my scribbles (poems and fics)

[tiredsoul]

I liked this a lot. I love the shorter poems mostly 'cause fewer words seem to convey much more. Can't wait to read more.



--celia

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[mollyig]

Thanks tiredsoul.



I'm tinkering with a poem at the moment, its darker, and I'm not entirely happy with it, so won't post it just yet.

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[tiredsoul]

dark can be good. I understand the "entirely not happy with it" line. Usually I hate everything I write. I'm my worst critic.

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[thehighpriestess]

It must indeed be magic Mollyig, I have to use so many words to do what you do in so few ......sulking now

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[ninjitsugrrl]

Mollyig - Don't know how I missed an update to your thread. I must be slipping! Love the newest poem! It has a great rhythm. It just flows as you read it.

"What you held in your hand,/what you counted and carefully saved,/all this must go so you know/how desolate the landscape can be
between the regions of kindness.." - Naomi Shihab Nye


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[mollyig]

You're right tiredsoul dark can be good. The Celt in me loves angst!



Ah Priestess, it isn't really magic so much as laziness!



Thanks ninjitsugrrl, I liked the pace of it too,

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[Scout]

mollyig

Quote:

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...But you know they say a picture tells a thousand words (and yes that is a hint for another Miss Kitty cartoon!)

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heehee...I just saw that. The next one is written, now I just have to draw it. Thank you for the motivation to do so!



Your last two poems were so wonderful. I love how you captured Tara's shyness and Willow's good fortune in being the one that Tara opens up to. And the Hush poem really captured the power of that moment. For such a short scene, it really packed a wallop!



Thanks again!

[Tulipp]

Nice, Mollyig. I always like your internal rhymes, in this case "evoke" and "cloak," also the repetition of T words in the first line. Nice.



Btw, how was the concert? I got to see the IG at a free concert in the park in June, and they were, as they always are, great. Then I met a couple of women, and the subject of music came up, and so the subject of the IG came up, and one of them said "Oh, the Indigo Girls. I'm not a fan," in a really disparaging voice. I don't think I can be friends with her now. I really don't.

[funkyasian]

just read through the entire thread...and wanted to tell you bravo... - i'm not usually a poetry reader...but yours really captured me...thank you so much for sharing it...



steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[Drakkenfyre]

Okay Marion. I give up..you win. I lay down my pen at your feet...You rock!! That was absolutely wonderful!!

"In my world there are people in chains and we ride them like ponies."

[thehighpriestess]

I rest my case! You cannot be a mere mortal and write such amazingly emotive pieces as you do.

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[mollyig]

I'm sitting here blushing madly and grinning like a fool!



You say the nicest things oh lovely Priestess! Thanks. I actually wrote most of that while stuck in a traffic jam the other evening.

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Indigo Girls

[thehighpriestess]

I only speak the truth, and if it makes you blush then you just don't hear the truth enough! Well in that case I bow down to the great muse that is the traffic jam - so why when I'm stuck in traffic do I just get smelly fumes coming from the other cars and angry old men with no patience?



So, you going to write some more soon?? Phurlease??

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[mollyig]

Thanks (even though I'm blushing even more now!).



I commute by bus, so when I'm stuck in a traffic jam I don't have to pay attention to the other drivers and such, and can just let my mad little mind wander - and it does!



Anyway, you can write in your sleep - now that's an accomplishment!

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[thehighpriestess]

Hehehe, you really think so? It's scary when you open up a notepad to suddenly find a poem scrawled there - and then you have to decipher it!

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[mollyig]

Isn't automatic writing a sign of possession?



I'm surprised actually that I've never written in my sleep, as I do other things. Bit of a sleepwalker I am.

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[tiredsoul]

This almost made me cry.



Kinda of rubberbanded my emotions. To be scared of the darkness and yet welcome it, powerless against either emotion. Wow!



Favorite line is the first "Darkness consumes the already dimmed light"



--celia

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[Tulipp]

GORGEOUS. I think this might be your best one yet. Internal rhmes always, and in this one I really see the enjambments more, and that works: Willow's emotions are to conflicted and too large with grief to be contained by a single line here, and that comes through so well.



Also, I think I like this one because it's just a little longer, and that gives you time to really develop the light image. Although in the beginning, darkness is merely the opposite of light, by the end Darkness has taken on a personality; it is sinister and breathing, an animal that torments. Wow. And Willow, sitting in a corner of her own dark mind, the prey. Really moving.

[mollyig]

Tiredsoul Is it wrong that I felt smug that I almost made you cry? Thanks so much. The line you quoted just popped into my head when I was on the bus, so I took out my ever present notebook and scribbled what I thought I wanted to be conveyed, and it all went on from there.



Tulipp I was really happy with this one, I let out a little yelp of satisfaction when it all came together (which earned me a few strange looks from fellow passengers!), so it pleases me immensely that you think its my best one yet. Thanks!

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[thehighpriestess]

Hey, I tried to post this yesterday, but the board had gone down Possession hey? So that's what it is Explains a lot! I can't wait for a new poem from you

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[funkyasian]

that poem was amazing...i'm in awe...and completely gripped with sadness...but still the awe part prevails...





steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[Drakkenfyre]

Hey sweetie...let's see, I know the word WOW is way overused but I am going to go with it anyway. So, what is up with us...you are writing the dark stuff now and I am writing the poems about love??? What a switch!!

"In my world there are people in chains and we ride them like ponies."

[mollyig]

Priestess, you didn't have to wait long!



Steph Aw! I'm happy you're in awe! Thanks so much!



Laura thank you. I'm back to the light stuff again . . .

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Rocked by loss -

I am adrift, guideless.

Swimming in uncertainty,

swirling in darkness.



Then hope on the horizon.

Her light shone sure -

reeling me to safe harbour.

Anchoring me willingly.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[TheWhiz]

Another beautiful poem mollyig! How do you do it?? Please send me some of your inspiration!

Loved the way you conveyed the feeling of being lost 'I am adrift, guideless' and then being found 'Anchoring me willingly'.



I always look forward to seeing your work!

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[ninjitsugrrl]

What a lovely and hopeful poem! Well done.

"What you held in your hand,/what you counted and carefully saved,/all this must go so you know/how desolate the landscape can be
between the regions of kindness.." - Naomi Shihab Nye


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[tiredsoul]

Ooohh, I like this. The likeness to the sea used beautifully.



And, yes, you should be smug that you almost made me cry with the last one. That's a good.



--celia

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[mollyig]

TheWhiz Yup, lost and found is the theme of that one, and of many of my poems now that I think of it. I don't know why I'm so creative lately. I'm actually working on a second part to the story I wrote months ago, and I have a few other little lines of poetry dancing around in my head too. It probably won't last, so I'll just enjoy it while it does.



ninjitsugrrl Thanks so much! I was happy with this one.



tiredsoul I wanted to show lost and found, and that just struck me as a good way to do it. Thanks muchly!

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[thehighpriestess]

Edited to say: now I've got over your amazing talent, this poem is fantastic, and yay, happiness *starts to stamp foot on the floor whilst requesting MORE, MORE, MORE....please*

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

Edited by: thehighpriestess at: 8/25/02 2:54:01 pm

[Drakkenfyre]

Marion, I really don't know what to say on this poem. The emotions are raw and at the surface. Confronting us to see the pain. My dark side loves but my new side just well...*hugs you tight* Thought you might need a dragon sized hug. Well done.

I am the dragon that hides from the sun and flies in the moonlight.

[mollyig]

Thanks Laura, I wrote that this morning having spent last night being hammered by a migraine and plagued with unsettling dreams, so actually I needed that hug.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls