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Re: The Prisoner

Postby Artemis » Wed Apr 06, 2005 10:41 am

Wow, that was a hell of a way to get to know each other :D I love how Number 6 is so challenging of everything around her - natural enough, given the situation. It was odd to see her so brusque with Number 14 initially, but I wonder if now that they've got something of an understanding, and some level of trust between themselves, that'll actually be a comfort to Number 14 - proof that Number 6's not going to accidentally give anything away. She's willing to work for the Village to save her mother, so she wouldn't jeopardise that unless she was pretty sure it wouldn't end in disaster for both of them.



And Number 6's flirting as they got to know each other was cute :heart Nice dream there, with Number 14 posing naked and decorated by greek script - why can't I have dreams like that (oh wait, I do... never mind). Pity Number 2 was watching the screen as well, that would be a bit of a blush moment :blush



I'm looking forward to seeing how Number 6's 'arrangement' with Number 14 influences future efforts by various Number 2s to get her cooperation. Should be interesting :) Be seeing you :wink

Chris Cook

Through the Looking-glass

A Willow and Tara for every world.

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Re: feedback replies

Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Fri Apr 08, 2005 3:18 pm

All: Thanks for your lovely feedback. I hope to have an update finished by early next week. I'm sick, so as long as I can keep my eyes open, I should have nothing to do but write the next chapter and watch my sister's cable TV. Fun, fun stuff.





cperrins78: Glad you're still interested in the story, I definitely hope you like where I take the story. There should be more soon. Thanks for your feedback!



tarasgirl2: Well hey there yourself! Good to hear my story could help inform your appreciation of "The Simpsons," which is always positive. Glad you like my story, and the rest of the Number 2's should be pretty easy to identify. There is only one more that I'm a bit apprehensive about. You'll see what I mean.



I was a bit worried about the self-possessed Willow as well, but I did it that way because that was how Number 6 was in the show, and also the reason she's trapped is making her extra paranoid and aggressive. Most people would be a little self-possessed if they were taken hostage after resigning, and then subjected to psychological warfare. I try to lighten her character whenever I can, and I think you'll like how their relationship progresses. Thanks for reading.



TemperedCynic: Thanks for your enthusiastic feedback. You've definitely picked up on the tension I was trying to create. I figured for everybody's sake, especially mine, I had to work in that light at the end of the tunnel. There will be lots more angst, though, not to worry. There should be more soon. Thanks again.



Artemis: Yeah, it was a bit of a crash course in trust for our girls, and I do plan on challenging and affirming their newly formed relationship. I'm really psyched about the next two chapters, which will have lots of fun scenes.



Glad you liked my homage to "Restless." It should be no secret that Tara is my favorite part of that episode, for many reasons. The Cheeseman is a close second. A very close second.





Thanks again, everybody. Be seeing you.

~ringwaldoeuvre

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Mon Apr 11, 2005 8:39 pm

Title: The Prisoner

Author: ringwaldoeuvre

Disclaimer: Neither “Buffy the Vampire Slayer,” “Angel,” or “The Prisoner” are my property. They belong to Fox, Mutant Enemy, The WB, UPN, ITC, Inc., A&E, etc.

Spoilers: To be safe, all episodes of “Buffy the Vampire Slayer,” “Angel,” and “The Prisoner.” I may end up integrating characters/events/dialogue from all seasons and the 17 episodes of “The Prisoner” television series.

Pairings: W/T

Rating: PG-13

Summary: AU. A red-haired witch resigns from her post at the Council and wakes one morning in a strange and secluded place. She discovers that escape is impossible and she can trust no one.

Feedback: Is awesome. I’d appreciate constructive criticism/encouragement. You can reach me at ringwaldoeuvre@yahoo.com. If anyone wants to beta, holler at me.



***Chapter 5: Schizoid Girl***



“How about this one?”



The blonde concentrated. “Three wavy lines?”



Number 6 smiled, “Good, and this one?”



“A star?”



The redhead glanced at the card, which featured a red star. She nodded, “Yup, good guess.”



“You should know by now that it’s not a guess. I can just... tell,” Number 14 said.



“Can you tell what I’m thinking right now?”



The blonde blushed and replied, “I think I might have some idea.” She shook her head and proposed, “Why don’t we try one more? I’ve got to get to the laboratory.”



“Sure thing,” the redhead said as she picked up another card. “How about it?”



“A square.”



“Good guess, er, answer,” Number 6 replied.



Number 14 smiled, stood up and asked, “Can I take a picture of you? I’ve been practicing photography for the Village Crafts Festival. Are you entering?”



The redhead grinned and said, “Take all the pictures you want, but I don’t think I have anything crafty enough to enter into the Festival. Me plus art equals spaz. Besides, don’t you have something to tell me? I thought this was a business meeting, lamp in the window and all.”



“Y-yes. I found out my mother was moved from a hospital in Glasgow to London. It’s supposedly for her to receive better care, but I’m worried there is another reason. I’m going to try to find out what that reason is. I thought you should know. Now... say cheese.”



The blonde snapped the photo as the redhead wore a concerned look on her face. Number 14 said, “That might not turn out so well.”



Number 6 inquired, “Because there isn’t a lot of light?”



“No, because you weren’t smiling. I better get going.”



“Thanks for the info, blondie. I was planning on hitting the library today, see what I can learn. Let me know if anything comes up?”



The blonde nodded and said, “Of course, have a good day,” as she walked out of the cave.



The redhead tiptoed up to blow out an elevated candle. As did so, she bumped a candle over with her ankle and quickly swooped down to prevent the carpet from catching on fire. The flame singed her finger, which she pulled away and cooled off with her tongue. She carefully extinguished the remaining candles before emerging into the morning light, her finger still smarting from the burn.



***



“How is our baby coming along?”



Number 515 took off his goggles and responded, “Almost finished. And she’s got everything you asked for. All the extra programming, tons of world knowledge. She’s the real deal.”



Number 2 smiled. Her short, graying blonde hair made her appear more austere than her lab coat and grim expression implied. She asked, “When will she be ready to wake up?”



“Few more hours. I need to run a few response tests, and we’ll be ready to roll,” the man answered.



***



The redhead could not believe how depressing her day had been. After she left the cave, she did research about cancer. Then, another maid spontaneously burst into tears, the sky was overcast, and there was no lamp in the window of Number 14’s apartment when she passed before curfew. ‘Good times. Throw in a little rectal surgery and it’s my best day ever!’ The sarcastic thought made her think of her old friend. She missed him, and wished she had his ear. It would be nice to have someone to discuss her situation.



She returned to her apartment, made herself a cup of tea, and prepared for bed. She made a note to buy ointment for her blister at the general store the next day. She laid down in bed and thought about happier times before she closed her eyes and fell asleep.



The light above her bed began to flash. It slowly fell closer to the redhead’s face until it covered it completely. The flashing continued.



***



Number 2 smirked, “Excellent. When will the dispatch retrieve her?”



Number 515 responded, “They’re on their way. She should be completely hypnotized. We will begin the process as soon as we can get her to the dwelling.”



“Good. Failure to fully reeducate, everything we’ve worked for could end tonight. Do not release her until you are certain she is ready.”



“Hey, easy there. When we’re finished, she won’t know herself.”



***



“Good morning, good morning, good morning. Rise and shine, rise and shine! Here are today’s announcements. All citizens are encouraged to participate in the Village Crafts Festival. The weather today will be sunny and mild.”



The woman opened her eyes and took in the altered decor of her apartment. She swung her legs out of bed and caught her reflection in the mirror. Where she should have seen red locks and green eyes, she saw black hair and dark brown eyes.



‘Okay, is it Halloween? Do they even have Halloween? What would be the point, when no one is who they seem to be anyway,’ she thought. She examined her surroundings, and could find no clue to explain where she was, or why she didn’t wake up in her own bed.



The woman decided to dress and go outside. As she walked toward the cafe, a woman in a multicolored cape nodded and said, “Good morning, Number 12.”



She turned her head and asked, “What? Why did you call me Number 12?”



The woman looked at her quizzically and replied, “Well, because that’s what I called you the last time I saw you.”



The brunette woman shook her head and walked toward Number 2’s green dome. She figured that she might as well confront Number 2 and let him, or whoever it was, know that she was hip to their plan. ‘Don’t want to be too much of a pain, though, lest they resort to more drastic measures,’ she thought. She walked through the doors to Number 2’s chamber just as the butler finished setting up a tray into the room.



Number 2 stood and exclaimed, “Good to see you, old girl. Please join me for breakfast!”



Number 12 walked to the tray and removed the cover off a tray of pancakes. She had to admit that she was a little hungry, and pancakes sounded good. Number 2 said jovially, “Do you remember how we used to call you ‘Flapjack Jane?’” At the redhead’s confused look she continued, “Ah, of course, way to start living the part, Number 12. You see, we're trying to determine why she resigned her post. I think you’ll find everything in this folder. Complete psychological profile, personal and professional history, everything.”



Number 2 handed the folder to Number 12. She informed the brunette, “You certainly look the part. We’ll just have a couple girls work you over, get you all ready. Oh but don’t worry, they’re very pretty.”



The brunette remained silent. Number 2 eyed her and said, “If there are no more questions, let’s get started. Oh, and one more thing. In case things get mixed up, the password is ‘gemini.’”



‘Something is up, but I’ll have to go along with it if I want to figure out what they’re trying to do,’ the brunette thought. Number 2 guided her through a pair of doors and down a flight of stairs to a room with two women and a large chair in the center. Number 2 gestured for her to sit down.



The brunette sat in the chair and whistled to no one in particular as the women dyed her hair bright red, and changed her eyes to the usual green. Number 2 leaned over her shoulder as she looked in the mirror and said, “Amazing. And those aren’t contacts, either, Number 12. We’ve developed a technique to actually change the color of your eyes. Well now, I think you’re ready for action.”



***



Number 12 walked through the Village to the apartment of Number 6, thinking that perhaps the inhabitant of her apartment could answer some questions. As she walked through the door, she did a triple-take. Before her stood a figure that looked exactly like her. If she didn’t know better, she would have thought she was looking in a mirror.



The figure turned around and looked the intruder up and down. “Oh... hello. Well now, are you one of those double agents we hear so much about these days? Nifty, really nifty.”



Number 12 took a few more steps into the apartment to inspect what looked like herself, Number 6. She examined her face and noted, “Well look at me. You know I never realized I had so many freckles.”



Number 6 retorted, “Must be all that sun I get. This Village is quite the vacation spot, I don’t know why they don’t advertise this place. Club Med for the underground set. Everybody would be jumping at the chance to give up their freedom and their identity and their sanity, if they knew there was a good tan in it for them.”



“I know that I’ve enjoyed my time here, as Number 6.”



“Now, now, Number 12. As cliched a tactic as this is, why don’t we try a little test. Magic, perhaps? Let’s see how powerful you are,” said Number 6.



Number 12 threw her eyes to the ground sheepishly and replied, “I can’t.”



Number 6 crossed her arms across her chest and looked the other redhead square in the eye to ask, “Can’t, or won’t?”



“Both. But since - and I can’t believe I’d ever insist this - I am Number 6, perhaps something else? A physical test?”



“Fine, let’s go to the gymnasium,” Number 6 said as she graciously gestured to the door. The pair exited and made their way to the gymnasium.



***



Number 2 watched the scene in her chamber. As the figures danced across the screen, Number 14 walked through her chamber doors.



“Hello, Number 14. Is there something you needed?”



The blonde nodded before her eye caught the action on the screen. ‘What?! I didn’t know this was going to happen,’ she thought in a panic. “Y-yes. I wanted to know m-more about the coven binding spell on Number 6. I think it might have had some adverse effects on the subject, and I’d just like to look over the spell for myself. I’ve been having trouble reading Number 6 the last couple of days.”



“I’ll see what I can do, Number 14, but I’m rather occupied at the moment. That reminds me, should the occasion arise, be sure to identify Number 6 as the real Number 6. Remember, the real Number 6 has a mole on her wrist. Look for that, and speak accordingly. Number 515 and I are running an experiment, and we cannot afford any loose ends. Don’t worry, we’re all on the same side. It’s only our methods that differ. We use the latest in scientific technology and you, if I’m not mistaken, talk about your feelings?”



Number 14 swallowed anxiously. “It’s a little more complicated than that.”



Number 2 smiled and responded, “Oh, I’ve no doubt. Just as I have no doubt that you will do the right thing. I’ll get that file to you as soon as possible. Goodbye, Number 14.”



***



“Sorry, old girl. Number 6 is a right-handed shot. It seems that I certainly shoot more like me than you do,” the woman said to a frustrated Number 12. They had tried fencing and target-shooting, both convinced that they were the genuine article.



Number 12 proposed, “Why don’t we try hacking? I’ll bet I can get into the U.S. DoD faster than you can. That is very much like me.”



Number 6 laughed, “Did you have your crazy flakes today? Or have you forgotten that the only thing you can hack in this place is the Library Card Catalog? Now THAT’s edgy, in that literary, super-nerd-power activate kinda way. You seem desperate, and I get it. Ya know, with the mind games and the cabin fever and the rovers and the unflappable good manners everyone around here seems to have.”



Number 12 let her shoulders droop. “I guess I did forget. Besides, you certainly babble like me.” She thought, ‘What is going on? I AM right-handed, why am I using my left? What’s really happening? Who am I?’



“I’ve got it. If you’re really me, then you will know why I resigned. So, how about it? Why did I resign?”



Number 12 cast a suspicious eye at her counterpart. “I’m surprised at Number 2, these agents just aren’t what they used to be. Why don’t we go to the green dome and figure this out. I’m sure the people in charge will be just as intrigued as we are”



Number 6 shrugged and responded, “Fine. Finey McFine. They might not even know about this, though it’s doubtful. I’ll follow you, assuming you know the way.”



***



The pair walked to the green dome. They walked through the doors to Number 2’s chamber as the short-haired woman spun around in her chair. “Welcome, ladies. I’m surprised it’s taken you this long to come to me. Won’t you have a seat?”



“No thanks,” both redheads replied together. They looked askance and both cleared their throats. Number 6 burst, “Look, what do you people want with Number 6? Other than having me teach my synthetic twin how to fence and shoot?”



Number 2 responded, “That should be pretty obvious by now. But there are more pressing matters at hand. Why don’t we settle this?” She picked up a phone and spoke, “Number 14, please come to my chambers immediately.”



The interim minutes were spent with leering eyes and awkward silence. The blonde entered with an anxious look on her face, which was not helped as she saw the group in the room. Number 2 said, “Hello, Number 14. I think you might be able to be of assistance.”



“O-of course. What can I do?”



“I’d like you to examine these two women and tell me which is the real Number 6. Is it the woman that seems to be Number 6, or Number 12?”



Number 14 was beside herself. “I can try, but isn’t there a better way to do this? With DNA samples or something?” She felt six inches tall under the glares in the room.



Number 6 inserted, “The trouble with science is that it can always be perverted. I believe in human instinct.”



Number 12 said, “Yes, well. I’m sure that we won’t need to worry about that. In a minute, she will confirm that I am the original, and you are the economy pack.” She looked at the blonde earnestly and prompted her, “Well, who’s the real deal?”



The blonde remembered Number 2’s order. Every muscle in her arm hurt as she pointed to Number 6, whose smile stretched clear across her face. Number 2 clapped her hands and said, “Glad we could clear that up!”



“There was a much simpler way to know. Number 6 has a mole on her wrist, and this Number 12 has no mole,” Number 14 informed the group.



“Thank you very much, Number 14. You’re excused.”



The blonde folder her hands behind her back and walked out. She tried to catch Number 12’s eye before her exit, but only found downcast eyes.



After Number 14’s figure disappeared, Number 2 turned to the pair of redheads. “Well, Number 6. Sorry for the confusion. You can be on your way, as I think I have a few questions for our impostor here.”



Number 6 left the room, and Number 2 picked up a phone. The image of Number 515 appeared on screen as he answered the phone. “Number 515, what is the meaning of this!? You forgot to put a mole on Number 12’s wrist! Do you have any idea what your little mistake cost us?”



Number 515 shook his head as he answered, “No, sir. I could have sworn everything was up to your specifications.”



“You were wrong. You know the rules, you know I hate exceptions. That is all.”



Number 2 terminated the call and looked at Number 12. “I’m sorry, old girl. I thought we had you totally prepared to find out why Number 6 resigned. Oh well. You’ll leave tomorrow.”



***



Number 12 returned to her apartment. She was bordering on despondent and ecstatic. ‘Who am I? And did they say I could leave tomorrow? Actually leave? Will they actually let me go? Praise the Goddess and her minions!’ As she looked at herself in the mirror, her inner dialogue raged on. ‘What will happen to Number 14, and her mother? Why do I care? Sure we made a deal, but couldn’t I help her from the outside world? And how do I know I can really trust her, after she didn’t even recognize me?’



She turned away and went to the kitchen. She picked up the tea kettle with her left hand, and an image flashed through her mind of an electric prod jolting her right hand. She reached for a plate and another image flashed, this time with three plates of breakfast foods. She looked down at her hand and noticed the blister on her finger. A swarm of images flooded her mind. She was eating flapjacks, batting away a prod with her left hand, and using the internet.



‘Whoa, there’d a deja vu party in my head and everyone’s invited,’ she thought. ‘Maybe that explains the new tendencies? You know your captors are smarter than you thought when they make you doubt your own identity.’ She heard, “Attention citizens. The time is now 10:15 p.m. 15 minutes to curfew,” from the speaker along the wall. She walked toward the door thinking, ‘I’m not going to get any answers in here.’



***



As she crept behind a row of bushes, the redhead head the announcement “The time is now 10:30 p.m. Sleep well, citizens.” She made her way toward the road to Number 6’s apartment when she was suddenly confronted by two very large men.



One of them asked, “What’s the password?”



“Gemini?”



“Good guess, wrong answer.” They moved toward her, fists clenched.



The redhead struggled, but eventually managed to get the two guards on either side of her. She quickly ducked as they swung their fists and knocked each other out. As she ran to Number 6’s apartment she thought, ‘Hey, some things don’t just work in the movies!’



She crouched outside the apartment and found the door unlocked. She found Number 6 sleeping, and decided a firm grab on the neck would wake her up. Her hand tightened around the figure’s neck, and a hand came up to move her arm. Number 6’s eyes opened.



“That’s not very nice,” she said as one hand held Number 12’s arm and the other punched her in the stomach.



Number 12 fell back against the wall, fists raised to defend herself and, if possible, beat the truth out of this impostor. Number 6 rose from the bed and assumed a classic fighting stance. They squared off and looked each other in the eye.



Number 6 made the first move. Her right fist thrust toward the other woman’s face as her left went toward her abdomen. Number 12 deflected the blow to her face, but neglected to block her stomach. She doubled over, hoping that she hadn’t broken a rib.



From her position close to the ground, she swung her legs and knocked Number 6’s legs out from under her. A swift kick to the head left Number 6 on her belly, neck twisted half way around her body.



Number 12 slowly rose to her feet, assessing her opponent. She nudged the still figure with her foot. Number 6’s body made no movement, yet her eyelids fluttered. Number 12 ventured, “Um, you alright?”



From her position on the floor, Number 6 replied, “I’m sorry, I don’t understand that question. But thank you for asking!”



“Okay, can you get up? Maybe we should get you to a doctor, help straighten out your neck.”



Number 6 braced herself and stood up. She turned her head forward, and asked, “Would you like me to run this program again?”



Number 12 gaped at the other woman. “How about you sit down, and tell me what is going on.”



Number 6 looked up and said, “You’re Number 6. Your password is “gemini.” You’re good with magic and computers, and you’re gay. Would you like to sword fight?” A spark shot out of her mouth.



“Great, a robot. At least I know I’m me. How do I escape the Village?”



The robot merrily responded, “I’m not authorized to answer that question. Please try another!”



“Okay, what is your objective?”



“Force Number 12 to doubt her identity, and prove herself to me by revealing her reason for resignation. But that’s easy. Would you like to read my “Doogie Howser” fanfic? It’s very smutty.”



The redhead’s left eyebrow twitched before she recoiled, “Ah... no thank you. What is your password?”



“Schizoid girl. Can I go now? I have to return to Number 515 when I break.”



“Let’s go together. After you,” the redhead politely gestured to the door. The robot began walking and Number 12 decided enough was enough. She slammed the robot in the neck and kicked the back of its knee to send it toppling to the ground. Two more precise blows left the robot a puddle of appendages.



She made her way to the telephone and picked up the telephone. “Number 2 please... yes, hello, Number 2? It’s Number 6... the password is “schizoid girl”... Anyway, I’m all broken and hot. Can I report to you and Number 515, even though it’s after curfew?... Thanks!”



The redhead ended the call and exited the apartment.



***



As she walked through the darkness of the Village, she noticed that Number 14 had left a lamp lit in her window. ‘Great, that should be good. Might as well show up and try to charm some information out of her before I tell her to hit the road,’ she thought.



She walked through the doors to Number 2’s chamber and saw the woman and Number 515 sitting and reading files. Number 515 shot up asked, “So what happened to you?”



“Number 12 attacked me. She is very angry, kept muttering something about the apocalypse and frogs. She snapped my neck and ran away. I put it back in place, but I don’t feel right. Will you check me out, Number 515?”



As Number 515 approached the redhead, Number 2 picked up a receiver and ordered, “Control Room! Locate Number 12 immediately.”



The dark-haired man turned the redhead around to open her panel. When his attempts to push her back did not yield the panel, he checked her pulse and shouted, “Sir! We have a heartbeat!”



The redhead spun around and looked at the flabbergasted pair. She announced, “Good plan, I’ll admit, trying to make me doubt my identity. Too bad the desperate can also be desperately unpredictable. Ciao.”



She walked out, the ringing sound of the large red phone echoing through the chamber.



***



The next morning, the redhead woke in her own bed. ‘Gee, I never thought I’d be glad to be Number 6,’ she thought as she walked to the bathroom. She took a quick shower and headed down to the beach. Taking the necessary precautions, she finally reached the cave.



She entered to find the blonde already sitting before the altar. She alerted Number 14 to her presence as she said, “This better be good.”



Number 14 stood up and tucked her hair behind her ear. She said, “Oh thank god, I wasn’t sure if you would come. I needed to explain about yesterday.”



Number 6 shrugged her shoulders and replied, “There’s no need to explain. You were looking out for yourself. I get it. Meanwhile, I got a fun make-over. I'd love to know what the people that thought black hair and dark eyes would look good were smoking. Now, if you’ll excuse me, I have an appointment with the undefeated chess champion at the Old People’s Home.”



She was almost to the mouth of the cave when she felt a hand grab her elbow. She turned around to face Number 14. The blonde looked at her with desperate eyes and said, “I’m ashamed of what I did yesterday. It was a betrayal. I would like a second chance.”



“This was your second chance. You messed with me once already, remember?”



The blonde bowed her head and responded, “Tw... twice, actually. I just - I wanted to be honest with you. I do care about you, and I’m so sorry.”



The redhead felt a brief pang of guilt and gently replied, “Look, I’m sorry about everything. You’re cute and all, but I’d rather just go it alone. They were talking about letting me leave, and I missed that chance."



The blonde let out a laugh of disbelief. "They weren't actually going to let you leave. They wanted to sustain the perception that you weren't you."



"At least I know I can trust myself. Goodbye.”



“But - my mother. I f-found out why she was moved. Her health took a turn for the w-worse. They’re keeping her in permanent stasis in a facility just north of London. She won’t die, but they have an ever tighter grip on me now. At least... please think about helping me. I’ve already gotten a copy of the binding spell they used on you, though I haven’t had time to analyze it. Please,” she said with an unshed tear, “we can survive this together.”



Number 6 replied, “I’ll think about it blondie. For now, you ought to work on your bluffing skills. That almost-crying bit is so played out. I’ll contact you when I’ve made my decision.”



The redhead walked out of the cave as the blonde let her tears fall.



***End of Chapter 5***

Edited by: ringwaldoeuvre at: 4/12/05 12:23 am
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Re: The Prisoner

Postby Safuega » Tue Apr 12, 2005 10:30 am

Wow, what an update! I was lost for a good while, felt like Theseus in the labyrinth but without the ball of golden thread. I don't know how you keep this all straight in your head, but I'm only glad that you do, and that you are sharing this cool, mind-bending story with us.



As for my previous update and my mention of angst, well, I really don't want to extract any promises of no angst. I like conflict, a well told story has conflict/angst to be resolved. You are doing a great job of keeping a light tone to the captivity while at the same time inserting just the right amount of drama/conflict/angst. Well done.



Safuega

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby TemperedCynic » Tue Apr 12, 2005 7:10 pm

Hard enough to deal with incarceration, but now Number 6 deals with losing an identity she never chose. Diabolically clever for Number 2 (Prof. Walsh) and 515, just not quite clever enough. They don't realize the damage they've done, however - Number 6 now doubts herself for the first time and lashes out at Number 12 in the cave. Does Willow really mean those cold words, or does she really want to believe Tara? Time and frustration will show the independent Number 6 that trusting others might get her out of the Village. But is Number 12 that person - remains to be seen. Brilliant!!!


More than any other time in history, mankind faces a crossroads. One path leads to despair and utter hopelessness. The other, to total extinction. Let us pray we have the wisdom to choose correctly. Woody Allen (1935 - )

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby Artemis » Tue Apr 12, 2005 10:18 pm

Eep! Trouble in not-exactly-paradise :paranoid



I suppose Number 14 was right to do what she did, looking at it coldly - if she'd sided with Number 6 openly it would've tipped off the Village that she wasn't to be trusted, whereas this way she's still on the inside, and she's got the details of the binding spell being used on 6. But you can't help but empathise with 6 - she desperately needed something to hang onto there, to retain her belief in her own identity, and it must've stung like hell when 14 didn't provide it.



I wonder though how much of 6's anger is because of that, and how much is a sort of defense mechanism - given the atmosphere of rampant paranoia, I wonder how much of a strain it is to trust someone else? 6 might subconsciously have leapt at the chance to withdraw from their fragile alliance, and just rely on herself - she doesn't leave herself open to betrayal that way. But once she's had a chance to cool down, maybe she'll realise that, under harsh circumstances, 14 did the right thing.



It amazes me how naturally the Buffy characters and situations fit into the Prisoner stories - Willow and Tara's psychic link, Warren and his androids (better than Buffy, in fact - here it's actually plausible he could build an android, not laughably ridiculous like it was in Sunnydale), Walsh overseeing such a project, it all fits.



More foreshadowing of the arts & crafts fair, I'm looking forward to that. Great update :bow



Be seeing you :wink

Chris Cook

Through the Looking-glass

A Willow and Tara for every world.

Smut Bunnies!: Saving the world, sexily!

Edited by: Artemis at: 4/12/05 9:19 pm
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feedback

Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Sun Apr 17, 2005 4:41 pm

All: Thanks for reading, I should have the next chapter in a couple of days. I'm jazzed about it, and anxious to get it finished. It's a doozy.





Safuega: Sometimes I feel a bit lost myself! That's why I have a rather extensive outline. I swear, between this and "Huddled Masses," I'm getting tired of having to compile research and outlines that are almost as long as the actual stories. Maybe I'll write a story about a boyband next. Still, the mindplay is a crucial element to the "Prisoner" series, and I wouldn't be doing it justice if things weren't intricate.



The next chapter is going to be a roller coaster of angst. I am also a believer that there has to be a central conflict to make things compelling, whether it be emotional, political, whatever. There has to be something driving the action. Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it.



TemperedCynic: Thank you for your wonderful feedback. You've really hit on the main conflict of the story, which is the balance between trusting others and self-reliance. The episode of "The Prisoner" on which I based this chapter made be think of "Doppelgangland," and of course I'd have to use it to as a metaphor to emphasize that Number 6 is having an internal identity crisis: she is starting to question herself and whether or not she can trust Number 14, a new type of self-assessment for her. Thanks again for your thoughts.



Artemis: Yes, things are getting angsty. Number 14's betrayal happened just when she needed something to affirm her identity. Both acted rationally, but it doesn't make it any easier for either of them. I'm trying to make Number 6's paranoia and individualism seem natural, which I think is appropriate given the conditions of the Village.



"The Prisoner" stories really do fit in with a lot of the Buffy characters and themes. Granted, I did finesse some of the scenarios, as I'm sure you can tell, but one of the reasons I decided to write the story in the first place was because it seemed like a good fit. I can definitely see Maggie Walsh, Quentin Travers, Ethan Rayne, Caleb, The Mayor, etc. as Number 2 in the show, with the striped scarf and cane and everything.



I'm not sure if I'm going to use the arts and crafts fair in "The Chimes of Big Ben" as a completely isolated chapter, or if I will merge it with "Dance of the Dead." I'm leaning toward the latter, but you're very perceptive to pick up what I'm hinting at for the future. Thanks for your feedback!





Be seeing you.

~ringwaldoeuvre (Mary)

Edited by: ringwaldoeuvre at: 4/18/05 1:24 pm
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Re: The Prisoner

Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Mon Apr 18, 2005 2:33 pm

Title: The Prisoner

Author: ringwaldoeuvre

Disclaimer: Neither “Buffy the Vampire Slayer,” “Angel,” or “The Prisoner” are my property. They belong to Fox, Mutant Enemy, The WB, UPN, ITC, Inc., A&E, etc.

Spoilers: To be safe, all episodes of “Buffy the Vampire Slayer,” “Angel,” and “The Prisoner.” I may end up integrating characters/events/dialogue from all seasons and the 17 episodes of “The Prisoner” television series.

Pairings: W/T

Rating: R

Summary: AU. A red-haired witch resigns from her post at the Council and wakes one morning in a strange and secluded place. She discovers that escape is impossible and she can trust no one.

Feedback: Is awesome. I’d appreciate constructive criticism/encouragement. You can reach me at ringwaldoeuvre@yahoo.com. If anyone wants to beta, holler at me.

Notes: (1) PLEASE read to the end before sending me hate mail. I raised the rating to R for violence and mature sexual subjects. There will be major character death, but it will be rectified by the end of the chapter. Thank you, in advance. (2) Again, I’m not cheating with the use of Tara’s name. It was done in the episode, and you should know by now that I abhor easy solutions when there can be so much delicious conflict.



***Chapter 6: Living In Harmony***



The Sheriff rode her pale horse into town. She dismounted and went into the Marshal’s office. The redhead threw her badge on the desk and took off her holster. Her eyes said all she needed to say before she walked out of town with her saddle slung across her shoulder.



She walked over the ridge, and did not see the band of men waiting for her descent into the valley. The redhead barely got three punches in before they knocked her unconscious and threw her over the back of a horse.



***



The band of men rode into town with the blindfolded redhead. They dumped her body on the dusty ground before they took off for the mountains. The Sheriff slowly woke up and realized that she did not know where she was.



A man leaned against a tree playing a guitar and said, “Welcome to Harmony, stranger.”



The Sheriff faced the man and clarified, “Harmony? Never heard of it.”



The man grinned, “Many haven’t. It’s sort of, how do you say, exclusive.”



“Why am I here?”



“You’ll find it’s wise to not ask too many questions around here, senorita. Eh, you look like you could use a drink. Why you no try the saloon?”



***



The Sheriff pushed through the swinging doors of the Silver Dollar Saloon. Men sat around tables playing cards and slapped their knees in laughter. A layer of grime coated the paintings on the wall, and the dim light of the chandelier cast faint shadows across the faces of the lonely.



The sound of the tinny piano halted. A blonde barmaid looked her up and down as she walked over to the bar. The bartender slid a glass of whiskey to her and the barmaid said, “First round’s on the house for regulars.”



The sheriff assessed the gorgeous woman and replied, “I’m not regular.”



“I’m Tara,” the barmaid said with a smile.



“Nice name,” the sheriff said as she reached for her drink. A bullet flew through the glass a few inches from her hand. Her eye shifted to the man that had holstered his gun. He wore a black top hat and his tan pants were pulled high above his waist by suspenders. His stoic expression revealed nothing, and the redhead felt his cold eyes go right through her.



A voice called to her, “Come and join me for a drink, Sheriff.”



The redhead turned and saw a lanky man sitting at a table, playing solitaire. As she walked toward the well-dressed man, she sent her fist into the jaw of the man in the top hat. Just as he was set to retaliate, the voice said “Not now, Kid. Run along. Who’s going to watch the jail?”



The Kid threw a steely look at the Sheriff, straightened his hat, and left the saloon. The Sheriff sat down and the man said, “You shouldn’t have done that. He’s good. Sensitive, but of the best. He’s got a mean draw, and you’ll need all the friends you can get. I’m the Judge ‘round these parts. Nice to meet you, Sheriff.”



The Judge extended his right hand as Tara brought two glasses of whiskey to the table. After a firm handshake, the Judge added, “He’s mean, and I could use some more, like you.”



The Sheriff replied, “I’m not for hire.”



“Turned in your badge?”



“And my gun.”



“What were your reasons?”



“My reasons,” the redhead replied.



The Judge tilted his head and asked, “You’ve already taken a job? Who with?”



“With whom,” the Sheriff corrected.



“Look, I’m offering you a job. Harmony’s a good town, and I feel quite moved to make you an offer you can’t refuse. Why don’t you think about it?”



The Sheriff replied, “I already have.”



“And?”



“I’m moving on,” the redhead confirmed.



“Well, you should know that the bartender slipped a pellet of poison in your drink. You’ll be dead in an hour.”



The redhead’s face paled and the Judge laughed, “Just kidding!”



The Sheriff rolled her eyes and turned toward the door. Before she exited the saloon, she threw a dollar on the bar. She did not want to feel indebted to the beautiful barmaid.



***



A buxom blonde approached the Sheriff as she made her way to the stable to buy a horse. “Well hey there, looking for company?”



“No thanks, I’m on my way out of town.”



The blonde’s high-pitched laugh made the redhead wince as she responded, “I’ve never been anywhere, myself. I’ve always wanted to go to France.”



The Sheriff replied, “I’ve heard that there are beautiful cathedrals and gardens and museums.”



“And shops! I would kill for a Parisian dress.”



“Right, I’m sure you would. I think I had better be going,” the redhead said as she backed away toward the stable. She bumped into a gentleman that looked like a preacher.



He inquired, “Well stranger, fancy living in Harmony?



She gruffly responded, “Maybe I don’t like the way it’s run.”



“Hey! It’s a good town!”



“Keep it.”



The preacher shouted, “Quit badmouthing our town. It’s a good town!” His loud voice had attracted a mob around the Sheriff. The guitar player had joined the ruckus, throwing a punch at the redhead after he cried, “Why don’t you like our town?”



The Judge looked on and directed three men to break up the brawl. They dragged the struggling Sheriff into a prison cell, and the Judge soon followed. He leaned against the door frame and asked, “Changed your mind yet? You might like this jail.”



The Sheriff brushed the dust off her jacket as she said, “What’s the charge?”



“Protective custody. That’s quite a crowd out there, and you’re no good to me dead,” the Judge answered. He turned to his men and ordered, “Clear out that other cell.”



The Judge left the jail as the three men unlocked the cell and pulled a ragged woman off the bed. She cried, “What’s happening? I told you I won’t tell you what I saw, stop this! What are you doing to me?”



The woman dragged her feet along the ground as the men brought her to the center of town and put her on a horse under a tree. They fastened a noose around her neck as Tara burst out of the saloon. She shrieked, “No! You can’t do that, she’s my mother! Stop! Please, she’ll cooperate, I swear. I’ll do anything.”



The Judge held her back as the horse was urged out from under the bound woman. The sound of her snapped neck echoed through the ears of the town of Harmony.



***



Whiskey slid down the throat of the Kid as he stared at the caged Sheriff. The redhead had removed tobacco and papers from her pocket and began rolling herself a cigarette. The Kid’s dark eyes gleamed as he shifted his weight to emphasize the six-shooter that hung from his side. His top hat fell off his dark hair as he spun around and drew his gun. He pulled the trigger, and the click resonated through the empty chamber.



The Kid grinned, bent over to pick up his hat, and holstered his weapon. he carefully placed the hat back on his head, then showed off his quick-draw once again. He sauntered back to the desk, poured another drink, and curled up with the glass in his chair.



Tara walked into the prison with a bottle in her hand. Her pale face was blank after the events in the town center, and her bright blue dress brought out the blue in her sad eyes. “I brought you a drink, Kid,” Tara said as she put the bottle on the desk. The Kid sat up and let his eyes wander up and down her body.



The blonde grimaced and decided a smile would help her accomplish her goal. “You know I’ve always liked you, Kid.”



The Kid’s hard eyes raked her body with desire. He grabbed Tara’s arm, pulled her to him, and kissed her ferociously. She gently pushed him away and asked, “How about you pour me a drink?”



He smiled and searched the messy desk for a clean glass. Finding a tumbler, he filled it with whiskey and raised his own cup to the blonde. She tipped her glass to him and consumed the liquor in one gulp. The Kid smirked, put his cup down, and pulled Tara to him again. She shuddered through his sloppy kiss and said, “Well, I’ve got to get back to the saloon some time today.”



The Sheriff watched the whole scene with curiosity. She could not hide her jealousy of the Kid, so she tipped her hat over her eyes. She sighed and threw her cigarette to the ground, then stomped it with her boot heel.



As the Kid turned his back and took the blonde’s glass to the basin, she slowly pocketed the keys that hung from a hook in the wall. She waved to the Kid and left the jail.



The Sheriff was brought out of her daydream by the sound of the barmaid’s whisper. “Psst! Hey! You should take these and get out of town. Please. For both of us.”



The redhead rose from her crouched position on the floor and gave the blonde a grateful look through the barred window. She took the keys from her hand, and swore she felt a spark rush through her.



Tara smiled gently and said, “You should leave after dark. I’ll have a horse waiting for you behind the saloon after it closes.”



The Sheriff smiled and said, “Thank you.”



Hours later, the Kid sat slumped in his chair. An empty bottle hung loosely from his hands and his snore reverberated throughout the jail. The Sheriff took her chance and unlocked the cell. She left the jail and crept to the back of the saloon to wait behind the bushes until it closed and Tara brought her the horse. She thought she might invite the blonde to join her in her escape since she was kind enough to steal those keys, and she was rather beautiful.



Thirty minutes later, she was counting stars as Tara’s voice pierced the darkness, “Hey, are you here?”



The Sheriff shot up and waved her arm to catch the blonde’s attention. Tara’s smile shone through the dark night and she said, “Good. Wait here while I get the horse.”



She returned with a brown horse and handed the reins to the redhead. She informed the Sheriff, “There’s only one way out of town, that’s due north.”



“I can’t thank you enough. Do you want to come with me? I’d appreciate the company, and I’ve never been terribly comfortable with horses.”



Tara shook her head. “I can’t. I know there’s nothing for me here now, but I think my mother would have wanted me to take care of our animals. I did want to, um,” she leaned forward and planted a chaste kiss on the Sheriff’s lips, “wish you luck, though.”



The redhead was stunned. After several awkward moments, she remembered to blink. She took the blonde’s hand and pulled her closer. Her green eyes traced the curves of Tara’s face and she captured her lips once more. She held the blonde against her and ran her hands down the length of her body.



Tara pulled away and smiled before she said, “You had better leave, so you can get as far as possible before the morning. It’s already so late.”



The Sheriff nodded. She captured the blonde’s lips once more before she mounted the horse. The redhead tipped her hat and rode out the gates of Harmony.



***



As the redhead had sat waiting for the barmaid, the Judge and his three men walked into the jail to check on the Kid and the Sheriff. He found the cell door swinging open and the Kid’s feet on the desk as he slept. Enraged, he kicked the Kid’s legs. The Kid dropped the bottle and drew his gun as his eyes flew open.



The Judge shouted, “You let him escape, you idiot! Men! Get out of here, and find that Sheriff!”



At the time the Sheriff tipped her hat to the blonde, the Judge’s three henchmen sat guarding the road two miles north of town. They saw the Sheriff approach on horse and hid on the side of the road. As the redhead drew near, they lassoed her and pulled her to the ground. The Sheriff managed to knock out one of the men before they pinned her against a tree and delivered a swift blow to her head.



***



The three henchmen threw the cuffed redhead to the floor of the saloon as the sun rose over Harmony. The commotion of the Sheriff’s capture had attracted a crowd of farmers working in the fields. The Kid walked into the saloon, and immediately walked out when he saw the concerned look on Tara’s face as she examined the wounded redhead.



The Judge walked past her and sat down. “Let justice be done. The court is now in session.”



The redhead sighed, “What’s the charge?”



“Against you? None, you were being held in protective custody,” the Judge said before turning to the blonde. “The people of Harmony versus Tara Maclay. You are accused of aiding a criminal escape.”



A farmer stepped forward, “But Judge, sir, didn’t you just say she was just in protective custody?”



The Judge sneered, “Ms. Maclay didn’t know that. Now I’ll present the facts and you can decide for yourself, if you gentlemen will serve as a jury.”



The farmers sat in a group of chairs on one side of the saloon. The Judge continued, “Tara Maclay, do you deny that you did willingly aid and abet the prisoner in her escape from Harmony?”



Tara ducked her head and nodded, “Yes, S-sir.”



“What kind of court is this? It’s not fair,” the redhead blurted.



“Order in the court, and it is a court, Sheriff. I assure you, we’ve been doing things this way for a long time. Now, I’ll ask the jury to go into the other room and return with a decision,” the Judge declared.



Five minutes later, the group of farmers returned a guilty verdict. The Judge ordered his men to take Tara into custody and told the Sheriff, “When you work for me, I’ll let her go.”



The Sheriff spat, “Fine, but I swear to god I’ll kick your ass if you lay one finger on her.”



“Now, isn’t this more fun than kicking my ass? Well, it’s more fun for me. Shall we to the prison? I can’t wait to get you out on the street.”



The pair walked past a sulking Kid on the way to the prison. He was practicing his quick draw in front of the stables when the Judge said, “Hey Kid, we’ve got a new arrival that needs your attention. Get back to the jail.”



The Judge pulled the Sheriff to the side and reminded her, “The Kid’s real fond of Tara, but he does tend to get over-affectionate.”



***



The Kid stared through the bars at the jailed blonde. He admired her grace as she sat in the very cell that held her mother for so long. She looked remarkably at ease as she lay on the cot. His mind lingered to other things he would like to see her do on the cot.



The Judge and the Sheriff entered the prison and went over to the desk. The man reached into the drawer and pulled out a silver star, a revolver, and holster. He handed them to the redhead and said “You’re going to like this job, Sheriff.”



The Sheriff accepted the star, but added, “I won’t be needing the weapon. Never was fond of guns, and it’s bad enough I have to wear this badge. Now why don’t you release Ms. Maclay?”



“I’m sure I don’t need to tell you that Harmony can be a rough town, especially without a gun” the Judge replied with a shrug. “Alright, it’ll be here when you change your mind. Kid! Release the young lady.”



The Kid’s eyes revealed his disappointment, but he did as the Judge ordered. Tara exited the cell and gave an appreciative glance at the redhead. She opened her mouth to say something, but thought better of it and left the prison.



The Judge said, “Well, I’ll leave you two to get comfortable. Have a good first day, Sheriff.”



As he left the prison, the Kid gave the Sheriff an angry glare. He grabbed a bottle and walked out, leaving the redhead to explore her new turf. The jail was pretty basic. Two cells, a cluttered desk, and a counter with a jug of water and a basin. She felt that the whole place could use a good cleaning, but there were more pressing matters. She decided to assert her new authority and start returning order to the streets of Harmony.



The Sheriff walked into the midmorning light and squinted as she took in the busy town center. A group of men approached from the stable and one of them called out, “So I hear you’re the new Sheriff. My name’s Zeke. I thought you’d never clean up this town.”



“That’s right, and I think I’ll start with you. I don’t want to hear about any of you boys starting any fights around these parts,” the redhead responded.



“Oh, you mean like this?” Zeke asked with a blow to the redhead’s face.



The Sheriff tumbled to the ground, as Zeke’s friends began kicking her gut. She managed to grab a leg and throw one of her attackers off balance. She got to her feet, blocked a punch from Zeke, and countered with a strike to his jaw. He spun around and fell face first into the adjacent horse trough.



A crowd had gathered round the brawl, including Tara, who had run out of the Silver Dollar Saloon. She winced as the Sheriff dispatched the two remaining men and braced her back.



The redhead returned to the prison to rinse her wounds. She poured water into the basin as Tara walked into the jail. She asked, “Are you alright?”



The Sheriff replied, “Nothing a little water can’t take care of.”



Tara could not take it, she warned, “Get out or they’ll kill you. They say they won’t but they will find a way to get what they want and kill you.”



“They killed your mother, why don’t you leave?”



A tear fell from her eye as Tara thought of her mother that had died not twenty-four hours prior. “She was a stubborn woman, just like you. That might be what I like about you. She wanted me to take care of the animals, but I’m starting to realize that she would want me to live a happy life, too.”



A gleam of intrigue flashed through the Sheriff’s green eyes. She took a few steps toward the blonde and asked, “You really like me?”



Tara nodded. “I do. I think I might be able to love you, if we ever make it out of this place alive. You’re sweet, and you’re strong, and you’ve got amazing... attributes.”



“Attributes, huh? Like the ability to grab you and kiss you senseless?”



The blonde blushed at the other woman’s forwardness, “Um, yeah. Those.” She threw herself into the redhead’s arms and kissed her. She could not help it, the redhead was so beautiful.



The Sheriff’s head was spinning. She wrapped her arms around the blonde and spun her around. She lifted her onto the desk and continued to press her lips against her. Her hands stroked Tara’s back, and pulled their bodies closer together.



Tara let her tongue glide over the other woman’s lips, and the redhead thrust her tongue out to meet it. Their kiss deepened, fanning the flames of a passion that burned through them.



The blonde pulled the Sheriff’s head away from her and breathed, “I’ll be in the saloon tonight. Meet me there after closing?”



The redhead nodded, grinned, and returned her lips to Tara’s smooth face.



Ten feet away, the Kid watched the scene through the window of a cell. One hand gripped his revolver, and the other gripped an empty bottle.



***



That night, the saloon bustled with drunk men. Tara had done her best to avoid the gropes and stares of the clientele as she served beer and whiskey. Her lips tingled with the memory of the beautiful Sheriff, and she could still feel the redhead’s hands across her back. She was excited at the thought of starting a new life with someone she could love.



Lost in her dream, she didn’t notice Will, a particularly intoxicated customer, grab her hand and waist and start dancing. She could smell the beer on his breath as he laughed and spun her around the saloon floor. Tara tried to have a sense of humor as she wrestled herself away from Will.



Two of his friends came to her rescue, and they were laughing about his antics when the Kid walked through the swinging doors. He saw that the drunken man had touched his Tara, and he took the cigar out of his mouth and extinguished it on Will’s neck.



A hush settled over the saloon. Will gasped and drew his gun from his side, yet did not fire. The Kid tilted his head and a menacing glare fell across his face. He swing his hip out and set his hand near his revolver. One second later, Will lay dead on the floor with a bullet through his gut.



The Sheriff ran in when she heard the gunshot. The bartender filled in the details, “Will drew first, Sheriff. The Kid was just defending himself. But, of course, you’re the Sheriff, so I’ll leave it to you.” The redhead threw a quick glance to Tara before she stepped over to Will’s dead body. She looked down at the sad sight of a man, gave the Kid a menacing glare, and walked out.



The saloon patrons murmured, “Coward. Get some guns on!”



***



Tara could barely hold herself up on two feet. The only thought sustaining her was the idea that in a few minutes she would be reunited with her precious redhead. She blew out the last lamp behind the bar and put her coat on. Just as she turned to the door, the Kid appeared.



“Oh! You scared me, Kid. What are you doing here?”



The Kid gazed at her with hate in his eyes. She saw pain, anger, betrayal, and jealousy painted on his face. For a moment she was afraid, but decided to smile and say, “You’d better get home, Kid. It’s late.”



He continued to pierce her with his eyes as he drew closer to the blonde. He put his hands on her shoulders and pulled her to him. His head thrust forward as he tried to plant a kiss on her lips.



She struggled, “You’re crazy, now get out of my way!” When he did not release her, she bit his lip.



The Kid stood shocked, and put a hand up to feel the trickle of blood that flowed from his mouth. He gaped, blood coming from his mouth, and a tear coming from his eye. He straightened his top hat and threw himself at Tara. He tore her dress from her chest and put his hands around her neck.



***



The Sheriff made her way to the north edge of Harmony. She rode to the valley and tied her horse to a tree out of the sight of the main road. After she located all of the guards, she managed to covertly knock each one out and tie them up without firing a single shot. She preferred to take them out one by one rather than take her chances with all three at the same time.



The redhead wished that there were something faster than a horse as she rode back to Harmony. She tied her horse up and noticed the Kid running out of the saloon. Sensing that something was wrong, she rushed to the saloon and through the doors. She squinted through the darkness, and saw the shoes of a woman on the floor behind a table.



The image of Tara’s body on the floor slowly came into view as she walked closer. The blonde’s dress was bunched around her waist, and her bruised neck was clear above her torn dress. The redhead began to cry as she fell to her knees by the still blonde.



She did not know how long she sobbed, but eventually she rose to her feet and carried Tara’s body to the field behind the saloon. The redhead dug a grave, and covered the blonde with dirt and tears. When she finished her task, she strode to the prison with purpose.



The Sheriff entered the jail and washed her face in the basin. She wished there were something that could wash away the pain before she threw her silver star on the desk and reached for the gun. After she checked that her revolver was fully loaded, she emerged to find the Kid staring at her through the moonlight.



The Kid shifted his hip, pushing his revolver closer to his hand to clarify his intentions. Both drew their weapons and fired. The Sheriff put her gun back in his holster as the Kid fell dead to the ground.



***



The Sheriff returned to the saloon and grabbed a bottle of whiskey. She poured herself a glass and finished in one shot. She poured another as the Judge approached her from behind and said, “You beat him, and he was the fastest I’ve ever seen.”



“I’m through. You can keep your badge and your gun. I’m leaving.”



The Judge sneered, “Oh no you’re not, not as long as I control Tara.”



“Tara’s dead,” the Sheriff answered.



“What?! But he was only supposed to-”



“Rough her up a little bit?” the redhead supplied.



The Judge crossed his arms and said, “Doesn’t matter. I’m not letting you join some other outfit. I’ve got my boys here, and you’ve got five seconds to make up your mind.”



The redhead tilted the contents of the glass down her throat, slammed it down, and stood up. The Judge’s three men spread out around the saloon, guns cocked. She drew her weapon and took out the first henchman before she rolled along the floor to fire at the second man behind the bar. She took cover behind the bar and rose quickly to dispatch the final henchman.



The Sheriff returned her gun to her holster as the Judge put a bullet through her heart. She fell to the floor of the saloon in a puddle of blood.



***



The redhead opened her eyes and cupped her ears. She felt large earphones around her head, and climbed to her feet. She saw the Judge and she lunged forward. Her hands pummeled the cardboard, and she threw the image of the Judge to the floor before she ran out into the center of town. She anxiously looked around and saw the stable, the prison, and the tree where they hung Tara’s mother. She ran across the town square and found the image of the dead Kid.



Confused, she ran past the gates of Harmony and heard the bright melody of a marching band. She ran past a row of hedges and saw the fountain of the Village and a group of people in colored capes following a band across the lawn.



Number 6 ran to the green dome and forced herself into Number 2’s chamber. She found a tearful Number 14, an annoyed Number 515 wearing a top hat, and a man that she recognized as the Judge, now Number 2. They wore headsets with microphones, and their frustrated looks told her that their experiment had failed. She noticed the screen with an image of Harmony, and the cardboard cutouts of the town. She left, disgusted at the degree to which Number 2 could manipulate people.



Number 515 broke the silence, “Interesting, that she could separate fact from fantasy so quickly.”



Number 2 threw his headset to the ground and shouted, “I knew it wouldn’t work! Filling her with hallucinatory drugs, putting her in a dangerous environment, talking to her through microphones. Give her love, you said, then take it away. Isolate her, face her with death, she’ll crack!”



“It would have worked if you had kept your head and not lost control so quickly,” Number 515 replied.



“You said we should act as ourselves, so tell me what you were doing, exactly? You can easily say these things, but you’re not the one that will have to answer for this failure.”



Number 14 continued to stare at the screen of the deserted town of Harmony.



***



The next morning, Number 14 knelt on the carpet before her altar. She took a deep breath and said, “Mama, I think I’m going crazy. I’m getting too deeply attached to her. She’s so beautiful, and she has such courage. She’s the strongest person I know. I think you’d like her, Mama.”



The blonde heard footsteps at the mouth of the cave and crooked her head to look at the figure that entered the cave. Her eyes found the redhead shuffling her feet. Number 6 spoke, “I, uh, wanted to talk to you.”



The blonde ducked her head down and replied, “Yeah, me too, but I thought you might not want to see me. Look, I’m sorry, but I had no choice, it’s not like I can just say ‘no’ to these people. They have my mother under their thumb, and I thought at least I could keep them from hurting you more if I took part. You can’t know how sorry I am, I just-”



The redhead’s finger silenced Number 14. “I know. I’m starting to get it, really. I saw how they killed your mother, and I saw their control over you. I also saw how much you cared about me.”



“I do. It hurts to much to see them do these things to you, but I don’t have the power to stop it. I can only try to mitigate the harm and show you how much I do care about you. You know, I wish it had been real. I wish I could have helped you more in real life,” Number 14 stated quietly.



“There is something you need to know. Number 2’s twisted plan backfired. I realized something about you, and me. I think I, no, I do care about you, and I want to help your mother. Thinking about your death, even if it was staged, it, uh, it hurt. And seeing how much you wanted to help me, even if it was a hallucination... it meant a lot. I just - I want to see your smile again.”



The edges of the blonde’s lips began to turn up. She said, “You have no idea how much that means to me.” She took two steps closer to Number 6 and added, “Thank you.”



The redhead reached out and brushed Number 14’s jaw with her hand. “There’s something else I wanted,” she said.



The blonde turned her eyes to the redhead and asked, “W-what?”



“I would very much like to kiss you. Actually kiss you?”



The blonde threw her arms around the redhead and pressed their lips together.



***End of Chapter 6***

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby TemperedCynic » Mon Apr 18, 2005 5:07 pm

Some major angst in this chapter, and I'm torn over the results. Number 6 has fallen in with Number 14, based on information that she sees - when she knows that what she's seen to this point has been carefully controlled. This chapter "kills" Tara's mother, Tara herself and finally Willow. Definite threat to all involved and pushes Number 6 into Number 14's arms - now wouldn't that be what Number 2 might want? What also concerns me is 515's (Kid's) interest in Number 14 because
Quote:
“You said we should act as ourselves, so tell me what you were doing, exactly? You can easily say these things, but you’re not the one that will have to answer for this failure.”
Number 515 acting as himself, eh? An abuser of women, with an unhealthy fascination towards Number 14. Number 6 has a lot to deal with now, and it won't be easy. Great stuff.



Edited to note: Liv, you are soo correct. It IS "Number 14" and not "Number 12." Yikes, it's time for bed, lol.


More than any other time in history, mankind faces a crossroads. One path leads to despair and utter hopelessness. The other, to total extinction. Let us pray we have the wisdom to choose correctly. Woody Allen (1935 - )

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby Safuega » Mon Apr 18, 2005 6:45 pm

What a tour de force! Inserting us, the readers, into the Village's mind games from the beginning was really, really, really well done.



I can see why using Tara's name in this horrible 'episode' is important and not gratuitous at all. Naming has real power, it can help connect you to the characters in a narrative in a way that an abstract or unnamed character cannot do. Names are simply that powerful, and perhaps you could not have achieved the same cathartic effect of the 'episode' for Willow if Tara's identity remained obscured behind a number. For Willow to realize that she cares about Tara, Tara had to be transformed. Having Tara be Tara gives her a substantive and graspable identity, one with which Willow can relate, one which Willow can love. This update seems to move Willow and Tara from their numbered anonymity, and on to a path of cooperation, love and perhaps freedom.



Truly well done.



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Re: The Prisoner

Postby cperrins78 » Mon Apr 18, 2005 6:50 pm

Great update. I'm glad to see Willow warming up to Tara now. Can't wait to see what adventure you take us on next.







Christina

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby Still Waters T » Mon Apr 18, 2005 6:55 pm

Don't you mean Number 14 (Tara), Mike? :hmm



Anyhoo, loved the angsty update. Felt like murdering The Kid/Number 515 (Warren) myself after what he did to Tara the barmaid :cry even though it wasn't real, thank god. It gave us some more insight to how twisted Warren is. And grrrrr Warren daring to even so much as fleetingly think about doing that to sweet, kind Tara :mad - cos when he did it in Willow's hallucination/dream, he must have thought about it before, right? :fit2



And yay, Willow realizing she has real feelings for Tara, AND W&T smoochies!! :wtkiss :bounce



Wicked update! :D Had me all tummy-rumbly when the Kid killed, and probably did other things than "just" that, to Tara the barmaid. :| That scene when Willow found Tara dead in the saloon, very heart wrenching. :spin Nicely done!



Liv :yawn *drags self off to bed to finally sleep* :sleepy

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby hermitfish » Mon Apr 18, 2005 7:13 pm

Well done...finely executed. It's nice to see such a malicious head game backfire and actually inspire a little trust between the girls and provide a little perspective on each other's situation. Thanks so much for this...it's a good read.



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Re: The Prisoner

Postby hidden watson » Tue Apr 19, 2005 8:48 am

Of course we knew it was a dream from the beginning, but how twisted it became was ... no, not unexpected, just very dark and forboding. Paranoia in extremis is the best description I can come up with to describe my own emotions as I rode with your chapter till the end. No. 6 is smart, very smart, in the almost cold-blooded way she dealt with The Kid.



If I was No. 6, I would be wary of acting too much on my growing feelings for No. 14. Not that No. 14 can't be trusted, but how much are they really hiding from the prying eyes of No. 2 and cohorts. Despite of that, I find myself smiling as they finally kissed. Let's hope the path forward is fill with no more thorns, though I realize this is wishful thinking.



Thanks for the story, it's very different and you write atmosphere very well.

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Tue Apr 19, 2005 6:21 pm

All: Glad to see no one sent me hate mail. I had this horrid vision of someone reading Tara's "death," stopping in disgust, and ensuring that I couldn't walk down the street without being pelted with tomatoes. Or something equally unpleasant. Thanks for reading.





TemperedCynic: If you didn't question whether or not their kiss was good, then I did something wrong. I wanted to get the characters acting "themselves" to make Willow/Number 6 sort out her feelings for Tara/Number 14. I think you'll see that there are good and bad results of their actions. Stay tuned. Thanks for your feedback, I really do appreciate it!



Safuega: Thank you so much for your kind feedback! I needed to orchestrate a way for Willow/Number 6 to come to terms with her feelings for Tara/Number 14. I felt that the way to do that was to use this episode's experiment and make Willow/Number 6 see Tara as a person, with her genuine emotions as well as her perilous position in the Village. You're so correct about the power of names, and I do plan to use that in the future. You'll see. Thanks again!



cperrins78: Thanks! I was anxious to get this chapter up so I could get cracking on their relationship, before more angst and mindgames. There is lots more to come. Thanks again.



Still Waters T: Glad the scenes of The Kid's death and Tara's death/burial were effective. They were surprisingly easy to write, considering the heavy material. Does that make me a sociopath? Nah. Thanks for reading, and your feedback!



hermitfish: Glad you liked. I was nervous about throwing the reader right into the hallucination. I wanted to have a scenario help Willow/Number 6 understand Tara/Number 14. They had to overcome the fact that one never really knows anybody in the Village, and the "Living in Harmony" episode seemed like the best way to do it. Thanks for your feedback, it's appreciated.



hidden watson: Thanks for your feedback. I was worried that folks wouldn't like the darkness of this chapter, or would be turned off as soon as Tara "died." It's tough to balance my efforts to make the reader question everything (paranoia in extremis indeed) and still have compelling story arcs and character developments. If I succeeded, I'm happy.



As I told TemperedCynic above, if I didn't have readers question whether or not they should have acted on their romantic feelings, then I did something wrong. Their relationship should not be as easy as a rendezvous on a cave, and I think you'll see that is certainly not the case. There will be a bit of a honeymoon period, then more thorns. Thanks again!





Be seeing you.

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby Artemis » Wed Apr 20, 2005 1:43 am

:fit2 Number 515 needs his head kicked in real good.



Okay, so naturally Tara's death - albeit temporary - has me all bawling my eyes out. But what really struck me, in a tragic way, was that the Sheriff didn't just collapse in tears and then go seeking revenge, she gave Tara a proper burial, she gave her the respect she deserved. I think that, more than anything else, drove home how much Tara meant to her - which of course carries over into how much Number 14 means to Number 6. She's not just a potential ally, and their relationship isn't just about mutual benefit and escaping the Village. Number 6 cares for 14, just because.



Did I mention 515 needs a kicking? If they ever need someone to act as a guinea pig for testing the Rovers...



So, smoochies... always a good thing :D But in this case, a good thing with lots of implications. 6 and 14 are closer now, and 6 seems to have forgiven, or at least acknowledged, that 14 has to maintain her position in the Village, for both their sakes. But I wonder how strong their renewed alliance is? And I wonder what the Village knows about the two of them. If they expect 6 to fall for 14, could that be used against them - can they tell the difference between 14 role-playing 6's ally, and really being 6's ally? Or do they see more than 14 realises, and is she being manipulated in more subtle ways than just the obvious 'do what we want or else' way she knows about?



Lots of paranoia still about :paranoid Be seeing you :wink

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby tarawhipped » Wed Apr 20, 2005 5:26 pm

What an amazing update! Everyone already said such insightful things that I'm not going to try and analyze anything. Let me just tell you that this evoked so many emotions, though now I'm caught between giddy and paranoid. Giddy that 6 seems to be ready not only to trust 14, but also ready to act on her attraction. Paranoid because as Chris said, how do we know that 2 and the others aren't expecting, and even orchestrating this? They were directed to act as themselves, so 2 and 515 must realize that 14 has feelings for 6. It would be in their interests to get her to gain 6's trust and get the information out of her, but that would be the ultimate betrayal. *sigh* Update soon, okay? The suspense is grueling (and you do it SO well :wink ).



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Re: The Prisoner

Postby JustSkipIt » Wed Apr 20, 2005 7:51 pm

Hi there,

Well I must admit that I'm only through part 4 but I'm facinated by this story. I think that your writing is wonderful, clear, and very mysterious. I'm not familiar with The Prisioner or it's premise at all. Seems quite creepy and there are certainly things that I have questions about. It's fun to play "spot the BtVS character" and I'm quite glad to see W/T warming to each other. I'll leave better feedback when I catch up. In the meantime, I think this is your first story? so welcome to the board. You're doing wonderful. Deb

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Re: The Prisoner

Postby GayNow » Tue May 10, 2005 10:43 am

It appears as though I have yet to respond to this particular fic. For that, I'm sorry. I could have SWORN I'd left feedback. I've been keeping up with the story with each update...so I don't know why I didn't.

I'm not going to go into a long, detailed analysis at this juncture...I've been reading the feedback others have left as well and I don't want to be redundant. But, I will say the following:

This is a highly intriguing fic and I find myself so wrapped up in the tale that I miss what's going on around me (one day I had to literally DASH up the aisle of the train and jump through the closing doors in order to get off the train at my stop). However, what I find particularly interesting is that I don't worry so much about identifying the various characters...unless of course they jump right out at me. Number 17 -- has to be Spike. The most recent Number 2 -- Caleb, right? I think I've liked this Number 2 the best. The rest of them, I don't worry about them so much. Again, I'm just wrapped up in the story...so engrossing.

Alright, enough of my rambling. Thanks for the update. So glad your writer's block has taken a break. Looking forward to your next update (for any fic, actually). :flirt

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The Prisoner

Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Tue May 10, 2005 9:38 pm

First, feedback replies.

Artemis: Who was it that said, “Just because you’re paranoid doesn’t mean they’re not after you?” You are right to be suspicious of the people running the Village, which is how I hoped readers would respond. Even though things will eventually end well for our girls, their relationship will be far from happy in forthcoming chapters. I’m glad you liked my portrayal of the Sheriff and Kid. Warren’s story line is eerily close to the Kid in the episode, no? I would answer more of your perceptive questions, but that would spoil the plot. Thanks for the feedback.

tarawhipped: Thank you for your generous feedback! As I intimated before, I want readers to take every development with a grain of salt. Oddly, giddy/paranoid is the exact response I was hoping to receive. If readers were not ambivalent about them getting together, than I did something wrong. I finally overcame my writers’ block, so the chapters should start coming more quickly. I hope. Thanks!

JustSkipIt: Thank you for the welcome, as well as the feedback. It means a lot. I hope you like the other chapters, and that the “spot the BtVS characters” game does not interrupt your immersion in the story. I want the story to be engrossing for those unfamiliar with “The Prisoner” series. It is the type of show that only provides need-to-know information, and it worked with my desire to have the reader identify with Willow/Number 6’s confusion and discover things along with her. Thanks for reading!


Title: The Prisoner
Author: ringwaldoeuvre
Disclaimer: Neither “Buffy the Vampire Slayer,” “Angel,” or “The Prisoner” are my property. They belong to Fox, Mutant Enemy, The WB, UPN, ITC, Inc., A&E, etc.
Spoilers: To be safe, all episodes of “Buffy the Vampire Slayer,” “Angel,” and “The Prisoner.” I may end up integrating characters/events/dialogue from all seasons and the 17 episodes of “The Prisoner” television series.
Pairings: W/T
Rating: PG-13
Summary: AU. A red-haired witch resigns from her post at the Council and wakes one morning in a strange and secluded place. She discovers that escape is impossible and she can trust no one.
Feedback: Is awesome. I’d appreciate constructive criticism/encouragement. You can leave it here or reach me at ringwaldoeuvre@yahoo.com. If anyone wants to beta, holler at me.
Notes: This is the first of two chapters in which I use a character exclusive to “Angel.” If anyone really can’t identify Number 86, let me know. She is perhaps my favorite recurring character in “Angel”-verse. I get very happy when I see her name on the bottom of the screen.

***Chapter 7: A Change of Mind***

The blonde regretted pulling away from the redhead. Her hands cupped the other woman’s face as she said, “I hate to say it, but I have to go.”

“I hate for you to say it, too. But I suppose it would be suspicious if we were both missing for the entire day, especially after the events of the latest experiment. Have I mentioned how disturbing that was, with that Judge guy, and your name being Tara, and the falling in love and the violent death, and the Kid... what I wouldn’t give for five minutes alone in a room with him.”

Number 14 teased, “Should I be jealous?” At the redhead’s dilated pupils she laughed and affirmed, “It was hard for both of us. But it helped you trust me, so it can’t have been all bad.”

The redhead grumbled, “I suppose not. I’m going to meditate and exercise in a clearing I found in the forest.” She leaned forward and pecked Number 14’s lips again, “Have a good day, beautiful.”

***

Number 6 stood back and admired her handiwork. The obstacle course spanned the length of the clearing, and she decided her makeshift exercise equipment would be better than the facilities of the Village. She could also have a place to meditate and relax, despite the ever-present gaze of camera lenses.

Two women, one tall and one short, came into sight between a row of trees, and the redhead paused her regimen when the taller woman asked, “Why not use the Village gymnasium?”

The redhead’s hands caught the twirling punching bag and answered, “I prefer my privacy.”

“Now, that could be taken to be antisocial. The Committee certainly wouldn’t like that. No, they wouldn’t,” the short woman replied. She continued, “Why don’t you come with us, and we’ll show you what we mean?”

Number 6 deflected the hands of the women and skirted around the parallel bars she had erected not twenty minutes ago. They teased, “Come now, you wouldn’t want to be seen as disharmonious, would you? You’d better come with us.” One grabbed the redhead’s arms while the other threw a punch at her face. Her neck twisted around and she released a groan before she used the leverage of one of her captors to deliver a swift kick in the stomach of the shorter woman.

Free from their grasp, she assumed the position to defend and fight, if it came to that. She reasoned, “I hardly think you ladies are in a position to tell me how I should behave. Why don’t you lead by example and give this up before someone gets hurt.”

The tall woman glared, “Too late for that, I’m afraid. You could definitely benefit from a little more community involvement, Number 6. Or maybe you’d rather listen to my fist?”

A speaker blared, “Number 6, please report to the Town Hall immediately. Committee business. Thank you.” The redhead grimaced, brushed off her coat, and headed toward the Town Hall. The women threw her an angry glare as they disappeared into the forest.

***

Number 6 had almost finished counting the bricks on the opposite wall when a deep voice sounded through a speaker, “Good afternoon, citizens. We hope the Committee will provide solutions to all your problems. Number 207 is well on the way to rehabilitation. There are already signs of disharmony in Number 6’s behavior, and we want to do something with Number 17. He is clearly in a state of depression. Crying all the time, reciting nonsensical poetry.”

The redhead noticed the blonde man sitting in the corner, arms hugging his shoulders and repeating the words, “beauty effulgent.” He burst out, “No! You can’t go in there. You need a special slip with a stamp. Ah, no, I should hide my face. Bad man, I’m a bad man.” He curled up in his seat and shielded his face with his hands.

A door opened and the deep voice spoke again, “Number 207, please step to the podium for confession. We will tell you what to say.” A tall bearded man entered through a white door and walked behind the podium. The voice ordered, “Repeat after me: ‘They’re right, of course.’”

The man looked to each person in the room and earnestly declared, “They’re right, of course.”

The deep voice said, “Quite right.”

“Quite right,” he repeated.

“I’m inadequate.”

The bearded man squeezed his hands and said, “I’m inadequate, inadequate!”

“Disharmonious,” the voice continued.

“Disharmonious!” the man repeated.

“I’m truly grateful.”

He shook his hands and said, “I’m truly grateful.”

The voice continued, “Believe me.”

“Believe me! Believe me!”

The bearded man and the speaker chanted a chorus, “Believe me! Believe me! Believe me!” He returned to a seat as the voice ordered, “Number 6, enter through the white door, please.”

The redhead rose from her seat and walked past a poster of a man with a square jaw and the words, “The Community Needs You!” She descended a flight of stairs to a large circular room with walls that rose to a barely visible ceiling. There was a panel of men sitting around a circular desk. They wore black and white striped shirts and bowler hats. The butler came into sight to pull one segment out and gestured for her to sit down in the center of the group.

The bang of the gavel echoed through the room. The butler replaced the segment of the round table as the redhead took the seat in the center of the table. “Welcome Number 6. I trust that you’ve had a chance to complete the written questionnaire of confession?”

“Of course,” the redhead said as she tore the paper into shreds, “naturally.” She threw the shreds into the air like confetti and spun her chair around to look at the members of the committee.

The chairman commanded, “Order, Number 6! Please do not be hostile to the committee.”

“Ah, yes. Well, I take it you’ve checked my file, regarding hostility?”

“Number 2 handles your file, it is not our concern. It is the duty of this committee to deal with complaints,” the chairman insisted.

“Complaints, really? I have several,” the redhead responded with interest.

“You realize a serious charge has been leveled against you, Number 6. We deplore your spirit of disharmony. You would be well advised to cooperate.”

The deep voice suddenly boomed from a speaker in the corner, “You are not called before this committee to defend yourself. All we ask is for your complete confession.”

The chairman pounded the gavel and announced, “Perhaps we will return to this matter at a later juncture, when the citizen has had time to understand these proceedings. Time for a tea break.”

Number 6 clapped her hands together at irregular intervals and the members of the panel left the room. The butler pulled out a segment of the table and the redhead walked out.

***

Number 6’s pale skin shone in the sun as she left the committee. She walked down a narrow path to the lawn and bowed her head to acknowledge the rook from so many weeks ago, “Beautiful day, Number 58.” The brooding man ducked behind an oncoming taxicab and rushed in the other direction.

The woman shook her head and could hardly comprehend what had just happened before her. She walked along a road and noticed citizens shifting to the other side of the street as the approached. She staggered to the newsstand and purchased a Tally Ho newspaper from a stern boy, the headline reading, “Number 6 For Further Investigation.” She threw the paper to the ground and went back to her apartment.

The door opened to reveal a patient Number 2 sitting at her kitchen table. His black attire was offset by his brown hair and firm demeanor. He stood up and exclaimed, “There’s our girl! I was wondering when you were going to turn up, sweet pea. There’s a saying, ‘He who is the slowest mule is closest to the whip.’”

The redhead eyed the tall man before her. She replied, “There is another saying: ‘He who digs a pit is destined to lie in it.’”

“Ha! Why, you’re just burning with righteousness!” He brought his hands together in front of his face and said, “I assure you, no matter what your significance is to me, to the people of this Village, you are merely citizen Number 6, who has to be tolerated, and ... if necessary ... shaped to fit.”

“Public Enemy Number 6, huh? You don’t scare me.”

He shrugged and replied, “Truth is like a sword, girl. It cuts deep. If they rule against you, I’ll be powerless to help. This... is out of my jurisdiction.”

Number 6 pointed to the door and responded, “Don’t you have someone else to manipulate? Surely there must be dozens of political and magical operatives waiting for your expertise.”

“You’re quite right, so I’ve selected someone to aid in your case. She has valuable experience with the committee. Number 86?”

A lanky woman walked into the redhead’s apartment with a clipboard and one of so many brightly colored capes that she had seen around the Village. She walked over to the pair and extended her hand, “Hello, Number 6. How do you do?”

The redhead accepted the woman’s hand into her palm and shook. She responded, “Hello, nice to meet you. What is this about?”

Number 2 grasped both women by the shoulder and said, “Number 86 will explain everything. I do believe I should take my leave. Number 6, don’t hesitate to come to me with any issues you may have.”

Number 6 shouted after him, “How about this demented hybrid of ‘Midnight Cowboy’ and ‘Bladerunner’ you call the Village?!”

The man was out the door before she could spit her feelings at him. Number 86 regained the redhead’s attention and advised, “Howdy! Okay, first: your attitude towards the committee. Bad idea. You’ve got to learn to work with others, cowgirl.”

Number 6 stood akimbo and answered, “Like you seem to be doing? Sorry, you’ve got to earn my trust.”

“I am trying to help you, Number 6. Believe me, this is no joking matter. Your file says that you used to practice magic, is that correct?”

“If that’s what my file says, why are you asking me?”

“You could join the Village Yoga. You would be well advised to participate in Village activities, which is my second bit of advice. People see you as isolated, and a little interaction would dispel this image,” the brunette stated.

“Maybe I like my image? These days it seems that people don’t appreciate a good loner when they see one. Besides, what do have I to lose, other than the homecoming queen election?”

“Being declared ‘unmutual’ would make your life very uncomfortable, even more so than it already is. It would be shame for you to learn that lesson the hard way. Besides, maybe if you exercised more you wouldn’t seem so... small. I expected you to be taller. Maybe, if you eat all your vegetables and pray real hard, some day you’ll have hips!” She sighed and continued, “If you are amiable to the committee and you invest yourself in the Village community, I think you can avoid that fate.”

The brunette suggested, “Why don’t you come with me to a rehabilitation meeting for Number 17. You’ll get a better picture of what we’re talking about.” She guided Number 6 through the door, brought her to the gathering, and left the redhead with her thoughts.

***

Number 2 slammed his glass onto his desk as he watched the exchange from his chamber. “Females! If she makes one mistake, we’ll lose Number 6. Do you understand?” he said with a stomp of his foot and a finger to his forehead, “Lose her. Girls shouldn’t be involved in this mess.”

***

Number 6 stood by as citizens debated Number 17’s rehabilitation. One citizen opined, “It is clear that Number 17 is suffering from acute paranoia and hallucinates about his past. We must give him all our support to help him back on the path to a stable mind.”

The redhead withheld the laughter that threatened to erupt after she contemplated what they meant by “stable.” She began to clap her hands, first to a beat, then at random moments. The citizens turned their heads to her noise and Number 17 declared, “You’re trying to disrupt my rehabilitation, you bloody wanker!”

The citizens clamored, “Reactionary! Rebel! Disharmonious! The committee will certainly hear about this!” The group dissolved, clearly annoyed, and citizens went their separate ways.

Two men approached Number 6 in a car. They stepped out and she noticed that they wore lab coats. One said, “Won’t you come with us, Number 6? We would like to conduct a physical examination as part of your assessment by the committee.”

The redhead hopped into the car and they sped off toward the hospital. After they tested her vision, hearing, and reflexes the doctor released her. “Off you go, Number 6. Would you like a lollipop?”

“Is it drugged?”

“How suspicious you are of all of us! I say, Number 6. You may want to consider giving some of us a chance. Be seeing you!”

Number 6 left the doctor in the examination room and wandered down the hall. She walked past the room with dozens of people, dressed in straightjackets, sitting along the wall of a long corridor. She wandered past a door that read “Aversion Therapy,” and she poked her head by the window.

The sight troubled her. A man sat in a chair, his feet and hands strapped down, his head bound with nodules. He faced a screen as images of the rover and Number 2 flashed before him. The word “unmutual” popped up, and he became hysterical. Sweat poured down his brow, and the chair scarcely restrained his jitters. His scream was the last thing the redhead heard as she walked away.

As she exited the hospital, she noticed a placid Number 17 sitting on a bench. His expression was remarkably content, given the stress of his situation. She sat down next to him, noticed a circular scar on his forehead, and said, “Hello, Number 17. Feeling better?”

His glazed eyes wandered to the redhead’s “Number 6” pin as his head turned to face her. He replied, “Suppose. Don’t know what was happening before. I don’t understand it, I mean, this sort of thing’s never happened to me before. I felt alright when we started, and after a while things got so mixed up. All better now,” he reached up and touched the scar on his forehead, “All better.”

The redhead warily replied, “Okay then. Good to hear you’re feeling better. I’d better get going if I want to keep making trouble around here.” The man nodded his head and began to rock back and forth on the bench. She rose to return to her apartment, deciding that she better leave her light in the window of her apartment if she wanted to get any help, and any kisses, from Number 14.

Her mind turned to the woman. There was no question that she was beautiful, and she could not help but trust her. Something just clicked when they were together, like they were two pieces of a puzzle. She had to remain vigilant, lest the people in charge use their relationship to manipulate her. Her head told her it was a mistake, but her gut told her that only good would come of their attraction, and she shuddered when she thought of her new feelings for the blonde.

Number 6 rounded the corner of the clock tower and bought a copy of the Tally Ho. As her eyes grazed the headline, “Number 6 Declared Unmutual,” the speaker system sounded. “May I have your attention please. The following citizens have been declared unmutual: Number 6.” After a long pause, the voice continued, “Citizens are to refrain from interaction with Number 6, and may report any disharmonious behavior to the appeals subcommittee. That is all.”

Number 6 threw the newspaper to the ground in disgust. ‘What in frilly heck is going on? They can’t just ignore me,’ she thought. She walked across the lawn and felt odd as every citizen immediately turned on their heel when they saw her. She glimpsed the beautiful hair of Number 14, and decided to at least try an attempt at normal interaction. Her chest tightened when the blonde turned around and walked in the opposite direction of the redhead.

She felt defeated as she finally crossed the threshold to her apartment. It was naive to think that the blonde was not obligated to act like everybody else in public, but she could not shake the sick feeling in her stomach. She picked up the telephone, but found that her line was dead.

***

Number 2 watched the events with a wide smile. He patted Number 86 on the back and said, “There now. Let’s see how our loner withstands real loneliness. Connect the direct line.”

***

The doorbell rang, and the redhead decided that if someone was actually waiting, it would be wise to answer. She opened the door to find four citizens, including Number 17, standing outside. One announced, “Good afternoon, Number 6. We represent the appeals subcommittee. I am Number 158.”

The redhead examined her guests. They seemed genuine, though she was surprised to see Number 17. “Glad to see you’re on the road to recovery, Number 17. So, what is it you want from me? My best impression of a mindless drone, wearing what everybody else wears, doing what others do? Apparently it’s what all the kids are doing nowadays.”

“Sling all the little barbs you want, Number 6. Number 17 has worked very hard to be here. It requires great moral courage to volunteer for work of this nature. And, I know it must seem weird, talking to a stranger about stuff, but you will soon realize that you need our help. It is clear that we came prematurely. Be seeing you, Number 6.”

The group walked away, leaving a befuddled redhead to ponder her next step. Suddenly, her telephone began to ring. ‘I thought it didn’t work,’ she thought as she moved to pick up the receiver.

She pressed the button to answer and heard Number 2’s twangy voice come though, “I told you that the committee was nothing to take lightly. So, how are you getting along, Number 6?”

“Peachy. It would almost work if it weren’t obvious you need a scapegoat. ‘Citizens unite to denounce this menace!’ and all that,” the redhead replied.

“A scape goat? Girlie, is that what you think it is? I assure you, after instant social conversion, you just won’t care what it is. You simply won’t care. Why, you’ll have something better: lasting piece of mind. Right now, your head’s so filled with filth, there’s no room for the truth.”

Number 6 paused, considering the information just relayed to her. “Conversion, huh. So, you’ll use drugs? That won’t last.”

Number 2 grinned, “Ah, girl, but what would be lasting is isolation of the aggressive frontal lobe. Of the brain, of course. I assure you, it’s quite thorough. I’ve sent Number 86 over to assist the process, and I suggest you cooperate. We wouldn’t want to have to play rough.”

Almost as soon as the line went dead, the redhead’s doorbell sounded. She opened the door to find Number 86 in a different outfit. A white lab coat replaced her colorful cape. The brunette walked into Number 6’s apartment and cut to the chase, “I hope you realize that being declared unmutual is no longer just a game. These are socially conscious citizens, rejecting the presence of a disharmonious element of their community.”

The redhead muttered, “They are sheep. They need a scapegoat.”

“Whoa, enough with the farm animal analogies. If that’s what you think, you might as well grow horns and start eating garbage. Look, your feelings at this juncture are irrelevant. There remains but one course open to us,” the brunette concluded.

Number 6 followed Number 86 outside only to be confronted with a mob of Village citizens. She heard the loudspeaker announce, “Attention staff psychologists: all wishing to watch the conversion of Number 6 should report to the second floor observation room in the hospital. That is all.”

The redhead made a break for the lawn, hoping that she could make it for the beach and escape the mob. Their strength proved insurmountable, and she soon fell unconscious after a sharp blow to the head.

***

Number 6 began to wake as she was wheeled into Number 515’s laboratory. The dark-haired man stood by to supervise as Number 86 injected a sedative and strapped the redhead to a table. The room featured a vast array of equipment and devices. The brunette turned to the rows of staff and announced, “We are using standard equipment. A unit containing quartz crystal is activated by a variable electromagnetic field from these high-voltage condensers. The crystal emits ultrasonic sound waves, which are bounced off the parabolic reflector,” she pointed to a concave dish, “here. The focal point of the reflector can be seen here,” she held her hand a few feet away from the reflector, “by use of light waves. I will now demonstrate the molecular turbulence at the focal point.”

An assistant approached the reflector with a piece of styrofoam and placed it in the area of the focal point. Within seconds, the bright dot on the styrofoam began to sizzle and abruptly burst into flames. The assistant pulled the styrofoam away and extinguished the fire.

“As you can see, the focal point of the beam is very powerful. The ultrasonic beam is capable of penetrating, whereas the light is not. We turn to a low voltage,” the brunette turned a knob to ‘minimum, “and move the subject closer to the focal point.” The assistant rolled Number 6 next to the device. With a grin, Number 86 announced, “we will now locate the point of the motor area.”

The brunette strapped on a pair of goggles and took her place next to the sedate Number 6. She ordered, “Apply the protective lotion, to reduce tissue damage.” The assistant rubbed a glob of transparent gel onto the focal point that now hit the redhead’s temple. She turned her focus to a screen with a scan of the redhead’s brain. She barked, “Move 0.45 centimeters left, 0.17 centimeters up. Hold horizontal!” She turned to the crowd, “The ultrasonic beam is now focused precisely on the subject’s frontal lobe. We inject a relaxant to preclude muscular reaction. Now... to increase the strength of the beam.”

She slowly turned the knob to ‘maximum,’ and the strength of the beam increased. She noticed sweat had collected on Number 6’s brow, yet the redhead made no movements to resist her restraints as her temple began to sizzle.

***

Number 6 opened her eyes, and immediately thought, ‘Am I in a hospital examination room or the alien sister of a hospital examination room? I’ve really got to stop waking up in strange places.’ The perky doctor approached her bed and noted, “You went to sleep, Number 6! Just at the most interesting part you went to sleep. How are you feeling?”

“Uh, fine... considering I seem to keep waking up in different beds. What happened?”

“Your instant social conversion, of course. You’ll want to take it easy for the next few days, Number 6. Now, your clothes are in a pile on that chair.” The doctor dismissed the redhead, and she walked out into the Village. Merry citizens and a marching band greeted her, and the confusion was plain on her face.

Number 6 staggered into her apartment, and again found Number 2 sitting at her kitchen table. He stood and greeted the redhead, “The sheep returns to the flock, eh? How are you feeling? No more of that pesky committee to deal with, Number 6. Why don’t you sit down, you should take it easy. Number 86 here will make you a soothing cup of tea. I’ll be back later, and we can have our little chat.”

Number 86 laid the redhead on a reclining chair and soothed her hair, “There now, you should relax.” The brunette approached the stove and removed a cup from the shelf. After the water came to a boil, she spooned the tea into the pot and poured the liquid into the cup. The redhead stole a glance of Number 86 as she removed a pill from her breast pocket and quickly dissolved it into the tea. She carried the cup to the table beside the redhead and asked, “Is there anything you need?”

“Cold,” the redhead muttered.

“Shall I get you a blanket? Where do you keep them?”

“Closet, bedroom,” Number 6 mumbled.

The brunette turned her back and made her way to the bedroom, and the redhead took the opportunity to pour the liquid into a nearby vase. She tipped the cup against her lips to persuade Number 86 that she had ingested the tea, and let her eyes glaze over as the brunette returned with a red blanket.

Number 86 spread the blanket across the legs of the reclined redhead, took the empty cup, and said, “Be sure to stay relaxed.” She left the apartment and headed to the control room.

Number 6 looked to the ceiling and replayed the series of events in her head. She did not feel very different, and it was clear that they were trying to keep her drugged on something. She had felt groggy after the procedure, but attributed that to the sedative. She heard the door open, and saw the figure of Number 2 draw closer to her chair.

“Time for our little chat, Number 6. Now that all your firebrand anxieties have been expunged, I know you feel free to speak. Especially about that little thing that’s been causing you great distress. Namely, your resignation,” the man stated.

Number 6 directed her eyes from the ceiling to the wall, and back to the ceiling. She decided to say nothing and act confused, in the hope that he would give up.

“Why?” he persisted, “You had a bright future, why leave prematurely?”

The redhead continued to stare at the ceiling and her lips remained still. The man shrugged, “We’ll talk later, when you’ve had time to... collect your thoughts.”

Number 2 frowned and left the apartment. Alone at last, Number 6 threw the blanket to the ground and hopped to the bathroom. Poised before the mirror, she removed the bandage on her forehead to reveal a circular scar. Her finger ran across the red mark, satisfied that they definitely did something physical to her. She hurried back into the kitchen.

***

Number 2 and Number 86 watched the redhead’s agitation. The brunette remarked, “Strange, very strange. Already she suspects.”

“The scar is genuine, that should make her think it’s real,” Number 2 supplied.

The brunette furrowed her brow, “I gave her 8 grams of mitol. Suspicion, doubt - those are all aggressive tendencies. The drug should preclude such reactions. I don’t understand. ”

The tall man paced the chamber. “She’s seen what she thought was the operation, she should be convinced. She should feel different, so there is certainly no reason for her to suspect that it never actually occurred. Therefore, we must maintain the illusion. We cannot afford to let her fall back on bad habits. Go to her now, and give her another dose.”

Number 86 shook her head, “No, 8 grams of the drug is plenty, and 16 could be dangerous.”

“More dangerous than your failure?” At the brunette’s blanched face, he replied, “Oh, I’m just funnin’ ya. Run along now.”

She hissed, “You men are all alike, and it always ends the same way: you, me, broken furniture.” She threw her cape over her shoulders and headed toward the Number 6’s apartment.

***

The redhead turned her head at the noise of the open door and saw Number 86 standing in the threshold. She asked, “Do you like my shoes? They’re Veracci, spring collection. Wide in the heel, round in the toe.”

Number 6 regarded the woman before her. The brunette seemed anxious trying to make small talk, so she casually replied, “The pink won’t work, and I must say that I cannot tolerate a woman that cannot make a decent cup of tea. Let me show you.”

She walked to the kitchen and stated, “Rinse the pot, boil your water, then be sure to warm the pot and add the tea.” She opened the canister of tea and began to spoon the flakes, “One for me, one for thee, one for the pot, and one for luck. Will you pour the milk while I get the sugar?”

The redhead walked to the cupboard and glimpsed the brunette slipping a droplet into her cup. She poured the tea and asked, “Number 86, will you get two spoons from the drawer?”

Number 86 turned away, and the redhead switched the cups of tea on the counter. The brunette returned to stir the liquid, and the women lifted their cups to their mouths.

***

Number 2 observed the events and remarked, “All charmingly domestic. Ain’t that just like a woman? I think I’d like a cup of tea!” The butler bowed and moved to the tray. The man turned back to the screen to see a very altered Number 86. She turned her cup upside-down on the counter, sneered at her pale companion, and threw her head back in laughter.

“Stupid woman! She drank the wrong cup!” Number 2 picked up the phone and commanded, “Number 86, report to Number 2 immediately.”

The brunette’s ears perked as the speaker boomed. She groaned, “Oh please, like he’s actually in charge? Give me a break. Let’s blow this popsicle stand, I don’t want to think about that jerk-off watching us.”

Number 6 considered her options. Whatever the woman drank, she certainly seemed talkative. In an effort to get somewhere out of the gaze of the cameras, she nodded and motioned to the door, “After you.”

The pair emerged into the bright afternoon air and they made their way to a secluded edge of the forest. The redhead sat down behind some brush, and the brunette sauntered back and forth.

Number 6 did not think she could feel more tense. She decided to get to the point, “Uh, thanks. So, I’m feeling much better. This instant social conversion is very... effective. I feel much more comfy in the Village... I, uh,” the redhead searched for words, “don’t know why I was being so difficult.”

Number 86 cocked her head, befuddled at the redhead’s statement. “That’s funny, considering nothing actually happened. Oh, sure, you got a nice scar on your forehead, but we didn’t actually do anything to that self-important head of yours. I swear, the way they talk, you’d probably get your own private room in hell.”

“Huh,” the redhead stammered, “that’s... huh. So, what did happen?”

The brunette smirked, “We created the illusion of a full ultrasonic dislocation of the frontal lobes of the brain, using just sound, not waves. You were kept heavily drugged, to make you more likely to spill your secrets... yadda, yadda, yawn.”

“I see,” Number 6 replied. She ventured, “You said Number 2 wasn’t really in charge. Can you tell me who runs this place?

Number 86 howled, “You should try out for the talent show, because you are a riot! Information is scarce, Number 6. You know that. I’d love to tell you, which... is something you’ll have to explain later, but I don’t have a clue.

“I do have an idea, then, to stop this Number 2. Would you consider helping me?”

“Sure,” the brunette answered, “it’s clear we’re not going to get much out of your babbling mouth. Of course, I knew you babbled from your file, long before I met you. You’re so good and pure, and science turns you on. Anyway, I’d love to stick one to that idiot Number 2. His technique really puts the ‘b’ in ‘subtle.’”

Number 6 masked her amusement as she instructed, “Okay, well, you’ll go to the clock tower, and when the bell strikes 4 o’ clock...”

***

The redhead glanced at the clock tower and realized she had almost two hours until her confrontation with Number 2. Number 86 wandered toward Number 2’s green dome, and she decided that meditation would best prepare her for the task ahead. As she approached the space she caught sight of the beach spread out below her. She saw a flash of blonde hair as Number 14 dashed between rocks and ducked into their cave. She followed and listened as the woman began to speak.

“Mama, I want you to hear me. You’ve always heard me, even when we were apart. But lately... I worry. Where are you? You feel so far away. I just wish you were near me, so that I could collapse in your arms and this nightmare would end.”

The redhead crept into the cave and offered, “I wouldn’t say ‘nightmare,’ so much as ‘phase.’ Don’t you think we’ll get out of this?”

The blonde turned to the redhead, “Oh, it’s you! I didn’t expect you!”

“Well I didn’t expect me either, seems to be a common sentiment, actually. But here I am, hoping that there’s something I can do for you.”

Number 14’s features softened, “Would it be terribly selfish of me to ask you to hold me?”

Number 6 opened her arms and replied, “I wouldn’t have it any other way.” The blonde curled into her neck and wrapped her arms around the redhead. Number 6 moved her hands to cradle the blonde’s head and closed her eyes, relishing the feeling of closeness with another human being.

The blonde pushed herself away, “Wait, why do you remember me? I thought you were, er, I mean, you underwent... instant social conversion?”

“Ah, yes... that. Rubbish, really. Complete hoax, their attempt to sedate me into revealing why I resigned. Seriously, will they ever give up using the drugs? What’s next, the electric Kool-Aid acid test? Have they flown in the Grateful Dead, complete with resurrected Jerry Garcia? Because honestly, I wouldn’t put it past these weirdoes. I just don’t get-”

The blonde silenced the redhead with her lips, her fingers woven into her hair. She pushed away briefly to add, “If I had known it wasn’t real, I never would have avoided you. Village rules be damned.” She pulled Number 6 closer and her hands resumed their place in the other woman’s hair.

Number 6 smiled into their kiss, lost in the sensation of the blonde’s fingertips massaging her neck. She slowly gained the upper hand, edging Number 14 down to the carpet that lay before the altar. She lost track of time, gripping Number 14’s hips, desperate to feel close to the blonde. She looked the other woman in the eye and gasped, “I’m so glad I found you. I don’t feel quite so lost when you’re in my arms.”

Number 14 leaned forward, letting their foreheads touch. “I wish we didn’t have to hide, I wish we could be free, I wish for so many things, really. Oh god, were you followed? I’m sure they’re watching you carefully. Of course, I would love to watch you carefully,” she flirted.

The redhead grinned, “There are a lot of things I would like you to do, but I don’t really have the time. I have an appointment with Number 2, and I would hate to be late. You should hang out on the lawn, watch the show.”

The blonde’s forehead creased, “What are you going to do?”

“I don’t want to spoil the surprise, but it will certainly dispatch this latest Number 2. They’ve really got to stop hiring monkeys,” the redhead joked.

“Be careful, I’d hate to l-lose you now. They don’t tell me much, but they have unlimited resources. Don’t forget that,” Number 14 warned.

Number 6 “Hey, I just found you, and we’re going to work together and figure this out. Don’t worry, I’m a geek-”

“A cute geek,” the blonde interrupted with a grin.

The redhead rolled her eyes, “If you say so. Look, I do this stuff all the time. We just have to be patient and watch each other’s back. I, for one, would love to watch your back all day, if I didn’t have to focus on getting out of this place. Speaking of which,” the woman moved to stand up, “I really should get going. Kiss for good luck?”

Number 14 stood, “How about three kisses?”

“Ooh! That way, I’ll be extra lucky! I like the way you think,” Number 6 leaned in to collect her luck from the blonde’s lips. The women began to lose count as their mouths continued to crash together. Hands wandered and stroked as they reveled in the sensations.

The blonde pushed herself away and breathed, “Not that this isn’t wonderful, but don’t you have somewhere to be?”

The redhead sighed and nodded, “Yeah... I really should get going. Remember, the lawn - 4 o’clock?”

“I wouldn’t miss it, Number 14 replied.

Number 6 left the cave and walked to the green dome. She entered Number 2’s chamber and cleared her throat to announce her presence. The man spun around and she said, “I hoped we might continue that chat we were having. And to think... I resisted for so long. There’s something that I want to tell everyone, on the lawn. You must have others that have information you want. But if I was to speak out publicly, I might, uh-”

“Ah, inspire others to speak out,” Number 2 interjected.

“Yes, exactly,” the redhead affirmed.

“And what could be more natural! Now come, and no over-excitement, please, we don’t want you to get too liberated.” Number 2 picked up a receiver and announced to the Village, “Attention please. May I have your attention please. Number 6 has a very important announcement to make. Citizens, please report to the great lawn immediately!”

Number 2 led the redhead to a balcony above the grass. Citizens slowly assembled as the butler handed a megaphone to Number 6.

The redhead began, “Fellow citizens, you are cheering me, when it is really Number 2 you should applaud. Until he brought about social conversion, I was a rebel. A slave to my free will. But, as they say, ‘the butcher with the sharpest knife has the warmest heart.’ Some of you have withheld information that is invaluable to Number 2. Now I want to tell you something that will inspire you all-”

The sound of the tolling bell rang through the air. Number 86 shouted from the clock tower, “I have just received vital information! Number 2 is unmutual!”

Number 6 continued, “You are still individuals, you still have the right to free thought and your own will. Number 2, with his devious plotting, in operating contrary to the community. He is... an ‘unmutual!’”

The crowd gasped and began to shout for social conversion as Number 2 staggered down a flight of stairs to escape the mob. The citizens chanted “unmutual” as they chased Number 2 to the green dome.

The blonde’s smile was plainly visible from the far corner of the lawn. The redhead felt she could see the waves of happiness wash over the other woman. Their eyes said everything as the women went their separate ways.

***End of Chapter 7***
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Re: The Prisoner

Postby Artemis » Wed May 11, 2005 12:29 am

That was a great chapter - I love the theme of this episode, resisting the Village declaring people 'unmutual' for behaving differently. Grr :fit2 Very relevant and well-written, such that you can't help grin in triumph as Number 6 turns the tables on her latest Number 2 at the end.

I also really enjoyed Number 6 and Number 14's time together (well, duh :blush ). And it was pleasing to see them sharing 6's little victory over the Village. Not to mention sharing smoochies :wtkiss I'm guessing that 14's lack of sense of her mother is due to her being put in stasis? That must really bring it home to her - being told is one thing, but being able to sense her mother, and then one day just losing that sense, that'd hurt bad. And, I imagine, fill 14 with resolve to defeat the Village - I wonder if they realise? Or perhaps they do, and they know what's going on in 14's cave :hmm

Didn't do so well on the character recognition this time, the identity of Number 2 eluded me. Then again, if he was someone from season seven that's no surprise, as the desire to switch on the TV when it was airing eluded me too.

Thanks for the episode :bow Be seeing you :eyebrow
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Re: The Prisoner

Postby TemperedCynic » Wed May 11, 2005 5:43 pm

Free Will labeled as 'unmutual' - so many parallels to today's society. The sad, almost desperate, need to conform to social "norms", knowing that these "norms" are decided by an elite few. Number 6 is brilliant in turning the tables on Number 86 and then Number 2. So she's won this round, ahs the cooperation of an insider and a clear goal. So what possibly could go wrong? Stay tuned, gentle readers, as Mary takes us on a one-way trip down the rabbit hole.

To Chris' point, I think they do know Number 6 and Number 12 are meeting in the cave. What they don't yet suspect is their relationship, but well-timed surveilance by Number 2 in the cave should provide the leverage they need to break Number 6. Will they figure that out before our girls escape? Tune in next week.....
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Re: The Prisoner

Postby terra21 » Thu May 12, 2005 5:52 pm

Ok, I finally got to read this and may I say, hmmmmmmmm, veddy interesting. I'm all woo-hoo with the creep factor and the mystery. I love doing the name-that-BtVS character with each new "Numeral."

At first I was all like, Number 6 is being a beyotch, and even to Number 14. :mad I wanted to put the smack down on her. I am so glad to see that they've progressed to smoochies and possible love...

My inner paranoid hates the big brother shroud. (Btw, did you know that the avg American is caught 7-8 times on surveillance cameras daily. Yep, so think twice about picking that booger next time.) Anyway, I'm sure the new Number 2 would appreciate if Number 6 would babble as much as me. I'm just waiting for Number 2 to pop up in the cave at an inopertune time. Hopefully our girls will escape and get it on soon.

Great job, Mary!

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Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Mon May 16, 2005 3:38 pm

All: Thanks for reading, and the encouragement. The story is past the half-way mark, and I hope to have another chapter in a couple weeks.


GayNow: Thanks for the feedback, and I'm glad you find the story intriguing. I understand, all too well, the hazards of an engrossing book on the subway, but please: safety first. :) Glad the characters are easy to identify. You are correct, Spike was Number 17 and the most recent Number 2 was Caleb. Oddly, the Number 2 in the corresponding episode of "The Prisoner" was a menacing, misogynist jerk, and Caleb more than fit the bill.

Also, I'm mulling a story for your second fic challenge. Though the next "Prisoner" chapter and that story will have to wait until I get the next chapter of "Huddled Masses" finished. Which, by the way, will be very soon. Thanks again!

Artemis: Thanks for the insightful feedback! Your guess about Tara's mother is quite perceptive, and there will be more on that in the next chapter. In general, I think you'll get a lot of answers to your questions in the next chapter which will, of course, lead to a whole new slew of questions. It's going to be a hard road for our girls before the happy ending.

Number 2 was Caleb, a Season 7 character, which would explain why you don't recognize him. It wasn't until I was watching the episode and Number 2 actually shouted, "Females!" and acted like a sexist ass that I decided to use Caleb. The corresponding personalities were perfect. Thanks for reading!

TemperedCynic: Ah yes, this chapter brought to you by the good people of the Justice Department, circa John Ashcroft. It definitely struck me that there were parallels with American society. I would answer your suspicions, but that would spoil the surprise. As usual, you are hip to my plan. Shush, don't tell anyone. Number 6 did win this round, but she is about to enter a world of angst. It's going to be a long trip down the rabbit hole. By the way, I love that metaphor. Thanks for the great feedback, I really appreciate it.

terra21: Glad you dig my story. I admit the first couple chapters are confusing, primarily because I wanted the reader to identify with Willow/Number 6's frustration, and I am so glad you have read this far. Writing a brusque Willow is a bit difficult, but I think of it this way: if you resigned your position with the Council for personal reasons, got kidnapped and taken to a hidden location where everybody had numeric identities and there were hidden cameras everywhere... you'd be a little testy, too. Throw in a few mindgames, and you've got one bitchy Willow.

Whoa, 7-8 times a day? If ever there was a reason to make funny faces in public. There will be about 4 chapters until they escape, and alas, I don't think there will be smut until the epilogue that's rolling around in my head. Rest assured, there will be a happy ending. Thank you so much for the feedback!


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Re: The Prisoner

Postby Safuega » Tue May 17, 2005 7:21 pm

Mary:

My life sucks in more ways that I care to explain right now, but I just wanted to pop in and tell you that I'm still stealing moments to read your stories even if I can: a) leave feedback or b) do it in a timely fashion.

As for the story and the recent update, I was just curious as to why Willow and Tara are still ignorant of each other's names? I mean, you had the episode where Tara had a name and then we get the intro to the latest update where Willow mentions that Tara was Tara's name but Tara never confirms or denies that Tara is indeed her name. It would seem to me that the intro to the cave dialogue would have provided both Willow and Tara with a natural opportunity to renounce their numbered anonymity at least when they are with each other.

As for the rest of the update, you did a great job. Your update is living proof that writer's block is no match for you. I must confess that even in my most inspired days I cannot come up with the writing quality you display in your stories. One must bow down to superior skill. :bow

Thanks for sharing.

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