"Mom meet Tara!"

[Sapphire eyes]

Title = "Mom Meet Tara!"

Part: 1 of however many it depends if you guys like it!

Author: sapphire eyes

Rating: NC-17

Feedback: Yes please. I would like that very much and will take all suggestions on board when writing. I am soooooo nervous so please be nice!

Distribution: That’s fine just IM me to check first

Content Warning: Could get quite steamy, I am not sure about the American ratings but I rated it NC17 just in case, lots of action and very non British stuff lol

Disclaimer: Willow and Tara are not my own characters; they and the rest of the Buffy gang belong to Joss Whedon and his people. Sorry I am never any good at these things and please don’t sue me.

Summary: Willow introduces Tara to her mother, blah blah blah…lots of kisses, and sexy stuff with some witchy wisdom thrown in as well. Hope you like it!

Part 1

Willow smiled as the sunlight flickered through the trees and fell on Tara’s hair making it all the more golden. Willow’s heart wanted to sing as the women she loved turned and smiled at her. “I…I’m kind of nervous about meeting your mother Willow” Tara confessed. Willow stroked Tara’s hand to reassure her and linked hands with her as they fell into a Skippy- step beside each other.

“My mom will love you, don’t worry, you will be fine baby!” Tara smiled and felt reassured. They walked happily hand in hand for a while and then they were at Willow’s house. Willow released Tara’s hand for a brief moment and brushed her arm before knocking on the door. For Tara it seemed like an eternity, now a lump forming in her dry throat.. and then the door opened. “Mom! Hi!” Willow said waving at her in an overtly theatrical way. Will loved her mother but she was worried that Tara would have to endure cheesy stories of Willow’s childhood…

”Willow honey…oh and you must be Terri!” The woman glanced at Tara and smiled. Tara was too polite to correct her and felt her palms beginning to dampen. She looked at Willow’s mother and saw a real likeness. “Hi!” Tara smiled. “Mom this is Tara!”
Willow said and made a point of putting her arm around her girlfriend as they entered the Rosenberg house. “Nice to meet you Tara, I’m Shelia”

Shelia laughed and continued “Really Willow I really must get the names of your friend’s right” Bunny! Terri! Honestly…I wonder if it is because of that weird tea Mr Giles made me drink the other day… I mean, you know the British they love their tea but they are a bit… well I guess they… oh now I’m babbling…please come on in and sit down the both of you, dinner is almost ready.”

Tara smiled and realised where Willow got her adorable babble-like talk, it was so cute. She brushed Willow’s hand delicately with a slender finger “Tara is my girlfriend mom.” Willow said, taking Tara’s hand in her own.

Sheila although being sceptical of Willow’s after school Wicca activities a few years ago, was thrilled that Willow had found happiness at last, they talked for a while about how she and Tara had met and everything was going well. Shelia decided to go and bring the dinner in after asking Tara if she was starving. Tara had replied yes and also snuck a sneaky look at Willow. Willow blushed as she remembered how they had, spent the whole day in bed yesterday and of how many uses they had come up with for yoghurt…

“I’ve got chicken breasts and feta cheese salad with a lime and coriander dressing, with chocolate soufflé for dessert. Do you like chicken Tara?” Sheila shouted from the kitchen to the sitting room. “All sounds yummy Shelia, I love breasts…ummmm I mean….chicken!” Tara corrected herself. Willow tickled her belly as they both giggled. “You are so cute!” Willow grinned.

*gulps and runs off and hides* Hope you all like it. x x x

[dlline]

Hey!

You've got a really cute start to something here. Keep going.

If I might, since it's new to you, some advice. Watch your point of view. A story is difficult to follow if the character's POV changes every sentence or paragraph. Try to focus on one character at a time, and just have them react to the others. It's less confusing for the reader that way.

Not a pick, just trying to help.

Diane

[Auriam]

I like it already i want to read more !
Keep doing sweetie !

[Willowtree252]

Oh Blue I like it so keep it coming ok

[Katharyn]

Nice start to a much undertold part of their relationship. I'm a sucker for 'missing' scenes and this was one of the 4 or 5 big missing ones for me so it's nice to see here.

I love the Sheila babble! So it's genetic... Also the girls are cute together. "I love breasts" LOL

Just a couple of notes:
- I think you mean 'Sheila' rather than 'Shelia' (though I could be mistaken but I am pretty sure Joyce called her 'Sheila.'
- Dlline's note about POV within the same structure (i.e. paragraph) is well made and would make it much easier to read. As a rule of thumb I tend to separate perspectives and lines of dialogue between characters into distinct paragraphs. That way the reader knows someone new is speaking (and possibly thinking) even if you explicitly don't say who. The point about reactions is also important. Unless a character is pointedly ignoring something, you usually want them to react - whether it's a smile, a patient look, or a line in reply...
- There's a little bit of punctuation (mostly around names it seems here) you could clean up, but I'm bad in the same ways myself so I am not one to talk
- The biggie for me though is think about how people really talk when you write. This is (again) something I used to do a lot. "...you will be fine baby" and "You are so cute" are two example. Just as you contract "I am" to "I'm" you should possibly consider "you'll" and "you're" in places. Of course that isn't always appropriate and if you want the stress on the "You WILL be fine" and "You ARE cute" then this if fine, however in speech terms "You'll" flows more naturally.
Buffy characters already have their unique little speaking habits, so dropping the 'perfect English' gets back towards that for me. I got over this by reading the words aloud to myself (and that applies to everything, not just speech) as it shows just where things might seem strange.

Dang, my notes were longer than my praise. But I just wanted to provide some examples. Nice start, I'd like to see more. I just hope when you get to the NC-17 you don't just summarise like you did for Sheila's response!

Curiosity-wise though I'd almost have preferred to see Sheila's reaction through what she said rather than that summary, but that's just because I'd have liked to see it in the show - there's certainly nothing wrong with how you did it.

Katharyn

[Sapphire eyes]

I am glad you like it
A Little Note to K, thanks for youer comments I will take them on board as regards the "perfect english" thing I graduated with an English lit degree and I am British so that is just the way I talk, the way I write and I am not going to change that too much. I will take on board your comments about the word abreviations though. I know the characters have their own ways of speaking and that will come into play as the story goes on. As regards grammar I am recovering from a very bad car accident and wrote this when I was rather tired, had a killer headache and upset- also hence the miss spelling of Willow's mother's name. I realised it when I posted it and am sorry for that, all in all I hope you all like it. x x

[Katharyn]

One other piece of feedback

Never apologise. It's all just opinions and yours is the one that counts And hey, if I didn't like it I wouldn't even be here LOL.

I'm a Brit too, and did exactly the same thing. Even now I have to 'force' myself to contract dialogue as it doesn't flow naturally for me that way. It's just a couple of very wise beta readers who kept returning beta to me and contracting it. A year or so in, I got the hint LOL.

And oh yeah, I know those exact headaches.

Be well. And when you're well, write more!

Katharyn

[Sapphire eyes]

Thank-you K
I am just too posh aren't I? lol

[dlline]

I didn't mean to offend either. Feedback should be supportive and helpful. I tried for both, but evidently missed.

Please keep going; certainly don't let me stop you.

Diane

[Sapphire eyes]

Thank-you Diane It's ok. I will just have to be more "Stiff upper lippy" next time, lol I know I am crap!

[Katharyn]

GRR. I'm going to get mad if you start calling yourself 'crap'

I'm the world's worst at receiving constructive criticism and always struggle to apply what I am about to say to myself, but hopefully you can do better than I...

The sheer fact you are here, writing and willing to put what you write out there marks you out as 'not-crap.' The Kitten is a very forgiving place. Compared to some of the places where fic type stuff is posted you will rarely if ever get trolls who've never written a word (or think they know it all if they have) telling you what to do and how to do it. Or how 'crap' you are simply because you are not them.

Almost all feedback here is either praising the work or just trying to pass on a few nuggets other writers have learned. By and large other writers will give suggestions (as well as praise) and they've learned themselves what seems to work/not work... 90% of the time they will phrase it as an opinion. The other 10% of the time it came out wrong and it should have read as an opinion but a random 'should' or 'must' slips in. Even when it comes to rules of grammar you can, as a writer, make a stylistic choice to ignore some or all of them (not that you did - it's just an example) so there is no 'must/should/can't' in feedback etc.

But the key is - It's your story. It's your fic. It's your style. I can confidently say that as long as it is readable, doesn't deal with banned subject matter and has the girls in... Someone here will like it. And it's the people who like it who will post.

About the only opinion you have to listen to is the unspoken one that says 'this was worthwhile enough for me to post.' So you don't get to say 'I know I am crap' since that disregards the opinions of those who offered feedback. (Sneaky of me, huh?)

Basically I am saying it's compulsory to go your own way, accepting what help/feedback you will, except where you say you are crap - cos that is just not allowed. No on who puts themself out there (and it definitely takes courage) is 'crap.' Worst case, they're just someone who has room to improve... which every single one of us does. So no apologies, no doing yourself down, no explaining why something is 'wrong' unless you want to...

BTW This post is another example of why Brits and Americans differ. A yank would say 'don't say that about yourself' and a Brit (or at least this Brit) well you can see just can't shut up...

And I promise not to come back again until there is an update. So hop to it!

Katharyn

[dlline]

Well, this American says you shouldn't call yourself crap, and I will cite all the reasons mentioned above. Katharyn covered it so eloquently; there is little I can add.

I'm done now, too. I hope you update.

Diane

[Sapphire eyes]

Thanks for all comments I will be working on an update tonight hopefully but not sure when I will post it because I will be away from the kitten board for a couple of days but until then x

[Emms]

Nope. No crap. (that was the abbreviated Emms version of "don't call yourself that" )

Sweet story, so far. I really liked when Sheila referred to Tara as Terri. That was perfect, characterization wise. Good job.

Keep the updates comin'

xoxo
Emms

[Tangetman]

Hello Sapphire Eyes,
You've got a great start to this fic and I'm eager to see where it goes. I loved the 'skippy-step' description! (I had a OMWF on the bridge visual for that) and also loved the 'breast' joke. Please keep at it and update often. I'd love to see where this goes.

It's understandable to be a little nervous about a post but remember, the kittens are the most devout, loopy but lovable, loyal, passionate and ardent admirers of Willow/Tara fanfic to be found anywhere. I'm certain that critiques of your story will be 'kitten-friendly' Expect practical purrs, motivational messages, and smiling suggestions to abound.

Can't wait to see what you've got in store next...

[Sapphire eyes]

Part 2 Hope you all like it

Sheila returned smiling “You can either eat it there or come into the dining room; I would like to eat here actually nice and cosy!” Sheila smiled. Willow gave Tara a little nudge and remembered how “cosy” they had been this morning all snuggled up and…”Willow?”

Willow was snapped out of her day dream of Tara goodness, as her mom passed her a plate filled with food.
“So, Tara, Willow tells me that you met at the Wicca group?” asked Sheila. Suddenly Tara felt very nervous of Sheila and Tara really hoped that the spotlight wouldn’t be on her all night…”Yes” Tara replied Smiling, nervously she tucked a piece of hair behind one ear.

Suddenly Willow mumbled something in Latin and snapped her fingers. Sheila suddenly became surrounded by a blue light and was still, like a waxwork, a bowl of croutons still in her hand. Tara turned to Willow, her expression puzzled. “Willow what???” Willow smiled her eyes gleamed, “It’s only for a second baby, you’re doing just fine” Willow kissed Tara on the lips and stroked her face, Willow leaned into Tara’s soft body and kissed her some more, Tara sunk into the back of the sofa, feeling safe and warm, their kissing gentle yet passionate. Willow straddled Tara, in the moment and her hair flopped down and tickled Tara’s nose, making Tara laugh mid kiss. It came out as a muffled sound followed by a gentle moan of pleasure as Willow ran one hand over Tara’s breast. Willow’s hand caress was warm and ignited a passion within Tara’s heart and she ran her hands through Willow’s hair and pulled her in so close, sparks seemed to Fly as Tara felt her body on fire, tingling from Willow’s touch…now Willow was gently kissing Tara’s collarbone, running her tongue lightly…Willow nudged Tara’s clothed breasts with her mouth, Tara exhaled deeply as Willow lifted Tara’s top up, almost over her head and began to kiss down…Suddenly Tara blushed and her shyness stepped in, conscious of Willow’s mother sat there…”Um, Will?” Tara looked towards Sheila, still as still as a waxwork, her expression blank, not registering anything, the coloured swirls still around her…Willow laughed “It’s ok Tar she doesn’t know what’s going on here, it’s like for her time is on pause…” Willow made a move to kiss Tara again. Tara did kiss her but just lightly on the lips before breaking away. “Um, Will not that I want to break the passion but…it’s kind of a mood killer!” Tara was serious for a moment then her and Willow both laughed. “Hmm I guess you are right…but tonight missy you are so gonna get it!” Tara said nothing but just did that half smile that made Willow melt inside.

[Auriam]

DIBS !
Read it now !
Wow willow is a very naughty girl !
She wants to do that with her mother in front of her !
My god !

[Emms]

wow... I can't believe they were making out in front of Willow's mom like that... even if she was all magic'd and such...

xoxo
Emms

[taralicious]

Oh Willow, you go down with your bad self, on Tara, that is.
This exhibitionist streak in Willow is a side of her we seldom see, I like it.

[Sapphire eyes]

Part 3 hope you all like it...

Willow clapped her fingers and her mom came back into reality, having just met her daughter’s new girlfriend, having lunch in her home. After chatting for a while Sheila said “Oh Look at the time, Willow sorry but I promised Mr Giles that I would see him this afternoon about something…would it be alright if I left the two of you here to finish dinner.” Tara smiled but breathed a silent sigh of relief, she had done enough talking for one afternoon; as nice as Sheila was Tara had that drier than dry feeling in her throat…”Sure Mom no problem” Willow said a little too excitedly. “Ok girls well, have a nice afternoon and nice to meet you Tara” Sheila smiled and grabbed her bag and coat off the sofa and was gone in seconds with a quick smile and a slam of the door.
The girls sat in silence for a moment, enjoying the quiet, relishing the ticking of the hall clock and sat holding hands, feeling like they could both relax more. Tara put her head on Willow’s shoulder. “Your mom seems nice” Tara said. “Well yes, but she has her moments too and you don’t wanna get her mad….hey I could do with a soda, you want a soda?” “I don’t feel like a soda right now” Tara grinned with a mischievous glint in her eye, “I was thinking perhaps we could hang out in your room for a while?” Tara asked grinning and stroking one of Willow’s slender fingers. Willow could have gone on flirting some more and could have tried saying things like “ And what on earth would we do all alone in my room?” But the message was clear, the hungry look in Tara’s eyes conveyed it all, she wanted to snuggle and wanted some Willow lovin’ so what could Willow do but agree? Willow wanted no more than to pleasure Tara and make her eyes gleam with satisfaction…

When they reached Willow’s room, the redhead went in first and Tara closed the door somewhat bashfully behind her. Willow suddenly ran over to her double bed and jumped on it, and then she laughed. Tara gave her a bemused laugh as Willow jumped up and down on the bed, beckoning Tara to her Willow smiled…Tara linked hands with her and felt a jolt of electricity run through her body. Both girls began to jump up and down together, laughing more and more with each bound. Tara’s smile made Willow blush and she kissed Willow, tiny little kisses on the lips, up kiss, down, kiss, up…Tara laughed her hair pins holding a piece of gold fell free as her hair bounced like golden silk on her shoulders and as she became flushed her cheeks a rosy hue, her eyes glowed all the brighter as if the ocean goddess herself dwelled within…Tara’s laughter and happiness, sparked off the same emotion in Willow and she found herself laughing so much her face turned completely red. “Oh Great!” Willow said sarcastically, still laughing she said “I bet I have lobster face!?” Tara just laughed and said “You make a cute lobster, good thing you aren’t a shrimp” Tara joked and stopped bouncing, Willow did the same and for a moment they just stood laughing and getting their breath back, staring hungrily at each other for a few moments that felt like forever until Tara stepped forward one hand still linked with Willow’s, with the other she cupped Willow’s face and leaned in and traced Willow’s lips gently with her own, just ever so slightly brushing them, so luscious, a breath of desire escaped Willow’s lips, Tara began to gently suck on Willow’s top lip and her breath mingled with Willow’s, both women were insanely aroused and could not wait until their bodies would mingle together too, forever in love, hearts beating as one…
Let me know what you think x

[Auriam]

dibs !
keep doing please
may i ask a longer chap ?

[amberholic]

Great update as always sapphy....keep it going, i like ur story ....and by the way is our challenge still on?lol

[Willowtree252]

oh blue it is cute and sweet keep it going and hmmmm I don,t trust how long mom will be gone missy

[taralicious]

Well, I hope that for Mrs.Rosenberg's sake, she deosn't have the appallingly bad timing that Buffy has had on occasion and arrive back at the house too early.
Things could take an ugly turn if her learning curve is accelerated too quickly and she chances to see Willow and Tara playing naked Twister.
I, on the other hand, would like to see that so please hurry back with another detailed update at how Willow and Tara pleasure themselves in Willow's bedroom.

[Dax]

A very nice and really cute story. Nice idea with the “glad you’re not a shrimp.!”
Keep going this is getting good.

[Sapphire eyes]

Part 4. NC17 Warning. Hope you like it

Moments later they were on the bed, scrambling around on top of each other, kissing hungrily. Soft moans escaped Tara’s lips as she sighed before kissing Willow again and again, their tongues doing a dance of love and lust as they each roamed their hands over the clothed body of the other. Willows fingers moved quickly over Tara’s breast giving it and gentle but urgent squeeze. Sparks seemed to be flying everywhere as Willow managed to lift Tara’s shirt over her head causing the blonde to blush as some strands of hair were messed up. That was forgotten and Tara took off Willow’s bra and cheekily threw it over the other side of the room, soon both women were completely undressed.

Both women just sat there for a moment taking in the beauty of each other, each beautiful body, each pair of breasts, each curve, each nipple, erect and awaiting pleasure…soon the need overtook them and Tara lay down and Willow started to stroke her body, all over, starting with her face,, Tara kissed Willow's fingers as they brushed her soft lips and Willow moaned as Tara took one of Willow’s fingers into her mouth and sucked greedily on it, as if it was made of chocolate. Willow gasped and thought “Wow if she is that good sucking on my finger…”

Willow’s sexy thought was broken by her mobile phone ringing. It made both women Jump and Tara was so startled that she accidentally bit Willow’s finger hard. Willow grimaced and bit her lip, “Ow!” Then she relented and kissed Tara’s nose. Willow swore silently to herself and wished that she had turned her phone off. “You should get that, it could be Buffy or Mr Giles” Tara said regretfully, she began to blush now because the magic for a moment had been and although Tara’s core was burning with heat and desire she pulled a sheet over herself. “Don’t wanna get it!” Willow pouted in denial at the ringing phone and threw it across the room, it hit a radiator and bounced off to the floor and landed on the rug. Tara laughed. “No where were we my Lady?” Willow grabbed Tara’s face and kissed her, a deep kiss followed by a few tiny kisses on the lips, the phone started to ring again and both girls moaned in angst, as they had to stop the kissage. “Ok, Damn it” Willow said, still naked she shimmied herself towards the end of the bed and managed by stretching her body and long arms to reach the phone without moving too much. “Hello” sighed an irritated Willow.

“Hello there is that Willow Rosenberg?” said a cheesy voice. Damn thought Willow I was about to have some hot lovin’ and now some bozo is going to try and sell me something…”Yes” willow sighed and was about to suggest to Tara to get dressed as the man’s voice rambled on...”Hello there my name is Wayne Macbayne and I’m calling on behalf of the Sunnydale hardware store and I was wondering if you would be interested in seeing our new website, which contains a fabulous new range of fashionable kitchen accessories to spice up your kitchen including a luxury Toaster range… stainless steel…”

All of his words seemed to blur into one long “Blah Blah Blah” God this is boring, if I wasn’t such a polite girlie I would have hung up by now, willow said to herself…”Can I interest you also in purchasing a limited edition Sunnydale exclusive….”
“NO!” Willow said in a forceful voice that seemed to come from someone else. The man was cut short and he laughed nervously and went silent.

Tara meanwhile was busy making her own fun, she had a cunning seduction plan and had been going through the drawer next to the bed and had pulled out a silk scarf. Willow was on all fours and her naked bottom looked irresistibly perky and kissable. Tara began to send gentle kisses over willow buttocks and caress her bottom and legs with the scarf. Willow meanwhile was trying to remain polite to the ever persistent sales man....

“No I mean, I wouldn’t like the toasters or the microwave egg poachers or anything…” Willow began to stifle a giggle as Tara caressed Willow’s bottom while moving behind her and caressing her other buttock with her free hand. Tara’s smooth hands glided up over Willow’s belly and Tara’s finger dipped into her belly button, Willow felt her breath becoming more fast and heavy as Tara’s hand glided down to her sexy love bud and Tara started to stroke her there, gently at first and then creating a more steady rhythm. Tara knew that Willow was enjoying herself as her love juice was all over Tara’s fingers. “No I really um…” Willow was finding it difficult to focus as Tara’s sexy fingers worked their magic, when Willow felt ready Tara gently slid her finger all the way in and massaged her there and rubbed Willow’s clit with the palm of her free hand, then used just the finger on the clit, applying differing pressure. Willow felt like she was about to cum, but Tara wouldn’t let her just yet she had to build it up so that Willow would have the most amazing orgasm she had ever experienced....

That is just what she did. Tara was the shy one but not so in the bedroom when she was with her Willow she would unleash herself and reveal her true nature, a sexy goddess in a gorgeous body. Tara wanted nothing more to pleasure Willow she never had thought she would find her but her heart had reached out. Now there they were…Willow was becoming so aroused that her breathing had increased so much that she could barely speak. Willow moaned gently and then blushed when the salesman coughed on the end of the line…Tara had stopped to give Willow’s clit a rest and then resumed only this time while massaging Willow there Tara also traced the scarf over her love bud and that made willow even more aroused.

Tara’s body was touching Willow’s now there was no space between them and Tara’s hands roamed up and massaged her loves perky little breasts, before sliding herself under Willow’s body and taking her breast into her mouth. The nipple was hard and tasted sweet. Had anyone seen them the positions they were in perhaps would have made people laugh but they didn’t care all that mattered were the sensations. Tara heard Willow moan again and then without hesitation Willow hung up on the annoying salesman.

“Mmmm” Willow moaned…”You like that baby?” Tara asked, doing that sexy little half smile with a twinkle in her eyes. She had lifted her shapely legs and had begun tickling Willow’s butt with her toes. In reply to show appreciation, Willow bent down to kiss Tara but Tara sneakily moved out of the way and soon Willow was holding back screams of pleasure as Tara began to lick her love bud, slowly dipping her silky tongue in and out..in…out…oh God…Willow couldn;’t take it and her legs began to shake as she grinded herself into Tar’s face only making the pleasure more intense. Willow began to buck and move faster her clit and private bud all over Tara’s lips and face, Tara’s gentle licks and flicks became more urgent and probing and soon Willow couldn’t hold back anymore and in one shrill excited cry of release she had the most amazing orgasm and the dreamtime began as she fell down in ecstasy on Tara’s heated body. “Oh Tara….” Willow exclaimed in wonder, thanking her in her heart for her love and satisfaction. “ I love you!”


comments welcome

[Auriam]

DIBS ! ! !!
read now
ok i just read just one word gulp

[Willowtree252]

that was very naughty

[taralicious]

Great horny toadies, that was just neat.
Nothing like vicarious Willow and Tara smut after a night's work.

[amberholic]

mmmm cough....cough....and u were telling me you hope th update will be good...woman it is so damn hot ....even the pinky elephant is dancing lol good work....i liked ur update ...keep going sapphy