don’t buy wives,” Terry responded. In the madness of the moment, somehow so surreal, birds were chirping, wind was hissing, and Terry was pulling on a brand new set of brass knuckles. At seeing them, Tara wondered where on earth a farmer from Iowa would come up with such a thing (was it the five and dime or the pawn shop?). Scott’s eyes had flown wide, and then his whole face was a mess of pulp and bone.

Scott had screamed, loosing his hold on the tree, slipping through Tara’s fingers. Before Tara could turn away (could this really be happening?) she saw Scott’s skull make a blistering impact with the rock wall, a mini-bomb that exploded with fireworks (oh say can you see by dawn's early light) of arterial spray and gore.

“Chilled monkey brains,” Tara now croaked as she looked over at her unfortunate companion. The Indiana Jones movies had led her to believe that brains were pink. Scott’s were rather gray, with hideous streaks of red. “We named the dog Indiana.”

Tara knew she was going crazy. Nuts. Three fries short of a happy meal. Light's on but no one's home. Lost her marbles. Her fevered and pain-addled mind sifted through associations and memories, scattering them into her consciousness to wander every which way like a puff of dandelion on the wind. One thought she tried to bring back, time and again, was that of her tour guide, Willow Rosenberg. After Tara had first fallen, she had called and called for Willow, for anyone, really (but not the chipmunks, never the chipmunks, nor their unholy army). Dimwitted from dehydration and unrelenting heat, Tara forced her mind back and back again to her tour guide (kissing buddy), and the Indiana Jones movies.

“I have fond memories of that dog,” Tara continued quoting, just to keep her sanity, but instead of thinking of Indiana Jones she thought of Tripod, her girlhood Irish Setter. Tripod had lost a back leg in a fight with a coyote when Tara was six years old. That dog remained the one constant in Tara’s precarious childhood. The lies, the screams, the booze, the drugs, the man she was supposed to call father, Tara absorbed it all. When she was full to bursting with the hot vileness of it, she would run with Tripod into a nearby field (and thank goodness it wasn't corn, because evil always happens in the corn, just ask Stephen King or M Night Shyamalan) and spill her guts, vomiting up the blistering exchanges between her father and her family. The words could never char Tripod as they did her.

Poor, blind Tripod lived to be thirteen years old. His joints seized with arthritis, his eyes clouded over, his soft red hair generously frosted with white. He lost his life quite suddenly the day before Tara graduated high school, when Tara’s drunken father kicked him to death as he lay sunning himself on the porch.

Scott’s shirt was rucked up, sprinkled with blood and dirt. Tara could see his tattoo. The man had boasted easily enough that he got the tattoo in prison (and did that really impress the fluff named Janice?). He never told Tara what he was in the slammer for; after their thunderous altercation with a corn farmer from Iowa, Tara could now easily guess.

An iridescent beetle was crawling up Tara’s leg. Determined.

Tara hadn’t eaten since yesterday, since before the brass knuckles made a pulp sandwich of Scott's face.

She thought of Willow.

Her tour guide was a self-assured and confident middle-aged woman (oh the stars, the pearls), maybe only a year or two older than Tara herself. She was an accomplished woodsman (woodswoman?) and her backcountry tour of Mount Robson, Jasper, Alberta had garnered a five star rating with Hiking Outdoors magazine. Tara had been told to take a vacation (I believe the words were take a break or you're fired, Tara), and though she had plenty of money, Tara still shopped for her trip on Ebay, sniping the auction with less than ten seconds left and paying a grand total of fifty four dollars and twelve cents. American.

Sissy Canadian money, all colourful and stuff. Blue fives, purple tens, red fifties, brown hundreds with Prime Minster Borden on them.

Tara absently wondered if she should ask for a refund.

Now the beetle was navigating Tara’s thighs, heading to her stifling flannel shirt. She sniffed the shirt deeply. It still had Willow's scent on it. At dawn yesterday morning, hours before playboy Scott would roll himself out of his blankets complaining about the lack of service and the rock under his kidney all night, hours before a corn farmer from Iowa would pull out a brand new set of brass knuckles, Tara had crept from her sleeping bag to stand by the edge of the ice-cold lake. It took only a moment for the chill summer mountain air to penetrate her skin, but before she turned back to her pack she heard the crunch of boots on shale, and saw her tour guide walk up with a flannel shirt in her arms. She had been nervous to see the girl in daylight after their amorous exchange under the stars the night before.

“Aren't you cold?” Willow had asked.

Not anymore. Now the shirt was stifling her, but she wouldn't take it off. She needed the shirt more than she needed Indiana Jones. She needed Willow more than she needed the shirt. She needed rescue more than she needed Willow. Maybe Willow would rescue her.

But maybe Terry got to Willow, too. Did they cover how to escape corn-fed assassins in the tour guide manual?

“In saving the world have you ever discovered how to save yourself?”

The Mount Robson tour group was small. There was Julia and Frank, a young husband and wife from Portland, Oregon (and what kind of death did Terry serve up for them?). She was expecting their first baby, and they had always wanted to do an adventure like this. There was Terry, massive and eerily quiet, with hands that could probably crush rocks into powder, and no wonder now that one punch was all he needed to permanently rearrange Scott's face. There was Jim (momma never taught me to swim), a scrawny youth who looked every morning for stubble on his chin, and stopped hitting on Tara when she asked him. There was playboy Scott, with a piece of fluff on his arm named Janice, and Tara knew it wasn't his wife.

No self-respecting wife would be ordered around like Janice, attending to Scott's every need like a well-heeled dog.

They had spent four days so far in the backcountry, and Tara had supposed that their fate was in Willow's hands, in the crumpled map and the compass pinned to her shirt (and a radio and GPS in her pack). That was before she discovered that their fate was inexplicably linked to the untimely death of Terry's small wife, and the single dark and malignant baby spawned from her failing womb.

The beetle was now on Tara's shirt, waving it's long antennae as it curiously investigated it's new home. Tara watched it as if her life depended on it. It made for better viewing than the decaying man next to her, but the slight beetle entertainment did nothing for the smell of gangrene that wafted from either her putrefying legs or the husk of Scott.

Willow was easygoing and openly flirtatious. She obviously didn't care about the homophobic ire of playdude Scott and his playmate. Tara had slowly opened up to her, telling her about her work in youth centers, her dream of someday opening her own restaurant. In turn, Willow had shared her love of the backcountry, the thrill of conquering mountains, the peace of crisp evenings when the Milky Way was an open shower of light, pearls on the velvety throat of night. The others had spent that night quaffing beer (no Julia, you shouldn't be drinking) and comparing lifestyles of the rich and famous, a topic nakedly introduced by Scott the wonder puppet so he could show them all his ring. Willow didn't drink.

Neither did Tara.

“Don't be bashful, Tara, have a drink with us!”

No, because cold beer makes for hot nights of anything but love, nights of hot piss dribbling down pajama bottoms of terrified boys and girls, siblings caught together in a circus of neglect, nights of heated arguments and drunken fists that somehow always hit the right target, nights of hot blood running down tired female faces.

The next morning all the others, save Willow and Tara, spent time getting acquainted with the fragrant butt-hole of the latrine that Willow had built for them. Bowing to the porcelain god in the middle of the forest wasn't an experience Tara felt she needed to have on her resume. Not when she and Willow had a secret.

If only she had guessed Terry's secret, she wouldn't be staring at the beetle and contemplating how good it would taste with fries. She wouldn't be wondering if the putrid stench of death was coming from her or from Scott. She wouldn't be reflecting on that one kiss from Willow, believing it to be the last.

Because Terry, corn farmer turned psychopathic killer from Iowa (where cornbread is always served hot with honey-butter, freshly ground from corn fields, those evil corn fields where children served a boy named Isaac who had all the adults killed, or where aliens carved signs and were afraid of water, or where dead baseball players dreamed of one last home run in Fenway Park), he had a fish-filleting knife and he had no compunctions about using it on people. He was a pragmatic man, this farmer (choose the right tool for the right job), and poor Jim who looked liked he'd never had a girl in his whole life, he didn't get the knife or even the gun. When the slaughter began, he screamed in terror and began to run but everyone knows that when a corn-fed killer is after you (oh, the evil corn), you can never run fast enough, no, because the thudding feet are always right behind you and their crazed breath is all you can hear and you can't even look where you're going you're so petrified with fear, and dark wetness trails down your jeans and puddles warmly in your shoes until your shoes fill with chilled water from your headlong charge into the glacier fed lake (pearls and stars) and you never learned how to swim because your momma could never afford it and the psychopath comes to the shore and pelts stones at you until you drown, locked in the icy embrace of the eager water-accomplice.

And Tara followed Willow (because I just found her, yes I did, under the stars that looked like pearls on the velvety throat of night) at first, with Scott close behind them, bawling at Janice for her to keep up. Just like Jim, Janice discovered the futility of running from Implacable Murder, tripping over a fallen branch and falling with a gentle thud into the prickly blanket of dead pine needles. Tara made to stop, to go back, but Willow knew her duty. To the end, she knew her duty.

Tara didn't really need a refund, not really.

The beetle fluttered its wings as if to leave (no party here, boys, someone put out pretzels but there's no beer). And some part of might-as-well-be-dead Tara stopped her wandering thoughts long enough to lift a trembling hand to this iridescent beetle, clutched it's terrified form between thick and clumsy fingers, then dropped it's sacredness into an eager mouth, teeth crunching, throat gagging. Willow would have known what type of beetle it was, and could have recommended an appropriate side dish (chilled monkey brains).

“Tastes like chicken,” Tara muttered as she picked at her teeth. She would accept that cold beer now, though frankly another kiss from Willow would be far preferable.

It was a kiss with a promise. It was unspoken, but they negotiated the nonverbal contract before the very stars as witnesses. With the homophobe passed out, dead to the world (now as ever he should have been), Willow and Tara had slipped away to the edge of the glacier fed lake, their boots crunching mercilessly on the shale (like the crunchings of beetles between teethsies it was, gollum!). Willow took Tara's hand. Tara took Willow's lips.

She wished she still had them. Anything to take away the disconcerting bits of exoskeleton stuck in her teeth. She willed herself not to, knowing she had to preserve her meager water supply, but her mouth once again simply did whatever it felt like, this time descending to lick the silty moisture from a crevice within the rock. From the corner of her eye she could see sunlight glinting off the five million dollar ring. Why didn't Terry come down and take it? Blood money for his dead wife and child?

Because Tara also heard gunshots.

And no corn farmer from Iowa was self-assured enough to somehow climb down this treacherous rock fall, come face to face with the murdered man and the woman who always did the right thing, who was just in the wrong place at the wrong time, to filch a five million dollar ring from a sausage bloated finger. No witnesses, no trial, and Tara knew that one of those gunshots echoing from far and away must have been to his own temple.

It's what cowards did.

Like her father.

(You know better, Tara, you know what really happened.)

She only prayed that Willow wasn't on the receiving end of another shiny metallic package.

Because Willow knew her duty, to the end she knew her duty (wouldn't abandon her post even if the ship was sinking). And so when Janice tripped and fell, it was Willow who ran back to save her, telling Tara and Scott to keep on running, but Tara wasn't going to, as if she was going to leave Willow in the rampaging path of that Terry-bull, waving the red flag to draw him off and away from his real quarry (rings don't buy wives). But Scott grabbed her hand with that meaty and sweaty fist of his, and dragged her away with him, and with Willow screaming in her ears, “Run, Tara, run!” she complied unwillingly.

Her last glance at Willow should not have been through such terrified eyes. She should not have seen her girl's agonized expression, the millions of words that should have been shared over a course of a lifetime reflected in those magical green eyes.

Scott didn't know where he was going. He tried to stop before running off a cliff that suddenly loomed before them both. He tried, but he couldn't stop, he slid off the edge and found faint purchase in that tiny doomed tree (such a precarious and sublime existence, just like mine) and the hand of his hiking buddy who always did the right thing. Who was always reliable. Who never smoked, never drank, never stole.

The shrinking part of Tara that somehow stayed optimistic of rescue (she hadn't seen Willow die now had she, no she hadn't) devised ways of taking this ring to fix everything in her life. (Finders keepers, losers weepers.) It could fill her bank account which was shockingly empty for a thirty-five year old single professional (who always did the right thing!). It could buy a new home for her brother, though it was abundantly apparent, now as ever, that he didn't need Tara's money or her charity (how crafty to make it look like an accident, Donnie, really). It could prop up the rehab program she had worked so hard for. Because too many of those socially rejected youth ended up in jail. Too many ended up with unsmiling faces, cynicism boiled into their skin, and their new rank in this life identified by a tattoo.

The tattoo on Scott’s back was a dark blotch in a sea of bloated, shiny skin (oh the flesh puppet). It was a stylized dagger, point facing down, with the number three above the hilt and the number twenty-five on the blade. She should have asked what it meant.

“Shoulda, coulda, woulda,” Tara muttered, sniffing her shirt.

She should have known that the corn farmer, once started upon his murderous rampage, would leave no witnesses behind. What better place to fade out of the world, than in the vast expanse of the mountains? Where fatalities were almost expected? I swear it was a grizzly bear, Your Honour. That or the murderous cult of chipmunks (What are we going to do tonight, Brain? The same thing we do every night, Pinky. Try to take over the world!).

Tara soon realized that she, too, would simply disappear. She had figured it out rather quickly. Because after the brass knuckles smashed into Scott’s face, Terry kicked Tara over the cliff with as much remorse as swatting a fly (goin' gopher hunting). Tara landed on the bottom on her legs, which then snapped like dry twigs. Was she lucky or not, that she didn’t open her skull like Scott? (Such pretty mini-bombs, those fireworks…oh say can you see?)

Tara had looked up then and saw the calm face of her killer.

“Why, Terry, why?” she screamed.

“She was beautiful, Tara, beautiful like you. Even when the cancer hollowed her, she was still beautiful. And after she died I didn't have anything except the corn. And Scott took that away.” There was little remorse in Terry’s voice.

“But why me?” Tara choked.

“Because nice guys always finish last.” Terry had wandered away, then, before she heard one gunshot, another some time later, and another immediately following. Coward.

She was frantic about Willow. Those first fifteen minutes she screamed Willow's name, her voice sharpened to razor keenness because of the agony of her legs. Surely her guide got away. She was a woodswoman, for pity's sake. She was MacGyver, she could probably make a nuclear warhead from a pack of matches and duct tape. She could mount a rescue operation with toothpicks and pipe tobacco. Willow knew everything, for crying out loud.

See, Willow would know the name of the bird that screeched from the pine tree near Tara. She could name the cheerful bubbling creek that was only thirty feet away but infinitely far to a woman with broken legs and no hope. She probably recorded the sessions of the chipmunks as they met to discuss taking over the world. And the devious sound of the cricket that wasn't a cricket, it was a...

“Don't be bashful, Tara, have a drink with us!”

“Boreal Chorus Frog,” said the handy-dandy-lips-of-licorice-tour guide. Willow had been explaining it, sitting on a comfy couch in front of the crackling fire. That first night they stayed in the cabin before starting their two week odyssey into mind-numbing terror, their regular tour programming suddenly canceled by breaking news (And now, from somewhere deep in the woods, a corn farmer from Iowa goes on a murderous rampage, stay tuned for more details!). “Small enough to fit on the tip of your finger, loud enough to hear from far away.”

That was just before the music began, for Willow had pulled out a guitar, and had tuned it up and played a melody or two to the compliant and still nervous strangers around the fire. Tara had found her courage somewhere in the deep green depths of Willow's eyes, for she asked for the guitar next.

And played under the blazing eyes of Willow Rosenberg and the blazing heat of the crackling fire, so hot she felt like she was dying, but the music sustained her, flowing through her veins like a cooling flood, rippling out her fingers onto her guitar, the best she had ever played because she was playing with her soul, and the room was so hot, and Willow kept looking at her with crazed lust in her eyes and Tara soared in ecstasy, and the music was her food and drink, filling her up until she could feel nothing else except for far pain in her fingers for they almost bled. And Willow's eyes, her hot and blazing green eyes, immolating her from within, the soul in Tara's eyes met the soul in Willow's eyes and Tara played only for her. Only her.

She was so beautiful.

Did Willow live?

Of course she did. She was MacGyver. She could defeat the farmer with nothing but paper clips and her swiss army knife. And nunchuks. Definitely nunchuks.

Michaelangelo the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle had nunchuks. He was the one with the orange headband and the crazy sayings.

“Cowabunga, dude,” Tara whispered, with no one to hear her except the contemptuous wildlife (the chipmunks were recruiting). A dementia of dehydration and exhaustion fogged her mind.
Tara wished another beetle would come and hang out with her. Willow would be better. She should invite Willow over.

“Red rover, red rover, I call Willow over!” Tara chuckled madly.

“In saving the world have you ever discovered how to save yourself?”

Tara couldn't count the number of times she had been in a room with a severely damaged fellow human being. How she had sat there, a faint smile on her face, leaning forward with deliberate attention, her ears scorching with the endless tales of violence, abuse, and neglect. It was always Tara who listened. Day after day, week after week, month after month she sat benignly and let them, those feeble and tragic ones, the millstones of private despair drowning them, she let them pour their blackened viscous tar all over her until the taste of violence was always on her tongue and the stench of abuse penetrated her bones.

“Take a break, or you're fired, Tara.”

She always listened. Why did she always listen, and never speak?

So here, within spitting distance of death, Tara began to speak. Why was it that nice guys always finished last? Why was it she who had to listen, she always had to listen, to save those around her? Why did that one kiss with Willow rearrange her connection with this calamitous world?

“Am I worth saving?” Tara wondered aloud. “Apparently not.”

She tore her eyes away from the lecherous cadaver and looked down the mountain valley. She thought she could hear something approaching, something that didn't care about making noise. Maybe it was a bear. “Any bears here?” Scott had asked Willow (and Willow hadn't really been paying attention, had she Tara, since you were sitting next to her on the pine-needled ground and there was a blanket over your combined legs, yes there was, a thin flannel blanket that more than adequately covered the fact that your hand was tracing the inside of Willow's leg, following the sewn crease of her jeans up her hips, and you were delighting, weren't you, in the flush of red warmth in her face, delighting that you knew the reason for that flush but no one else did and it was that very night under the pearled throat of sky that you stood with her and ravished her with your lips, the kiss with a promise of more to come, and come.)

“Oh, yes,” Willow had stammered, “This is prime Grizzly bear habitat.”

So at the crashing, Tara sat up a little straighter, her muddled mind rejoicing. Being eaten by a bear was certainly a more desirable fate than death by dehydration and exposure. She knew she would not survive another night, oh no she wouldn't, not another night, no more waking in the morning with kiss-swollen lips and a tour guide that gave away flannel shirts.

But it was Tripod who staggered over to her, his awkward gait intensely familiar, his red fur coat gleaming in the brilliant light of day, but why oh why were his eyes so green? Tara didn't care, for Tripod came closer and closer, stumbling a bit over the uneven ground. Was he hurt? For the second time in months, maybe even years, Tara was truly happy (stars and pearls and licorice lips).

She was saved.

“So much has happened, Tripod,” she whispered. Tripod didn't sit to listen, he moved about her legs as if assessing the damage done.

The searing sun had begun running to the horizon as if night were a corn-fed farmer from Iowa with a fish-filleting knife and no compunctions on using it. Soon it would hide behind the jagged peaks of the Rocky Mountains and wait for a tour guide/McGyver to rescue it.

“I'm so sorry about what dad did to you,” Tara said. “You may be happy to learn that Donnie murdered him last year and made it look like an accident and collected all the insurance money and now lives like king of the trailer park. He tried to tell me dad committed suicide. What am I, brainless?”

Tripod didn't pause in his peculiar ministrations to her legs, barking his approval (I found her, repeat, I found her. Send me a helicopter as fast as you can, the sun is setting soon and she's in really bad shape).

“You know what, Tripod? I finally found her. Knew I was looking all my life for her and I found her here of all places. She's beautiful, Tripod. She's got incredible red hair, remarkably like yours, and her eyes were like jewels.”

(Tara, hang in there, rescue is coming.) Was Tripod weeping? Could dogs weep?

“I kissed her, Tripod. Under the starry sky in the middle of the wilderness I kissed her. I kissed her, and suddenly my old life just wasn't enough anymore. Throughout my career I saved over a dozen kids, and it used to be enough. Just barely enough.”

(You'll play the guitar for me again, Tara, yes you will. And you'll kiss me under the moonlight again, Tara. And when you do, you'll realize something. Finders keepers, losers weepers. I found you, too. I'll never let you go.)

Tara started to wonder if her body would soon be fodder for the bears and the crows, just like Scott's. In a dozen years, all that would remain of both of them would be the royal, five million dollar purple square cut diamond ring.

“I saved them,” Tara whispered.

(And I'll save you, Tara.) Tripod gave her a lick on her cheek, and from the dark funnel she was sliding into, she could hear a strange thwumping of rotor blades. The chipmunk army must be ready to stage their unholy coup.

“In saving the world have you ever discovered how to save yourself?” her older brother Donnie had once asked.

(She's over here, guys! Would you hurry?!)

Apparently so.

THE END
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Re: Phoenix Short Story Thread - Saved (Dec. 29)

Postby magicdanw » Sat Dec 29, 2007 9:33 pm

Beautiful story! Both calm and intense, erie at times, and deliciously demented in all the right places! Like Harlan Ellison, except with a happy ending! :) I loved it! :D
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