New Fic: Into the Stars

[justin]

This is a very good story



The interaction between Willow and Tara in this part was fun to read. So what do Alide and Tobias want with Willow?



Looking forward to reading more.

Postel's Prescription: Be generous in what you accept, rigorous in what you emit.

[bindingwiccan]

Back in the doorway, Tara felt her breath catch as she stood silent and Willow finally finished her panicked speech. Willow’s eyes were damp with tears, but Tara felt the great spark behind them and it made her pulse quicken. Those eyes were a forest, a deep, cool wood full of shade and sun and life. Those eyes were trying to tell her a story, trying to pull her in, trying to sing to her.

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awesome part in the story. very interesting and it makes me fidgit waiting for the update but no rush hehe very good



much love,

bindingwiccan

[Grimlock72]

update...



Ok, so Tara had some serious message to tell Willow.. but she didn't get the switch from 'casual' to 'serious' quite right now did she ? Seemed rather abrupt. Let's hope Willow will most remember that Tara comforted her and cared when she fell, as opposed to being a 'hard' warrior or something.



On reading both Willow and Tara's thoughts, it seems like they're more than just one year apart. Especially Willow appears 'younger', more childish in some aspects, compared to Tara. Should be interesting how that balances out, Lord knows Tara needs some childish stuff to lighten up her life .



I have to wonder why Tobias thinks Willow will just sign on for another mission. I think he kind of forgot to thank her for the first one to start with. If the next mission has Willow being close to Tara, I doubt Willow will complain much :-)



Grimmy

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"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

[TemperedCynic]

Wow!!! I was right, the action has picked up. So Tara is really here to bring Willow into the light of her destiny. I wonder how our redhead will react to that news, especially coming from Alide, Tobias and Tara. Can Willow handle wha she hears? Will she blame Tara for bringing her this news? So many questions! Please continue.

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More than any other time in history, mankind faces a crossroads. One path leads to despair and utter hopelessness. The other, to total extinction. Let us pray we have the wisdom to choose correctly. Woody Allen (1935 - )

[sabina]

Hi there



That was a great update



Now I'm really curious to know which role is Willow going to play in the war... And of course I'm also curious to see how will Willow's and Tara's relationship progress



More soon?

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"I know I was born and I know that I'll die.

The in between is mine.

I am mine!" - Pearl Jam

[bluemote]

Hello kittens, well just in case I haven't grovelled enought please accept a large dose of very intense grovelling and replies to your lovely feedback.



it's so nice that you all took the time to leave a reply and i'm so sorry it's taken so long for me to get back to you... *grovels more*



i hope to have part 11 up fairly soon, but it's turning out kind of long. hope you have all been enjyoing anyway



so anyways, thanks so much and here come the replies:



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SuperMandy13 Thanks so much for your earlier feedback, I hope you are still reading and enjoying. I am sorry to you for not replying earlier, it's so nice to get feedback and here I am being pathetic and taking ages to get back to you all. i grovel very much at your feet, and hope that I haven't lost you altogether. And thanks very much again for your comments, I'm very glad that you like.



MarildaSo glad you are enjoying - hope you haven't given up because of my feeble organisational skill and that you like the more recent parts too. Thanks!



shuyaku hi there, thanks so much for your encouragment, i hope that my willow/tara flows too! Hope you have enjoyed the rest of the story, if you kept reading, and love your signature!



justin THANKS! thanks for the feedback, and glad you are enjoying. hope to reveal what alide and tobias want soon..... thanks again



sabina, THANK YOU Wow, thanks so much for all your feedback, hope you are still enjoying, and all my apologies for not responding sooner to your lovely comments. I am honoured to be the cause of a happy dance too!



I know it seems harsh the way Willow was treated when she returned with Tara, i'm not quite sure why it played out that way in my head, but there are 'darker forces' afoot i guess, and i'm trying to make things ominous... The next part of the story, which is getting kind of long, should go quite a way to explaining some of the mystery of how Willow is involved in the war...



the falling off chairs is in memory of my teenage years, which involved a lot of falling down, particularly in the presence of beautiful women... oh dear... Thanks again so much, and much grovelling in your direction, wherever that may be...



bluewillowwitch THANKS! So glad to find that you're keen to find out what's going to happen. And thanks for all your encouragament - it's very sweet And see above post for the falling off chairs reference



grimmy WOW! You are leaving such good feedback and I'm very impressed.Thanks so much Also very glad that you keep reading, and that you like. I've got lots of feedback to yours, so i'm just going to put it all here, feel free to get mad if i repeat myself, i'm already suffering from large amounts of bad-writer non reply guilt if that helps



um, so, the whole 'sir' thing is a reference to the fact that at the Base, there isn't really many gender role issues, in that pilots are equally male and female, as are soldiers etc. 'sir' is just the general term for someone higher up than you in this situation, i know it sounds a bit funny, but i really don't like 'ma'am' for some reason... i don't like avocados either, so maybe it's that...





i'm glad you like the childhoods and adventure thing... there's definitaly lots of scope for the 'mutual support' thing, ahem.



willow making the mistakes is a big thing for her - as she is desperate to start training properly as a pilot, or anything really. willow has easily proved herself to the more senior members of the base, and is frustrated at being treated like a kid, even though she still pretty much is. i think that's why Mala joking about it didn't help... um, that and being distracted very much by tara



as for the last part, as you said, Tara really didn't make the switch from being nice to giving her message very well. i think that's tied up with the 'young' thing. in this fic, i would say that tara is older than willow, but not by much (maybe a few years). however, they're both pretty young, which is why they maybe aren't handling all of this very well. tara has also been through a lot recently (which should become clearer very soon) and is very tired and confused. Tobias' behaviour is also something that will be dealt with, and something that willow is very confused about...



so, hope that is ok, and thank you SO much for all your feedback - it's so great to get such insightful comments and i'm very pleased that you've kept following this fic. hope you enjoy the rest...



sarabiga THANK YOU TOO Thanks for you comments, i'm so glad you like. also pleased in contribution to christmas presents. um, i'm afraid i use 'magick' rather than 'magic' because i just, um, like the way it looks better. sorry, if it's really making you worried i can change it - i feel the same about 'aluminium' being spelt 'aluminum' so don't worry.



and yes, my ego is feeling wonderful from your recomendation to a friend, but i will pop it soon before i cant get out the door. thanks so much for your nice comments, it's very sweet of you



and yes, willow is being terribly goofy, although hopefully she will redeem herself soon... and her and tara will be able to help with their tough worlds...



sabina THANKS! Wow, thank you for all your feedback, especially when i am a lousy reply to feedback person. but no more, from now on i will be better i promise. but, gosh, it's really very nice to hear what you think, thank you.



i hope things will become clearer soon about what role willow plays, and how that fits in with tara. i'm trying to be mysterious, but i might have to give that up before i confuse myself... which isn't hard...



so again, thanks, and i hope very much that you keep reading.





lipkandy THANKS! Thanks so much for your feedback, it's very nice of you. i'm glad you like the characters, i'm very worried about my dialogue skills, but hopefully i can avoid that... and i always see tara as a hero, a proper saving the world type, which she will be in this. and, um, see above for the falling out of the chair issues i have, i should try for the olympics in 'falling out of things'



also, really like your website for your band, enjoyed the tracks i listened to!



TemperedCynic THANK YOU! Thanks for your feedback, and for saying hello in the chatroom. i'm afraid my connection here dosen't approve of chatrooms, so i don't get to hang around for very long! and i am very floored by your comments, so i'll just blush and hope that you like reading the rest and still like it.



i don't think willow will blame tara for the news she is going to get, but it's going to be a shock... i hope you enjoy, and thanks so much for your feedback.



bindingwiccan THANK YOU hope you are not fidgeting too much, apologies for all my delays. i'm really glad you are enjoying and that you liked the 'forest eye' part. i was a bit worried that i was getting a little carried away, but hey, that's the fun part right? anyways, thanks again so much, and i hope you keep reading.



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well, i hope very much i included everyone

thanks again, and hope to have new parts up within this week

take care,



bluemote

[janedoe]

Hey you're doing a great job on this fic! It reminds me of one of my favorite books (Ender's Game) a bit- except this has Willow and Tara so it's better! But I was wondering how old they are in the fic right now?

[shuyaku]

Yup - still reading and enjoying muchly School is making me crazy and seriously affecting my feedback time Ooh, look a new and very appropriate emoticon! I'm kinda in lurker mode, but definitely loving this story.



You can thank AntigoneUnbound for my sig

Oh God, Willow—you’re giving me the gift of Karen Carpenter. Just when I think I grasp the full extent of your love." - Tara

"Why do birds suddenly appear? It’s because, you are queer…" - Willow (Gods Served and Abandoned by AntigoneUnbound)

[SaraBiga]

I really loved your last update! I'm a slow writer myself, so I'll never bother you about that... and I know how it feels when you fear the interaction or the dialogues aren't going to work out as you'd like... but you really did a great job on dialogues and stuff, and the interaction felt just like ... magic. Seriously, it really felt special to me.

And the bit about the wood was soo sweet, you know, I've never thought about Willow's eyes as emerald green, because Aly's are brown-green, just as mine, and just as a wood actually, and I love woods... and I'm going to stop babbling.

Don't worry about the 'k' in the magic word, I think I'm getting used to it... yeah, I still hate it, but I can cope with it if you like it best!

I know it sounds weird, so I'm going to explain it. Here in Italy you rarely use the letter k, 'cause it's not in our alphabet, but it's often used by kids to substitute the hard 'c' sound (it sounds just the same) and look cool and rebelious and trendy. Sure I did it when I was a kid, but more than ten years have passed and you'd think they got tired at it, but now media try to make it a trendy new thing, so if it was boring now it starts to be annoying... That's the origin of my 'k' allergy, so you see, you have nothing to do with it...

[bluemote]

hi guys!



once again i am pathetic. i'm afraid my super duper plan that i had planned for this fic has just, um, melted. and now i am stuck...



anyways, here's a little chapter, and some thank you's for your feedback. hope you enjoy, and hopefully i will get my act together and get back on track...



janedoe thanks for your reply, i'm glad you are enjoying.



i'm not sure how old willow and tara are in this fic, willow isn't quite sure of her age, because she was found when she was young. she's probably around 18 or so. tara is a bit older i think, or at least she's had to grow up pretty fast. i put her in her early 20's. hope that helps, and enjoy the rest



shuyaku thanks very much! i understand completely about the school = crazy and all those essays get in the way of writing more fun things...



sarabiga again, thanks for the great feedback. i'm glad you are enjoying and don't think i'm being too cheesy....



i appreciate the k thing.. lots of places in britain do that too - put 'k' in things to be cool, and i normally don't like it. i do like it in magic though, but maybe i'll take turns in which one i use. sound better?



anyways, thanks again for the feedback, and i hope i am not being too annoying by being so slow



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Into the Stars: Part 11: The Test



Willow is sitting on the dark red couch and staring at her boots. The room reminds of her of the day with the computer long ago, the day when the puzzles in her mind had locked into something useful. The day she had joined the people of the Base and done something for them, the day she found her place.



For the past day and night she has been tested by Tobias and Alide in the magic rooms. They have given her books to translate, spells to interpret, puzzles to solve. She has scratched out answers with inky fingers; fought the tired haze of her mind to recall long lost translations; spent hours identifying and attempting to channel with unknown crystals. All the time she could feel the touch of their minds with hers, the slight push at the edge of her consciousness that hinted at their presence.



And now, what she thought was her place is gone, her stability lost. She couldn’t fathom the tests, couldn’t see what she was supposed to find or do. For the first time, she has left puzzles unsolved, unrecognised even. Her mind feels terribly cramped, any trace of magic gone, any trace of understanding vanished.



Willow feels young, she feels tiny. The great doubt she had forgotten when Virid befriended her has crept back into her chest, the hazy panic of childhood has returned with sharp edges. Her face pales in the dark as she begins to remember….



‘Willow?’



Looking up, Willow sees Tara, sees the brightness of her hair in the dark room and hears the softness returned to her voice. She smiles as the taller woman moves towards the couch and her own thoughts halt their dangerous reminiscence.



‘Do they want me to go through again?’ Willow asks.



‘N…No.’ Tara’s voice is low and tired, tense.



‘Do you know when…?’ Willow’s question trails out as Tara shakes her head.



Willow’s eyes shine green in the gloom despite the negative answer, her trust falling into Tara. She waits for an explanation, but none arrives. Eventually, she returns to staring at her boots as the shadows in the room grow deeper. While the darkness spreads, a heavy silence grows between the two women.



‘Sorry,’ Tara’s apology is infinitely quiet but squeezes a whole spectrum of meaning into a little word.



It is enough for Willow, more than enough. The kindness of Tara’s voice wriggles into her heart, pushes into her tired confusion and releases the tight grip of her worry. Before she realises, her eyes are full of tears, her voice caught halting somewhere in her chest.



‘I, I don’t understand… I didn’t understand those tests, I… I couldn’t do them, and I didn’t meant to fail, I… I just couldn’t do them, I…’



Tara’s heart clenches at the sight of the smaller girl so sad, so confused. The energy she feels from the redhead is wildly disturbed, tinged dark with memory and unhappiness.



‘Willow’, she says the name again, the word rolling soft from her mouth.



Tara draws closer to the redhead, kneels in front of her by the couch. She is lost in Willow’s eyes, their troubled green drawing her in, and before she realises her movement, her hands are resting on Willow’s slim shoulders.



‘Willow, please,’ Tara’s voice is low and calm, determined to help. ‘It’s ok, really, it’s alright. You don’t need to worry about those tests, they were fine, you were fine. I p…promise’.



Tara feels fear through the thin material of Willow’s tunic, feels the tight bones of worry under her hands. She presses down without thinking, focusing energy towards the redhead in front of her, longing to shift the fear and darkness from Willow’s eyes.



Without warning Willow feels it, they both feel it. A sudden catch of energy, grasping and holding between them, twined, twisted, linked. Willow is falling again, pushed under and held up by Tara’s hands on her shoulders, the bubbles in her chest returning to fizz and swirl. She feels something inside her burning through her skin, pushing her blood fast, loosening her breath. Her hands move without thinking, she is grasping Tara’s arms at the elbows, then pulling back to cover Tara’s hands with her own. The contact jolts her heart, yanks the fall into a spin, and Willow knows she is lost.

[TeesEmmy]

I'm really glad to see this fic is back in business...

I read it quite some time ago and fell in love with it. Im very interested to see what's going to happen next. Please update soon??

xoxo

Emms

Edited by: TeesEmmy at: 3/6/04 1:38 pm

[sabina]

It's great to see this story back. It is such a great story



So Willow is being tested on magic? I wonder why she hasn't been doing very well...

Maybe she needs Tara to help her to discover her power?



I felt really sorry for Willow, it must be killing her to be doing bad at those tests... Good thing she has Tara to cheer her up



I really love this story and I hope you will overcome your writer's block soon.



More soon? Please?

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"I know I was born and I know that I'll die.

The in between is mine.

I am mine!" - Pearl Jam

[Grimlock72]

Nobody said she did BAD at those tests. Willow didn't understand the purpose of the tests, as such she can't determine if she failed or succeeded at them



I'm developing a rather strong dislike towards Tobias and Alide, with their not telling Willow anything (they basicly just push Willow around to their own liking it seems). Surely they have figured out by now Willow would respond in a not-so-good way ? Poor Willow is insecure as is, thats not something to be toyed with. I feel verrrry sorry for Willow, poor girl.



I wonder what Tara was doing there. Assuming Alide and Tobias did whatever tests they liked, did Tara just stay around for the day&night ?? For that matter WHERE is Willow anyway, not in her room I guess...



Willow needs to be given a problem, not a solution (she would make a horrible foot-soldier :-). Testing someone raw for 24-hours sounds rather not-nice as well... definitly not liking Alide or Tobias at the moment, nope. Thank God at least Tara is around to stand up for Willow, someone has to.



Besides, isn't it rather risky to test someone for magic stuff without properly training them first ?? Don't want the base to go BOOOOM! If I may propose a suitable teacher... heh....



Story doesn't appear all that 'molten' to me really, it can still go a number of different ways. Can't help you with writers-block and such, sorry.



Grimmy (patiently waiting for the next monthly update :-)

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"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

Edited by: Grimlock72 at: 3/6/04 11:56 am

[Big Dummy]

Yay, an update! I've been loving this fic in silence for some time (at least, I don't think I've commented before...better go check). So Willow failed the tests? Interesting. I wonder what the tests were for? I have a suspicion that maybe she didn't entirely fail them.



Question: I noticed that the tense changed in this segment, from past to present. Have you decided to change it overall, or is it for effect, an extra means of really getting into Willow's mind and emotions?

[TemperedCynic]

Well, first - You are not pathetic. Many writers on Pens have writer's block. Maybe you need to step back and re-think the story - come at it from a fresh perspective. Then you will be ready with new ideas.



Second, thank you for the comments. It's a shame you cannot visit us more often in Chat - you make a fine addition to us morally-upstanding Kittens (heavy on the sarcasm there).



Poor Willow is so lost here. Her thoughts tend to stray towards the dark chapters of her youth. Tara's energy brings on a new level of confusion - Willow now has deep feelings for the blonde. Looks like Willow will need to sort things out quickly, and grow up even faster than normal. Such is the burdon of all heroes.



There is a lot to explore yet - Willow's youthly experiences and why she cannot remember. Tobias's and Alide's reasons for keeping Willow's destiny a secret, Tara's role in this mess, and how all of this will set the universe on it's collective ear. I look forward to reading more - just take your time.

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More than any other time in history, mankind faces a crossroads. One path leads to despair and utter hopelessness. The other, to total extinction. Let us pray we have the wisdom to choose correctly. Woody Allen (1935 - )

[bluemote]

hi guys



i'm very glad you are all still reading! and thank you all so much for your feedback - i've left replies in the next post



well, i think i've 'unblocked' a little, so while it's still fresh - here's part 12.



and *coughcough* the tense changes are a little strange but they just felt right. i'm not sure how long it will continue, so i hope it's not too annoying!



Into the Stars: Part 12: The knowing



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Imagine the room is frozen.



Imagine two figures in the doorway, watching the occupants of the room. Inside, one kneels, her arms outstretched, head tilted up to towards the other sitting on a couch. The room is dark, but the two girls are lit by a slight glow from where their hands touch. The light is blue, then green, then some impossible and beautiful middle colour. It shifts without moving, but is never the same. It is mesmerising- it is impossible not to watch.



The pair in the doorway watch.



They know what they see. The see a connection, they see a link. They see something stronger than they had hoped. But most of all, they see magic. Strong magic.



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Alide tries not to breathe. Her tall frame is absolutely still as she watches Tara and Willow connect. Her shock is ebbing, replaced by a wild hope. She feels rather than sees a tiny glance from Tobias and nods her consent that this is, in fact, what they have been waiting for all along.



‘There is a connection, a strong one. There is hope for Tara to realise what she might do, what she might be. And now there is a path for Willow, a need, a reason for her power.’ Alide reasons slowly in her mind, silently communicating her thoughts to Tobias. ‘ There is hope against the conglomerate. They will give us hope. ’



There is the tiniest of movements and then the doorway is empty, its two figures leaving in respect to the scene playing out in front of them.



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Willow watches Tara, unable to move, unable to comprehend the feelings crashing inside her. She is barely aware of the changing light surrounding them as she watches Tara’s eyes and feels their fingers twine and spark.



Tara is stunned, her eyes darkened with emotion and magic. Willow’s hands on hers are the most right feeling she can know, the beginning of knowing anything.



‘This is it. This is it. This is what I was looking for. What I need, what we all need.’ Tara blinks as her thoughts return and tears drip quiet down her cheeks as a huge pressure lifts from her heart.



‘Willow,’ Tara’s smile spreads as she breaks from the spell of Willow’s eyes. Her heart is dancing, her whole body tingles in the air of magic. ‘Willow?’ she asks again, gently waiting for the younger girl to become aware.



Willow’s eyes widen further at Tara’s question. Her mouth opens but no sound emerges.



‘Willow, it’s ok, it’s all ok’ Tara continues, her grin widening, her tears flowing with relief. ‘You’re, you’re… Well, it’s a long story, but you’re the end, I think, um, I think we’re the end. Well, I hope, I know, I’m sure…’



‘Tara’, Willow is frowning as she stumbles back to reality. ‘You’re crying. Oh, that’s bad. Don’t want you to cry, don’t want you to….’



‘It’s ok. It’s, um, good crying, it’s all good.’ Tara interrupts. ‘And I can tell you now, I can tell you why I’m here, why we made you do all those tests, what they mean. I’m sorry I couldn’t before, I’m really sorry, I never meant to hurt you, never…’



‘Tara?’ Willow’s voice is quiet.



Tara nods, waiting for the question.



‘What… what’s this light? What’s happening when we touch? I mean, it’s good magic, I know that, I can feel… I can feel you, I can feel us, but I don’t understand how…’ Willow asks gently, not stopping their contact.



‘It’s our connection – it’s magic, but an especially strong magic. I’ve been looking Willow, I’ve been looking so long and now here it is, here you are.’ Tara falters as the immense relief floods her again. ‘I… I can’t explain how that feels, how good it is, how much hope we have now…’



‘Hope?’ Willow questions, her mind working quickly. ‘Hope against the Conglomerate?’ At Tara’s nod she continues. ‘But what can I do? I’m just a kid, just an apprentice, I mean, and you’re a famous hero, you know, very brave and fighty and everything and I’m… I’m, well, I don’t even know where I come from – how can I help you?’



Tara’s heart lurches as she hears Willow’s doubt. Her feelings are new, but so strong, she is amazed at Willow’s questioning. She knows now that Willow is special, knows that her role in fighting the Conglomerate will be crucial, knows that she gives them all a chance.



She moves closer to Willow so that she can feel the shallow breath from the redhead’s lips. She grasps Willow’s hands in her own, feeling the spark between them grow, feeling her own emotions rise above her duties in the fight against the Conglomerate and become certain. There is more than a spark; there is more than strong magic.



‘Willow’, she breathes, and the distance between them is almost gone. ‘I have powers to fight against the Conglomerate. Magic. It’s old magic, magic that needs two to make it work. Everything you do can help me. You are… you are everything I’ve been looking for. More than I ever could have hoped. I know…. I know you are. I…. I just know.’



Willow nods, feeling the emotion tangible in the air between them. She has never felt anything so strong, so true. She begins to know.



‘I want to be, Tara’, she whispers. ‘Whatever you need, I am’



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[bluemote]

thanks to everyone who reads and has the patience to wait !



TeesEmmy Thanks! and a dancing elephant too, that's made my day i'm really glad you like, hope you like the new parts too



sabina thanks again for your lovely comments. and devil cat character, obviously i need to get with the new smileys!



the tests are for a reason, but willow can handle them.. especially with tara to help hopefully Chapter 12 will explain a little



bigdummy thanks! i don't think willow failed anything either... i hope you like the new part, and thanks for writing



and, er, the tense changes. they kind of happened, and then i realised it had changed, and then i had scary flashbacks of my old english teacher getting mad at me for the same thing. but i decided it was ok, hope it's not too annyoing. it just seemed, more.... real?



Grimmy Thanks again for your great feedback. Glad you are waiting and sorry for taking so long!



um, i wouldn't be too harsh on Tobias and Alide - they have some reasons, and i think they will improve a lot soon. and willow takes things like this in her stride, even if she is upset. life on the base is pretty harsh, and willow can handle these events, the only problem being her feelings for Tara. and those should cease to be any kind of problem very soon



an no booms either , although i can understand the worry! willow has been trained, but things are just to busy for her to have all kinds of teaching. tara should be seeing to that soon though



anyway, hope you like this part, and the waits will be slower.



temperedcynic thanks, as ever, for your feedback. it's great to know you are still reading, despite my lateness



i shall do my best to join the intellectual chit chat of the board more often too!



i think that tara's news will directly relate to willow's childhood, and what happened to her and the people on her planet. still, hopefully a bit of happiness before that happens!



hope you like the new chapter, and hope to have more up soon...

[photographer02]

Wow....this story is updated again!!! YAY!!



What can I say? I love it...And no...it's not annoying...so far.



Please update soon! I'm waiting!! ray



photographer02

[bluemote]

thanks ray, glad you are enjoying i promise to try and write more soon. i am trying to decide what will happen next, as my original plan kind of went awry. i still have a plan, it's just, um, changed... *gulp*hopefully that will work out

[TeesEmmy]

Don't worry bluemote....cause...I too know the pain of a good plan gone awry Even though it's not where you were planning to go....It'll work out And I absolutely loved the update! There is so much chemistry between Willow and Tara i just want them to make with the kissing already hehehe...Im a sucker for a good kiss!....but back to my point....Please update soon??? I love this story! Woo Hoo!



xoxo

Emms

[bluewillowwitch]

bluemote ,

Okay I just caught up to all the updates and I love them! and are making with the lights I see. So what was up with all the test. I know that it has something to do with proving that is soul-mate probably but what exactlly? Can't wait to more. Update soon, please?





Grace

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"Fate keeps on happening."--Anita Loos

[shuyaku]

Wow - 2 updates! I didn't even get a chance to respond to the first one and then there is the 2nd I know your plan went awry - but whatever they are doing now certainly makes sense. Thanks for not giving up on the fic - it has loads of potential



Great updates -

- shuyaku

Oh God, Willow—you’re giving me the gift of Karen Carpenter. Just when I think I grasp the full extent of your love." - Tara

"Why do birds suddenly appear? It’s because, you are queer…" - Willow (Gods Served and Abandoned by AntigoneUnbound)

[Grimlock72]

I don't know about Alide or Tobias, they probably have reasons they deem very worthy. I just don't like people manipulating other people, irks me. Espescially since in this story Willow comes across as a scared child at times, emotional anyway... Just don't like the people taking advantage of such things even if it IS for the better of the person involved.. did that make sense ?? Guess I'm rather protective



I think whatever happens Willow should go sleep a lot first. If she really has been up and busy for the last 24 hours she clearly won't be able to think much about anything. She deserves her rest, despite the fact she doesn't know WHAT she did/does that is so nice :-)



Should be interesting how any form of magic, even when done by Tara and Willow could be powerfull enough to fight back a huge conglemerate. Looking at the scale of such a fight I can't imagine how magic could fix all that. Makes for interesting reading no doubt, heh.



Willow's usefullness to the resistance when together with Tara is good but also makes it nessecary for Tara to make sure Willow knows she doesn't just like her for the magic stuff. Tara appears to know to some degree what is going on and Willow knows nothing, obviously that needs fixing. Together with some neat explanation why she "couldn't" tell Willow, hmmm... don't like people not telling other people things because they decide they don't "need" to know. (heh, watch BtvS for LOTS of examples:-). Then again maybe Willow is really to young to handle that ? (still have the feeling she was somehow tricked into something)



In that last scene Tara really came across as much older (emotionally) than Willow. Good thing she's there to care about Willow, just make sure Willow knows the motivation.



Maybe it's simpler; I don't like to see Willow upset



Grimmy

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"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

Edited by: Grimlock72 at: 3/9/04 12:24 pm

[lil wiccan]

i just found this fic and i LOVED IT!!! it's soooo cool... now all i want to do is read more.... i can't wait to read the next part... in the mean time i'll just be going crazy waiting to see what happens next...

[Shinnen]

I'm usually not a fan of sci fi fics (the furthest I go for sci fi is probably a few episodes of Star Trek:TNG or that other series... ST: Voyager ?) So this has definitely caught my attention, I really like the extremely descriptive writing style. Gives a very vivid image for the readers. But one lil stupid question. What does a tunic look like ? I was imagining something like from the Superman comic books where they've shown what a Kryptonian suit might look like

CheerZ

Shinnen



She's the most amazing girl in the whole world. She's the only girl who makes my heart beat faster and slower at the same time. When I'm not with her, I'm not living. I'm not existing until I can hold her in my arms again.

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hello all,



thanks for all your great feedback - i'll reply in my next post, but i'm very glad that you are still reading despite my erratic *coughcough ok, just late* postings



my ideas changed again, so this is very short, but i hope, sweet... it can be chapter 12.5 because it's short



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There was the blue-green light.



There was time.



There were minutes curled upon themselves.



There were endless hours, pulsing quickly with heartbeats.



Then there were just two girls grasping hands tightly, falling and holding, pulling and landing. There was their connection. There was their breath.



A pale circle drew itself in the air thin as smoke. Looping, it moved around the two and grew stronger. Soon it was a thin paleness, then a strong silver. It vibrated with their breathing, sparkled in their eyes.



The blonde tore herself away from the other woman to watch the circle. She smiled slightly - a crooked pleasure.



“Willow?”



“Tara” The answer was tiny, made a flicker in the magic circle.



“That’s us Willow. That’s what we can make – just the beginning. It’s… it’s beautiful”



“Tara” Willow’s attention swung back towards the blonde. “Tara. We? Us? We made that? It is, its beautiful, but… you…”



“What”



“You’re more beautiful.” Willow’s eyes poured into Tara, her voice quiet and sure. Tara’s heart danced at the words, span and rose until she had no choice but to ask.



“Willow,” she paused, but she still knew, “Can I… could I… kiss you?”



The answer was given in red as Willow’s hair trembled yes, but Tara didn’t see, she could only see the green shade of Willow’s eyes, the beginning of a marvellous story.



Closer and closer until lips met, and then such a kiss that the stars sang into the wind.



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hope you enjoyed - will post again soon, and thanks again for the feedback!



xox

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[Grimlock72]

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I think thats pretty much ALL Willow is sure of at the moment. Poor girl has no idea whats happening beside her falling in love with Tara of course :-)



I still say Willow needs some real sleep first though, she did work for 24 hours right ? There will be plenty of time to talk after a good nights' sleep. Hmm... come to think of it, does Willow sleep well overall ? Or does she have icky nightmares about her youth and war-stuff ??



Grimmy

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"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

[Twisted Minstrel]

*tiptoes into thread* *looks sheepish*



Who's this rock fiend that writes so well? You are much too hard on yourself, and I am much remiss not to sit down with this sooner.



What I really enjoy about this story is (aside from the angsty sci-fi environment) - I could easily see it adapted into some glorious graphic novel or even film. Your writing is totally cinematic. You don't waste a lot of language on what only needs a few right words, and while I would love to see the 'enemy' fleshed out a bit, I think you've got a lovely saga on your hands.



I love fics that prove a little daring by taking W/T out of their 'normal' context and serve them up in new, unfamiliar places. This one is no exception. It's hard to 'put down' so to speak. You might even give these characters completely different names and we'd still recognize them - Willow is so very 'Willow' and Tara - rightly strong and mysterious (qualities she was continuously denied in the series).



I do enjoy clumsy Willow, too - being a klutz meself I can humbly relate. All the falling down rings rather true for me.



And, as I know what a busy thing you are (pubs are NOT for writing in, by the way ), I hope you may find time to continue your tale. Or at least, another Sunday chat. That would be most welcome.



Now I am off to do some of my own...



xxoo

Piper

[mollyig]

I started reading this story on my lunch break, and felt compelled to continue it. You've set up a wonderfully diverse AU. There's still so much we have to learn about what our girls have endured in the past, and what they will accomplish in the future.



Loved how you used the colours in the latest chapter, it made it even more intense.



Oh, and I thought this quote from a previous chapter was really poignant:

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Whatever you need, I am

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Lovely, thanks.

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"Love is just like breathing when it's true" Indigo Girls

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Hello kittens,



I’m so glad that you’re still reading, and thank you all for your comments. I think I might have sorted out my lack of progress, so I hope to update more regularly now that I’m rolling again. Here’s replies to your lovely feedback, Chapter 13 comes after, and thanks again…



TeesEmmy Well, hope you liked the kiss…. Thanks so much for your comments, and especially the Woo and the Hoo! and also many thanks for the understanding about the plans going awry. They just tend to slip out of my hands…



bluewillowwitch Thanks again for your lovely and splendid feedback. There’s more making with the lights to come, and I promise very soon that you’ll find out what all the tests were for. you’re on the right track though Thanks again



shuyaku Thanks for not giving up on the fic either! I’m so glad that you take the time to reply, and I hope you enjoy the update, and that it makes some sense. Thanks again



Grimmy Hi Thanks for your feedback – it’s splendid as ever. As for your concerns, Willow will get some sleep soon(ish), but too many exciting things are happening just at the moment. I hope she does too, or I think she might just kind of implode from babbling and adventures. As for bad dreams, well I think that sleeping in the arms of a certain lovely blonde might cure those…



hopefully, these next parts will make it clear that Tara likes Willow apart from the big bad fight, and she’ll start to explain what they can do to fight the Conglomerate. And I’m totally against the BTVS-style “let’s not tell anyone this very important fact for their own good. Despite the fact it will undoubtedly lead to death and disaster”. The delay is more to do with me figuring out how I’m going to set the scene! *looks sheepish* hope that helps and hope you enjoy the update, now that I have gotten my act together a little and posted a longer part *looks more sheepish. baa*



lil wiccan Glad you found, and thanks so much for replying. Hope you like the update, and that it has not been too long a wait. I am terribly disorganised, and the story kept changing in my head, but I think I’ve got a better idea now, and so hopefully will have more updates. Hope you enjoy, and thanks again



Shinnen hi and thanks so much for your feedback. I’m glad you’re enjoying, and also that it’s ok that it’s sci-fi. I don’t get to watch a lot of sci-fi due to lack of a tv, but I read it quite a lot, and somehow, this story just came out in the future… er, as for the tunic - it’s kind of like a thick shirt with no sleeves, and you would wear a shirt underneath. *is sheepish again* I mostly just like the word so I used it in this, sorry if it was confusing, and thanks again for the feedback. Hope you like the rest



piper! Thanks for reading! Oooh, I got the fear when I saw you had posted, because you know how good I think you and your writing is. But thanks for being so nice, I’m really glad you liked there’s no need for tiptoeing or looking sheepish. *looks sheepish again*, I’ve been doing that enough as it is. I hope you like this new part, and hope that it sheds some light on the big baddies. The idea has been done a lot, but when I think of big bads in the future, I think of big and giant company-type bads, which is basically what the Conglomerate is in this story.



And as for the clumsiness, well, all events are based entirely on my own experiences. *sees pretty lady, falls out of chair. repeats* now I just need to get Willow to knock over an entire table of drinks while trying to impress Tara with a witty story, and then the story will be complete.



Oh, and I may be a rock fiend, but there is little that a nice piece of granite can’t help with. Plus, I haven’t put any rocks in the story yet, and I’ve been sorely tempted, especially in the next chapter. *laments lack of geological descriptions in the next part*



Talk to you soon I hope, xox



mollygigI’m really glad you like! Hope you like the next part too, and that the explanations make sense now, better get back to my lunch too (cheese and pickle sandwich) and say thanks again i like your penguin by the way