I wish I could explain it in a way you would understand. I know I don't always come across like I hope I will, so I am trying again...
If you are putting something up online, you have to learn to take negative criticism, not just nice parts. I didn't want more during the whole post, I just thought that particular part needed MORE. I just wanted to feel what they felt. The amazement for Tara with Willow totally understanding without her having to say anything. Willow being amazed that she is so deep inside Tara that she can barely tell where she ends and Tara begins. I liked the rest, honest I did, and I have no reason to protect your feelings, as it seems I've already hurt them. You usually use really good discription and that particular part lacked it. I like to be immersed in a story, and I was following so closely, and for some reason that part pulled me out and made me feel critical. It didn't seem finished to me, at least not as finished as the rest of the post... I thought I had backed my opinion up better than I did...
I go to some websites that people just respond with a simple "you suck," if someone doesn't do something perfect. I wanted to HELP, it wasn't to be vengeful, or make you feel bad, just to help you improve a skill you already have.
I'm sorry if it made you feel bad, it honestly wasn't meant that way. But I won't lie and say something is "totally amazing" if I thought it could have been better. If you would have wrote a fight scene, and said "Buffy quickly defeated her foes." I would have asked for more, and to me this is not any different. Love scene, action scene, I want to feel in it.
Even with my negativity towards that part it was still a much better scene than TONS I've read, and I know you have a some potential to improve (if writing is something you want to improve upon) I'm just trying to point out how I think you could have made it better. If everyone just tells you you are awesome all the time, how do you improve? I just don't like making people feel bad, so I am trying to make you understand when I'm not so fresh from reading it. I have a bit of a "get the feelings out now!" complex, so if I don't like something and feel compelled to say something I just do, without to much thought.
Again I am apologizing for any offense I may have caused, and I hope this doesn't fall on deaf... erm eyes. Sometimes I come across more mean/mad/offended than I really am and that may have been the case on this one. I hope you can take what I said and use it, instead of taking offense to it and not listening because it isn't what you want to hear. I didn't mean it as a personal attack.
I don't criticize a fic if I don't like it, or a writer if I think they are wasting their time writing. I only make suggestions if I care enough to say so. If one of my friends would have shown me the same scene, written by them, I would have said the same thing, just probably in a more "erm, um, uh, yeah, so you uh..." way. I tend to be bolder online, more to the point. Sometimes too to-the-point. Re-reading what I wrote, it was harsh, harsher than I intended for sure. I could have said it in a nicer way, and this is my attempt, I hope you accept an apology from me...
I could get on my knees to apologize but alas I fear that would be a tad too... suggestive, so I'll just say I'm sorry for offending you while sitting down.
Paige.
"I'm gonna kiss you, okay?"-Me
"Okay,"-The girl I love