My Poems

[pacou]

Wow the last two ones were great!



In fact all of your poems are, but the last one...this was a very good one. Like bulldog said: powerful and painful...perfect described.



Well, I run out of words and its quite late



But Im looking forward to your next ones, I dont care if they are happy or not



-Viv-

Well, we can answer questions.
Tara - Checkpoint

Dont dream it, be it.
Rocky Horror Picture Show

[ninjitsugrrl]

I really like the Seeing Red poem. You do a good job setting up a sense of darkness and loss. I love the line, "The silence louder than anything I have ever heard". The wording of that is great!

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz


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[Tara22]

Oh wow... I'm a bad girl! This thread managed to get pushed to page 5. Well, at least I wrote one now...



you know what? It's so weird. I'm chatting in the chat room and then all of the sudden I have this huge burst of 'gotta write a poem!' and so I did.



With me it is always this attack of muse. Like something hits me and says 'write!' and so I do, and it all comes flowing out in less than five minutes or so.



bit freaky but, yeah, that's how it is...



hmmm... thank yous!!



BV: Thanks!! I'm really glad you liked it even though it was all sad.



Vixy: ooooh... you flatter me! *grins* Glad you liked it Salibali! Missing you soooo much!



Whiz: Thanks so much! I'm glad that you liked it!! hehe...sorry about the LONG wait.



bulldog: Now it's my turn to be flattered... Thank you so much! wow



Viv: Thanks! so glad you like my poems!! This one is a tad more on the happier side...ok, LOTS more on the brighter side.



ninjitsugrrl: Thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked it. That one had been crawling around in my mind for so long and I just needed a start and an ending. So when I formulated the first sentance in my mind it was all easy from there!



Thanks SO much for your reviews!! I am SOOO sorry I took so long to reply!! but I hope you like this new one.



It's a Willow's thoughts on her relationship with Tara (earlier relationship full of happy moments)







It’s a little strange

That to anyone else

I am me and you are you

Two bodies

Two hearts

Two souls



It’s a little funny

That they don’t know

That you complete me by existing

That I breathe what you breathe

And you feel what I feel



It’s a little exciting

To know that you’ll always be there

That I will always have that shoulder to lean on

And always have that amazing someone to lean on mine



It’s a little scary

That there was ever a time without you in my life

That I managed to survive without your ever-constant love

That if one moment, one thing, had been different, I may never have found you

Never have found that missing piece of me.



It’s a little of everything

Really

The love you give

How loved I feel.

You completed me

And helped me to find myself



To find myself in you



I am you and you are me

That’s who we are

Two bodies

Two hearts

One soul

***

"Oh, sorry. Uhh, I forgot that that doesn't seem normal, to the rest of society. It's just, we, well, we both really like cows. Really like them. To the extent of wanting to buy one, when we're older." - The Crying Game (by Vix84)

Edited by: Tara22  at: 11/12/02 1:59:33 am

[barnabasvamp]

WOW;

Each section with the "IT's" seems like if you take them all together they describe a relationship. Strange, funny, exciting, scary, everything, and you!

Then you expound on each one.

I enjoyed this one alot.

BV

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[ninjitsugrrl]

Great poem! You do a wonderful job of capturing the feelings of a loving relationship.

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[pacou]

WOW!!!



Great new poem!



I love how you are turning that "two hearts, two bodies, two souls" to "two hearts, two bodies, one soul", very clever done by the way



Thanks, Im patiently waiting for the next ones



-Viv-

[Taras Shadow]

Chel!

I just had to re-read these poems, then realized I never did drop by and say what I felt about these wonderful poems! I love them...a lot! You are very creative and I do hope you keep up with the writings because I'd be sad if you didn't

Your poems are like no others, and I can't wait to see what other great poem you can whip up. Who knows ...maybe I'll share some of mine



~Holly~



Show me where to touch youTara-It Ain't Fickle

[Tara22]

Thank you all so much for your reviews!!



BV: ohh... thanks so much! I'm realy glad that you liked it! I was actually thinking along the lines of that too, for my poem, all of the different emotions involved in a relationship.



ninjitsugrrl: Thanks so much! I'm really glad that you liked it!!



Viv: awww Thanks!! you're so nice!! Glad you liked the poem!! hope this one was soon enough for you



Holly: ooooh... Holly!!! thanks!! I had to write this one so that you wouldn't be sad *nods* cause I don't want you to be sad! *sniffles* my poems are wonderful? aaaawww and you think I am creative!? *looks flattered*





now for the new one, this is one from Tara's point of view, thinking about Willow....



With one little look

You reached into my heart

Visited places that even I didn’t know existed

Showering me with light and warmth

Filling me with happiness and love



The first time you smiled at me

You opened up your heart

Teaching me lessons that I never thought I’d learn

Letting me see right into your soul

Letting me see who you really are



And when we touched

It was like nothing else

Every single part of us in tune with each other

Our hearts beat as one

Our spirits intertwined



The first time you spoke my name

Spoke it with all the love in your heart

You unlocked the chains that held me down

You saved me from myself

And showed me that I was worth more than I could possibly have imagined



And I find myself wondering

How can one girl be so lucky?

How does someone get blessed the way they are?

And how can I ever tell you just how much you mean to me?



With your eyes you opened me

With your heart you showed me

With you hands you taught me

And with your lips you saved me



With everything that you are

and everything that you made me



I love you

***

"Oh, sorry. Uhh, I forgot that that doesn't seem normal, to the rest of society. It's just, we, well, we both really like cows. Really like them. To the extent of wanting to buy one, when we're older." - The Crying Game (by Vix84)

Edited by: Tara22  at: 11/16/02 3:44:52 am

[Taras Shadow]

CHEL!

Oh wow, very very good poem! *sniffles* Beautiful!! And I'm not sad anymore...

Cannot wait until your next wonderful heart touching poem.



~Holly~



Show me where to touch youTara-It Ain't Fickle

[Urn of Osiris]

: wave Chel......I am so bad.



Somehow I've missed your beautiful words so wonderfully written.



The last poem on page two left me sobbing.



Thanks, I think I really needed that.



Wonderful view you have of their love. I think we've been looking out the same window.



UoO <------- for you.

Urn of Osiris

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[ninjitsugrrl]

Wow! Great poem. The opening lines are especially effective, "With one little look/ You reached into my heart/ Visited places that even I didn’t know existed".

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[pikescoob]

Rach!! I finally got my forgetful tush in here I actually don't read poetry much but I wanted to come in and show my support for your talent and you rock!!



--Michi

[Vampire Willow]

WOW! I think too many people have said that, but WOW! God, I am very impressed, you have completely left me in the dust! And might I just say, DAMN! I wish this many people would visit my thread. But you soooo deserve it! You rock girl! Go team you, is all I can say.



~Tash xoxo

"Willow:Well, who wants to be cooped up on a day like this? The sun is shining, there's songs going on...those writers are ploting your death..."~Once More, With Bitterness

Edited by: Vampire Willow at: 11/17/02 5:03:41 pm

[barnabasvamp]

Quote:

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With your eyes you opened me

With your heart you showed me

With you hands you taught me

And with your lips you saved me

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Beautiful, and so touching. To be loved like that, we can dream.

BV

"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

[pacou]

Wow, that was good



Yeah pretty intense and very well done



Always looking for new poems of yours



No, I am NOT greedy



Anyway, thanks!



-Viv-

[tiredsoul]

Those last two poems were awesome! Yay you!



I love these lines:

Quote:

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With everything that you are

and everything that you made me

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Beautiful.



Thanks for sharing.



--celia

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[TheWhiz]

*Looks around guiltily*

Yes I do still exist somewhere amongst paperwork, articles etc..As you can see I've been tryin to focus more on the Uni work than the internet!



However I do keep my promises so I've finally made it here, hope you can forgive the delay. I've missed 2 poems (bad me!) both I thought we beautiful- lovely words (I see you have gone happy on us-good for you!) You show so many touching emotions in your words



I'd better catch up with your fic now.....

"I am a whiz...If ever a whiz there was"




"Make your own kind of music"-Mama Cass

[tiredsoul]

How do you do it? This was so cool. The dark is fun, but then again, I'm a little weird



This is a great line: I’m choking on these words I didn’t get to say I also liked how you used

Quote:

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Everything aches

Everything hurts

But I don’t care anymore…

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at the beginning and at the end. Like the feeling doesn't change.



Thanks.



--celia

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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

[funkyasian]

totally agreeing with celia, dark is more fun... sorry i haven't commented until now...i've been lurking in your thread for the longest time and i think it's time i come into the light and tell you that your poems are incredible. great work...



~steph

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

[YouGetMe]

CHELLYCHEL- First of all...I'm on Leah's name...heh, she fell alseep so I snagged it...but then she woke up...so I'm writing this quickly...



Wow...that was just....wow.



Sad I give you that, but sad in a good way! *sniffles*



And this part...people seem to love, as do I...it just explains everything in something so simple:

Quote:

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Everything aches

Everything hurts

But I don’t care anymore…

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LOVE IT! Can't wait for more...and more...and more...



*coughs* As for your neck...we shall make you an appointment young lady, wouldn't want it gettting any worse...now do we?



Love ya

~Holly~



Show me where to touch youTara-It Ain't Fickle

Mommy, how come monkey's can't talk?-Odette

Edited by: YouGetMe at: 12/7/02 11:50:33 am

[ninjitsugrrl]

The latest poem is wonderful. I especially liked the line, "I’m choking on these words I didn’t get to say". I think that one line really sums up the feeling of the whole poem. Great job!

"I know the answer! The answer lies within the heart of all mankind! The answer is twelve? I think I'm in the wrong building." - Lucy in "Peanuts" by Charles Schultz




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[pacou]

Hey that was good



lol It was angsty and I hate angst but still, it was so well written and dark but still good...



Hmm, am I making sense now?



All in all: LOVED IT!



-Viv-

Dont dream it, be it

[pikescoob]

Rachi!! That was soooo sad *sniff* but written so incredibly well. You've captured the emotion of the situation perfectly. Thanks for sharing!! Go you!!



Michi

[ss]

Hey,



Just wanted to add to all the praise... your poems are absolutely wonderful!!

Very powerful and so full of emotion, they're amazing!



Keep 'em coming!

[TheWhiz]

A wonderful poem and return to the dark side!

So raw, emotive and painful to read, it was hard to chose a favourite line as they all express so much but this one stood out to me

' That simple sentence that has a meaning that runs so much deeper then words ever can'- so true.



Bec -See how good I've been checking the board more often!!

[Tara22]

Isn't it just the strangest thing...... a muse......



I haven't written a poem in so long...



and I open up word to type up a lovely essay that I should have done by now



but that doesn't come out....Nooooo...instead out comes a poem...



gotta love it



Thank you all so much for your feedback on my poem! It means a lot to me



Celia: THANKS! lol, naww...the dark side CAN be fun, but lately I seem to be more with the writing happy things. I'm so glad that you liked my poem oh, I loved the choking on the words line too



Steph: Thank you so much that means a lot! I'm so glad that you like them!!



Hollybolly: awwwww shucks! why thank yee Dr. Holly! I'm so glad that you liked it



ninjitsugrrl: Thanks!! I really appreciated your feedback very helpfull! I happen to love that line too...



Viv: oooh thank yee!! you shall be much more satisfied with this one then... not so much with the angsty dark stuff. Thanks for reading!



Michi: Thanks!! sorry for makin you cry Mich, lol. Thank you so much for your feedback! this next one is not sad so it's all good



ss: ooh thank you I'm so glad that you think so! I am sorry about the lack of them coming but where the muse goes...so too does my keyboard hope you like this next one!



Bec: Go you! Thank you lol, yes, return to the dark side for me... not for long though, it's a thing... I guess my mind just prefers that happy





ok, here it is.....



It's a Willow's reflections on who she is with Tara......



Today I’m a singer

And I guess I always will be

Not in an ‘up on stage look at me’ way

But from the heart



Cause that’s what this feels like, you know…

Like I’m singing

And the words sweep me away

To a place safe in your arms

Where everything is right

And it always will be



The music of it fills my heart and fills my soul

And I close my eyes as I sing

And I know you’re there



Sometimes I wish I knew what it was I was singing

I wish I could capture it

Know the lyrics for a later time

Just have them there

Just in case



But then I start to sing again

And my insecurities are gone

Cause when I’m with you I don’t need to know the words



It doesn’t matter if I get them right

Or if I stay in tune



you fill me with the most beautiful harmonies I have ever heard

and a love so deep it needs no words



I don’t think I could tell you how much I loved you

Even if I tried



Even if I spent hours trying to find the perfect words to explain…



But I hope you know

And I pray that you do



That I love you

You complete me

And you make me sing

***

"Oh, sorry. Uhh, I forgot that that doesn't seem normal, to the rest of society. It's just, we, well, we both really like cows. Really like them. To the extent of wanting to buy one, when we're older."- The Crying Game (by vix84)

Edited by: Tara22  at: 1/20/03 6:39:46 pm

[pacou]

Yes, I'm very satisfied with it, a very nice, very lovely poem



That was... wonderful and sweet and just damn good



Thanks you so much



Lol and I'm glad it came out that poem instead that essay



-Viv-

You wanna know what my new last name is?
Forgetful... and its the invention of my English teacher....

[SJ]

Great poetry

[Urn of Osiris]

Oh you sweetie, How fantastic it is to wake to such a wonderful poem.



I read through and had to sigh. I know this tune, although I can never quite define it. What a fantastic collaboration of words.

Quote:

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But then I start to sing again And my insecurities are gone Cause when I’m with you I don’t need to know the words

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Oh wow Chel....Loving and being loved is so wonderful and here you capture an awakening to such dynamic passion.

Your eyes and your heart have brilliant vision. Keep writing!! Keep seeing the world as a palette, keep decorating my days with such wonderful creations.



GO YOU!!!!!!!

Urn of Osiris

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"When I find myself fading, I close my eyes and realize my friends are my energy."

[vix84]

I think I speak on behalf of everyone when I say WOW!!! First, to have our Chelli posting poems again makes me so very happy. And to have such a loving, happy poem makes it even better.



"...a love so deep it needs no words."



You say it all, motek. Beautiful.



Keep writing, we love it so much.

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Willow laughs, kissing her. Soft and sensual. Deep love territory.
Seeing Red, Shooting Script.