Fic: Fractured

[tinnakaren]

Hey Marilda,



Great couple of updates, and just a great story overall. It's taken some time, yes, but it's been worth it.



First of all, I'm so glad Tara didn't run again, but instead turned around and didn't let Willow go, because after the previous update I felt she was being very unreasonable, bordering on self-righteous and hypocritical about Willow's use of magic. I can understand her reaction, and sympathize with the initial hurt, but she did leave. Any claim she had on Willow's use of magic had expired in my opinion. And it seems like she saw that too, because she stayed.



Also, Willow's using white magic right? Thanking the Goddess and all...if anything, Tara should be happy that Willow has gone back to the white side of things. Being hurt about Willow's use of dark magic is understandable and highly justifiable, being mad about her use of white magic goes back to that self-righteous and hypocritical thing I mentioned earlier.



However, I realize that in that moment of terror and quick thinking, Tara probably didn't see or feel the difference between white or dark magic at the hands of Willow, she just saw Willow and magic and the last time that happened, that magic was entirely dark, so feeling betrayed is understandable.



And I realize I've sort of talked myself into a circle here...oops.



What I'm trying to say is, I understand Tara's initial reaction, but had she run away and left Willow, I wouldn't have sympathized with her at all...so I'm so glad she stayed and gave Willow a chance, because in my opinion, Willow didn't do anything wrong.



And so yeah...great writing here. It certainly gets a reaction out of me and leaves a lasting impression

x Tinna Karen



"You're not gonna jokey-rhyme your way outta this one." - Willow in Pangs

[russ]

Hi Marilda,



It's great to see an update to this story; it's one that deserves to be completed.



Frankly, I was rather put out with Tara at the end of the previous chapter. I mean, Willow used magic to save Tara's life -- would she have preferred the alternative? It's not exactly the same as tossing power about frivolously as was happening before.



Then they both get going with the self-blame, self-loathing thing. Each blames herself for what happened, and seems to enjoy being "full of angst and regret and running around yelling "Mea Culpa" and beating his chest."



Wilow's little tangent on the subject of chest-beating brings a needed lightness to these dramatic proceedings. And I sure hope they're not too much like a Shakespearean tragedy, 'cause you know, everyone ends up dead in those.



Through all of this, we've finally come to what you in your intro. call "love in its purest form ... the falling and the getting back up." They have begun to clear the air, to discuss how much they mean to each other and how each saw and was affected by the breakup.



Like Arwen, I too loved the closing sentence. It leaves us with a sense of hope for their future growth together. Nicely done, and I'm lookiing forward to more.

Russ



When we love and give it everything we've got, no matter what the consequences, we are doing what we were put here to do -- Geneen Roth

[wimpy0729]

Oh! I remember this one!



So glad you're back!



Anyway, yes, this is much better. They need to stop with the self flagellation and move on. Life's too short, now let's get on with it!



More soon please!



Wimpy

"There was plenty of magic." ~ Tara

[Irishgrl3]

Yay... an update!



After the last chapter I so thought Tara was going to run. But yippee she stayed! The much needed talking has begun and now they can each start the healing process together.



Great job!

Edited by: Irishgrl3 at: 9/13/04 9:37 am

[mollyig]

Both have been hurt so much, so Tara's decision to remain, and Willow's heart-felt honesty, must have been difficult. I'm sure both will agree, though, that it was worth it, to get back some of the trust they once shared, and to have hope again.



Thanks for the update.

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Sheacht mh'anam déag do bhéal, do mhalaí's do ghrua

[Irene73]

Hey...

PLEASE...PLEASE...PLEASE...update soon. This is such a wonderfully written fic, I can't wait to see what occurs next.



Saluting you while holding up a glass of sparkling apple cider,

Irene



HAPPY AND SAFE NEW YEAR

[willohand]

first of HAPPY NEW YEAR from NEW YORK.

now im lurking around as i do coz you know keeping vampires hours.so im whizzing through and wait a minute. oh shit! god tell me im not just dreaming. is it? no.w-wait it

is.its 'fractured' oh god... i drop to my knees and thank every god imaginable. my breathing quickens.my heart slows down.my eyes go large with excitement.i babble,i scream,i go

freakin nuts with joy.people stop to look at me on the streets of new york with everything else going on to see what all the excitement is.i grab the nearest person wishing them a great new year and telling a crowd its back. its back.they look at me

with joy yt confusion.i get to my feet, lifting the laptop and in

a huge deep voice i cry out she`s back.she`s back.welcome to 2005 and please dont leave us again.

[Willow18]

I just read this again, and now I really, really would like to see an update. This story is too good to not continue on with the next part. Why couldn't they have done this with the show instead of-of that crap they actually did?!



*sigh* Please continue... don't make me beg. Please?

[Marilda]

Hey,



I've honestly just had a really bad night. I mean, if I were rating these things, it would be high up there. Top 5 to be sure. It's about 9:30 in the morning and I haven't slept at all, so naturally instead of actually trying to go to sleep, I got online.



I stop by the board daily because there's a couple of stories that I absolutely adore, "Neverland" comes readily to mind. After seeing that none of the ones I love have been updated, I searched the secondary pages for something to catch my attention. Imagine my surprise when I saw my fic. I thought for sure this thing would be deep in the confines of the unfinished archive by now.



I read your comments Irene73, Willohand, and Willow18, and they made me smile so much. Thanks. Sincerely, thanks. You've made my day better.



As for an update? Honestly, I wasn't planning on it. The well kind of ran dry on this one. Mostly because I have a tendency to get an idea for a story and instead of sitting down and outlining it, or structuring it all the way through, I just write and post(I may be afraid that if I wait to organize my thoughts, the thoughts will disappear). Thus, right when I get to the falling action, my story structure fizzles out on me. The gist of the matter is that I don't know if and when I plan to finish this out.



On the plus side, I think I've finally, thank God, learned my lesson and will not be posting my next fic until I've finished it all, gotten a kick-ass beta to edit it, and finally polished it up. Once it's fully complete and safe within the confines of my hard-drive, not the mention the backups on my .mac web site, will I even consider posting. Delayed gratification only takes you so far.



After I'm done with the current story, I'll look at this again and see if maybe I can repost it after it's been polished up and restructured a little. Actually, I think that is what I'll do. I love this fic so much, and it's been so cathartic for me to write, but the last 3 or 4 chapters that I wrote just didn't work for me. I'd definitely like another shot.



And boy, do I ramble. Anyway, thanks for the kind words.

[serendipitous]

Just now, I got extremely excited when I thought you had updated your fic. I even waited to see the update so that I could re-read the last few posts because it'd been a while and I had forgotten some of the details of the fic. But no update. Oh well. This was really a great fic. One of my favorites (although it seems Neverland is on the top of everyone's list as well!). Sorry to hear that you've stopped the fic but good news to hear that you might pick it up again. I'm sure many of us will be excited to see and update sometime in the future! Cheers!

[Marilda]

serendipitous -- sorry about the confusion. I'm glad to hear you liked the story. It makes me want to get back and finish it. Which is good.



As to "Neverland" being on top of everyone's list. Isn't it though? That's one amazing piece of writing. Like, novel, let's get this published and get this girl some money, kind of amazing.

[serendipitous]

I definitely agree with you there. Neverland is an unbelievable piece of writing. But, so was your story! I'm a sucker for stories with deep character development and vivid descriptions of the scenery (which I really sometimes think is just as important as the characters). I love to get lost within a story, to the point you feel like you've become a part of it. Who says you lose your imagination as you get older!

[cperrins78]

I just caught reading this amazing fic. When are we going to be graced with an update.







Christina

[TaraBaby77]

See, that's what happens when I don't stay up to date on what I'm reading. I miss all the good stories and forget where I left off reading. Well, I found this story again and got caught up and I am so happy that Willow and Tara are talking and... well, enjoying being together again. Even though there is a lot of talking to be had, at least they are talking. Great updates and sorry for not keeping up... Take care. =)

Aaron

'Tarababy77'

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"Don't buy into all the media crap. Love yourself for who you are, not what others THINK you should look like. It's DEFINITELY more important in this life to love each other despite our imperfections." - Amber Benson

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Edited by: TaraBaby77 at: 3/27/05 2:39 pm