my scribbles (poems and fics)

[jomarch]

I just wanted to pop in and say that i've read your recent poems and they are amazing. Such potent feelings and emotions. The words just leapt off the screen. Very well written and thanks for sharing. I have missed reading a lot of updates and must remeber to keep up with yours

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You must think that something is happening with you, that life has not forgotten you, that it holds you in its hand; It will not let you fall

And Death shall have no Dominion

[fudgie9]

Well Molly, this poem was so powerful and so very raw that I felt a huge ache in my heart. I like to be moved when I read things and this poem certainly moved me. Great writing, I hope you've recovered from your migraine, at least enough to be listening to the Indigo Girls. Thanks Nicole

[mollyig]

Thanks jomarch Leaping words eh? That's a bit dangerous! Seriously, I'm so very pleased that you said the emotions were potent. I love how poetry, using so few words, can convey such powerful feelings. Thanks again.



Hi Nicole Nice to see you de-lurking! Thanks so much for your comment. It's so lovely to hear (or read even) that people are moved by what I write. Headache finally lifted about an hour ago (maybe that brandy at lunch time helped) and I'm sitting here happily listening to my beloved IG - got an mp3 of a brand new Amy song so that's improved my mood no end!

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[TheWhiz]

A dark yet powerful and moving piece, mollyig. I felt many emotions whilst reading it.

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[Tulipp]

Mollyig, the last two poems....also excellent. I think your stuff is always good, but something must be going right on those bus rides because they keep getting better.



I love the one that begins "rocked by loss"; it's so tight, so compact, but not a word is wasted, and there's a real sense of image integrity, if that makes sense. I read that first line two ways...both disturbed by loss as by a wave, but also rocked in the sense of calmed or soothed, like a lullaby. It was unexpected, and the rest of the words support the first idea of being rocked, but still, it made sense to me.



And the one that starts "raw-red eyes"...the language is so careful in this one. Lots of alliteration which really works, but also a real sense that the pain that Willow is feeling is not just emotional but physical. I think that's why the alliteration is so good here...just like physical pain is an expression of emotional pain, in some way the repetition of those consonants is an expression of the repetition of Willow's grief, grief which goes on and on.



Or else I'm over-reading.

Edited by: Tulipp at: 9/10/02 9:31:50 am

[mollyig]

Thank you TheWhiz It was a tad dark, but then so was my mood at the time.



TulippI started first with the idea of being lost at sea and then found, and I worked it all around that, so I'm glad you think the image works all the way through. With regard to "rocked", I deliberately used that to be the contrast of "anchored", both having the same sound in the middle, but I like your idea too!



Re: the latest one (I'm really going to have to work on giving them names!) I like what you've suggested here, about the unending grief, and wish it was intentional! I really just wanted the "s" alliteration to elaborate the soothing. Thanks so much for your comments!

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[mollyig]

Fiery hair outshone by the burning

desire in her glowing green eyes.



My want further enflamed by the passion

I inspire, I cling to her fevered skin.



Yearning for this fervent girl, I

swirl in the smouldering sensuality.



Intensity mounts as mouths meet hungrily,

and demanding hands trail a blaze of need.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[tommo]

I've been terribly remiss in not stopping by sooner. However, I took the opportunity for some alone time today and read your works.



I think what springs out at me right away is the image of "fire". You seem to have this theme of the elements running through your poetry; I like that. They're very raw and there's no misunderstanding with them; that solidity, I think, gives some kind of basis for the love that you're writing about and it fits so perfectly with the kind of emotion that Willow and Tara have for one another. It's rooted in the very essence of what is around them, it's not lost or ethereal or shoved into that airy fairy romantic notion that I see so often in creative writing.



I also really like the dark stuff. I think too often it's easy to get caught up in how "wonderful" love is, without considering the ramifications of its darker side; particularly when it's a passion, rather than a feeling. You manage to convery that really well in so few words.



I'm not a poetry person; well, not on the board anyway, heh. But I really did enjoy these and I'll be checking this thread more often. Thank you so much.

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"The only thing going for me -
were those moments - just
moments - when Tara would look at
me and I was wonderful."

[mollyig]

I don't think I've mentioned how envious I am of your posting level Ruth!



Thank you for your kind words.



I know I do tend to ascribe fire to Willow, I just think it fits somehow. And I like to use the elements in my poetry, I suppose to show how natural the love is.



Thanks again.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[TheWhiz]

'demanding hands trail a blaze of need'



A great line in another wonderful poem, you have a real talent in being able to say so much in so few words.

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"

[Scout]

“My want further enflamed by the passion I inspire”



I love that idea – they bring passion for each other to the relationship, but the other girl’s passion adds even more fuel to their fire. I felt kind of warm after reading this. hee!



Beautiful, as always.

[tiredsoul]

Different from your other poems but I like it. You have the ability to convey so much imagery in so few words. Impressive. My favorite lines:



Fiery hair outshone by the burning

desire in her glowing green eyes



--celia

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[fudgie9]

Hey Molly, This was so different to your last poem and yet it still has that same raw emotional quality which reaches out and moves the reader. The references to fire in relation to their passion for each other was wonderful, because lets face it Willow and Tara's love is hot. Thanks Nicole

Edited by: fudgie9 at: 9/5/02 1:40:57 am

[mollyig]

TheWhiz Thanks so much. It really helps to know what lines people think work.



Scout That was the image I started with, that they each further ignited the passion in the other. Glad it seems to have been effective. And I felt kinda warm after writing it!



Celia Definitely different! I try to balance out my poems, so as I don't have too many dark or vice versa.



Nicole Totally agree with you, their love is hot! Thanks muchly.

As I explained I often use fire to describe Willow, but this time I wanted it to encompass both.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[Blue Athame 1]

Mollyig...I have been having some poetry for breakfast this morning...what a delightful little feast. I don't often have the time to read and know certainly that is to my detriment. I feel badly that I haven't written to you in a long while so I am feeling a tad neglectful here...you are always so generous with your words and thoughts when you come to me and the other writers on the board. I always look for you because I trust your eye...I admire your use of words and imagery as well as your eloquence.



I read these poems and thoughts and am consistently amazed at your eye...you pierce through the mist like an arrow and find the heart of every description. You write with a clarity and truth that is profound and insightful. Your word usage... "reeling me to safe harbor", "grief grasps tightly"....god the sound on my tongue of "grief grasps tightly..." never mind the message. This most recent poem...such passion and sensuality...you are usually so reserved...what a wonderful leap for you.



Rambling now...sorry...I love your work...I wanted you to know I appreciate what you do...I am honored to watch you open as a writer...Thank you.



Athame.

[Drakkenfyre]

Oh, Marion, I am a bad dragon. How could I have missed this one. I must have been off at the manor again...really very sorry. I love this poem!! I love the imagery you used to express love, desire, need and want. You have been on quite a writing spree. Again, sorry for the lateness. Bad dragon.

I am the dragon that hides from the sun and flies in the moonlight.

[mollyig]

Athame Thanks very much, most kind of you to say such lovely things.



Laura Not a bad dragon - a sweet dragon! Thanks!

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[vix84]

Quote:

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Grief grasps tightly, pulling me close.

Swallowing my burning tears,

steadying my shaking bones and

filling my mind with Her Light.

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What a wonderful way to write about grief. To show what she gained, the Light and love, and not what she lost. It's so powerful, and touching.



Thank you for sharing this poem, Molly. Can't wait to see what titles you come up with

[mollyig]

Hiya vix84 Thanks very much. I'm not sure exactly where this one came from. Usually I write after re-watching an episode or thinking of a specific scene, but with this one the first line just appeared in my head "raw red . . ." and it went on from there.



Re the titling. I don't know why I find it so hard to ascribe names for the poems. Maybe I'll ask people what they think I should call them, they might have better luck than me!



Thanks again.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[ninjitsugrrl]

Mollyig - I have been gone too long. Can't believe I missed this wonderful poem from you. It is very beautiful!

And, you aren't the only one - I can never title my poems either.

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz


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[mollyig]

Hiya ninjitsugrrl. Thanks very much. I'd been wondering where you were, hadn't seen your lovely avatar around! I've actually managed to come up with a name for this one, albeit an unoriginal one!





DREAMS



Dreams drape loving arms around shaking shoulders

calming the tears coursing down my face,

blocking thoughts of the brutal beating

and the callous cruelty that is my existence.



Freckled hands erase the frown.

Soothing voice whispers solace.

Grass-green eyes grant hope,

As smiling lips speak softly of love.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[TheWhiz]

Great poem

Shows the hope, love & comfort, Willow gives to Tara even in her darkest hour- wonderful.



P.S The title wasn't unoriginal! I think it suited the poem

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"


"Make your own kind of music"-Mama Cass

Edited by: TheWhiz at: 9/12/02 1:15:23 pm

[mollyig]

Thanks so much WhizKid!



Actually I'd been thinking of some of the fic I've read where a younger Tara had dreams of Willow, and this just came about.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[Drakkenfyre]

My dear Marion, You have done it again. I love the theme of comfort that is in this one. Well done, sweetie!!!

I am the dragon that hides from the sun and flies in the moonlight.

[Tulipp]

A title! Yay!



This was nice; I assumed as I started that it was Willow being comforted by Tara, but I quickly realized, with freckled hands and green eyes, that it was the other way around, and that worked so well.



As for the dream itself, the poem could go either way: it could either be young Tara dreaming of the future and of this love that she will one day have, AND/OR it could be our Tara dreaming of the past but waking up into Willow's comfort and love.



I don't know if that's how you planned it, but it works so well. Lovely, as always.

[fudgie9]

Wow Molly, I can't believe I missed this when it was first posted. I really enjoy your poems because the images presented are so vivid and there's always so much emotion between the girls. (No wonder you love the Indigo Girls so much because they write in a similar emotional way about life and love). Also glad to see that your giving your poems titles.

Lovely as usual, Nicole.

[thehighpriestess]

I've just caught up with you poems, and can I say they were absolutely amazing. The raw emotion in your poems is fantastic.Go you!

WILLOW: Where would you go? If you felt lost
and alone? Where would you go?

TARA: To you.

[mollyig]

Laura Thanks so much, Sweetie!



Tulipp Yup I'm very proud of such an original title!



I know Tara is traditionally seen in the role of comforter, so it was nice to change the roles. I thought of how it could be the remnants of a dream that Tara needed to be consoled from after I had posted it. Great that you saw that too.



Nicole my friend for life now that you've compared me to my darling IG! Thanks so much. But, now that I've titled one, the pressure is on to name my next poems - oh yikes!



Priestess Thanks muchly. You are very kind.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

Edited by: mollyig  at: 9/19/02 7:32:26 am

[mollyig]

The ache of loss blossoms as I awaken.

Realisation of deeds done kicks violently in,

Causing heart to constrict, and conflict in mind.

I focus on Her Light, my compass - my saviour.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[TheWhiz]

This piece really captures what Willow's thoughts would be.

Really well written, great words, well done.

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"


"Make your own kind of music"-Mama Cass