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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby terra21 » Mon May 23, 2005 7:24 pm

Ruh, roh (Scooby style) Xander figured it out. I don't think he'll tell.

Warren makes my stomach turn. Nothing new there.

I personally think Tara will want to leave town with Will. Even though she is a stubborn sort. Prime example...
“I want to dance,” she softly replied.


The whole dancing scene was intense. I so wanted them to kiss, of course I ain't the author and I can't make 'em do what I want in this fic. Darnit.

Thanks I-94 and Cam.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Urn of Osiris » Tue May 24, 2005 9:47 am

Interesting fic you've got here. Sorry to come so late to the party. I was hoping there'd be more. When I came to the last update I was sad.

The story is well written and I flows easily with the wild west setting. Green eyed red made me smile. I'd love to hear more about her/his reputation and how it was formed. Robin hood of the wild west sounds exciting. I loved the flash back and forward chapter. The looks from our elder late comer were precious and written smoothly. It added a sweet tone to the entire chapter.

The dance was very exciting and loaded with action, that again, you presented flawlessly. I like your characterizations and the time you've taken to develop each. Keep up the great work. I look forward to reading more.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Tue May 24, 2005 1:12 pm

Great update, as usual. I particularly like the looming threats of Warren and Ethan Rayne closing in on the Maclay's as well as the law catching up with Willow. It makes for a complex situation, and it should come as no surprise that I am a sucker for complex situations. The dynamic between W/T feels innocent, yet sensual. At least, to me it does. Well done. Looking forward to more.

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby behindhereyes » Tue May 24, 2005 4:08 pm

All Hail Cameron Of The Gay :bow


Okay I'm all caught up now, as always this story is awesome ! Cam you have a real knack for this ( just between the two of us... you own western gear dont'cha) Seriously Cam... you rock dude !!!!!!!


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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby wimpy0729 » Wed May 25, 2005 10:08 am

Howdy Cam!

Well, I took your advice and loosened my boustiere, boob holder-upper thingy. Whew! Just in time too. I think the blood flow to my brain had been significantly diminished for way too long. I guess brain damage is the price I have to pay for being the smut bunny that I am.

So, you took a trip and your muse returned? Glad to hear it. I think my muse just took a trip and has no intention of returning.

Okay, Tara doesn't know about Will yet. I just know you're going to keep prolonging this realization. Can't give us bunnies satisfaction that easily, can ya?

The dance was incredibly sweet. I felt sorry for Will when she had to admit she couldn't dance, but then Tara took charge. I love when she does that. Everything was incredibly well written, as usual. Made me laugh at drunk Xander, continue to hate stinky old Warren, and of course smile and sigh over our girls.

Now they get to have a nice romantic ride home together. You know I can't wait for that, so make it soon, okay?

I'm gonna mosey on over to the saloon, sit for a spell and do my best to behave. I hope nobody notices just how loose I loosened my bunny suit, but hey, it may get me a free drink.
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More soon please!

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Artemis » Thu May 26, 2005 1:20 am

Ah, romance... :x Such a sweet, intimate moment between our girls in the dance, lovely writing :bow

Now I'm wondering about Tara's "So soft" comment - maybe, at that moment, it was just said in a spirit of awed I'm-touching-Willow-skin (even if she may think at this point it's Will, not Willow), but her subconscious has already seemed to be on the track of Will's secret, might that have given her a jolt? Will she realise?

Speaking of secrets, Xander's picked Willow's other one - but I'm not surprised he seems happy to keep this secret for her. He's met her, after all, and he's had plenty of experience with people in authority being less than they should be - I don't see him being convinced against his own judgement just because 'the authorities' say Will is a criminal. He'll trust what he sees with his own eyes (which apparently includes some dynamite - I hope that's put to good use before this story's over :D

Warren... damn, that boy needs a kicking. Was he hauling Faith around against her will at the end there? I'm having trouble imagining Faith taking that from anyone, married or not. That may not be anything like a happy marriage - which leads me to suspect that perhaps Faith might be only too happy to betray her 'comrades' and help the townsfolk be rid of the lot of them, given the chance.

Looking forward, as always, to more :clap
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby camlover » Thu May 26, 2005 10:59 am

More please! I love this story! Cam is the reason I visit pens. If I don't get more soon, I may have to punsish someone. :geek
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Trom DeGrey » Sun May 29, 2005 4:50 pm

Oh god, someone please just horsewhip Warren. What a putz. I laughed out loud when Tara nearly accidentaly felt Willow up. I could just see Willow blushing to the roots of her hair!:lol This was just a sweet couple of chapters. I loved Willow letting Tara lead to save her toes. I'm wondering how Tara is feeling about falling for "Will" though and it's killing me wondering how Tara is going to find out the truth. Can't wait for more!
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby FineyMcFine » Sat Jun 11, 2005 5:47 am

Just found this story and read it in about 4 days. SO GREAT. I love the pace and flow of the action, and the setting-up of conflict from the beginning. Finding out that Donnie and Tara might lose the saloon and the mayor and his cronies are all crooked, combined with them wanting to ship Tara off to the whorehouse, combined with Will being on the lam and needing to go but wanting desperately to stay - it just created the perfect stage for a really good story, which is exactly what we're getting.

And speaking of getting somewhere, I was glad to see the gals are finally...getting somewhere. I cannot WAIT to see what Tara's reaction is when she finds out Will is a girl. I'm sure she'll be thrilled. And I hope that she finds out before the end of the story - like not right away, not the very next thing (because it would be neat to read about them making out while Will is trying to stick to the male gender, and to hear what's going through Tara's head while that happens) - but sometime before the very last scene of the story so they have some time to relate to each other as women and to share a secret. Before all the shit hits the fan.

Can't wait for an update!!! More smoochies!
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feedback replies

Postby tarawhipped » Wed Jul 06, 2005 5:08 pm

Another trip to Michigan, another update! First for feedback replies...thanks to everyone reading, and for all the wonderful comments.[br]
GayNow: No worries on the missed feedback for the previous chapter, Car. Now that you’re my official beta for all my fics, though, it better not happen again. :glasses Thanks for the comments about the sweetness…I really like writing the romance of this story, but don’t want it to go overboard into syrupy. I’ve grown quite fond of Donnie, and really appreciate that everyone seems to approve of the liberal character change I made for this story. There will be more of his and Faith’s history in the next bit (not much, but they will both play a big part in the next couple of updates). Thanks, Car![br]
the hero factor: Xander will not knowingly rat Will out to the authorities…he knows what the score is in town, and who the REAL bad guys are. Glad you liked the dancing and almost-smoochies…more back story and romance coming up next. Thanks![br]
pipsberg: Pips! It kinda threw me to see you leave fb so fast, but I’m glad I snuck the last update into your brief free time.
I can’t wait for these two to connect…I love the build up, but bring…it...ON
Oh, right! It’s the mid- nineteenth century, dude!…like they’re just going to go for a buggy ride and get jiggy in a snowy cave??? Hmmm…*runs off to read The Rosenberg Institute again* :p …As for whether or not Tara suspects anything about young Mister Smith, I really don’t know (and I know that sounds like bs or a copout)…my feeling is that she’s at the point where she doesn’t care one way or the other…she just likes Will. Thanks butthead![br]
meretricious: I’m glad you liked all the sweetness…hopefully the ride home in the next update will please as well. Yeah, Xander was none too smooth, but if I counted up all the times I said or did something stupid while drunk, I wouldn’t have time to write this! All I can say about Warren is he’ll get what’s coming to him eventually. Ethan does have his own agenda, and will happily play the three major groups against one another as it suits him, but he’ll remain in the shadows for the moment. Thanks, Mary![br]
hermitfish: Thank you, Cyd! Glad you liked take-charge Tara with the dancing…I liked the idea that Tara would have to take the lead (literally in this case) in their relationship, since it goes against the established roles of men and women, which they are already subverting (knowingly in Willow’s case). Don’t be too worried about the warning…mostly it was just hype...though there is just the teeniest lil cliffhanger at the end of this next one. :smug [br]
VixenyTarasHot: I dunno, Ashleigh…I think getting close to the breast area is always a good thing. Sorry about another long delay, and I won’t make promises about the next one, but I’m glad you’re still reading and enjoying.[br]
watersong84: LOL. Being worried is probably wise, though most of the ride home will be a good thing…more time to talk and get closer. Hope you like it, and thanks.[br]
cooper: Thank you so much for your comments about Uber settings, cooper. I think it’s partially a safety net…if I don’t write in the canon universe I don’t have to worry about 100% accuracy (plus I’m afraid I’d pale in comparison to the many amazing canon/AU writers out there---JustSkipIt, Lisa of Nine, LipKandy and Sassette to name a few of my favorites off the top of my head). There will be some more of Willow and Tara’s backstories in the next update, and you’re description of Green Eyed Red as an activist is accurate in that it is the way Willow sees herself. Others might disagree.[br]
thebardgirl: Nice lil hissy fit you threw there, Liz. Heeheeheee. Even when you’re throwing a tantrum you’re adorable. And since I like to encourage bad behavior as much as possible, here’s an update for you. (and you thought the last one ended at a bad place? :devil ). Thanks![br]
watson: So watson, if Fic Writing 101 is 'tease tease tease', is 102 'fuck with their expectations'? :-D All the parties are starting to converge, which definitely ups the ante, and you're right that Tara's not doing anything lightly. Rest assured that there is a backup plan (which will no doubt go off without a hitch, right? hehe). Thanks, pal![br]
stillrunning: LOL. Glad you liked it, and more is on the way.[br]
cperrins78: I’m all blushy over your ‘favorite story’ remark even a month and a half later. It’s comments like yours that make writing such a rewarding experience, and I thank you.[br]
Reallybigpineapple: I will always have another update, just maybe not in a timely fashion. LMAO over the image of Faith taking target practice on a 'Warren-crow' (or would that be a 'Scare-Warren'?). The Mears family will appear next, as well as Willow and Tara's ride home. Hope you like it, ma'am! *tips hat*[br]
JustSkipIt: Thanks so much, Debra. I'm glad the setting is coming through, and hope it's not too cartoony/Hollywood stereotype.
At the end was Tara feeling Willow up?
I suppose it could be seen that way, though her hands never made it down that far. Willow's panic would probably cause more suspicion than anything Tara could have felt through all the layers, but Tara's still assuming Will is just a somewhat feminine boy.[br]
WickedReds: You're right about Ethan's suspicions, Reds, but for his purposes, it doesn't really matter if Will is Green Eyed Red or not. He's more interested in causing havoc, so as long as people suspect Will, he'll be happy. Glad you liked the almost smoochies, and I hope you enjoy the next part. Thanks, G![br]
Safuega: Thank you for reading, and for your remark about enjoying the dance scene. I really don’t know dance terminology, and was a little worried it’d get bogged down in a “left hand here…right foot forward”, and turn into a mess that would resemble a game of Twister more than a waltz, so your praise was much appreciated. Tara’s actions were bold, and had Will been an actual guy, he might have been shocked, but since he’s a she who can’t dance, it all worked out for the best.[br]
dorksrcool: LOL. I’m glad you pushed it back to page 1, too. There’s nothing like a little guilt to get me to work. Thanks for the feedback, and I hope you like the next part.[br]
terra21: Hi terra. I can't say anything about Tara's willingness or not to leave town with Will, cause I don't want to give anythig away before it happens. I do appreciate you calling the dance scene 'intense'---I was hoping it would come off that way. I owe another shout-out to I-94 for this next update...maybe I should go visit the in-laws more often. Hmmm...[br]
Urn of Osiris: No worries about late-itude, Urn...just glad you're here now. I'm glad you like the setting. Despite my cowboy alter-ego when I was 7, I'm not a big fan of Westerns. As a history major, though, I love the era, and especially the gender-bending possibilities. The response to this story has been a wonderful surprise, and even though I've been neglectful of it, I will continue to work on it. I plan on having several more of the 'flash forward' chapters...one will be coming up in another couple of updates, in fact. Thanks for your remarks about the characterizations, pacing and action...I really appreciate it.[br]
ringwaldoeuvre: Things are getting complicated! I see three distinct factions (W/T & Co., the Bad Guys, and the Cavalry), while Ethan is the unknown factor. The various groups are on a collision course, which will rapidly speed up up after the next chapter. I like your description of the W/T dynamic as "innocent, yet sensual." I don't like when period pieces portray characters, especially women, as assexual, but it's going to be a long time before anything above a PG rating happens. Thanks, Mary![br]
behindhereyes: LMAO r.e "Cameron of the Gay" (would that make Chicago or my parents "the Gay"???). I hate to disappoint you, dude, but I'm living Western wear free at the moment (though I had several cowboy outfits as a kid...maybe I never completely outgrew it). Thanks, Kim![br]
wimpy0729: Runaway muse, huh Pam? Well maybe if you spent more time in chat you'd find some inspiration (or are you being inspired, but lack the time to write, hmmm?). Good to know that everyone's hating Warren...it'll be that much more satisfying when he gets cut down to size. Take-charge Tara seems to make all the girls swoon...glad it's not just me. Sorry for another long spell since the last time, but I think it'll please. Thanks![br]
Artemis: In regards to Tara's 'so soft' comment, I think it was more of a "well, he's not all rough and scratchy...maybe I could deal with him being a him." When the truth is revealed, it WILL be a shock (pun intended, har har). You're right on the money with Xander...Will's been nothing but nice to him, and Xander knows the law in these here parts, so it's no surprise whose side he'll choose to be on if it comes to that. As for putting the dynamite to good use...well, foreshadowing with no payoff would be very bad of me, wouldn't it? :-D
Was Warren hauling Faith around against her will?
Yes, but at the time, he basically could. Even if he wasn't the Sheriff, as her husband he would expect her to do as he said, and for no one to stop him. Your suspicions r.e. Faith are very astute. Thanks, Chris![br]
camlover: For a second I thought I had my very own stalker, but then I read the sig line, which was a dead giveaway. Thanks for FINALLY stopping by, sweetie. I love you. :kiss [br]
Trom DeGrey: Thank you, Trom! Warren is indeed a putz, and will be dealt with in due time. Glad you liked the ride to and the dance. I hope the trip home is just as satisfying.[br]
SallyMcFine: Thank you so much for your kind words and for bumping this back up and making me think about it. I love getting feedback about the pacing, which will speed up very soon as all hell starts to break loose. Tara will discover Will's secret long before the story ends, but it's still a way off. Her reaction, will be mixed, though it's no surprise that they end up old ladies together. Sorry about the delay, but the wait is over! Update next...[br][br][br]
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The Legend of Green Eyed Red: Chapter 15

Postby tarawhipped » Wed Jul 06, 2005 5:17 pm

Title: The Legend of Green Eyed Red
Author: tarawhipped (Cameron)
Email: tarawhipped@hotmail.com
Rating: R (just to be safe)
Disclaimer: All characters are the property of Joss Whedon/Mutant Enemy
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Distribution: Take it, just tell me where to visit it!
Summary: A redheaded stranger rides into a town full of trouble and meets a blonde barmaid. Can they save each other and the town?
Setting: AU (the Old West)
Thanks to my beta, Carleen, for her support and her infectious enthusiasm.[br][br][br]
Chapter 15[br][br]
Faith silently fumed, the anger that had been bubbling up inside her over the course of the ride home nearing the boiling point. She felt an almost uncontrollable urge to strike out at someone, but swallowed it down, focusing all her thoughts on getting home to her father. He would fix this. He had always been there for her—guiding her, protecting her—and once he knew what kind of man his son-in-law was, he would take care of everything. She smiled as she imagined the scene, and laughed out loud when she sensed her husband’s eyes on her.[br]
“Something amusing, my dear?”[br]
Faith continued to look straight ahead at the approaching lights of Dusty Hollow.[br]
“I just can’t wait to see what Daddy does to you when I tell him how a lying, whoring bastard weaseled his way into our family under false pretenses.”[br]
The self-satisfied smirk melted off of Faith’s face as Warren erupted in laughter. She hated the sound of his voice, but the mocking cruelty of his words could never match that of his laughter.[br]
“Cackle all you like, Warren. As soon as I tell him what I heard tonight you’ll be lucky if you’re only turned out into the street.”[br]
“What makes you think he doesn’t know already?” Mears snapped. “Who do you think suggested it in the first place? You didn’t honestly think I wooed you out of love, did you? Daddy dear made it worth my while to enter this marriage, Faithy—and he knew exactly what he was getting.”[br]
“You’re lying,” Faith accused, the mere thought of her father knowingly passing her off to such a scoundrel inconceivable.[br]
Warren jerked the carriage to a halt in front of the Dusty Hollow Inn and turned to face his wife. “Ask him yourself,” he sneered, tossing the reins onto her lap and climbing down to the street. “I have business to attend to. I trust you can find your way home.”[br]
Faith glared at her husband’s back as he walked into the Inn without a look back. She gripped the reins tightly, her knuckles turning white while her fingernails dug painfully into her palms. She allowed herself one brief glance over her shoulder at Maclay’s Saloon, and set her dark eyes toward the Mayor’s mansion.[br][br][br][br]
“They’re in an awful big hurry,” Willow remarked, jutting her chin in the direction of the dust cloud rapidly disappearing ahead of them as the woods gave way to prairie.[br]
“Donnie always drives fast when he’s upset,” Tara replied quietly.[br]
Willow watched Tara’s expression out of the corner of her eye. Softly illuminated by the sliver of moonlight, the blonde appeared thoughtful and a little sad, but not worried. The redhead toyed with the reins a moment before clearing her throat.[br]
“Was it the Sheriff? I mean, I know I missed something back there, and I just thought—not that it’s any of my business, and feel free to tell me to shut my trap—I’m not usually this nosy, I was just curious, though curiosity killed the cat, maybe it’s best if you don’t tell me…not that I’m a cat—”[br]
Tara chuckled, soft and low, and Willow felt a blush creep up her neck in pursuit of the goose bumps that broke out at the melodic sound.[br]
“Sorry…I babble. I know it’s irritating,” she apologized, frowning as she remembered Donnie’s admonition earlier that day.[br]
“I find it rather endearing actually,” Tara admitted, grinning at Willow, who smiled brightly in return. “It wasn’t Warren so much as his wife. She—Faith—and Donnie…well, we all thought they’d get married one day, but then Warren showed up.” The blonde’s eyes darkened and she looked away.[br]
“What’d he do?” Willow prompted gently.[br]
“He lied and said Donnie had done something—he got some of the less scrupulous people in town to corroborate it. Faith believed it, and Donnie was too proud to go running after her. He tried to set her straight when she first took up with Warren, but she wouldn’t listen. I guess she’s been with him long enough now that when Larry shot his mouth off back there she realized it was true. Luckily Hank stepped in before a fight could start, though I’m not sure how wise a decision it was for his long-term well being.”[br]
“They’re good people,” Willow assessed, to which Tara nodded her agreement.[br]
“They haven’t been here long, but everyone likes them. Most families here got as far as Dusty Hollow on the way West and stopped, but they actually came here on purpose.” The blonde shook her head as if it was the most preposterous thing she’d ever heard.[br]
“How did your family arrive?” Willow asked, immediately regretting the question when she saw the pained expression on Tara’s face. “I’m sorry, I shouldn’t pry. You don’t need to tell me anyth—”[br]
“It’s alright, Will,” she answered softly. “My parents headed West during the Gold Rush. Donnie was only two and the time, and my mother—,” Tara broke off with a heavy sigh before continuing. “They thought they could make it to California in time, but there were so many delays…bad weather, the wagons needed constant repairs…they only made it as far as a little clearing in what would become Dusty Hollow before my mom went into labor.”[br]
“You?”[br]
“Mmhm. The trip had taken its toll on her, and with no doctor and only an apprentice midwife…well, there wasn’t anything they could do.”[br]
Willow reached over and took one of Tara’s gloved hands in her own. The blonde smiled and squeezed their clasped hands.[br]
“It’s okay…really. It was a long time ago. Dad took it hard of course, wouldn’t talk about her for a long time, but when we were older he’d tell us stories, make us feel like we knew her. Sometimes I wondered why he never remarried, but I think he just loved her too much to move on, almost as if he thought any new love would necessarily diminish the memory of the old. I think he was content with his life, though. Only once or twice did I catch him looking at her picture, looking almost…haunted. He went off to the War with her photograph pinned to the inside of his coat, and it was still there when he died. I like to think they’re together now,” she added quietly, looking up into the night sky as they passed over the stream.[br]
Willow opened her mouth to speak, but found that she had no words. Tara squeezed the redhead’s hand again, and Willow was struck by the fact that this woman who had experienced such loss felt the need to comfort her.[br]
“What about your family, Will?” the blonde asked brightly, clearly attempting to lighten the conversation. “Is there a girl waiting for you at the end of the trail?”[br]
The redhead dropped her eyes and shook her head. “Don’t really have no family, and I uh…never had a girl.”[br]
“You lost your parents too?”[br]
Willow nodded. “When I was four. They used to travel a lot, giving speeches at Abolitionist rallies. They were on a stump tour in Missouri…them and another feller were shot by pro-slavery advocates.”[br]
“I’m so sorry…that must have been terrible. Did you go live with relatives?”[br]
“Didn’t have any—my folks had only come over from Europe a few years before I was born. Whenever they were away I stayed with some friends of theirs, and I woulda kept on stayin’ there if I could’ve.”[br]
“I don’t understand…why couldn’t you?”[br]
Willow clenched her jaw as the familiar anger washed over her. “Cause they were Algonquin, and according to the State of New York, ‘no Injuns is fit to raise white children.’ I got sent to the orphanage and stayed there til I was old enough to run away,” Wilow dropped one rein and roughly swiped away the tears that trickled down her cheeks. Internally chastising herself for her display of weakness, she closed her eyes and took several deep breaths.[br]
“You’re shaking.”[br]
Willow looked up and blinked in confusion. She hadn’t noticed the blonde taking the reins and pulling the wagon to a stop, or scooting closer on the bench until she was so near Willow could feel the warmth radiating against her left side. She stared into Tara’s soulful eyes and felt her distress quickly giving way to deeper feelings.[br]
“I’m not—” Willow protested, but a shudder that had nothing to do with the chill breeze burst like a wave over her slight frame, and before she knew what was happening, Tara had leaned away and returned to wrap a heavy cotton blanket around the redhead’s back. The blonde held the folds of the material in place against Willow’s breastbone, her stilled fingertips reading the pounding beat of the redhead’s heart through the numerous layers.[br]
“Do you always take care of everyone?” Willow asked with a warm smile.[br]
“Habit, I guess,” Tara grinned. “Donnie and his friends need a lot of looking after, and they’re all sort of like my brothers.”[br]
“Brothers, huh? Not beaus?”[br]
“No,” Tara laughed heartily, rolling her eyes at the incredulous look on the redhead’s face. “I think they see me as m-more of a s-surrogate sister.”[br]
“That’s not how I think of you, Tara.” Willow replied seriously, the words tasting thick in her throat. She knew she shouldn’t have made the declaration, but felt entirely unable to resist the emotions welling up inside her.[br]
They sat half turned toward each other, knees brushing, Tara’s palms still resting flat against the blanket over Willow’s chest. A gentle breeze blew over the wheat fields, which waved in time with the chop of water from the brook. The chorus of crickets rose over the wind, the sound almost deafening to her ears as Willow raised trembling hands to Tara’s and guided them to her lips, softly kissing each gloved knuckle in turn before turning them gently and pressing her mouth against one, then the other palm.[br]
“Will!” the blonde exclaimed, her voice husky and breaking. The green eyes that opened to meet hers were wildly intense, while labored breathing caused the blanket to slip unnoticed from the redhead’s shoulders. The two gravitated toward each other, Tara looping her arms around Willow’s neck, her fingers burrowing in fine red locks. Willow eased her hands under Tara’s shawl and touched her silk covered waist, squeezing gently before wrapping her arms around the girl’s back and pulling her close.[br]
Willow’s brain was rapidly losing all sense of reality, sending her the most conflicting and delightful messages. She felt as though she was alternately flying and drowning, both numb and overwhelmingly alive with joy. She turned her head just enough to place a whisper soft kiss at Tara’s temple…her cheekbone…the hollow beneath. At the moment when she thought her heart would surely explode, she felt Tara turn her face a fraction, and their lips met.[br]
It was a chaste kiss, lasting barely the length of a heartbeat, but its import resonated through both girls like the echo of a canon blast. For Willow it was the confirmation of her heart’s desire—promises and better judgment be damned. For Tara it was the negation of a lifetime of deeply held belief, but she found that she did not care. Man or no, Will was the one who her body and soul cried out for—any lingering doubt swept away by one simple kiss.[br]
“Will—oh, Will!” she shivered, and was enveloped her in a strong embrace, soothing hands softly caressing her back. She lay her head on the redhead’s shoulder and sighed, wishing she could stay right there forever.[br]
A piercing shriek echoed over the fields, jolting the lovers, who loosened their hold to peer down the trail toward the town. A moment later the cry was followed by a woman’s voice wailing ‘Donnie!’ Willow grabbed the reins and with a nod passed them to Tara, who snapped them sharply and drove down the path at breakneck speed. Willow gripped the seat rail with one hand, holding on for dear life, which her other hand rested loosely at the small of Tara’s back, gently circling to calm the girl.[br]
The clap of the horse’s hooves sounded louder as they reached the hard packed earth of the main street, but Tara did not slow until she neared the saloon. Willow hopped off the cart before it came to a stop and sprinted ahead, while Tara sat white as a sheet and motionless, staring at the sight of Faith kneeling in the street, crying hysterically and leaning over the bruised, bloody form of Donnie Maclay.[br][br][br]
TBC[br][br]
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby watersong84 » Wed Jul 06, 2005 5:42 pm

Yay! Update! :applause I have been waiting for this for a while now... :-D

Oh man, that was an intense update. And I LOVED every second of it, except maybe the last 5 or so.

Tara sat white as a sheet and motionless, staring at the sight of Faith kneeling in the street, crying hysterically and leaning over the bruised, bloody form of Donnie Maclay.


:sob Oh no! Is he dead? Please don't let him be dead. Poor Tara, and Faith!

She turned her head just enough to place a whisper soft kiss at Tara’s temple…her cheekbone…the hollow beneath. At the moment when she thought her heart would surely explode, she felt Tara turn her face a fraction, and their lips met.


Yay! :wtkiss !!!!! Finally! :bounce But now I'm all nervous because I'm like, "when is Willow gonna tell Tara that she's NOT A MAN?" Now, in this case, I'm guessing that Tara won't mind, but she might be a little mad that Willow kept it a secret for so long.

Update SOON!

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby VMarie » Wed Jul 06, 2005 5:45 pm

Gah! Cam! You can't stop there...noooooo. What in the frilly heck happened to Donnie? One of the few stories where I like the guy and you have to end it with him bloody and bruised. *cries*

Despite the bit o' cliffhanger, wonderful update. Yay! Finally a kiss. Nice to see a little more of both Will and Tara's past revealed in the form of family history.

Now, when can one expect the answers to those burning questions...

1. How did Donnie get bruised and bloody?
2. Did Faith have something to do with it?
3. When will Tara realize Will is not just a small-framed man? LOL.
4. Will Tara and Green-Eyed Red ride off into the sunset together? (Ok, that's an obvious answer. :-D )

Looking forward to more, as always. :clap
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby cperrins78 » Wed Jul 06, 2005 6:37 pm

Yippie my favorite story has an update!!! I'm gald that comment can still make you :blush even after a month and a half.

Willow & Tara's kiss was perfect. You described the scene so well I could actually picture it in my head. I hope Donnie is ok, I actually like him for a change.

You better update soon. I dying to know what happens next.


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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby JustSkipIt » Wed Jul 06, 2005 7:10 pm

Cam,
Wow, what a powerfully written update. First off Tara's story of how her family arrived in Dusty Hollow is heartwrenching. How hard to be an orphan in those circumstances. Then Willow also an orphan (I feel a little like they should sing a song from Pirates of Penzance). She opened up so well for a man. :grin The kiss was absolutely lovely. I particularly love Tara's realization that Will's gender doesn't matter. Now I'm wondering if they ever have any peace when Willow will start to panic about Tara loving her as a man. That part is farcical. But Warren killing or maiming Donnie is not. Not good at all...

Well done.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby WickedReds » Wed Jul 06, 2005 7:51 pm

Mmmm... now how did that happen to Donnie??? I'm sure he didn't fall from his wagon... Oh and when did Tara kinda realize that dear old Will isn't a man??? huh! HUH! okay i'll back off now... Great smoochie Cam... :-D

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby the hero factor » Wed Jul 06, 2005 8:02 pm

Yay, an update.

“No,” Tara laughed heartily, rolling her eyes at the incredulous look on the redhead’s face. “I think they see me as m-more of a s-surrogate sister.”

“That’s not how I think of you, Tara.”


Gosh, I just love that part. So sweet. And the lovely kiss. I know I should be a bit worried about the fact that Tara doesn't yet know that Willow isn't a man, but right now I'm just all, "Woo hoo! They kissed!" I'll be worried about it later.

Right now I'm worried about Donnie. Please let him be okay.

I really love this story. Can't wait for more.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby thebardgirl » Wed Jul 06, 2005 8:36 pm

*walks in eyeing update*

"OOOOooooo..."

*grabs greedily at update, only to see Cam's warning*

"Aww....crackers....but...but update! It's an update..."

*wimpers*

Don't do it, Elizabeth.

"Wha...? Who the hell is that?"

God.

"Really?"

No.

"Oh. Well, who ar--"

An overworked freelance conscience.

"Ah."

I've been hired by your subconscious to warn you about the impending cliffhanger and the possibility of mental trauma from said cliffhanger.

*wimpers again*

"But...but...it's Cam! She...she wouldn't do that to me...not...not after all we've been through."

Uh, yea. Sure.

*Grabs at update*

"Warnings be damned! I can handle cliffhangers! I used to make them! And there's no way in Hell I'm missing out on this...I'm reading and I'm positive the ending won't be hard to swallow, or my name is Madame Maxime McGuillicutti III!"

*reads update*

*beat*


*elizabeth stares blankly up with puppy-dog-teary-eyes at sadness of ending*


It's been nice, Ms. McGuillicutti. But, I gotta run. Have another client to visit, some strange veternarian planning to take over the world by pugs or something....anyhoo, Toodles!

*elizabeth sits sadly*

Oh! I almost forgot, the service comes with a complimentary Tiny Violin. Good luck!

*Tiny Violin appears playing a depressed tune behind Elizabeth who indignantly gets up and walks off miffed at Cam's evil updateness*


and now, the REAL feedback

The kiss was a beautiful scene in of itself, and while I was a little confused about when the fight broke out and why, I was able to pick up on it alright through others words...you tricky indirect-writer-person!

Oh man, never before have I been so sad to see Faith and Donnie in a bad way. Cause...Well, let's face it, for the most part, they aren't portrayed wonderfully as sweet, kind, loving individuals. But but...aw, man, that was hard to swallow. EsPECially after that beautiful moment between our two heroines.....

ah! fabulous!

-elizabeth (who's still got the puppy-dog-you-just-shot-me-in-the-pinky-for-no-good-reason-look, but is willing to overlook painful endings with more updates...:grin)
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby hermitfish » Wed Jul 06, 2005 8:51 pm

Cam...just when I think you’ can’t outdo your brand of lecherous hilarity in Dopeygayland, you come back with a W/T scene so tender that I can practically see it being filmed with a soft white light background. Hmm...One of these days you’re gonna let me take a tour of that delightful, creative mind of yours, right?



Well, it was worth a shot.

BTW...

Don’t be too worried about the warning


So Donnie, actually likable Donnie, is just 'resting' in the dust...and it’s nothing to worry about. Okay...if you say so...for now. :P
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby dorksrcool » Thu Jul 07, 2005 1:04 am

:clap
Cam,
I have been anxiously awaiting an update to this wonderful fic. Thank you so much! Your writing is impeccable as always and I just love the Old West setting. I especially liked this....

It was a chaste kiss, lasting barely the length of a heartbeat, but its import resonated through both girls like the echo of a canon blast.


I think it's really hot that this fic is set in the 19th century so they have to be so careful with the physical affection. I also like the idea that a kiss that lasted "barely the length of a heartbeat" would have such a strong iimpact on both of them.

Once again, I love this story and can't wait for more. I was so excited when I saw that there was an update. Thanks again!
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby FineyMcFine » Thu Jul 07, 2005 5:21 am

Woo hoo, thanks so much for the update! So many unanswered questions coexisting with the advance of the plot. Brilliant!

What on earth could have happened to Donnie?

1. Warren beat him up

2. Faith accidentally ran him down with her wagon (more plausible if it were Buffy at the wheel, but anyway)

3. The mayor's cronies beat him up (this could go along with #1)

4. Xander and Anya beat him up (okay, this one is not likely)

I'm leaning towards suspecting it's #3 because when Warren left Faith in the wagon he cast a backward glance at Maclay's Saloon. Perhaps some nefarious plan was already in motion.

Such a totally sweet interaction between Will and Tara; what a nice first kiss. I was a little surprised to hear that for Tara it was the negation of a deeply held belief when they kissed. I know she's fooled by Will's dressing and presenting as a boy, but I can't help thinking that on some subconscious level she must have some inkling. Pheremones, or something. Oh well, I guess it can rock her world yet again when she discovers the hidden wonders under all those boy clothes, bindings, and packers. (Does Will wear a packer?) :)

PS - another trip to Michigan, another update? Do you write while driving? Mercy's sake.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby watty » Thu Jul 07, 2005 7:40 am

Right. I'm prescribing many many trips to Michigan -- I know it's the in-laws, and you might be hesitant about spending all that time with them. But for the sake of all us kittens, you have to ... you go to Michigan, we get an update, so how can you blame me for trying?

Lovely scene of them opening up to each other, even though the topics and their experiences were so very tragic and sad, it's best that they're able to tell someone they feel something for.

Even before the kiss, I loved how you painted the scene.
A gentle breeze blew over the wheat fields, which waved in time with the chop of water from the brook. The chorus of crickets rose over the wind

That was as beautiful as the kiss, which when it finally arrived, was one of the sweetest I've read for a long long time.

Ok, that was a BIG cliffhanger - what happened to Donnie and why was Faith there? Ok, you need to get into your car and drive around aimlessly, right now. I don't care where you drive to, as long as you find inspiration. Okay?
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Artemis » Thu Jul 07, 2005 8:30 am

Faith/Donnie - that's a new one :eyebrow But Donnie defies his usual role and is a decent guy (if a bit of a doofus), so that's okay. Or would be, had he not ended up in a bloody heap! I'm guessing that Sheriff Scumbag got a few of his lackeys to rough up Donnie, having had what passes for his pride tweaked by Faith's anger, and knowing that she had a soft spot for the big ol' dope. Lackeys, seeing as I'm having trouble picturing Warren taking on Donnie alone and not ending up folded in half and stuffed in the mailbox, badge or no.

Poor Faith, if what Warren said is true (and it seems that way) she's been sold out by her own father. I see grim vengeance-taking in her future - I hope, though, that she's got the presence of mind to keep cool and seek out allies (such as any convenient redheaded bandits and highly-pissed-off barmaids who might be nearby) rather than just tearing off to confront those responsible on her own, which could get her in deep trouble.

At least Willow and Tara got some nice alone-time to discover that W/T kisses are great (we all could have told them, naturally, but they've got to find things out in their own time :D ). It was sweet that Tara decided to accept her feelings for 'Will' rather than freak - but of course, in accepting originally that she's hot for the women, she's already had to decide being true to herself is more important than doing what's expected of her, even if in this case she's the one who had the expectations that're being up-ended. I wonder how she'll react when she finds out though - if she doesn't mention her 'usual' lesbian tendencies to Willow beforehand, poor Will may be all anxious that the truth will freak her out, when in fact she may just be pleased that she was right all along, even without knowing it.
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby camlover » Thu Jul 07, 2005 10:45 am

Wow, great work again my dear. Maybe I should kidnap you to michigan until the story is complete. ;-)

As for "FINALLY stopping by", you know damn well I've been stalking you since you started posting.

Keep up the good work, and I'll be sure to reward you. :kdevil
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby onlykaren » Thu Jul 07, 2005 3:10 pm

Hey, great update. I love your story :)
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby meretricious » Fri Jul 08, 2005 5:36 am

cam, maybe you could find a job transporting something to michigan, stock up on the flannel shirts and get that trucking liscense, and you'll be prolific writer girl!
so faith was headed to confront daddy and ended up back outside the saloon? guessing she got answers, and didn't like them. and finding donnie like she did, she's prob. pretty sure who roughed him up, i think things are going to hit the boiling pt. sooner rather than later.
poor willow, essentially raising herself, and this is prob. the most she's ever talked about it to anyone. tara's story is sad, too, but willow's really breaks my heart, esp. with her clipped speech patterns, i can really hear her. also gives red's reputation/activism some context, i think her parents would be very proud of her for keeping up the good fight.
and then there's the really good stuff- kissage! i love that you can bust out nc17 smut with the best of them when you want to, but then you can also make glove kissing and reaching under a shawl seem like the boldest thing ever. very nice cam! ~mary
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby ringwaldoeuvre » Sun Jul 10, 2005 6:41 am

Great update, Cam. Very fine balance of the tone between the sad revelations of their past, the tense romanticism of their kiss, and the suspenseful action at the end. It all flowed together very well, and left this reader eager for more. So get on that.

On a self-interested note, yay! They kissed! I liked the historical dimension of Willow's parents death and Tara's father's death. I am a sucker for history, and it is nice to have the story rooted in something beyond the standard Western setting. Well done.

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby GayNow » Wed Jul 13, 2005 9:21 pm

*mosies into the room and looks around*

[**hey! I can mosey if I want to!**]

*eyes the spitoon in the corner and wanders over, stopping about 10 feet away...squints one eye and takes aim*

**PING**

*gives a self satisfied smirk and mosies toward the center of the room*

[**eeewww people! Sunflower seeds! If it had been tobacee it would have made a "splat" sound, not a "ping"**]

*looks around at all the people in the room, demanding attention*

[**I'm tall...hard not to notice me in a crowd.**]

*gives a quick jerk of the head to get everyone on the dancefloor...looks over at the musicians and winks, silently telling the banjo player to pick away*

C'MON, Y'ALL! IT'S THE VIRGINIA REEL!!!

*claps hands and stomps foot in time to the rhythm*

[**and suddenly I'm hearing "come on shake your body, baby...do the Conga" and the mood is broken. sigh**]

*******************************************

Another great update, Cam. WHOO HOO for kissage!!!

As per the usual, you've continued to entice us with wonderful characterizations and captivating plotlines. [**how's that ego?**] Each cliffhanger brings something new to the story...and each cliffhanger remains unresolved. I can't wait to see what happens when you bring all of these cliffhangers together. [**would the cliff then become a precipice? cuz, ya know, fancier word and all...could encompass multiple cliffs, right? Okay, maybe not. Plus "precipicehanger"? Not a good descriptor.**]

So, eventually we'll see another update, right? Cuz...HELLO?!...wtf happened to Donnie?! And why is Faith crying over his body? [**And what is Faith wearing? Please say she forgot to wear her bloomers!**] I hope we get to learn more about the story behind Faith and Donnie. Cuz I think that's fascinating. [**Just put that in your outline if it wasn't there before, missy. :moo **]

Yay, Cam! Alrighty, let's get you on another trip to Michigan...we need updatey goodness. [**Of course, a challenge fic would be nice too. Or an update to IoD -- Riley dying a painful death by tumbleweed...oh yeah! Or perhaps we could do something about a certain musical. Hmmm....**]

Can't wait for more!

Carleen

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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby watty » Thu Jul 14, 2005 4:06 am

The Tall and therefore hard not to notice in a crowd GayNow wrote:What's up with the brackets and asterisks? [**Do I suddenly think I'm watson or something?**]

So now we not only share brains, we share punctuation? [**I'm scared for humankind.**]
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Re: The Legend of Green Eyed Red

Postby Graceland » Thu Jul 14, 2005 6:43 pm

The kiss was just lovely. I still love the way that Tara is allowing herself to be led into this relationship with a "man" even though she has never liked one before. Poor Donnie. Like Chris said: Faith/Donnie? That's a little strange but then that's why they call it AU I guess. Can't wait for more.
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