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Re: Random Bits - Willow's List - 03/03/2010

Postby guitar_girl » Thu Apr 14, 2011 12:01 pm

WOW! So cute! I really loved the whole thing, it was just so amazing! I really wanna know everything that happened in between the emails!
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Re: Random Bits - Willow's List - 03/03/2010

Postby wayland » Fri Apr 15, 2011 4:43 pm

I love Willow's List, it's one of my favourites.

The writing is very good. I'm amazed how you can convey so much of their personalities in just a series of short emails.
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Re: Random Bits - Willow's List - 03/03/2010

Postby JustSkipIt » Sun Apr 17, 2011 9:38 am

guitar_girl - Thanks so much.

wayland - I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was worried that the e-mail story was an overused thing but people seemed to like it.
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Re: Random Bits - Willow's List - 03/03/2010

Postby JustSkipIt » Wed May 11, 2011 3:42 pm

Story Title - The Three of Us

Part - Part 1 of 2 or 1 of 3

Author - JustSkipIt

Feedback - Does anyone ever say no?

Spoilers - For real?

Rating - PG-13 for this part.

Glossary - I don't know how common the word mulligan is if you're not a golfer (or former golfer).

You don't want to Fall and not be able to get up.

Judiasm has very specific mourning traditions. Of course these will vary depending on the denomination (Orthodox, Conservative, Reform, etc.) and the observance level of the mourners.



Willow stared at the phone as she set it in the cradle. The avocado green color might not have even been in style back when the phone had been installed in this community center a few hundred years ago. Ok, the phone was probably only 40 years old but the color made it distinctive. She pondered this as she stared at the offending appliance. For the moment it kept her from processing the information she had just received.

"Willow! Are you ready? We've got line of people down the block and..." Joe, Dr. Hampton, cut off as he got a look at his partner's face. "Willow? Dr. Rosenberg? What happened?"

Willow turned slowly to look at her friend. Her voice broke and tears filled her eyes. "My brother..."

--

Tara shifted the bag over her shoulder as she fumbled with the spare key. She knocked lightly on the door even as she realized sadly that there was no reason to do so. Trey wasn't home. He wouldn't be home. Ever. The key slid in the lock easily and she turned it before stepping into the apartment and letting the screen door close quietly. She pushed the door closed behind her and carried her bag into the kitchen. "Coco? Coco? Here girl. I've come to feed you. Now... how are you doing?" She reached over to pet the cat who had jumped onto the kitchen stool as the pet purred in approval of the movement. "Ok, let's see. You need some new water and some dry food. And I think Trey... Trey liked to give you wet food in the evening right?" She pulled the can out of her bag and had just pushed down the handle on the can opener when the door to Trey's bedroom opened.

Neither woman could say for sure who screamed first. Tara dropped the half-opened can of food on the counter as her mind simply would not register the slight woman wrapped very insecurely in a towel and wielding one of Trey's commendation plaques in one hand as the other attempted to hold up the towel. Willow screamed as she realized that she had not imagined hearing a strange noise while in the shower. A strange noise that had caused her to jump from the shower without rinsing the shampoo from her hair and which now resulted in the suds beginning to run into her eyes. Without stopping her screaming, she dropped the plaque and tried to rub the soap from her eyes. For her part, Coco ran across the kitchen counter, bounced off the pass-through counter, shot through the living room, and dove under the bed where she stayed for the rest of the day.

"What? Who? What?" Willow stopped talking to try and gather her breath giving Tara a chance to speak.

"Willow? Willow um... Rosenberg?"

The redhead tilted her head to the side. "Right. Ok. Willow. Yes. You're?"

"You look just like your brother. I m-mean ... not just like. So like. Obviously you're a w-w-woman and ... um... " She motioned toward the other woman's towel.

At the motion Willow attempted to refasten the towel around her chest. "We're twins. I mean we were twins. I... I don't know." She took a deep breath as tears filled her eyes noticing that the other woman was also starting to cry.

Tara continued staring at the other woman. If not for being different genders and the large scar running down the left side of Willow's face they were virtually the same. She would have known her best friend's sister anywhere. "I just came to f-feed Coco." She motioned lamely toward the counters and bed.

"Coco! I tried Blacky, Puff ball, Fluffy, Puss, Boots, even Alice and Cindy and Hortense... I mean but how do you know with a cat? You know? It's not like they come even if you guess the name right." She wiped at her forehead again.

Tara refastened the can onto the opener. "Do you want to go back to your shower?" Willow nodded. Before she could leave the room Tara called out behind her. "Do you w-want me to go?"

Willow turned and studied the other woman for a moment. "Would you mind staying?" The blonde just nodded.

Fifteen minutes later, the redhead emerged from the bedroom to find her brother's apparent friend sitting on a kitchen stool fiddling with a chopstick she had obviously picked up out of a canister on the counter. "Thanks for staying." She crossed the room to look at the other woman, noting that her eyes were red and puffy as if she had spent the last fifteen minutes crying just as Willow had done. "I'm Willow Rosenberg, Trey's sister. But I guess you already knew that."

Tara nodded and extended her hand. "Tara Maclay. Trey and I work together. Worked t-together. I don't know. He was my f-friend." She dropped the redhead's hand, rubbed her stomach in what Willow assumed was a nervous gesture, and looked at the counter again. "We didn't know you were coming. I ... my apartment doesn't allow pets so I've been trying to figure out about Coco."

Willow pulled out a chair and sat down. "I... The embassy called. I got a ride to the airport and a taxi from the one here and the manager let me in. I don't know that any of it seems real yet. I mean two days ago my partner and I drove into a new village and the mayor says he has a message that I have to call the embassy and I do ... and now I'm back in the States."

The blonde nodded. "You're in shock."

Willow laughed, half-way between a laugh and a smirk. "Is that what it's called? I don't think I understand how this happened. I mean... aren't there police here? I've been in South America for three years and I was safer than my brother in California. How does that happen?" She slammed her hand on the counter. "I'm sorry. I don't mean to yell at you and I'm not mad at you." She took a deep breath. "I haven't eaten. I got a ride on a plantain truck to the airport 36 hours ago so I had plenty of plantains but since then I had some peanuts and five or six cokes on the plane."

Tara stood and put her hand on the redhead's elbow. "I know a really good diner near here. Trey and I went there all the time."

Willow allowed herself to be stood up and led toward the door. "Are you his girlfriend?"

Tara blushed. "Uh... very the no. Just f-friends."

Willow shrugged as she followed the other woman through the door, taking the opportunity for a very inappropriate glance at the blonde's ass. "He must have been blind," she muttered as she pulled the door closed behind them.

---

Tara could only stare as she watched Willow eat. The redhead had gone through her first cheeseburger in about 3 minutes before ordering another one and was finishing off a plate of fries. Between bites she was eating a slice of cherry pie with ice cream and she was drinking coffee from a mug while downing a glass of coke. The blonde picked at the pita bread, celery, carrots, and hummus in front of her as she attempted to get a little protein.

The redhead wiped at her mouth with a napkin and noticed the look on the other woman's face. "Uh... I'm sorry. I'm a pig. I just... I haven't had food like this for three years, 2 months, 17 days, and ..." she looked at her watch... "9 hours give or take." She glanced down at the table in embarrassment, not wanting to offend her brother's good friend. In addition to wanting to hear about Trey and what had happened, the blonde was quite attractive. Hot even. So her stomach was a little poochy. It wasn't any big deal and sometimes Willow liked a little meat on a woman. Not that she'd had much of a chance to explore any preferences in the last few years. She mentally admonished herself for objectifying this woman so thoroughly before speaking. "Can you tell me what happened? I mean I got an e-mail from Trey last week. He said he had some exciting news and wanted to speak to me so I could hear his voice. Then the embassy and ... I mean. How can he be gone?"

Tara took a deep breath as she began to relay the information she'd heard from first her manager and later the police detective who came to the office. In short, Trey had made a home visit and determined that he would need to file a report and then return for a follow-up visit. He'd filed the initial findings from his car and then driven around the corner to get a soda at a convenience store. When he'd come out the suspected abuser was waiting for him. Both the Sunnydale Police and California Department of Safety were investigating the murder and the perpetrator was being held without bail. It was the first time the Child Protective Services of Sunnydale had ever lost an investigator and the entire staff was in a state of shock even with the counselors who had been brought in to talk to them. When she finished speaking, Tara wiped her eyes again with a napkin and looked down to notice Willow's hand in her own. "He... we was a good man and he was t-trying to make a d-difference."

Willow just nodded as she wiped at her own tears. "I have to go meet with a detective Harris in the morning. He said I have to... identify... you know."

Tara nodded and took a deep breath. "Would you like m-me to go with y-you?"

Willow looked at her hands as she considered the offer. "I'm ... I think I can do it. But can you... I don't know help me with the service? I know he has a folder with instructions but we didn't discuss what was in it. I mean where does he want to be buried? I need to call a rabbi. I mean his rabbi. I know he only went on the high holy days but ... " She stopped speaking and lay her head in her hands as she started to cry again.

Tara watched the redhead for a moment before moving to the bench seat across the table and sliding in next to her, wrapping her arms around the smaller woman. She was aware of the looks of other patrons but didn't care and felt grateful that the waitress kept her distance. When the moment, which had turned into minutes, had passed, Tara silently returned to her side of the table.

"Do you need to contact any family?"

Willow wiped at her eyes. "I guess my aunt Zelda. Other than that... our father died when we were kids, mom a few years ago, and now Trey." She motioned at herself. "I guess the great Rosenberg line will die with me." Tara raised an eyebrow in question but didn't voice it. "I had an accident ... once."

"Oh."

The redhead shrugged and pulled some bills from her pocket to drop them on the ticket lying on the side of the table. As Tara began to do the same she quickly waved off the offer. "Please. It's not often that I get the opportunity to buy a beautiful woman a plate of hummus and vegetables that she hardly touches."

Tara felt the blush rising in her cheeks and quickly looked at her hands. "I wasn't very hungry." She looked back up at the redhead and motioned toward the door. "It's getting late."

--

Respecting Jewish tradition to conduct a burial very quickly, Willow had done just that. At the temple service she had sat in the front row with only her aunt Zelda and prayed the Kaddish with fervor as if it could actually bring back her brother.

Tara observed all this as she had observed the determined woman for the past 30 hours. True to her word, Willow had called Tara after meeting with Detective Harris and signing the forms to have Trey's body released. The blonde had helped her make calls as well as helping compose the obituary, a process that had brought no small amount of tears to either woman. Occasionally the blonde thought her friend's sister was flirting with her but other times she seemed to withdraw into herself in such a way that she almost thought she had imagined it. Trey had never mentioned that his sister might be gay but maybe he didn't know or maybe she wasn't. The Temple service was followed by a graveside internment and announcement of the hours for Shiva over the coming days.

Finally seeing that Willow stood alone at the graveside, Tara approached. "Can I drive you home, Willow?" The redhead nodded and waited for Tara to begin walking before falling into step next to her.

Willow sighed. "We go home. Eat bagels and hard boiled eggs. Pray three times a day. I already covered the mirrors and pictures. It's a whole thing..."

The blonded opened Willow's car door for her and motioned toward her torn blouse. "And that?"

Willow barely opened her eyes as she settled into the seat. "It's ... " she trailed off as Tara slid into her own seat, bumping against the steering wheel as she did to, then placing her hand on the redhead's knee. Willow looked at the hand as if she didnt' understand how it had appeared there before raising her eyes to look at Tara. For a moment the blonde was tempted to move her hand but she didn't and after a few seconds she felt Willow's hand covering her own. "There are lot of rules."

Tara nodded.

"It ... makes it ... I don't know. Structured. Easier I guess."

The blonde nodded again. "And what after? Will you go back Dentists without Borders?"

Willow shrugged. "I haven't decided. My commitment was over months ago but they're always short and I just stayed on." She looked down at her hands. "But maybe it's time to start my new life here. Or somewhere. I guess I could move anywhere." She shrugged again.

Tara's voice was almost a whisper. "I think I might miss you if you did." Willow didn't respond and they rode the remainder of the way home in silence.

--

Tara closed a file folder with a sigh and looked at the clock, surprised to see that it was after 5:00. She quickly locked up the files on her desk, shut down her computer, and turned off the desk light. After gathering her bag and car keys she stopped at Trey's desk to run her fingertips over his computer, clock, chair, pictures, plants and other belongings in what had become a sort of ritual.

"Good night, Tara!"

"Good night, Mac!" Tara always found comfort in knowing that most nights when she left the office her boss was still there. He actually worked and actually liked his work. It made it easier for the entire department to have a supervisor who understood and supported their work and right now she knew his job was particularly challenging. She settled into her car and took a deep breath. It was hard not to think of Trey constantly. So many times they had left the office together, gone for a walk or to get dinner or to one of their houses to throw together some dinner and watch a video. She had frequently tried to convince him that he needed to get out and meet women more often but his response of Touche always stopped that argument and they had enjoyed their friendship. It wasn't that they didn't date - both did but they also enjoyed time alone or with each other. She laughed as she remembered a particularly disastrous double date with identical twins.

The ringing of her phone interrupted the memories of their "date with idiots" as Trey had dubbed it. "Hello?"

"I don't know how I'll manage to eat all this food."

Tara smiled immediately as she recognized Willow's voice. In the three days since the funeral service, she had gone by the apartment only once. Having arrived during the recitation of the Mourners Kaddush she felt somewhat awkward and clearly out of place and only stayed a few minutes among Willow and the seven men and three women praying together. "Is that your best opening line, Willow?"

She heard the redhead laugh and then exhale. "Can I try again?"

Tara nodded like you do when you are on the phone but feel like you're really there. "Please do."

"Hi, Tara! I was wondering if you wanted to come over and have dinner.... Um... with me?"

The blonde smiled as she put in her earpiece and started the car. "You know... I just happen to be in the mood for casseroles. Do you have anything in the pasta genre?"

Willow laughed back. "I can offer you an assortment of pasta. Pasta salad, Pasta and peas, Pasta and meat sauce. Pasta and Eggplant Parmesian. Also salad and green beans and brocolli and a nice bottle of wine or two. Ok, I went out and bought the wine but the rest just keep showing up. I gave some to the woman who lives next door."

"Paula."

"Huh?"

Tara turned right at the light and continued talking. "Trey's next-door neighbor. The one on the right with 3 kids? Paula."

"Oh. She told me her name but I forgot it. I have met so many people in the past few days. So I can hear you driving. Are you coming here? You never actually said yes."

"I'm on the way. Do you want me to stop and pick anything up? Ice? Garlic Bread?"

She could practically hear the smile over the phone. "I have everything I could need except a beautiful woman to share it with." Before the blonde could answer Willow joked. "Maybe I should have opened with that line."

Tara pulled into the parking lot across from the apartment. "That's the second time you've called me beautiful, Willow."

"Is it a problem?"

The blonde looked up to see that Willow must have seen her car arrive as the redhead now stood in the doorway holding the phone to her ear and waving. "Definintely not a problem, Will."

"Good." As Tara smiled as she saw that Willow was watching her climb the stairs. They had both disconnected the call. "Hey you!"

"You got a bike?" Tara nodded toward the bike chained to the railing in front of the apartment.

Willow closed the door behind the blonde as they both went inside. "Yeah. It's my big splurge so far. I mean I have most of my earnings from the past few years plus savings from both my parents's life insurance plus I'm apparently getting part of Trey's life insurance. I mean... why did he even have life insurance? He was a young single guy. Anyway, I got a registered letter today and it had an amount in it so I could afford a bike or I guess 100 bikes or something. You know? Plus it's wierd being in an apartment where I don't own anything at all. It's sort of like I'm just stepping into my brother's life." By the time she took a breath she had reached the kitchen and was pulling casserole dishes from the refrigerator. "Why don't you look in those or poke your index finger in or whatever while I open this wine." She held up the bottle.

Tara set down her purse and lifted the foil on a few dishes. "The lasagna looks good. No wine for me though, please."

Willow looked up from where she was pouring wine into the first of two wine glasses. "Really? Um... Coke? Sprite? Grape juice?"

The blonde picked up the spoon and began dishing a portion of lasagna onto her plate. When Willow pointed at it and then her plate, she did the same with the second plate. "You h-have grape juice?"

Willow recorked the wine and reached into the refrigerator to pull out the bottle. "Sure. For the blessings. I mean you never know when people will bring kids to the Shiva or alcoholics or whatever..."

Tara smiled warmly and pushed the plates toward the redhead who started warming them in the microwave and then replacing the other dishes in the refrigerator. "Trey always told me that Jewish kids drank wine in their baby bottles."

The redhead laughed. "Some do. Most drink grape juice until they're 8 or 9 and then toast with wine." She walked around the kitchen bar and handed Tara the wine glass of grape juice holding up her own. "Here's to beautiful women who say yes to dinner even when I have to play a mulligan on my opening line."

They clinked their glasses together and each took a sip. "Does it happen a l-lot?" Tara realized how jealous that sounded and could feel her ears starting to burn. She looked down at the floor as Willow leaned back to take a seat on one of the bar stools.

The redhead took another slow sip of wine and tilted her head as if studying her dinner companion. "Would it bother you if it did?"

Tara looked down at her skirt, picking off an invisible piece of lint. "Yes," she finally whispered.

She felt Willow touch her fingers and then entwine just the tips of their fingers. "Good." Tara looked up at the tentative smile on Willow's face. "No. It doesnt' happen often at all."

Before Tara could say anything the timer on the microwave sounded. Willow set down her wine glass and walked around the bar to check the food to ensure it was warm enough. "C-can I do anything else?"

Willow put one of the plates back in the microwave and pulled forks, knives, and spoons from the drawer just underneath it, handing them across the passthrough. "I thought we could sit on the balcony. It's the best part of the apartment." Realizing that Tara wasn't stepping up to take the utensils but was standing to the side of the bar she walked around and handed her the silverware. "Are you ok?"

Tara took the silverware and smiled broadly. "I can't remember having been better. Well... except for ... you know, Trey?"

Willow shrugged. "I think it might only hurt forever."

Tara looked away, the moment feeling a little too raw for them both. "I'll just set the..." She stood on the balcony for a few minutes thinking of the many times she and her best friend had enjoyed the view. The microwave finished and she expected Willow to come out. Then she realized the the other woman was giving them both a few minutes to themselves. Just as wiped her eyes she looked up and there the redhead was.

"This balcony is the best part of this apartment." She set the plates on the table then dashed back inside to grab the wine glasses. "I can see why he picked it. You hardly even know that you're in a city."

The both took their seats and tasted the food. "This is really good," Tara murmured. "Do you know who made it?"

Willow shrugged again and Tara realized with some affection that it was a all-purpose sort of movement. Like when she didn't know something or didn't want to say something. "It has a name on the pan but I don't know..." She took a deep breath. "It's weird." Tara nodded, assuming the redhead would continue. "I mean I've never met anyone before. He had this whole life. People from Temple and work and seven guys he played basketball with on the weekends came by. A huge Rastafarian who smelled like he toked up in the parking lot came over yesterday with a bucket of daises and six dozen golf balls and said that Trey saved his life. Three priests have visited. Catholic priests?" Tara nodded. "A girl came by in a shirt that barely qualified as clothing and sat down on the couch and cried and cried and then left without saying a word." She took a bite of the food. "And I'm sort of... visiting his life. Sitting Shiva. Mourning. Following the rules." She chuckled. "Does my hair look stupid?"

Tara laughed. "It looks quite adorable actually."

Willow smiled and stopped the fork half-way to her mouth. "I'll have to take your word for it. Bathing only for cleanliness, no mirrors, no hair product..."

"It sounds hard."

Willow shook her head. "No. I mean... I don't want to complain. It's not hard. Trey being gone is hard. This is just mourning. Just following rules. It's structure and I like structure. I appreciate structure."

Tara looked down to note that she had cleaned her plate. It was probably the best meal she'd eaten in a week. "I read through some things online about the rules." She wasn't sure if she could tease the other girl but then she realized that she would have opened with this were she talking to Trey. "... no sex for 30 days?"

Willow nearly choked on her bite of lasagna but quickly took a drink of wine. She noticed the teasing look on the other woman's face. "You don't know the half of it. My last three years have not exactly been a hot bed of... well hot beds. Or maybe they have but not in that oh... so... good ...way." She breathed the last four syllables.

Tara smirked at the very sexy and teasing answer. "What way was that?"

Her companion laughed as she stood up and took both their plates into the kitchen. "If you don't know, I'm not going to tell you again." She poured herself another glass of wine and then looked at the woman who had followed her inside. "Maybe I could show you in another ... 24 days or so."

Her flirtatious efforts were rewarded as the blonde coughed had to take a drink of the glass of water sitting on the table. "So you know what's weird?"

"Real Housewives of ... shows? The popularity of Lady Gaga? Performance Art?"

Tara laughed and sat at the bar as Willow loaded the dishes into the dishwasher. "Trey never mentioned that you were family." She she saw the puzzled look on the redhead's face she continued. "I m-mean most people they only need like ... 2 seconds with someone and if they know two lesbians they're like... 'hey, you should meet my sister/aunt/roommate's dog's littermate's owner and so on and so forth... Trey never even said you were gay let alone any of the standard 'you should meet my hot Dentist twin.'"

"Are there a lot of homeless people here?"

Tara scrunched up her face. "Yes but he never tried to set me up with them."

Willow laughed. "Want to go help me give them this food? We could wrap it up in foil and rubber band some plastic forks to it and make their night." As she spoke she began opening and closing drawers until she found a tube of aluminum foil and pulled it from the drawer.

"Ok." Tara reached across to put the aluminum foil between them. "Why don't you pull out everything you want to give away and two spatulas and we'll wrap it up."

Willow did as asked. "He set me up with this woman named Blanche when we were in college."

"Blanche? A lesbian named Blanche?"

"I think she was the prototype. Maybe a one-off." Willow set the last container on the counter and the two women began cutting and packaging the food. "It was a disaster. Actually to say that the date was a disaster would be an insult to disasters. You remember the Titanic? How it hit an iceberg and a few thousand people froze and drowned and Leo DiCaprio froze to death but Kate Winslet managed to get on a boat and steal a huge honkin diamond? That voyage was basically a success compared to this date."

"So not good?"

Willow pointed her spatula at the blonde. "Look here missy... I probably screamed at him for 2 hours after that. I made him vow that he would never set me up again. Never even mention that I was gay to anyone again. Never 'hey, you should meet my hot Dentist sister.' Never ever ever. Also I made him pay to get the tattoo removed."

Tara laughed. "Really? A tattoo? Of what? Wait! I want to guess. A butterfly? No, tiger? Barbed wire and flames? Spongebob Squarepants? Wait.... you're kidding about the tattoo, right?"

"I think I saw a card board box somewhere." She wandered into the bedroom and came back after a minute with a box which she began loading with the food. "Yes, I'm kidding about the tattoo but not about the date. He was duly admonished which is why he never sent me an e-mail saying 'so my best friend is this smoking hot social worker. You two should meet for what I'm very inappropriately sure would be hot monkey lovin'...'" Before Tara could respond Willow practically shouted. "Socks!"

"Yes, socks to you too."

"No," the redhead smiled as she went into the bedroom again and emerged with two packages of tube socks. "I saw these earlier. He must have just gotten them." She tossed them into the box with the food. Then noticing the look on Tara's face she asked. "You think it's ok, right?"

Tara nodded. "It's ... totally ok. It's just ... we went shopping last Sunday and he was teasing me about shopping 'like a girl' so I said he had to buy some clothes. He got those even though he didn't need them but he said they were a 'guy thing.'"

Willow chuckled. "That's my brother." She picked up the box. "Do you mind driving since I've had 2 glasses of wine and you know the city better than I do?"

Tara stood and picked up her keys. "I don't know. That grape juice is really hitting me hard. Are you sure you w-want to take your chances with me?"

"Maybe not for another 24 days but I'm definitely open to it." The redhead bumped her hip playfully against Tara's as she walked by her toward the door.

Tara chuckled as she picked up her keys. "You know just because your brother was my best friend, it doesn't make me a sure thing." She held the door open as Willow carried the large box out and then locked it behind herself. Before Willow could answer she looked at the key. "Do you want this key back? I m-mean I've had Trey's key for years but I hardly know you. Maybe you don't want a ... sort of s-stranger to have a key to your apartment."

Willow leaned the box against the railing for a few seconds as she adjusted her hold on it. "Oh I think you should keep it. I mean we've already established that I don't know anyone here. What if I fall and can't get up?" She took one hand off the box to pantomime reaching for a phone that she couldn't reach much to Tara's amusement.

"Please put your hands back on the box and be careful down the stairs, Willow, so you don't fall and can't get up in the next minute."

Willow giggled as she went down the stairs, reaching the bottom quickly and stopping to wait for her companion. As they walked it occurred to her that she didn't actually know what Tara did for a living. "Can you charge this time at work?"

Tara opened the passenger door and opened it for Willow who placed the box on the floor and then got into the car so her feet were on either side of it. "Thanks, Tare."

"Is that your w-way of asking what I do for a living?"

Willow waited for the blonde to join her in the car and shrugged again. "You didn't find it smooth and charming?"

Tara started the car and backed out of the parking space. "I'm a caseworker. It's the same thing that Trey did. Usually I'm in the field maybe 50% of the time but right now... we're all driving desks and starting to drive each other a little crazy."

Willow nodded. "I've never worked in an office. I'm not sure if I'll be able to do it."

Tara pulled up to a stop sign. "I'll be right back." Willow stepped out of the car, taking a few packages of food to the teens she saw on the corner. She talked to them for a few minutes then came back. "They said that if we take the third right we can find basically a whole city of hungry people. Are you ok with that?"

Tara nodded and waited for the redhead to buckle her seat belt, then pulled away from the curb. "So where did you practice in the jungle?"

"It looks like right up there." Willow motioned toward a group of kids on the sidewalk. She stepped out carrying the box, telling Tara that she would be right back. As the blonde watched she saw the woman hand the box over to a tall boy who held it as she handed around the packs of food and socks. Word must have gotten out because within minutes a crowd of 15-20 people were taking the food packets before fading back down the nearest alley or into a doorway again. She visited with the kids for a few minutes before Tara saw her reach into her pocket and hand something to one of the girls before returning to the car. She got back into the car, waving at the kids and pulled the door shut. "Sometimes a community center, village leader's hut, we had a van that we traveled in and it was equipped but it was also really stuffy and you could smell the gas that another dentist was using. Occasionally we would just set up in a square."

The blonde laughed as she drove. "Do you always do that?"

"That depends on what I just did."

"Well I asked you a question and you got out of the car and were gone for 5 minutes and came back and started up the conversation as if you hadn't been gone at all."

"So what you're saying is that while I was gone you were watching my ass and you forgot what question you had asked?"

"Willow!" Tara sputtered as if she had never been accused of such a thing. "I refuse to answer on the grounds that ... "she glanced at the clock on her dashboard, "... it's after 10:30 and I have no obligation to answer."

Willow smirked. "You should be warned that failure to answer can be taken as a positive response and will be taken as such because it would make me happy." She saw the smile on the blonde's face. "And yes, I have that habit. I guess you'll get used to it?"

Tara nodded. "I'll certainly try." She pulled into the apartment parking lot. "What did you give the girl?"

"What?"

"The girl on the corner."

"Oh... all my money. I mean ... I don't know. Maybe she's going to get high or drunk or something. But maybe not. She said she wanted to call her mom and get a bus ticket home. Maybe she really will."

Tara turned off the car and reached out to pat Willow's knee. "I think you're a truly good person."

The redhead laughed. "Well, that's a relief."

"No. I mean it. I l-like it." She looked down again, letting the moment pass. "I should go home. I have work tomorrow and you have Shiva."

Willow nodded but didn't make any move to get out of the car. "Hey Tara?" Tara looked up at her and Willow looked like she was considering what to say. "I know you were ... um ... uncomfortable the other day but would you come Thursday morning? We'll break Shiva right after the morning Kaddish and ... you know... it gives me another chance to share a meal with a beautiful woman." She smiled hopefully.

Tara looked down again, feeling her ears start to burn. "You d-don't have to do that."

"Do what? Invite you to break Shiva? I just thought... I mean you seem to be Trey's best friend and I can't say he'd want you there because it's bagels and lox and cream cheese but still... it ends the Shiva." She wrung her fingers together. "Is it because it's a work day? It has to break when it breaks but maybe your boss would understand. I met him yesterday and he seemed pretty alright."

Tara looked back up at the fast-talking redhead. "I ... that's not what I meant. I'll come to the ... thing. I just meant you don't have to keep giving me compliments. Calling me beautiful and all that." She looked down again. "I feel a little like you're t-teasing me."

Willow was silent for a minute before reaching across the car to lift Tara's chin so she could look into her eyes. "There is no part of me that's teasing you. I think you're beautiful and I can stop saying it if it makes you uncomfortable but I won't stop thinking it just like you're not going to stop looking at my ass."

Tara giggled and pulled away, playfully shooing the redhead from her car with her hand. "I'll see you on Thursday, Willow."

Taking her cue, Willow opened the car door and studied the blonde for a few seconds before standing up. "Thanks for coming over tonight, Tara. I really enjoyed it."

Tara smiled and waited to call out after the other woman. "Me too, Willow. And not just because I got free food and grape juice and got to watch your ass."

Hearing her, Willow wagged said ass playfully then took the stairs two-at-a time, before unlocking the door and turning to wave to a watching Tara.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby BeMyDeputy » Wed May 11, 2011 5:16 pm

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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby taranwillow4ever » Wed May 11, 2011 6:07 pm

I really liked this story. You have such a gift for dialogue. I've missed reading your writing. I liked all the sitting shiva details. Thanks for writing.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby arsyadriani » Wed May 11, 2011 6:46 pm

great..I totally forgot about my excel and stuff :buried I lost track of time..the conversations seem sooo real and sooo can't wait for the part 2..or 3.. :grin
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby sadie » Fri May 13, 2011 4:16 am

arsyadriani wrote:great..I totally forgot about my excel and stuff I lost track of time..the conversations seem sooo real and sooo can't wait for the part 2..or 3..


So... that ^

They're so cute together, despite both their tragic loss... I'm glad there will be an update (or two?)...

ETA:

Forgot to say I really enjoyed the email story as well. The cutest flirting!! Of course they'd hit it off rightaway as soon as they'd meet, but I'm glad you decided to keep that meeting in email form instead of switching to 3rd person. I'm sure the readers can fill in the details, hehe
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby wayland » Fri May 13, 2011 4:36 pm

Great to see a new story from you. The details of shiva are interesting and its strictures provide an opportunity for them to get to know each other, beyond the fact of their shared loss.

I do like the way you write Willow and Tara. The banter between them is crisp and witty.

Tara nodded like you do when you are on the phone but feel like you're really there
I loved this observation, it’s so true.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby Ariel » Sat May 14, 2011 10:13 am

Deb,

This was so smoothly and beautifully done. Polished. Not a word out of place.

More than that, I'm sitting here with tears in my eyes after reading the ending.

You created the reality, the layers. They met and Willow didn't know that Tara was six weeks pregnant, the variations in their routine, their sense of shared times, years passing. Very ably and beautifully done.

The sex. hot Hot HOT HOT!!! but the key ingredient to making it so incendiary is the love behind it. And I love Willow putting herself out there to offer not 362 more days but the accurate fractional amount! You see nerdy Willow and vulnerable Willow and brave Willow and again, it's so touching.

All I can say is thanks. :flower

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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby Mrs. Pineapple » Sun May 15, 2011 8:19 am

Loved this story! Did I mention that I really like your short-stories? Lately I have been a little lazy on the feedback, but I wanted to come and say some things about this because it's really good.

Firstly, I really liked the setting. I recently lost my favorite uncle and it's always amazing to see how people who seem to have little in common can bond in their mourning. Of course we know that in the case of W/T, it's always a bit more...

I loved how you interlaced light conversation and even slight flirting with the more heavy feelings of losing a colleague/brother.

I'm curious to hear about Willow's accident. I'm sorta unclear about how that would mean that the 'great Rosenberg line' would die with her, but maybe I just read that wrong.

More things that I liked:
"So you know what's weird?" "Real Housewives of ... shows? The popularity of Lady Gaga? Performance Art?"

Made me think about the rooftop-conversation in 'Listening to fear'. Wether that was an intended reference or not, it was still funny *giggles*
"Yes, socks to you too."

Hehe. Sounds like something I'd say.
"I refuse to answer on the grounds that ... " she glanced at the clock on her dashboard, "... it's after 10:30 and I have no obligation to answer."

Making up rules to evade embarrassing questions. Again, sounds like something I'd do (if I was as smooth as I'd want to be, at least :p)

Keep the updates going, please! Looking forward to the next part.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby little.hesperides » Wed May 25, 2011 7:47 pm

Ooh! So I don't have much time here (got the mother of all storms coming my way), but I'm really enjoying this story so far. The dialogue is seamless, and I love the subtle (and not so subtle) flirting. :) I'm interested in Jewish culture, and while I've had a friend sit Shiva before (when her dad died), I didn't know an awful lot about it. Thanks for some insight.

Also....as a twin, stories about losing, you know, the other twin make me incredibly nervous. Might as well be losing half of yourself.

In any case, most definitely looking forward to more!
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby JustSkipIt » Fri May 27, 2011 3:57 am

Hmmm. I sort of thought there would be more feedback but ok… I’m working on part 2.

Katie – Congratulations! Anything to add?

taranwillow4ever – You are so very welcome. I am trying to be relatively true to Shiva. Depending on level of religiosity, there are some even more severe rules. These are sort of the basics that one might follow. There will be more.

arsyadriani – Thanks for posting. I don’t think I get this comment:
I totally forgot about my excel and stuff :buried I lost track of time.

But I’m glad you liked the conversation.

Sadie – Yes, I’m working on part 2.
Thanks for the comments on the e-mail story. I’d never written one before but it was quite fun.

wayland – Thanks for commenting. I actually have a real appreciation for Jewish mourning rituals and rules. I believe that they date back to an agrarian society in which it was really necessary to sort of handle burial and mourning and then get back to life. I’m glad that you’re finding them interesting.
The banter between them is crisp and witty.
Thanks. I’m glad to read that.

Ariel – Hey there. It took me a few seconds reading to realize this is feedback for Years, not for the latest but that’s all good. I’m glad you liked the story. I found it somewhat bittersweet but loved the love they have for each other for those years.
The sex. hot Hot HOT HOT!!! but the key ingredient to making it so incendiary is the love behind it. And I love Willow putting herself out there to offer not 362 more days but the accurate fractional amount! You see nerdy Willow and vulnerable Willow and brave Willow and again, it's so touching.
Thanks so much.
I’m glad for your comments.

Mrs. Pineapple - Thank you so much. I’m glad you like the shorts because these days that is all I can work myself up to write. I’ve got 2-3 stories that are all just a few parts started. Did I mention my work is very busy these days?
I’m sorry to hear about your uncle. I think in this case, they’re being forced to bond and now they can let their w/t ness take over.
I loved how you interlaced light conversation and even slight flirting with the more heavy feelings of losing a colleague/brother.
Thank you. I tried.
I totally see what you mean about the vagueness of her accident and the line ending with her. That’s not clear. Part of me wanted it to stay vague so she would be more mysterious. Basically the same accident that scarred her face also gave her internal damage that means she can’t have children. But it’s in there for a reason…
Yes! It was a reference to Listening to Fear. Thank you.
Keep the updates going, please! Looking forward to the next part.
Will do. Thanks, Helena

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I’m guessing you saw my pouting in random moments. If so, or if not, thanks for commenting.
I hope you’re ok with the storms. They seem especially bad this year and there’s so much death and destruction. Please be ok. Thanks for the comments on dialog and flirting. It was fun to write. You’re welcome for any insight you get on Shiva and mourning.
Also....as a twin, stories about losing, you know, the other twin make me incredibly nervous. Might as well be losing half of yourself.
Wow. Sorry that’s hard. I don’t think I know any adult twins or not any that have said they’re twins. Ok. I can think of one. My son’s best friends are identical twins and honestly, I have a very hard time telling them apart. Are you an identical or fraternal twin? Just curious about it.
Anyway, thanks for commenting. I’m working on the next part.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby BeMyDeputy » Fri May 27, 2011 9:42 pm

Katie – Congratulations! Anything to add?

Oh, man, time to be sheepish.
See, I'd actually gotten about halfway through coming up with real feedback for you, but I lost it. Like, I'm sure I'll find it in a few weeks, because it's on a computer around here somewhere. But when I sat down yesterday (I'm not kidding, I swear was yesterday) to finish, I was frustrated to discover that my initial work on this was missing. So I decided that I would start over, and then actually finish, today.

Then I woke up and saw this.

Sigh.

So, without further ado, and only . . . um, what, 17 hours too late to avoid being mocked, here we go.

Overall
Squee
So, I went and checked the dates, and as I thought, this was in fact the first fiction you've posted since I joined the board. I was pretty ecstatic to see it, as I'm a total fangirl. So, there was some quality happy dancing. Then I got a dibs! Totally made my day.

You know, even if I didn't go back and fix it in time.


Grief
I’m extremely fortunate in that I’ve made it to 28 and 11/12ths without having anyone I knew particularly well die. So, my understanding of this kind of grief is all second-hand. Based on that second-hand grasp, this feels like very realistic portrayal of this sort of event. The mixture of extreme sadness with very practical considerations such as food, moments of random adorableness and humor fit in to my concept of what this kind of loss actually feels like.


Style
I can’t really put my finger on why, but I would bet that if someone had put this in front of me and said “who wrote this?” that I would have guessed you. And not just from the level of detail about mourning in Judaism, either. It just feels like you.


Random crap
I liked how they both had problems with tenses, and what do to about it when they use the present tense to refer to Trey. (Willow: “"We're twins. I mean we were twins. I... I don't know." Tara: “Trey and I work together. Worked t-together. I don't know. He was my f-friend.")


Specifics
Feedback - Does anyone ever say no?

No, but some people are more specific, like “I’m fragile, be nice,” or “please rip this to pieces.”

Judiasm has very specific mourning traditions. Of course these will vary depending on the denomination (Orthodox, Conservative, Reform, etc.) and the observance level of the mourners.

Thanks for this. I grew up hearing about Jewish culture (my parents lived in New York for a long time, and my mom became very interested in it), and have had an academic education about Judaism, but am a lot less familiar with more practical things. For example, I wrote a 25 page paper on the second diaspora, but I wasn’t introduced to the idea of Shiva until I saw it talked about on “Grey’s Anatomy.” Since it's a subject that I've been interested in most of my life, but have very odd contacts with, this was really interesting to me.


Willow stared at the phone as she set it in the cradle. The avocado green color might not have even been in style back when the phone had been installed in this community center a few hundred years ago. Ok, the phone was probably only 40 years old but the color made it distinctive. She pondered this as she stared at the offending appliance. For the moment it kept her from processing the information she had just received.

First, I really loved this whole paragraph. Really very quality.

Second, one of the interesting things about fanfiction is the shared background of the show itself. It’s hard to tell in a specific instance if it’s deliberate allusion or if it’s just me being primed by knowing the show too well.

Anyway, her obsession over the phone here instantly brought me to the close-up of the phone in “The Body.”


"Willow![...] Dr. Hampton, cut off as he got a look at his partner's face. "Willow? Dr. Rosenberg?

Huh. I’m more used to seeing people go from title to first name when trying to get someone’s attention, so this felt strange to me.

For her part, Coco ran across the kitchen counter, bounced off the pass-through counter, shot through the living room, and dove under the bed where she stayed for the rest of the day.

This still makes me laugh.


"What? Who? What?"

This made me think “How? What? How” from “Something Blue.”


Obviously you're a w-w-woman and ... um... " She motioned toward the other woman's towel.

Hell of a way to meet Willow. Yum.


"It's not like they come even if you guess the name right."

This made me giggle, because a key difference between dog people and cat people is not whether they think this statement is true, but if it’s a good thing or a bad thing.


I mean... aren't there police here?

What I like about this is that it clues the reader that something horrible has happened above and beyond him dying at all, but without laying all the details out up front.


"He must have been blind"

I'll second that.


. "Uh... I'm sorry. I'm a pig. I just... I haven't had food like this for three years, 2 months, 17 days, and ..." she looked at her watch... "9 hours give or take."

So Willow. So very Willow.


staff were

"Staff" is a collective noun. It takes the singular, not the plural.


"He said I have to... identify... you know."

This brought me back to “The Body” again, and that sense that those words are the worst things in the world and need to be avoided.


"I guess the great Rosenberg line will die with me."

Tara raised an eyebrow in question but didn't voice it. "I had an accident ... once."

"Oh."

This ended up being confusing to me. Like, I think that what’s happening is that the line about the accident is Willow talking, but the paragraphing makes it look like these lines are Willow/Tara/Willow, but the context makes it seem like it should be Willow/Willow/Tara.

On the assumption that it’s Willow, I’m guessing she can’t have children because of the accident. I know that being a Jew is passed matrilineally, she would otherwise have the ability to pass that on at least. I know some people are more concerned about the last name, but I’ve always imagined that what last name to give the kids is a bit more negotiable for same-sex parents. Though, all my friends with kids are opposite-sex couples, so I don't really know that much about the logistics of the thing.


Willow barely opened her eyes as she settled into the seat. "It's ... " she trailed off as Tara slid into her own seat, bumping against the steering wheel as she did to, then placing her hand on the redhead's knee. Willow looked at the hand as if she didnt' understand how it had appeared there before raising her eyes to look at Tara. For a moment the blonde was tempted to move her hand but she didn't and after a few seconds she felt Willow's hand covering her own. "There are lot of rules."

I really love this whole paragraph. It's just . . . good.


"It ... makes it ... I don't know. Structured. Easier I guess."

This reminded me of when I was young asking my mom about why there were funeral processionals; that during grief and shock it’s so much easier to have every step in front of you laid out, so instead of deciding what to do, all you have to do is do it.


"And what after? Will you go back Dentists without Borders?"

A friend’s dad works with Doctor’s without Borders, so this made me smile.


Tara's voice was almost a whisper. "I think I might miss you if you did." Willow didn't respond and they rode the remainder of the way home in silence.

This was the first time I started to think about the title. Particularly at this early point it feels like a big part of what’s keeping them so close is that they’re each using the other to hang on to Trey. But that it isn't bad that that's what's going on: it feels like coping, not morbid.


After gathering her bag and car keys she stopped at Trey's desk to run her fingertips over his computer, clock, chair, pictures, plants and other belongings in what had become a sort of ritual.

I liked that Tara has her own ritual, even if it isn’t as structured and prescribed as Willow’s is.


Tara nodded like you do when you are on the phone but feel like you're really there.

Oh good, it's not just me.


Willow shrugged again and Tara realized with some affection that it was a all-purpose sort of movement. Like when she didn't know something or didn't want to say something.

I was glad to see this, because Willow shrugging when she says “I think it might only hurt forever” originally felt surprisingly callous to me. So that it’s just kind of a universal nervous-tick kind of thing, that made it better.


"Trey never mentioned that you were family."

I was 27 before I heard ‘family’ used like this. I’m 28 now. I’ve always been so disconnected from gay culture. But because being queer was sufficiently mainstream, not because I was isolated, if that makes any sense.


"I m-mean most people they only need like ... 2 seconds with someone and if they know two lesbians they're like... 'hey, you should meet my sister/aunt/roommate's dog's littermate's owner and so on and so forth...

This is common for so many things. Like, when I meet someone who is from Asia or speaks any Asian language, my default response is to try to connect by saying “hey, my sister has her B.A. in Japanese.”


"Are there a lot of homeless people here?"

Tara scrunched up her face. "Yes but he never tried to set me up with them."

This made me laugh.


"I refuse to answer on the grounds that ... "she glanced at the clock on her dashboard, "... it's after 10:30 and I have no obligation to answer."

That's a very important rule, the 'not answering because . . . um . . . ' rule.



So, to answer your question: yes.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby jazhers » Fri May 27, 2011 10:48 pm

Wow, this is great!! Sad about Willow's Twin tho. This story is very endearing. Looking forward to more. Thanks for writing this.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby wayland » Sat May 28, 2011 10:40 am

Hi Debra,

On a side note, about the way you wrote Tara and Willow confusing their tenses when they spoke of Trey, I just watched a programme about police work and they showed a clip of a man in a TV appeal for witnesses to the murder of his wife.

He spoke movingly of his grief for her, but he didn’t get the tenses wrong. Not once.

That was a factor in the police turning their attention towards him. Ultimately he was tried and convicted of her murder.

The use of those well-observed small details makes all the difference between a convincing and an unconvincing story. They give texture and make the characters come alive.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby Rachel » Sun May 29, 2011 6:42 pm

I love these stories. I absolutely love your style of writing, which I personally think can bring a reader in more so then actual content. My favorite thus far though has to be Years. I love the "real life" feel of what could have happened to these two characters. That they had grown and changed by themselves, yet still were rooted together with love and it finally came full circle at a point in their lives that it could work again.

I really was fascinated with Missionary Position and was actually drawn in by the style of writing as opposed to the content of the story. I'm not quite sure what to think about it, but again, I was captivated with the first person ideals and really wanted to know more about Tara's thought process. It was just a very interesting piece, very different.

Can't wait to read more!!

Rachel

(p.s. I love how Kate's feed back is about as long as the actual story lol)
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby Finey_McFine » Mon May 30, 2011 11:59 am

Hey!

Sorry it took me so long to fb this fic. I lost my subscription to the thread I guess, because I never got a notification. Plus, after seeing Kate's fb...what else can I say? lol

Anyway, I really like the overall feel you've created. A twin sister close to her brother, but not close enough to know his pet's name or if he has a girlfriend and the name of his best friend, etc. There is a deep feeling of grief, but also the shock of a sudden and tragic loss. I think of everything that is happening here, I loved this the most:
Willow shrugged as she followed the other woman through the door, taking the opportunity for a very inappropriate glance at the blonde's ass. "He must have been blind," she muttered as she pulled the door closed behind them.
Through the grief, the shock, etc, Willow still finds herself attracted to Tara and unable to look away.

I liked the way you wrote about the traditions...accurate, but not like a 'how to' manual.

The ass wagging at the end was adorable and I can't wait to see where this ends up. I vote for 2 more chapters instead of 1!!

On a side note: I shoot a lot of stuff at hotels (weddings, banquets, proms, etc) and I always have to enter and exit through the kitchen to get to the freight elevators. Anyway, the amount of decent food they throw away is outrageous! Whatever they have extra, they dump. Enough from one banquet to feed the homeless in Houston for several days. So, I really liked that you had them sharing the leftovers instead of just dumping it.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby truck_driving_magic_mama » Mon May 30, 2011 3:19 pm

Hey Debra!

just wanted to let you know that I loved this. was a wonderful read. I've recently lost my grandma and went through the shiva'a and all, and it's interesting. 'Cause it's both comforting and absolutely exhausting. Either way, thanks for this. I really can't wait for the next part.


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Postby BeMyDeputy » Mon May 30, 2011 8:52 pm

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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby JustSkipIt » Thu Jun 02, 2011 3:29 pm

Katie – I’ve done the same thing. And besides, I think this type of feedback (epic as it is!) gets you off any hooks you might have been looking to hang yourself up on. Wow, that sentence was a train wreck.

…, 17 hours too late to avoid being mocked, here we go.
Well… is it ever too late to truly be mocked? I mean, isn’t that what we think when we get out of high school? But then there’s college and work and marriage and work and family… Lots of opportunities to be mocked really.

So, I went and checked the dates, and as I thought, this was in fact the first fiction you've posted since I joined the board.
No shit? How long ago did you join the board? And I haven’t posted anything else since then? That sucks doesn’t it (on my part I mean).

as I'm a total fangirl.
It’s quite mutual…

You have interesting thoughts on grief. I’ve lost family members but all of them were older as well as one friend as an adolescent. I was 14. He was 12. But in that case he died and we literally moved across the country the next day so there was no closure for me. I never got to go to the funeral or visit the family or anything and it took me years to really grasp that he was gone. I kept thinking that it was just that I was in Texas and he was in Florida and if I went to visit he would be there. And of course, there was my mom and that’s just indescribable. But in her case, it was also a few years in the coming and quite honestly, a relief because she was in such pain and misery. So I’ve not had an experience like this before. Bottom line: I’m glad this seems realistic.

Style – Wow. Well, I guess that makes sense but I can’t put a finger on my style either. I’d hope it has a clarity to it and perhaps humor but I get what you’re saying.

Tenses – That was intentional and I would say that’s something I’ve found very realistic for myself in speaking about people who have died or even situations that cause grief like lost jobs and such. I still sometimes will say that my mother loves cement mixer trucks because she thinks they’re brilliant or that she hates the phrases “basic fundamentals” and “first annual”. And then I usually correct myself out loud.

Feedback - Does anyone ever say no?

No, but some people are more specific, like “I’m fragile, be nice,” or “please rip this to pieces.”
Lol. Good point. I think I’ve written around 350,000 – 400,000 words in the last 10 years. I’m happy for any feedback. If someone wants to disagree and argue with me, I welcome it. If someone wants to just post emoticons… ok. And anything in between is great too.

I’m glad that the Shiva traditions were interesting to you. It’s all sort of very flexible depending on the family but the traditions are there as the baseline. A little story from my grandmother’s Shiva – in order to say Kiddush, you must have 10 people to pray (a Minyan). This is one of the big reasons that people come throughout the day to pray. In some traditions it would only be 10 males but in most it would only require 10 adults. Because I was not Bat Mitzvahed I am actually not an adult in Conservative Judiasm. At my Grandmother’s Shiva it was time to say the Kiddush one day and someone was trying to count the Minyan and I took a step back to said that I did not count. My cousin who is a Rabbi took me aside and told me that I should never say or believe such a thing. She said that the fact that I wasn’t Bat Mitzvahed did nothing to reduce me and that I should never say it again. It has stuck with me for 12 years that she said that.

I’m glad you liked the avocado phone paragraph. Thanks. I wasn’t specifically thinking of the phone in The Body (I actually generally avoid that episode) but I think that it’s appropriate in any situation like that to simply end up staring at the inanimate object in front of you. You know?

"Willow![...] Dr. Hampton, cut off as he got a look at his partner's face. "Willow? Dr. Rosenberg?

Huh. I’m more used to seeing people go from title to first name when trying to get someone’s attention, so this felt strange to me.
Hmmm. I guess my thought was that I would probably go from the name that’s more common to me to the one that’s less common to me. So when trying to get my son’s attention, I say “Ash? Ash? Asher? Asher? Asher Griffin? Asher Griffin Springfield Serrins?” In this case I was backstorying that he and she are close so he’d be likely to address her by first name most of the time (or when not with patients). But I appreciate the feedback.
"What? Who? What?"

This made me think “How? What? How” from “Something Blue.”
I quote that line all the time but it’s always to people who have no idea what I’m talking about.

This made me giggle, because a key difference between dog people and cat people is not whether they think this statement is true, but if it’s a good thing or a bad thing.
Lol. I thought a key difference between dog people and cat people is whether they want a pet to walk through its bathroom then jump on the bathroom counters and kitchen counters and dining room table and spread germs everywhere. Oops. Sorry. We got a cat a few months ago to the joy of the entire family and I’m basically putting up with it. I can handle it but I’m still so grossed out about the germs. Gross.

What I like about this is that it clues the reader that something horrible has happened above and beyond him dying at all, but without laying all the details out up front.
Thanks. One thing that I’ve learned from writing as well as reading is that the reader is perfectly able to manufacture his/her own horror. You just have to set him/her n the path to it and she’ll fill it in. (Yes, I said fuck the gender neutral pronouns at the end).

Thanks for the reminder about staff. That one always gets me. I don’t access to the KB while I’m at work (where I’m writing these responses) but if I remember, I’ll edit it later.

This brought me back to “The Body” again, and that sense that those words are the worst things in the world and need to be avoided.
I think it’s also a matter of speaking the truth into reality. To this point, W/T have not actually said directly “my brother is dead” or “my best friend is dead” to each other. Right now they’re in a limbo. Once she says that… the limbo ends.

You’re right about the paragraph breaks. I remember now that I rewrote that paragraph and originally had dialog from Tara. When I removed it, I forgot to take out the paragraph breaks. Again, hopefully I can edit it later. Thanks again.
Yes – Willow can’t have children because of the accident. And yes, Judaism is passed matrilineally. Re: names. At least in Texas you can give your kid whatever last name you damn well choose. I know two women who are both named Jen/Jenny. They hate their last names (one is divorced and hates her current name which was her husband’s but her maiden name is very Polish). So they named their son “Alex Jens”. In the hospital our son’s name was Springfield because at that hospital the baby’s name is the mother’s last name no matter what but both our kids’s last names are Serrins because my wife gave me that because our name is dying out. You can name your kid Elvis Presley or Bill the Dinosaur. My brother’s son is named like ours – 4 names - first, middle, his mother’s last name, Serrins.

Willow barely opened her eyes as she settled into the seat. "It's ... " she trailed off as Tara slid into her own seat, bumping against the steering wheel as she did to, then placing her hand on the redhead's knee. Willow looked at the hand as if she didnt' understand how it had appeared there before raising her eyes to look at Tara. For a moment the blonde was tempted to move her hand but she didn't and after a few seconds she felt Willow's hand covering her own. "There are lot of rules.”

I really love this whole paragraph. It's just . . . good.
Thanks. Interestingly you’re quoting a few parts that are dropping hints about the sort of “rest of the story” for this story. So far no one has honed in at all on the other thing that I’m building here.

This reminded me of when I was young asking my mom about why there were funeral processionals; that during grief and shock it’s so much easier to have every step in front of you laid out, so instead of deciding what to do, all you have to do is do it.
Yes. I also think that in Judaism, you have to think back a few thousand years and understand that when these rules were created these people were farmers. Eight days was about as long as you could get neighbors to come milk your cows, feed your chickens, and pull your weeds or whatever. Then it would be time to get the hell back to work. For a parent or child, you would continue to say Kiddush for a year. And there are rules for 30 days as well.

This was the first time I started to think about the title. Particularly at this early point it feels like a big part of what’s keeping them so close is that they’re each using the other to hang on to Trey. But that it isn't bad that that's what's going on: it feels like coping, not morbid.
Again, to cruelly drop hints, there is more to the title than that but right now, I think they are sort in pseudo-relationship because of Trey. It’s sort like a relationship of 3 people.

Tara nodded like you do when you are on the phone but feel like you're really there.

Oh good, it's not just me.
I’m glad to read that you and one other reader liked this line. I really struggled with it because it breaks the narrative flow and style so badly. I’m glad that it works though.

I was 27 before I heard ‘family’ used like this. I’m 28 now. I’ve always been so disconnected from gay culture. But because being queer was sufficiently mainstream, not because I was isolated, if that makes any sense.
Actually, I’m not sure if people even use that term any longer. I mean when I came out in the late 80s it was a sort of code word like Friends of Bill or something. But now I just don’t know that it’s even necessary. I guess it sticks with me though. A few years ago my brother introduced me to two women while cycling and introduced them saying “they’re family too” which I thought was funny because he’s not family. I probably would have said that they were a couple or “this is Alice and her partner Jo” or whatever.

"Are there a lot of homeless people here?"

Tara scrunched up her face. "Yes but he never tried to set me up with them."

This made me laugh.
That’s a relief?

So, to answer your question: yes.

Lots more to say.
I’ll do the traditional happy dance! Thanks so much.

jazhers – Thanks so much. I agree it’s sad but hopefully the romance is cute and worth it. Thanks for reading and commenting.

wayland – Wow! I think I had heard a story like that before. How very creepy though.

Rachel – Hello and if I haven’t had a chance to say it before, welcome to the Kitten Board. Thanks so much for your comments about the short stories. I haven’t written many of them – I guess about 15 if you include various challenge or multiple-writer collections. Right now, I’m just so busy at work and at home that I sort of find it easier to commit to writing 5000 words than writing an entire story.

My favorite thus far though has to be Years. I love the "real life" feel of what could have happened to these two characters. That they had grown and changed by themselves, yet still were rooted together with love and it finally came full circle at a point in their lives that it could work again.
Thank you so much. I really like that story as well because there is so much that we don’t know but what we do know is that they love each other and have never stopped.

Missionary Position – Lol. I can’t say that I’ve ever seen anything like it and it just sort of popped fully grown and perverse into my brain one day. I loved the contrast between Tara’s faith and conviction with the fact that she sleeps with these girls to attempt to save their souls.

(p.s. I love how Kate's feed back is about as long as the actual story lol)
Tee hee.

Finey_McFine – Welcome to the party. I totally hear you. From now on, I’ll just copy Kate’s fb into any story and figure it’s the # of characters that counts. Right?

Anyway, I really like the overall feel you've created. A twin sister close to her brother, but not close enough to know his pet's name or if he has a girlfriend and the name of his best friend, etc.
I think partially that is just part of living in another country with very tenuous technology for the past 3 years.

Through the grief, the shock, etc, Willow still finds herself attracted to Tara and unable to look away.
Quite true.

… I can't wait to see where this ends up. I vote for 2 more chapters instead of 1!!
We’ll see how long it takes to say what there is to say. I’ve got an outline in my head. Possibly there will be an epilogue.

On a side note: I shoot a lot of stuff at hotels (weddings, banquets, proms, etc) and I always have to enter and exit through the kitchen to get to the freight elevators. Anyway, the amount of decent food they throw away is outrageous! Whatever they have extra, they dump. Enough from one banquet to feed the homeless in Houston for several days.
There is an organization called Feeding America formerly America’s Second Harvest that actually can take the uneaten food from hotels and banquets and packages it up and distributes it at different organizations. The fact that people in this country are literally starving while food goes in the trash is just horrific. Our close friends are very active at their church. When their church Easter event ended they had lots of food left. Because the church recently upgraded their kitchen to commercial standards so that they could feed more homeless people, they can no longer return any food to the refrigerators or freezers once it’s taken out. My friends spent 3 hours after the meal packaging up the food and another 2 hours walking around handing it out. My wife is very anti-church but to me, that should be what church is about.

Melissa – Hello! I feel like I haven’t seen your sign on in a long time. Thanks for checking in here. I’m so sorry to hear about your Grandma. I agree that Shiva is both comforting and absolutely exhausting. If you’re like me, every time we go to a funeral it’s like me and my cousins all going “why don’t we ever see each other in better times?” That said, 3 of my 4 cousins were able to come to my nephew’s Bar Mitzvah last year so some times we do all make better times. Thanks for your comments. I hope the next part will be done soon.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby HalfCamel » Sun Jun 12, 2011 9:02 pm

Hi Deb,

So I haven’t really been reading fic when I come to the KB and I’ve just read your shorts in the past couple of weeks. Mostly I’ll browse other topics and sometimes I attempt to start reading fic’s and then I get distracted. Like I just did. Anyways. I LOVE your writing style. Absolutely love it. It just flows and there’s nothing jarring or distracting. I feel like I’m actually watching two people go through their moments in life. I feel like I’ve already left you this FB back in the day but everytime I read something you’ve written, it just... transports me.

My favorite so far is Missionary Position. I’ve never read anything like it. My initial feeling was shock. Shock at how Tara was using her beliefs to “save” these women. Shock at Willow for her seeking out this experience. Shock that this was happening. And then I had to stop reading. It just threw me. Never has a story shocked me into leaving it.

And then! And then I came back and read it. And re-read it. And re-read it one more time. And it was perversely delicious! And so cheeky. I was still shocked that this was happening but I had a smile the entire time I was reading it and laughing in some places. This story has taken a place as a favorite of mine.

Years. This story was sad for me. Sad because yes, they were enjoying each others company for a weekend and they were loved and loving and blissful but then they were miserable for the rest of the year. And miserable they were because they loved each other and were living without each other. And then I was sad for what they were doing to their respective partners.

But aside from that, I thought it was very well written. Your choice of words and descriptions really brought out of their internal feelings and made me believe it. What also struck me was how few words Tara spoke compared to Willow (per usual) yet I could clearly envision how she felt and what her reactions were.

Willow’s List. I have to be honest… I couldn’t get past the second email string. The email format is annoying for me in general and I couldn’t get through it.

The Three of Us. Them bonding over their grief was interesting. For me, their grief wasn’t what was at the forefront; it was everything else. I was uncomfortable reading this, but uncomfortable in the sense that there’s these two women who are thrown together by a tragedy and they are trying to navigate it and they’re hesitant and uncomfortable and testing boundries and sad. And we’re watching them trying to deal with it. That didn’t make much sense but I can’t describe it better. You’ve made their emtions and reactions real and the words you choose to convey that are perfect.

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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby JustSkipIt » Mon Jun 27, 2011 5:17 pm

Jackie – First off, hi back at you.



Anyways. I LOVE your writing style. Absolutely love it. It just flows and there’s nothing jarring or distracting. I feel like I’m actually watching two people go through their moments in life. I feel like I’ve already left you this FB back in the day but everytime I read something you’ve written, it just... transports me.
Well thanks so much.



Your response to Missionary Position is really interesting to me. I have to say that when I wrote it expected many more people to feel that way. To be sort of appalled or sickened or confused or something but everyone seemed to just have fun with it.
Never has a story shocked me into leaving it.
Cool and not I guess.



But then.



And then! And then I came back and read it. And re-read it. And re-read it one more time. And it was perversely delicious!
Awesome! Perversely delicious sounds like something to print as a quote on a book jacket.



Years – I find the story incredibly sad. I’m one of those people who thinks that the Bridges of Madison County is completely tragic. Just the line when the kids are cleaning things out and the boy tells the girl that their mother was in love with someone else for 30+ years is heartbreaking. And this is too but at least they finally get together. At least they share their weekends and then finally end up together forever.



And then I was sad for what they were doing to their respective partners.
Well yeah. That part really sucks and is totally crappy of them.



Willow’s List – point taken. I don’t generally like e-mail stories but this popped in my head so I went with it.



The Three of Us. – I think I understand what you’re saying. Your basically just saying that it was interesting but also uncomfortable to see the two women trying to grieve and also possibly start a relationship. I agree. I suspect it will become both more and less comfortable in the next update.



Thanks for your comments.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby truck_driving_magic_mama » Sat Aug 06, 2011 1:39 pm

Sorry guys, I'm bumping this.
'cause I wanna (best child voice). I want an update. so what if willow has to wait a month? we don't want to wait two.. :(

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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby Babbles4Twillow » Mon Sep 12, 2011 3:48 pm

Delurking..99%...100%

Hehe. Anyways...I've been reading your stories, and I really love them. I actually registered just for the purpose of being ab;e to leave you some feedback. I love how you're able to bring Tara out more
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby Ariel » Sat Oct 29, 2011 7:19 pm

Hi Deb,

And this time I'm giving f/b on the right story - and it only took 5-1/2 months! :grin

First, I admit to being fascinated with the details of sitting Shiva - as a long time fan of "The Chosen" and Chaim Potok's other amazing books, it was great to be pulled into that world again.

It seems to me that Tara, again is pregnant - not drinking wine and having a bit of stomach. I wonder if Trey was her donor.

I love their banter and their sharing of grief; this is entirely a new fic, nothing formulaic for me at all.

Please update - I loved "Working it Out" (another entirely different fic) and feel real regret that you're not continuing with that. And yes, I am a base hypocrite for abandoning my story for a three and a half month/7 day work week hiatus! So I feel the irony! :blush But still . . .

So the ancient Greeks define happiness as, "The exercise of vital powers along lines of excellence in a life affording them scope" and for you part of that is writing. So get write-y, be happy! (Okay, how did ancient wisdom turn into a cute and semi-[or fully] annoying song from years gone by? Only in the mind of Ariel :flirt ) But having joked and gibbered, let me be dead serious: your writing has grown from wonderful/sweet/good to wonderful/fascinating/great.

So thrill us, your fans, and bring more of your imagination to life! Please? :pray :pray :pray

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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby JustSkipIt » Thu Nov 03, 2011 8:01 am

truck_driving_magic_mama - Hello and welcome. Thanks for the bump. Yes, Willow has to wait a month and we have to wait much longer. Sorry. I'll update when I can.
Babbles4Twillow - Cute user name. I would say you are well delurked since you're posting a story even. I'm enjoying it, BTW. Wow, you registered to leave me feedback? Thanks so much. I think this Tara is pretty different from the one in the show. I'm glad you like her.
Ariel - Lol. Congratulations then! I'm glad you enjoy the Shiva details. I find it to be a conforting way to grieve in that the rules are laid out so clearly. You don't have to wonder what to do.

It seems to me that Tara, again is pregnant - not drinking wine and having a bit of stomach. I wonder if Trey was her donor.
Well Katie asked me privately but you're the first to hit that nail right on its head so well done.

Thanks for the thoughts about the banter. I want them to have the magical connection even during this hard time. I will update both this and Working it Out. In fact, who said I wasn't updating WiO? And no worries about being a hypocrite. We all write when we can.

Thanks for your wonderful words about my writing. I love it and love to share it.
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Re: Random Bits - The Three of Us Part I - 05/11/2011

Postby JustSkipIt » Tue Jun 05, 2012 4:08 pm

Story Title – Finding Tara – Part I/?
Author – JustSkipIt
Pairing – T/W
Feedback – Yes, please.
Spoilers – None.
Rating – NC-17.
Disclaimer – You’ve heard it all before. I own nothing associated with Buffy the Vampire Slayer, Willow, or Tara. I will make no money from this and profit in no way but the kind words of relative strangers and strange friends.
Distribution – Chris, Susan, Megan are welcome and I’ll send you a copy. Everyone else, please ask.
Note – This just sort of came to me and I’ve written it in the last few days. It’s mostly PWP and hopefully amusing too. It’s not based on or a rewriting but sort of intended to have the same feeling as a trashy novel I love called Belinda by Anne Rice.

It's not like I went out looking for her. For someone like her. I mean, I'm not some dirty old perv who like cruises around the really run-down parts of town looking for runaways who look just desperate enough, right? I mean this is a totally different thing. I mean not at all pervy. Not at all wrong. Hell. I didn't meet her on the street or something or toss my business card in her guitar case with a hundred dollar bill while she was busking or something. It's not like that at all.

And she could totally be 18. Maybe 19. Right?

Plus. Even if she's not 18, which she probably is, in today's world what does it really mean to be 18? Kids are way more grown up at 14 than they were when I was 14. Not that I was 14 that long ago. Ok. 14 years ago. And I'm not saying that she may be 14. No. 18. I'm sure she's 18. At least. Maybe older.

Faith picked the restaurant. Bar. She wanted to talk and she said they have like a whole happy hour buffet and you just have to buy a drink an hour. Like I give a shit. But Faith is such a penny pincher. Like she should give a shit either. My chief... hell, I forget her latest title... but I can tell you that Faith makes things run smoothly and she is the second largest stockholder after myself and my point is that she doesn't need to cut coupons or find free happy hour food. I think it's like a game for her. Deals or something. Doing things hard so they will be a bargain. Whatever. Melody has been gone for 2 months and good riddance but if Faith wants to meet she wants to give me one of three lectures and I need at least a drink an hour to listen to that. Lecture #1 - "Willow, you work too hard." Sublecture #1 Part A - "Willow, when you work too hard you make everyone work too hard." Lecture #2 - "You need to take a vacation" (Lecture #2 could be sub part B of Lecture #1 I guess). Sublecture #2 Part A - F - Here are brochures of vacations you would love. Sublecture #2 Part G (to be delivered in a week if I don't respond correctly to parts A-F) - "I've booked you on a trip to the Bahamas" (or wherever). Lecture #3 - "Willow. You need to get laid."

I was late. So I started with a vodka with lime and Faith started with Boilermakers and a lecture on my being late. I told her to hold the lecture because I was going to get a plate of taquitos with four different dipping sauces. She started to say something but I just walked over to the buffet. At least she had the good grace not to lecture me on being late or on numbers 1-3 while we were filling our plates with the free food.

She did surprise me by leading off with Lecture #2 rather than #1 and I couldn't really tell you if she ever got to #3. By that time I had spotted the blonde at sitting at the bar with the canvas duffel bag at her feet and had developed voluntary and selective deafness. I think Faith had just mentioned Vail when I waved over the bored waitress and asked her to go buy a drink for the clearly legal blonde at the bar. Ok. so the waitress looked at me with a look that said "I'm calling the child pornography task force so you might want to pay in cash" and told me that the girl at the bar was drinking regular coke, not rum and coke. Faith started laughing her ass off which is typical. I think I heard her mutter that if I got sent to jail I would at least be forced to take a few days off work. The waitress went over to the talk to the girl at the bar and then she leaned out of the way so the blonde could glance at me. Oh god. She blushed. Honest to God blushed. Like her cheeks turned red.

Faith was blah blah blah for the next 45 minutes. I have no idea. For all I know she won the Nobel prize for something or was the MVP in the Super Bowl or is getting married to Dawn (AKA the flavor of the month). Don't get me wrong. I love Faith. She is my best friend and probably the person I trust most on this planet. But I was busy watching the blonde. I felt simultaneously terrified of approaching her and not approaching her.

Fuck it.

I finished off my drink and went over to the bar to say hi.

"Hi."

"H-hi."

"I'm Willow. Can I buy you a drink?"

She blushed again. Jesus God. "You did." She glanced down so her hair sort of hung over her eyes and I swear if I believed in swooning I would have swooned.

"Dinner?"

She pointed at the plate empty plate on which she had rested her fork up-side down at the 4:00 position indicating that she was done.

"Dessert?"

Jesus. How desperate could I sound.

She laughed. "I'm full but I was about to go do my laundry at the place across the street. I don't suppose you have a pocket full of quarters."

"You're teasing me."

She shrugged then and slid off the bar stool. She was an inch or so taller than me. "My dirty clothes await..." She picked up the bag and slung the strap over her left shoulder. She was going to escape and I had no idea of her name.

I pulled a business card out of my pocket and handed it to her. "I'm Willow. See Willow Rosenberg." I pointed at the front of the card. Then grabbed a pen out of the jar on the bar and flipped the card to write on the back. "This is my cell phone #."

She smiled again and sort of licked her lips. Just the hint of her tongue.

Remember what I said about swooning.

"Thanks for the drink, Willow Rosenberg." She tucked the card in her pocket and started to step toward the door.

I grabbed her on the arm. Not even the arm. Really the sleeve of her jacket. "What's your name? Will you call me? How will I see you again?"

I should write a book: How to sound completely Desperate.

She smiled again.

Again.

"I'm sure I'll see you around, Willow." And she left and I just stood there watching her go. Watching her hips sway and her beautiful no doubt totally legal 18 year old ass go out the door. I wanted to chase her down the block. Tell her that I don't even live near here but my friend wanted free food.

Fuck.

Faith was chuckling and on her 4th drink so she was certainly making the happy hour buffet into an excuse if not a good deal. "You know she probably has parents and 3 older and very bigger brothers at home right? A dad with a shotgun?"

"Great. I'm all for the 2nd amendment."

"You know he's going to use that shotgun on a 28 year old lesbian who tries to get his high school runaway artist daughter into bed right?"

Talk about a buzzkill. "Ok. Miss Reason and No Fun. Why did she runaway? Because her family are bad people. Because they hurt her and weren't kind and no one should have to live like that."

"Jesus, Red." She nodded and downed her latest drink. "Nice rationalization."

"What?'

She finished off the drink. "Let's head out tonight. We'll call Dawn and find you some legal tail and you can stop trying to figure out how to get in trouble." She tossed a few twenties on the table.

"I ... I don't know." I was thinking that as soon as I got rid of Faith, I could wander over to the Laundromat. Hell. I have a washer and dryer in my house. It would save the girl money if she just did her laundry at my place.

"Friends don't let friends go pick up jail bait so come-on." She was practically dragging me out the door and Faith is really strong. I mean I work out and she is strong. She called for a taxi and we stood there waiting while I looked at the door to the Laundromat. I couldn't see the blonde.

We went to some bar or some series of bars. It wasn't that I got falling-down drunk. It was more that I didn't care. Faith did her best to get me to hook up with some woman she knew from some THING. The woman from the THING was there and then she wasn't and that was better. I called a taxi and must have gotten home in one piece because I woke up the next morning in one piece and it's hard to wake up in one piece if you're not in one piece when you go to bed. You get the idea.

So... four days. It's Tuesday now and it was Friday when I met and didn't meet her and I don't even know where to look for her.

"Are you daydreaming about orgasms?"

Anya is the strangest administrative assistant ever. Check that. The strangest person ever. No boundaries. But she's also a totally awesome administrative assistant. I'm never late for anything and I never forget a birthday present and she has a wonderful relationship with my mother. Or that's what my mother says when I call her every once in a while.

"Yes, Anya. Which means I don't want to be interrupted." You kind of just have to start where Anya is.

"Faith said you tried to pick up a 16 year old at a bar and that if I see you with any young women I should call her immediately. She said she'll give me $100 cash." Anya took a drink of her coffee. "What was a 16 year old doing in a bar?"

I blew out a long breath. "It was a restaurant that served drinks and she's older than 16."

Anya helped herself to a seat. "So how old is she?"

"Older than 16."

Anya shrugged. "I'm going to get lunch. I'm getting you a burrito and chips and you'll eat it because you're getting too skinny since Melody left you. I'll be back in an hour."

She'd already closed my door before I thought to shout at her that Melody didn't leave me: I kicked her out. But who cares really?

She's wrong that I'm losing weight. I've been back to the free happy hour twice since Thursday and there's no way that food is good for you. I keep getting that same waitress and I think she has my number but what can she do? I thought about going to the Laundromat but no one needs to do laundry that frequently.

I ate the food Anya brought and about 3:00 went out by her desk, yawned as obviously as I could manage, and said I thought I would go home and sleep. She all but pushed me into the elevator.

After I changed into jeans, a t-shirt, and a hoodie sweatshirt, I put my ID, a debit card, and some cash in my pocket and called a cab to take me back to the restaurant. It was only 4:30 which I figured meant I could walk around for 6-8 hours before giving up for the night. I started at the happy hour, looked around and didn't see the blonde, so I started walking clockwise. Every time I got back where I had been before I expanded my square by 1 block. If I saw people begging, I gave them a few dollars. If I needed a drink, I stopped in somewhere for water or a drink. And I looked for her. Looked and looked and looked.

Where did I find her?

Tucked in the back of a run-down bodega leaning against the magazine rack reading The New Republic. No canvas duffel but she had a backpack over one shoulder. Jesus God. I had started to wonder if I imagined how amazing she was but no. She was... unbelievable. She smiled when she saw me and put the magazine back on the rack.

I wiped my hands on my jeans, hoping they weren't all sweaty and tried to think of a casual opening line. Something besides "I am so obsessed. I've been searching for you since Thursday." But I knew any words would be some version of that even if I said "so how about this weather?" I didn't have to worry about what to say.

"I was just thinking of getting a donut."

I swallowed hard. "I love donuts." I was contributing absolutely nothing to the conversation. "And coffee."

She almost laughed. "And coffee, Willow. Come on." I fell into step beside her and noticed the clock on the wall as we went by. I had been walking for five hours. A donut would be good.

The guy working the counter shouted that we should have bought something as we went out the door and she giggled. Giggled. Oh God. I didn't know if I would live through the night.

"What?"

I looked over at her. "What what?"

"You have a l-look on your face." She gestured with her fingertip.

"I have a look on my face?" I took a breath. "What sort of look? Like 'you giggled' or like 'I can't believe I found you' or like 'what in the hell is this amazingly beautiful girl's name?' or like 'Won't the donuts be sort of stale at 10:00 at night'?"

She pulled open the door to a brightly lit shop and shrugged. "I guess like all of the above."

"Hey, Tara!" The girl behind the counter shouted and waved a hand as we got into line. Tara. Tara. I whispered it a few times to get the feeling of it in my mouth.

We got to the front of the line and she ordered a chocolate covered one with sprinkles and I got an eclair and we both got coffees and I yanked my money out in about 1/100th of a second. We sat down and she told me that the shop was actually a 24 hour shop so the donuts were never stale.

"Tara."

She smiled.

"It's a beautiful name. Like you."

"Jeanne said you've b-been in every day."

So she had checked on me as well. "The waitress?" She nodded. "You could have called and made my life easier you know."

She sipped at her coffee. "Don't you think this way is so much more fun? I mean, Willow Rosenberg. CEO of the 32nd largest technology firm in the country, 4th largest in the state. Graduate of MIT, member of various service organizations, Tae Kwon Do purple belt, youngest daughter of Sheila and Ira Rosenberg. How often do you have to go looking for someone?"

I sipped my drink in return. "This is not the way things usually go for me, Tara... Tara whatever your last name is."

She popped the last bite of her donut in her mouth. "Maclay."

"Are you..." I swallowed hard. "Are you a runaway? I mean if you are, I'm not going to turn you in or anything. I'm just trying to wrap my head around things."

The girl from the counter came over to take away our plates and glare at me pointedly. I guess she didn't think the glare was pointed enough because she asked Tara if everything was ok and if she wanted her to call "Jimbo" for anything. How dangerous do I look? Tara told her it was fine and she stalked back behind the counter to pretend to read a book and give me the evil eye.

"Uh... girlfriend? Potential girlfriend?"

Tara glanced over toward the counter and back toward me. "I think she has aspirations but she has never seemed right for the part." I couldn't help the smile that spread across my face and a part of me wanted to stick my tongue out at little Miss Aspiring Donuts. "No."

"Huh?"

Tara was watching me with that smile on her face again. "I'm not a runaway."

I took a deep breath. "Do you want to get out of here? Miss Aspirations over there is staring at me and I'm worried I will burst into flames."

She stood and pulled me to my feet, then waved a hand toward the door. As soon as we got outside, I asked where she wanted to go. She took my hand and pulled me around the building to the empty doorway in the closed shoe repair shop next door. Maybe I wasn't thinking clearly but I didn't expect to find myself pressed against the door of a cobbler shop. "Where do you want to go, Willow?"

I swear my brain was not working. "Um... well... we could go get some thing else to eat or ... um the park or ... the fountains..."

She lifted my hand and kissed the back. "Really? What were you thinking we would do when you found me, Willow?" Oh Jesus. She took my index fingertip and began to suck on it. I was going to get arrested or die or something equally bad. And all I could think was that if I died right then I would miss out on my chance to take this woman to bed.

"My place." My voice was barely audible. I had to repeat myself a few times and she looked very amused with herself. She pulled away and whistled for a taxi. Whistled. This I will place under the heading of "I shit you not."

I half-way expected Tara Maclay to give the address to the taxi driver but instead they both sat looking at me so I told him where to take us and then leaned back to just look at her. She was so comfortable, so self-assured, and yes, so damn sexy. I never knew someone could be that sexy in cargo pants and a concert T shirt. I kept sort of opening my mouth to say something and then worrying that I would sound stupid and closing my mouth again. I hadn't been this nervous since I had to convince the bank to loan me $150,000 to start my first company when I was nineteen. Please let her be that old. She was watching me like she was as amused as she could be. There was a voice in my head telling me that she might rob me blind and I couldn't have cared less. I would have handed over the keys to my house and car if she had held out her hand.

The taxi pulled up in front of the house and I handed him the fare and a generous tip. He was as unimpressed and uninterested as you might expect. We were walking up the path to the house and I still hadn't said anything since giving the driver my address. Of course, my first effort, waving my hand vaguely toward the porch and muttering "Here's my house" hardly qualifies as sparkling conversation but I was impressed every time I was able to take a step without either suffering a medical emergency or throwing her to the ground and tearing her clothes off right there among the roses and daffodils. She stopped a few times to smell the flowers and I wished I had a camera to record it. She was 100% involved in the act of smelling each flower and I could see that she was like that about everything.

We took our time getting to the door and I unlocked it, and then followed her inside. The lights came on automatically so I spoke a quick command to lower them and hung my keys on the hook by the front door. She watched me and watched where I put the keys but didn't say anything. My cell phone on the end table showed that I had 7 missed calls and 4 messages. I looked at the phone and then hit myself in the forehead with the heel of my hand. "What if you had called?"

She began to laugh in that deep throaty way that nearly brought me to my knees. Without asking she began to walk around the living room, as if taking note of my books and artwork. Then she stopped in front of the small bar Faith had set up one day when I was out of town and that I had never gotten rid of, uncorked a bottle of scotch and poured herself a glass. Fuck. No way she is 21. All I needed was to transport her across state lines and I could manage a potential trifecta of illegality. She sipped down half of it in one go then held out the glass to me. I guess my instincts were starting to return a little so I took the glass, brushing my fingers along hers as I took it, then matched her drink to empty it.

She stepped a closer. So close I thought she would kiss me but instead she purred that it was very good scotch and could we take the bottle to bed. I nodded, again unable to speak somehow, picking up the bottle and switching the empty glass to the same hand so I had one free. That hand I extended and she took it so I could lead her to the bedroom. Once we reached the room she took the bottle and glass from my hand and poured another drink as she kicked off her shoes under a chair. I finally found my voice. "We don't have to... do anything." She smiled again and fixed me with a look as she sipped from the glass and set the bottle and glass on the nightstand. When she turned around again she reached down to grasp the hem of her t-shirt and pull it up and over her head. "I MEAN I just wanted to get to know you! We don't have to..." Oh Jesus. White cotton bra.

I swallowed again as she unsnapped her pants and slid her fingers under the band. "I don't think you've been slumming around searching for me for the last 4 days just to 'get to know each other'".

"I think I need to sit down." I motioned to the edge of the bed. Not just a white cotton bra but matching panties. She handed me the glass and when I had taken a sip, she set it on the nightstand again. Then she kneeled in front of me as casually as if this was something she did every day (not something I wanted to think about). No self-consciousness at all. She untied my sneakers and pulled them off, setting them aside, then ran her hands up the backs of my calves and the fronts of my thighs. When she leaned forward to kiss me it was like I snapped out of a stupor. Oh god. Her lips. Her lips on mine. The softness. The trace of scotch and coffee and donut. I fell back onto the bed, pulling her with me and rolled her onto her back, stripping off my clothes as I did so with no small amount of assistance from her.

I wanted to take my time, make slow languid love with her and at the same time I wanted to be inside her right at that moment. I literally didn't know how I could wait even a minute or two. I could feel her wet through her panties against my hip and hear her moaning as we kissed. Or maybe that was me. I was nearly crying with the effort of bringing our bodies together fully naked and it had been maybe three minutes since the first kiss. I didn't want to scare her but I wanted her so badly. I kept curling my fingers in the comforter to keep from moving too fast and she was grasping at my skin, pulling me closer, wrapping her legs around mine and pressing against me. One of us was whimpering or maybe both and she finally pulled away from the kiss to grasp my head with the flat palms of her hands. I thought for a moment she was going to say to stop but she smiled that amazing smile and whispered what did she have to do to have me inside her.

Nothing. Nothing else. I entered her slowly against all my instincts that wanted to take her and make her mine now and never let her go. She hissed as I did so and again when I added a second finger. Her head was thrown back and I kissed the soft part of her neck to feel her shudder. When we were out at the bar, Faith and Dawn had teased me that Tara might not even be gay. She was gay. No one could fake ... she was so wet, so responsive. She screamed my name as she climaxed and again and again.

I could have stopped then. I swear. I'm no softie or I didn't think so but I could have stopped. Held her. Watched over her sleeping. She was making incoherent muttering noises that sounded like a combination of prayers, curses, surprise, and my name and I was just grateful that my name was included every once in a while. Like I had done when we first entered the room I again began lamely trying to back out of this... this whatever. She only smiled that sexy confident smile again and agreed. "Ok." And then I was on my back and she was between my legs and ... Jesus... no wonder she had that confident smile. She was magic. It was like nothing I had ever felt or known. Her mouth was doing things I had never even heard of or it felt like it and when she entered me I literally cried out. I might have been saying her name over and over or Fuck or Damn or Please or God. I don't know. I can't even imagine how many times I climaxed and when I said no more she agreed again "Ok" and then brought me to delicious painful climax again.

It's possible that she only took a break because she needed a bathroom break or the drink she poured when she returned. She laughed that I hadn't moved an inch and ran her fingertips along my spine and I whimpered pathetically again. I felt something wet on my lower back and realized that she had drizzled the scotch on my skin and was licking it off, her hand cupping me between the legs again and I gave in to whatever she wanted for as long as she wanted.

I don't know how long we went on. It felt days but must have been hours. It was almost like a contest between us as one of us would bring the other to 10 or 20 or 20,000 climaxes and the other would take that as a challenge to reach 30,000 or 40,000 climaxes next. Or it felt like that.

I glanced at the clock and it was gone 5:00 when she reached for the pillow that we'd long since knocked from the bed and tucked it under our heads. I wrapped my arms around her as tightly as I could and thought I asked her to stay but perhaps I was dreaming when I said that.

I knew she was gone the moment I woke up. I shot my hand out but she was not in the bed and I knew she wouldn't be in the shower or the kitchen. I searched anyway. She had showered, putting everything back where she found it. Eaten a bagel by the looks of it and washed the plate and knife, putting them in the dish drainer. The bottle of scotch was back on the bar and the glass washed and returned as well.

The only signs she had ever been here were her smell on my hands, the soreness I felt in every muscle in my body, and the small sketch of me sleeping she left under my cell phone which now showed 13 missed calls and 7 messages. None of them would be from her.
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Re: Random Bits - Finding Tara - Part I - 06/05/2012

Postby Ariel » Tue Jun 05, 2012 4:31 pm

DIBS!!!! :whip :whip :whip (I bagged a Deb Story! I bagged a Deb Story! :bounce :eatme :pinky :banana :party :pinky :bounce

"13 calls and 7 missed messages and none of them would be from her." Oh, wow! Punch to the gut ending! :clap :clap :clap

Love your writing, you write layered emotions - titillation, shyness, need, guilt, awkwardness . . . layered into this amazing first person who is your Willow.

The love scene almost broke my Hot-O-Meter and I'll have to buy a replacement because I see danger ahead! You are one of the great writers of smut! :bow :bow :bow

So don't leave us hanging! And please accept my apology for late f/b - haven't been on the board since I dibs'd the curse of R/L!

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Re: Random Bits - Finding Tara - Part I - 06/05/2012

Postby Grimm » Tue Jun 05, 2012 5:15 pm

* Takes DEEP breath*

That was fucking AWESOME!

I have worked in Law Enforcement for the last 12 years. So, the references to the crimes Willow thought she was commiting had me in tears. I'm reading this in my school Library and the part where she imagined the waitress wanting to report her to the child pornography hotline almost got me tossed out for LITERALLY laughing out loud!

How could Willow not ask her age?....Probably because the truth would be a deal breaker (if Tara was a minor...which she isnt?). I can't wait to find out Tara's story. Obviously she researched Willow. So, she can't be a total street kid since she has access to a computer and the net.

This is one of the funniest/sexxxiest things Ive read in ages. I can't wait for more!
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