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Passionate Love *New Fic* 10-15-07

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Passionate Love *New Fic* 10-15-07

Postby Winnie8706 » Mon Oct 15, 2007 11:43 am

Passionate Love
Author- Winnie8706
Rating- Pg- 13 ( for now)
Disclaimer - All characters belong to Joss Whedon
FeedBack- Yes Please(please be gentle)
Pairing- W/T Of Course
Summary- She wants her
Notes - This is my first fanfiction, so if you dont like it I am sorry ahead of time.




Chapter 1A



When I first saw her , I knew I had to have her. Not just to fuck her, but to love, protect, and hold her . There was something about her that sent me crazy for her.

I saw her sitting two tables away from me.She was tapping her pencil against her upper lip. The way she flicked her Beautiful
silky hair away from her face was the most erotic
thing i had ever seen in my life, stupid I know but she had a hold on me.

When she shifted slightly in her chair I could see
a glimpse of cleavage though the top she wore, and her legs
( thank god she wore a short skirt) were long and i just wanted to run my hands up her legs and under her skirt
to feel....god. I just wanted to hear her whimper my name over and over again.



I heard her sigh Deeply and close her textbook as she got up to leave she finally glanced my way. When she did my breathe
caugh in my throat she was so beautiful, and those
gorgeous blue eyes made me quiver.She shifted
her bag over her shoulder and started for the door my eyes followed of course.

Now all I have to do is talk to her.


Sorry its so short but the next update wont be so short Promise!
"A kiss is a lovely trick designed by nature to stop speech when words become superfluous."
-Ingrid Bergman
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Re: Passionate Love *New Fic* 10-15-07

Postby MiniShrink » Mon Oct 15, 2007 12:50 pm

Short, but good so far. I liked the last line. You might want to spell check it, fix the few grammar problems you have, and maybe make it a little longer, but that's really up to you - it's perfect the way it is, but if all instalments are this short I may tar and feather you.
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