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Re: The Edge of Silence Chap 6j: The Things I Cannot See

Postby HOPE REIGNS » Tue Nov 19, 2002 6:06 am

Wow, this Chapter was just artistic. So many things being tied together.



First, Willow and Tara: Humina Humina, Tara, so attuned to Willow's thoughts and feelings. Knowing that Willow had some doubt in herself and letting her know that it was ok, she excepted that she wasn't ready yet to give herself completely. "take me", the whispers, so so intimate, I felt like I was peeping in on something that was just between them. The meaning behind the whole scene with very few words, just said so much about the two of them as people and as a couple, Goddess they just go together.



Jo: So happy she made it home ok. The not being able to sleep was right on. Her fear of Willow was interesting though. Maybe before too long, she'll understand more where Willow is coming from, they are really going throughthe same thing in life right now. Jo just now realizing that found the right path in love and has Tara to talk to about it. Willow, finding her Soulmate in her lover and feels she can't tell anyone. Of course Willow is going to snap at other people, with all of thoughts going through that little head of hers without some sort of release. I think the two of them could be great friends down the road. As long as Jo doesn't try to take up too much Tara time.



Anyway, I guess my whole point is I love this fic. Can't wait for more wordy goodness.



Thank you,

Anna

Even though they are no longer here in body, their souls continue on in our hearts.

HOPE REIGNS
 


Re: The Edge of Silence Chap 6j: The Things I Cannot See

Postby Darcy » Tue Nov 19, 2002 6:26 am

hondosfirst:



First of all, I'm innocent this time. (OK, maybe

innocent" is the wrong word to use in the context of this fic, especially since we were researching part of the next update last night, but ....)



She normally tries to have an update ready for Tuesday night. She wants to provide the kittens with an alternative - or balm - to the Season Severed episode that normally runs Tuesdays. As it happens, it's not being shown in our area until Saturday night due to a basketball game.



That said, I thought I'd give you a sample of what a Beta does so you have a better understanding of why it can sometimes delay an update. Usually I would sit with the writer and discuss revisions in detail, but that's obviously not feasible in this case. This is just a first pass revision; when possible, I like to do at least two runthroughs before posting. Comments are enclosed in [ ].



[Are you sure you want to use a screenplay format here rather than a little more scene setting/character introduction? The readers may be confused as to the speakers' identities. Well, okay, if you're sure.]



Minion 1: "These updates are falling far behind schedule. Somebody is surely in for some impatient feedback"



Minion 2: "Why does the story remain in chapter 6j when we know that Willow's admission of love and Jo getting laid lie so close at hand?"



[Possibly revise this sentence, especially the latter part. Is the question really addressed to the delay in posting, or an expression of Minion 2's frustration with the pace of updates? Suggestion: How can she leave us at this point when Willow's admission of love - and Jo's first experience of it - are so close?]



Minion 1: "Well, The Glorious One, having acquired many writing skills, doesn't exactly "post lightly".



Triscuit7 BETA: "Hey, I can read this, Beta-like vision doesn't miss much, remember."



Minion 2 (pointing at Minion 2, A.K.A. hondosfirst.): "'Twas she who blasphemed, Your Magnificence."



[OK, Minion 2 is pointing at Minion 2? Presumably that should be Minion 1?]



Minion 1: "Um, yes, I was informed by The Smut-tastic One that perhaps by, oh, I don't know, kind words or bribes of some sort, that it may move the story along quicker perhaps, than pain-inflicty threats? If so,then please accept my humble offer of whatever it is that she ..." (pointing to Minion 2) "... may do for you! She will lay down her life or give you her free time to help you proofread."



[This demonstrates the difficulty of the screenplay format. It's easier to insert a specific action in the middle of dialogue in a standard paragraph. I'm less familiar with screenplay conventions, so I'm not entirely sure I've placed that break correctly. For a fic, I would look that up and edit accordingly.]



Minion 1: "Wha..huh?" (looks curiously at Minion 2)



[Again, do we have the minions backwards?]



(Minion 2 shrugs shoulders at Minion 1 and looks adoringly at the wonder BETA.)



["adoringly smiling" should be simplified. And again we need to clarify the minions.]



Various Triscuit7 fic groupies chant in spacey, brain-fried tones: "PLEASE UPDATE, ALL DARK, LOVE CONFESSION, BIG CONFESSION, BIG BIG LAY FOR JO, WE HAVE TO BE THERE."



[Not sure what the chant is saying, but maybe that's the effect you were going for. And does it really need to be all uppercase and all one sentence? Consider revising to something clearer - Suggestion: "Please update. All DARK. We love confession - big confession - big, big lay for Jo. We have to be there."]



Of course, the final decisions on revisions are always the author's.


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I don't care if it is an orgy of death, there's still such a thing as a napkin! - Willow in "Superstar"

Darcy
 


Re: The Edge of Silence Chap 6j: The Things I Cannot See

Postby hondosfirst » Tue Nov 19, 2002 10:08 am

Oh.I get what your saying here.I should be going after the Basketball Team!!Which team is it now?Ill need both teams actually,they share equal blame I think.Please let me know.

Ya know what?Im starting to think that you two might be carrying on or something outside this BETA business.Nothing gets past me.Oh sorry.I hope you dont mind I just blurted that out.Know they all might figure it out.Okay so back to this team I need to be stalking...

Minion(insert any #)Im a multi...personality wise.Some jokingly call me Sybil.

Thanks for the help you sly one you...wink,wink!!

Reserch,I bet those two are singing right now!!



Edited by: hondosfirst at: 11/19/02 8:16:34 am
hondosfirst
 


Feedback Chap 6i: The Things I Cannot See

Postby Triscuit7 » Tue Nov 19, 2002 5:35 pm

Hi Kittens



A little while turned into a long time. Sorry. I just figured there would be more happiness if I concentrated on the writing part. :) So here are the thank-yous from the update before last.



LostSoul

Quote:
Well now, that was just cruel.


Awwww, not so much really. Hehe. Thanks.



MadeinNZ

Hey Nicky. “Cool dude" works for me :) I love Willow to pieces, but with the self-doubt thing, well, she beats even me; that could be why I like her so much. As for the “I Love Jo” club, I hereby appoint you to be in charge of organizing it and since you’re an accountant, I approve your appointment as Treasurer. Have fun and thanks for reading sweetie.



LeatherQueen

Hey LQ. You caught me, I admit it: I like being naughty. : -->>: Thanks again.



darkmagicwillow

Hi. Glad I’ve brought you back to the liking Jo side of life. My Mei-Ling is actually not from Honor Harrington at all – I’d forgotten about her from Honor of the Queen, gracious. I wanted to introduce an Asian character and vetted the name with one of my booksellers. Oh, after you finish the Honorverse books, try 1632 by Eric Flint. Thanks.



xita

Hey sweetie. Willow and Tara in a lesbian context was definitely missing from the show (until last fucking week). But…they were lesbians they must have had lesbian friends. I’m glad you’re enjoying the whole package. And don’t worry – I have no plans to stop anytime soon. Thanks again.



singgirl

Hi. Yes, indeed, me=cruel, see above. : -->>: Sorry I just like to tease and as LQ pointed out, I’m also very occasionally naughty. :) Thanks.



mollyig

Hey. Tara is intuitive and I think always more concerned with others than she is with herself. Thanks for reading.



tommo

Hi Ruth.
Quote:
but dammit, what's going on when I'm more interested in a peripheral character than Willow and Tara?
Well, I’m not certain what’s going on, but I am delighted to have intrigued you so. :grin Thanks.



Puff

Hi. I’m cruel and naughty but I also like to tease. :grin I have to confess I like playing with the dialogue and scenes from the show. It’s fun. Thanks again.



tkheaven

Hey. I think Nicky’s taking applications for the Jo club. There will be more coming. Thanks.



MAISEY12

Hi Ann-Marie. I’m very glad you’re enjoying this and the original secondary characters. Thanks sweetie.



ChaoticBliss

Hey.
Quote:
almost missed last night's episode because of your story
That counts as a good in my book. Thanks for reading.



TromDeGrey

Hi. What can I say but : -->>: Thanks again.



barnabasvamp

Hey BV. I love teasing, it’s fun. :grin Concerning Dani and Sarah - well, Dani is walking around, but then Sarah’s munching doesn’t seem to be permanent. Thanks.



Murasaki S

Hi. This was a good first dance, I agree. Dani may be clueless, but then most of Sunnydale is clueless, so don’t hold it against her. And yes, she was one of Sarah’s meals. Thanks for reading.



tiredsoul

Hi Celia. I’m happy you liked the scene with the collage from the show. I think the position of secretary of the Jo club is still open, but I don’t know who the president is. Thanks again sweetie for everything.



Insanity

Hey. I’m glad you liked Jo. She is a treasure. Thanks.



Pikescoob

Hi Michelle. Hehe. I personally love snuggles of any kind, but naked ones are special. Glad you’re reading. Thanks sweetie.



HOPE REIGNS

Hey. Good butterflies I hope, except for the worries over Jo. But she’s fine and she has a date! Yay! Thanks.



Vampivy

Hi Patty.
Quote:
that is why I will continue to read “The Edge of Silence”, because YOU will never let ME forget the beauty that is Willow And Tara.
IMHO this really is what the Kitten and Pens are really about. Thanks sweetie.



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I brought marshmallows!

Triscuit7
 


Re: Feedback Chap 6i: The Things I Cannot See

Postby darkmagicwillow » Tue Nov 19, 2002 6:26 pm

I finished "War of Honor" this weekend; it made me hate politicians all over again. I have read "1632" and "1633." I don't like them as much as Stirling's island books, but they have a greater scope and the modern time setting is great, especially seeing what happens as Cromwell, Richelieu, and the other leaders get caught up with knowledge of what would have happened in the future.

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"Omnia mutantur, nihil interit." -- "Everything changes, but nothing is truly lost."

darkmagicwillow
 


The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby Triscuit7 » Tue Nov 19, 2002 6:55 pm

Hey Kittens



It's Tuesday night and here is the promised update. Here in the Philly area, tonight's ep. is pre-empted by Sixers basketball - yay!



Because this one sort of pulls out a lot of the stops:



NC- 17 And yes, I really, really mean it. :grin



Health Warning - have ALL of your equipment handy. It is 100% essential. And don't forget to breathe and to blink.



Xita - thanks. : -->>:



Have fun.



*****





She watched as Tara closed and locked the door. Her lover let the robe slide from her shoulders and laid it in the chair. The fairy lights didn’t provide enough illumination to see every detail perfectly, weren’t bright enough to allow her to distinguish colors. Tara was light and shadow, her hair shimmering like spun metal. She smiled and lifted the covers.



“Oh, I didn’t mean to w-wake you.”



“You didn’t. I woke up while you were gone.” She slipped an arm around Tara’s now-cool body and pulled her close. She nuzzled her neck and ears, inhaling Tara’s scent, and shivered – but not from the cold.



“M-miss me?”



She caught a slightly mischievous smile. “Yes. Missed my Tarebear snuggles.”



“And?” The smile grew broader, naughtier.



“And, yes.” Willow grinned back, tucking a strand of silky hair behind one of her girlfriend’s ears.



Tara shifted up on top of her. “Yes – what, sweetie?” Eyes that she knew were blue crinkled in amusement.



“Mmmm, well, while I was waiting I got to thinking how good you’d taste.” She kissed her gently.



“Ahhh.” Tara ducked her head down, so that her lips were beside her left ear. She whispered, “I was thinking how much I enjoyed my lunch – and thinking how I might enjoy a snack right now.”



“Oh.” That was all Willow could manage, her tummy fluttering. She knew how she wanted to answer that. After all, she wanted that - wanted that rather intensely - but she didn’t think she could actually say the words. Against her neck, she felt Tara’s lips curve into a smile and felt her own cheeks flush.



“Want me to eat you, love?” Tara lifted her head.



Oh … yes. Hell, yes. “Uh, … well, uh, I should go freshen ….” Fingers covered her lips again, shushing her as Tara shook her head minutely.



“No, love.” Soft lips replaced the fingers in a gentle kiss and Tara settled in on top of her, blanketing her with her body. Slow kisses covered her lips, making her hungry, but gentling her.



She cupped Tara’s face in her hands, nibbling her lips between kisses, until Tara shifted upwards. Looking down at her with considerable hunger, Tara-tongue licked her own full lips. She felt her lips part in reaction to the visual and saw Tara smile.



“Are you up to some math, love? I promise it won’t be complicated.”



“What kind of math?” Willow’s smile had nothing to do with her love of math.



“Easy addition, like 33 +36 and 27 + 42.”



“I like that math.” Willow grinned hugely. “But, ohhh, multiplication is important, too. Don’t forget that.”



“3 x 23 suit your fancy, love?”



“Very much so.” She smirked. This was a game she could play and win. “The square root of 4761 is much neglected, I think.”



“Is it, now?” Tara slipped off her.



“Well, it feels neglected.”



“Such an important number shouldn’t feel that way.” Tara’s fingertips traced a line between the hollow of her neck and the edge of her curls before circling lightly over her tummy. “Is it feeling less neglected now?”



“Uh, no. Not yet.” Willow squirmed beneath the teasing fingers.



“Can you tell me what it wants?”



Oh god, she was going to make her say it!



Tara lifted one eyebrow; smirking, she lowered her mouth to a nipple. Her tongue traced the aureole lightly. Willow wound her hand in the blond hair, simply holding, not guiding. Willing to be teased. Wanting to be teased. The words to express what she wanted, what she needed, hovered on the tip of her tongue. Fingers dipped lower, tugging her curls.



“You are so lovely,” Tara murmured. Taking the nipple between her teeth, she tugged gently.



Willow’s hand clenched in the long hair and she hissed. Her back arched. Tara flicked her tongue over the nipple once, then released it.



“Oh, god,” Willow sighed.



“Ready to find that square root, love?”



She nodded and released Tara, who slipped out of bed – which was wrong, right? Sitting up, she tracked her lover. What was she …? Oh. She relaxed as Tara found what she was looking for and returned to the bed. Fingers on her chin tipped her head back and Tara kissed her thoroughly. Tara tongued her, curling her tongue into a warm tool to tease and enflame. Willow felt her heart rate quicken. The fingers shifted to her shoulder and pushed her back, and all the while Tara kissed her. She moaned, her hands caressing her lover’s sides. She whimpered when Tara broke off the kiss, and recognized in herself the hunger Tara had felt this afternoon.



“Lift your hips, sweetie.”



She nodded and lifted upward.



Tara spread a towel beneath them. “Just in case.”



Eyes wide, she drank in her lover’s face, willing now to say the words for what she wanted, that Tara had wanted her to – if she asked. Her hands stroked Tara restlessly, urgently, as Tara turned about. Long hair brushed over her upper thighs and she lifted her hips involuntarily.



“Shhhhh. Easy, love. I want to take my time.”



“Okay.” The lack of strength in her voice surprised her, but also pleased her in a way. Tara was the strong one now.



Her lover reclined beside her and she lifted her leg, letting Tara pillow her head on her thigh. Tara did the same for her, and they curled into one another, 6s and 9s. She felt Tara sigh, warm breath washing across her wetness, and trembled.



“So very lovely.” Tara’s voice was a mere whisper, but made her nipples harden. Soft lips kissed her and her breath caught in her throat. It was pulled free in a low moan when a soft firm tongue pressed into her.



Her own face nuzzled into Tara and she felt her lover’s reactive thrust. Yes. Hungry. Her lips caught at Tara’s clit and she licked it hard – harder still when she heard Tara’s breathing hitch. Tara strained towards her lips and tongue.



Wanting.



Yet Tara squeezed her thigh, begging breathlessly. “N-No. Slow. Please.”



Willow considered. Slow or fast. Either would get them there. But slow, yes, slow had merits – they’d already proven that in the past few days. She grappled with her hunger for Tara and pushed it down. She could do slow. She ached to do slow.



She kissed Tara’s cunt gently – and felt her relax. Felt an identical kiss on her own cunt. Slow, oh yes. Slow was going to be very good.



Tara’s upper hand reached behind her, caressing and kneading her butt. The other parted her lips, exposing her to Tara’s breath, and lips, and tongue. Movements she mirrored, making her lover shiver. Tara was wet. Her cunt glistened with juices. Juices she slowly began to drink: saltier today, tangier, not as sweet. She was becoming a Tara connoisseur. Of course, who wouldn’t, given the opportunity?



Her hips rocked to the slow, but definitely not lazy, strokes of Tara’s tongue. Gentle strokes. Feathery strokes. Eyes closed, she duplicated them with her own tongue and felt her lover begin to rock. Yes. This was very good.



Wild monkey love could come later. Now she just wanted Sara MacLachlan loving.



Soft fingers caressed and rubbed, intensifying the motions of their tongues, until it grew impossible to think. Then she entered Tara, motion her lover couldn’t duplicate. And Tara stiffened, motionless, tongue and fingers stilled as her orgasm flowed through her. She added a second finger and sucked her clit, feeling her lover come.



Wanting that herself.



Tara’s rapid breathing slowed and she drank up the thick juices. She curled her fingers, brushing the tips over Tara’s rough-smooth inner walls.



That – she wanted that, fingers thrusting into her. Tara’s tongue flicked her clit hard, rapidly. She moaned. Good, but not enough.



“Sweetie.” Tara’s voice was deep and thick with hunger. “Come up over me. Ride my tongue.”



Willow pulled her fingers out and rolled, turning Tara over onto her back. She crouched, knees on either side of her lover’s head, carefully not kneeling on the long hair. Trembling, she ran her fingers over Tara’s breasts and tummy.



Tara pushed at her thighs, spreading and bracing her. “Come down, love.”



She lowered herself to Tara’s mouth, wondering if even this would be enough. She felt the warm contact and began to rock. Tara’s tongue stroked her clit, front to back, with long, firm strokes. She felt her body tighten up with pleasure that ratcheted upwards with every stroke. But more, oh god, she wanted more.



A gentle probing touch of Tara’s fingers made her tense. Then she felt tension inside her as Tara tugged on her string. Tugged it just hard enough to cause tension within her, but no harder. Her hands knotted in the sheets and she began to thrust against her lover’s mouth. A fingertip teased her, entering her just enough for her to feel it with the sensitive mouth of her vagina. Tara repeated the motions, tugging and teasing.



Willow moaned deeply. “Yes, there.” She licked her lips, whimpering, frantic now with her need. “Do. It. Yessss.” Her breath came in sobbing moans that punctuated each downward thrust of her cunt against Tara’s mouth. “Eat me, please,” she pleaded hoarsely, and Tara’s mouth closed on her clit. Sucking hard, drawing it into her mouth. “Ohhhhh!” She shook her head from side to side, crouched even lower over Tara now. She could feel Tara’s teeth against her cunt as she rode her.



The orgasm swept through her hard, making her buck and grunt, but Tara didn’t stop. The tongue swirled over her clit, flicking it firmly. She began climbing upward again, riding her lover’s mouth. “Yes, Tara. Oh, yesssss.” As she came this time, Tara’s tongue slowed and began flicking more lightly. As she started to lift off her, she found herself unable to escape from her lover’s hands and mouth. She was being tongued completely and totally.



And she loved it.



Her body trembled, but she couldn’t move away – didn’t want to move away. She wanted this. She rested her forehead at the junction of Tara’s hip and belly; panting, she reached up her own body, found her nipples, and rolled the aching bits of flesh between her thumb and fingers.



Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath.



Tara claimed her, filling her with pleasure, until her raw need gradually dissipated to something milder. Finally she rolled over onto her back, reaching for Tara as she turned and climbed her body, eagerly accepting the press of Tara’s hungry body against hers. She looked up into the beautiful face and wound a hand into the hair, drawing her lover down. Her lips covered the bruised lips with gentle kisses, then traced their way back to her lover’s left ear.



“Fuck me, love,” she murmured.



Tara straddled her thigh, pressing her fingers over Willow’s clit. Willow held her tight as she began to rock, little grunts emerging from her mouth. Each rocking motion rubbed the fingers over her clit. She nuzzled her lover’s neck, and Tara angled her chin upwards invitingly. Willow licked the soft flesh, tasting the sweat that slicked Tara’s skin. She lifted a leg and hooked her ankle over Tara’s calf for leverage. She met her lover’s thrusts, her breathing falling naturally in sync with Tara’s.



Together they reached upward, helping one another along, until long slow waves shuddered through them.



Tara stirred first, slipping off her and nestling into her arm and body. Willow turned her head and gazed into her lover’s face.



“Are you okay? Do you need anything, ’cause if you do, I could ….”



“I’m fine, love. More than fine, actually.” Tara’s lips curved upwards and she raised her hand. Her fingers were sticky as they caressed her cheek.



Willow turned her head towards them, curious to taste herself today – to taste what Tara had. Her lips closed around them and she sucked and licked them clean. Almost as nice as Tara had tasted. Different. Stronger. More woman-y.



Which reminded her – she reached down and made certain the towel was in place. She really didn’t want a repeat of last night in Tara’s bed. She’d snuggle awhile, go change, then snuggle or make love with Tara again. She had a plan. Plans were good – she liked having a plan. And a plan involving Tara was the best plan of all.



****



Jo glanced at her watch, fidgeting. Almost 10. That was late enough. Surely that was late enough. Obviously 8 hadn’t been. And 9 probably wasn’t, but to avoid temptation she left her room then.



She stood, juggling her peace offering. Everyone liked donuts, right? She frowned at the other bag. Were bagels too ethnic? She hadn’t gotten lox, but bagels and cream cheese were good, right? Or were they too Jewish? Oh – what if her peace offering wasn’t peace-inducing?



She almost dropped everything – donuts, bagels, coffee – as she struggled through the doors. Strolling down the quiet hall, she met no one. Maybe 10 was too early. But if she waited, then the coffee would be cold. She hated cold coffee.



She hesitated outside Tara’s door, then shifted her burdens. She knocked and waited. Oh god, what if she was interrupting? Maybe she should just go back to her room. She was rocking back and forth between her room and Tara’s when the door swung open, revealing Tara in her robe.



“Hi, Jo.”



“Uh, hi. It’s not too early, is it? I’m not interrupting?” Her eyebrows climbed up into question marks.



Tara stepped back. “N-No, come in.”



Jo ventured into the room cautiously as Tara closed the door behind her, her eyes automatically searching for Willow. Who was dressed in boxers and a t-shirt and reclining across the bed on her stomach, one foot kicking lazily in the air.



“Hey.” The redhead smiled a greeting and Tara sat down on the bed, claiming one of Willow’s hands.



Not snarky at all. Jo sighed in relief. “Hey. I brought breakfast.”



Willow sat up. “Oooooh, what?”



Jo smiled shakily, feeling a little more at ease. “Donuts, bagels and cream cheese, and coffee.”



“Yum.” Willow patted the bed with her free hand.



She sat gingerly, not too close, and handed over the bags. She glanced at Tara as Willow happily rummaged through the bags. The blonde’s eyes met hers in quiet amusement over her lover’s shoulder. Jo smiled back and then grinned broadly.



Maybe Willow was only snarky when she was horny.



Triscuit7
 


Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby LeatherQueen » Tue Nov 19, 2002 8:16 pm

OH yes, Mel... this is exactly what I needed today. It's been a horridly crappy day, but this was just lovely. A bright spot on an otherwise dreary day. :)





"We've got the only librarian who can rip off your arm with his leg. People respect that." - Terry Pratchett

LeatherQueen
 


Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby pikescoob » Tue Nov 19, 2002 8:21 pm

Yay an update! :D "now she just wanted Sara MacLachlan loving" loved that! :) Awww, how cute is Jo bringing a peace offering :D That last line made me smile, which I haven't really done the past two days. Thanks for the update Mel! :D



--Michelle

pikescoob
 


Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby SlayerSydney » Tue Nov 19, 2002 10:03 pm

Quote:
Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath.




LMFAO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:laugh :lol :rollin And then you got me with this one:



Quote:
Maybe Willow was only snarky when she was horny.




Great update Triscuit!! :)




MichelleBranch:"And when I catch my breath, it's you I breathe." ---Everywhere.

SlayerSydney
 


Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby blameburner » Tue Nov 19, 2002 11:19 pm

Hehe. And homina homina beep beep.



Wow.



Loved this line:

Quote:
Wild monkey love could come later. Now she just wanted Sara MacLachlan loving.




Not sure if I've posted this before (if not, then shame on me), but this fic makes my heart go all-a-flutter. On a scale of 1 to 5 cold showers, this is a definite 5.



And don't you just HATE how often UPN pre-empts out here? If it's not basketball then it's the damn Flyers! Stupid sports.



Thanks for this!

"Maybe I'll change my look, or cut class. You don't know! And I'm eating this banana, lunch-time be damned!" - Willow, Dopplegangland

blameburner
 


Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby darkmagicwillow » Tue Nov 19, 2002 11:28 pm

Very nice reading after an all too Spiky episode of Buffy. It looks like people have already picked up all my favorite quotes ... both the "devour from beneath" and snarky Willow ones were great.

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"Omnia mutantur, nihil interit." -- "Everything changes, but nothing is truly lost."

darkmagicwillow
 


Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby tiredsoul » Wed Nov 20, 2002 12:35 am

**health warning noted ... should have heeded it**



Wow ... you sure were pulling out all the stops. Loved it!



I love Jo at the end. A peace offering that wasn't peace inducing. LOL.



And to add ... :thud



--celia



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"That was just rude. Now I forget what I was saying."

tiredsoul
 


Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby MadeinNZ » Wed Nov 20, 2002 2:49 am

Breasts.



See - that was such a great start to the previous chapter I thought it might be nice to start my feedback like that. I think I might use it for all my feedback from now on. Has a nice ring to it.



Once again you've explored the amazing depth of this relationship while giving us great smut at the same time. I won't repeat what everyone else is said. Easier to just say 'ditto'. I did want to add a couple of things though.



I liked how the lovemaking was so polite. All the sweetie's and love's and please's. It added such respect.



I also love the way your sex scene's play out like an infomercial. Now stick with me here - its a compliment. Really. You know the commercials which offer you a product and then say "but wait, there's more"? And then not only do you get the product and the bonus, they also chuck in a free set of ginsu knives? Well this is the wonderful thing about this chapter. The scene doesn't stop when the first climax is reached. That's just the beginning. Almost like Tara turns to Willow and says "but wait, there's more". I'm not sure where the knives come in but hopefully you get the idea.



And I think you just put the maths stuff in to torture me. You know how excited I get about numbers. Is it wrong that I found the maths problems as erotic as the actual act? Don't answer that.





Edited by: MadeinNZ at: 11/20/02 12:51:10 am
MadeinNZ
 


Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby The Inward Sea » Wed Nov 20, 2002 9:22 am

Hi, Mel :wave



Making a reappearence in this thread and confessing I've been reading all your updates I apologize for not posting before.



I'm loving this story. Absolutely. I'm keeping it in my laptop so I can read and re-read while working :)



I really wonder where all this is leading to but enjoying tremendously the ride!

Quote:


devoured her from beneath




First Kitten prize for best use of a stupid ME catch phrase!



And, of course, lots and lots of well earned :thud



Many thanks.



Sea





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Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby xita » Wed Nov 20, 2002 9:23 am

uh, yeah i .. yeah. What an idea and such great execution. Bless your heart :) And Willow just saying the words , oh yeah! Jo's last line rofl. That's great.

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Buffy?

Let's change it, the Discovery channel has koala bears.

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Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby darkmagicwillow » Wed Nov 20, 2002 9:35 am

MadeinNZ, is the maths fetish particular to you or are do all girls from NZ like them? If so, I may have to move. I just knew being able to do square roots in my head would come in handy some day...



Sea, it's good to see you back. Where have you been hiding?

--

"Omnia mutantur, nihil interit." -- "Everything changes, but nothing is truly lost."

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Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby barnabasvamp » Wed Nov 20, 2002 9:43 am

:thud :thud Mel, I listened to the warning, got me a pillow, and I think I missed it!:drool

Math references, OMG

Quote:
“Ready to find that square root, love?”


What an invitation :grin

Their lovemaking, desire to move quickly, yet more of a desire to go slow and enjoy. Beautiful.

BV



"In front of total strangers won't you kiss me, Flowers for no reason but you miss me - OOH, I wanna be in love"

Melissa Etheridge-Skin

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Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby funkyasian » Wed Nov 20, 2002 10:00 am

i...:thud



that's all i have to say...



steph



p.s. - been using "snarky" - get weird glances all the time...hmmm...strange people...

Nothing can cure the soul but the senses, just as nothing can cure the senses but the soul. ~ Oscar Wilde

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Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby jdcioffi » Wed Nov 20, 2002 10:35 am

Dude, if someone has to be devoured from beneath ... that's the way to do it. *holy schmaboly!*



You realise, of course, the next time someone on the show says "From beneath you it devours" I'll turn bright red and, quite possibly, blush to death from images of Tara-loving.



:eyebrow

JD

"Was there a voice unkind in the back of your mind saying, "maybe..." (Jeff Buckley - The Last Goodbye)

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Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby Jennpurr » Wed Nov 20, 2002 10:53 am

Hey Mel. :wave



**Falls off chair and rolls over to you, stopping at your feet, looking up at you**



WOW!



I'll agree with Xita. LOVED Jo's last line. Hee... :)



WOW... this update was... YUM! to say the least.



:drool



:thud



I just can't get over how you write the sex scenes. They're excellent. I also love how you can feel the love between them, expressed through out, even if Willow hasn't spoken it yet.



I did love Willow saying, in the last update, that she was Tara's. :heart So beautiful. She's come so far...hope it won't be too much longer before she'll say those three words?? :pray Can't wait to see Tara's reaction.



You know, I always wondered when she first actually said it on the show. I'm thinking at the end of, "New Moon Rising," but maybe before then?? I'm looking forward to seeing when you have her say it.



It's official... Jo has stollen a chunk of my heart. :shy It's all your fault. :p JK! But, yes... I'm now part of the, I like Jo camp. Can't wait to see what happens with her and Dani. You know, I can't remember who said it, but I was kinda wondering too, if Jo was somehow thinking of Tara kissing her. I think she's still a little hung up on her, but hopefully her mind will be occupied by someone else, soon?? Jo needs her Dani smoochies. :wink



I was trying to picture where you were in the episode? I haven't watched, "Superstar," in a while, but I remember all the W/T parts.



Looking forward to more, Mel, as usual. Thank you for all the updates. I just am totally in love with this story.



More!



So next Tuesday, right?? :bounce :bounce



Oh, hey Darcy! :wave Give Mel a hug of thanks, for me. :)



Take care,

Jen

* * * * * * * * * *
"For a seer, you have an incredible grasp of the fucking obvious." ~ Tara from, "Milestones: Chapter 14," by Lisa Countryman
"Got a sock. Master threw it, and Dobby caught it, and Dobby - Dobby is free." ~ Dobby the House Elf
"I've become really protective of her. I want to make sure if Tara comes back, it's for good reason." ~ Amber Benson

Edited by: Jennpurr at: 11/20/02 8:54:53 am
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Re: The Edge of Silence - Chap 6k: The Things I Cannot See

Postby BFR from Paris » Wed Nov 20, 2002 12:24 pm

I don't get it. What's the square root of 4761?



:laugh



Great update, Melissa :thud

Edited by: BFR from Paris at: 11/20/02 10:25:49 am
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Re: FIC: The Edge of Silence

Postby samiamiguess » Wed Nov 20, 2002 12:25 pm

Oh crikey. Fantastic. So realistic I felt like a voyeur.



And Tara got the towel. if I was in such a position I'd like to think I'd be as clear minded. but I'd be like Willow. Slow, right. Slow. I can do this.



Love how we're seeing Willow's development and Tara giving herself so completely. Just really depicting how I'd imagined the relationship between the two would have been. (or is in my mind).





Hoping those three little words aren't too far away, I'd just love Tara to hear them.



thanks for the update.

sonya



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Re: FIC: The Edge of Silence

Postby MAISEY12 » Wed Nov 20, 2002 1:29 pm

Mel,



I read this update this morning, just before I left for work. Not a good idea as I had wicked and naughty thoughts whilst driving to a meeting.:) (Very frustrating). I will make sure that I only read your updates in the evenings, in future.



You certainly know how to write erotic and sensual love scenes. Please keep up the good work.



I certainly could relate to Jo and her desperation to talk to someone about her encounter the previous evening. Thank goodness she has Tara.





Already waiting for more.





Ann-Marie

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Re: FIC: The Edge of Silence

Postby SilverWingedNemesis » Wed Nov 20, 2002 3:14 pm

OHMYGOD!! LOL :clap I LOVE THIS FIC!! *takes a deep breath* AHH....That's better!! LOL



I really am enjoying this fic..Too much probably!! LOL



Thanks for this and keep it coming! (LOL I kill myself sometimes!! LOL)



~NICKOLE~

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"Wanna be bad?"

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Reply

Postby The Inward Sea » Wed Nov 20, 2002 3:29 pm

Hi, DMW! :wave



I fell victim of major cosmic mishaps -mostly related to business/partnership and career- and had to take decisions that will affect definitely my future. Let's say I am in a turning point. But everything is being settled now and the inner turmoil is calming down. I have a tendency to be very quiet during times such as this. My nick is The Inward... for a reason :) Thanks for asking. I've missed a lot our historical/artistic chats! BTW, I owe you big feedback on other thread...



Sea

The Inward Sea
 


Re: Reply

Postby MadeinNZ » Wed Nov 20, 2002 5:08 pm

Quote:
MadeinNZ, is the maths fetish particular to you or are do all girls from NZ like them?
I'm afraid its just me. *sigh* Nobody appreciates a good multiplication.

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Re: Reply

Postby HOPE REIGNS » Wed Nov 20, 2002 7:38 pm

Aaaaahhhh!! Yet again, you bring good things to life. At least in this brain of mine. Great update as always!!



Anna:-)

Even though they are no longer here in body, their souls continue on in our hearts.

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Re: Reply

Postby TromDeGrey » Wed Nov 20, 2002 9:52 pm

So, really, how does it feel knowing you've caused more THUD related injuries than any other Kitten? :lol







"The person who says it cannot be done should not interrupt the person doing it."



Chinese Proverb.

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Re: Reply

Postby tkheaven » Thu Nov 21, 2002 7:42 am

Quote:
Tara ate her, devoured her from beneath.


Giving new meaning to this season's catch phrase. :lol LMAO That was great!I loved how you had them working out some math. I was reading this during my lunch break yesterday and had to mention it to my gf (what! I thought it was cute...) So I'm reading this to her and her face is all blank..I'm like, "Sweetie, I know you're not all that in math but COME ON!" it was the moment, it cracked me up even more... :laugh

and can I just add a :thud and a :drool and yet another :thud I'm about to go back and reread this chapter. :angel



Jo IS SO CUTE! :lol She's all excited about kissing another girl, and well, by checking out and thinking about hands I'd say other things...



This is awesome! please continue....

Tk's new and improved "GrrArgg"...Tk's Heaven


"I've become really protective of her. I want to make sure if Tara comes back, it's for good reason." -Amber Benson

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Re: Reply

Postby Insanity » Thu Nov 21, 2002 10:32 am

Wow... really great update..



best sentences are all up there somewhere..(from beneath..., Snarky-horny; Square-root)



And Jo... as always: soo cute, beeing insecure.. To early??



Ok..ready for the next update....BTW I like cold showers *fg*



Insanity



"Nobody messes with my girl!" Tara, Bargaining

Insanity
 

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