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The Dark Matter: New AU Fic

Postby bluemote » Mon Nov 01, 2004 6:22 am

Title: The Dark Matter

Author name: bluemote

Email Address: ezboard please :)

Rating: PG13 at the moment

Disclaimer: I acknowledge that ME and JW own the characters of Willow and Tara.

Feedback: Yes, yes, yes. Please and thank you very much.

Summary: Very AU (Alternate Universe) fiction. A (very tenuous) kind of follow up to a previous fic I wrote, Into the Stars, although it’s not at all necessary to read that first, and, er, it's not actually quite finished....



This one is set in a future kind of sci-fi world, but with magic, Willow and Tara have been separated by dramatic events and are finally to be reunited. Thoughts are in italics.



Hope you enjoy :)



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The Dark Matter: Part 1





The woman rages down the passageway, her cloak a dark rain cloud behind her. The corridors are narrow and book-lined, brief flashes of stone and wood the only hint of the rooms beyond. A straggle of low level clerks and scholars follow respectfully behind the slam of her boots.



The arched wooden door looms, brightly painted with the shield of Head Professor even in the gloom. The woman stands in front of the door for the briefest moment, enough for the curious followers to see her eclipse the elaborate carving and gilding with her anger. She enters. She does not knock.



The man looks up from his desk. He is younger than she had expected, his face bland and round, his eyes flat. The door echoes into the wall behind her and he is afraid. It is not who she wanted, but for now he will have to do.



‘Where is she?’



He gapes, begins to shake his head but is unable to ignore the ice of her voice. His eyes wander to the tall staff in her right hand, and he feels its silver wood twisting in his heart before he can answer. He blinks and it is gone but large in his mind and the woman is suddenly closer.



‘Tell me now or it will go very badly for you.’



Her voice is worse than the staff, heavy and sure with menace. He dares not look at her eyes, at the cold and ancient blue he glimpsed as she entered. He must answer, but his mind is wandering away from him towards a dull endless sea of terrified confusion.



‘Wh…Who?’ he manages to gasp, ‘My lady…you must…’



She spins her staff towards him terrible with anger, her cloak circling thunder around her bright hair. Her face is revealed, but he cannot look. Instead, he is falling into a horrifying cave that ends in the silver staff at his chest.



‘The girl.’



The staff stops its shaking and is lowered as the words emerge.



‘The girl that was found. The girl that is living here and working for you in this crumbling place.’ Each word is precisely spoken, sharp and brittle as glass.



His soft face pales in relief. He is scrambling up the cliff face of his fear.



‘Yes,’ he whispers, ‘Oh, yes, the girl we… She’s downstairs. Downstairs, just down the stairs in the stack rooms, maybe I could show…’



‘I wish to see the Head Professor. He will show me.’



‘I am the H…’



A laugh slices his protest to a stop. He cannot help but catch a flash of the cold blue in her eyes. Her voice lowers.



‘Little boy,’ her grin is hard metal. ‘I do not care to have my time wasted, as I am sure the Professor will appreciate. You will get the Head Professor and he will show me to her. I shall wait here.’



He hesitates, grasps the edge the desk with slippery fingers.



‘Now!’ The roar travels directly to his legs and he is running desperate to his escape. The door slams behind him.



The woman, the witch Tara, is left alone in the room. She does not notice the books or instruments, the great paintings proud on the walls. She paces, marking time with slams of her staff.



Suddenly, she freezes.



I can feel her. She’s here.



The anger leaves her eyes, replaced by something soft and sad.



Alive. Alive, she’s here and alive… I know she’s alive, she’s always been alive, but… I have to see her, I have to see her now…I…



The blonde woman has been waiting for almost three years.



I can wait for three more minutes. I can…



************



A smaller woman stamps a book. She puts the book on the trolley to her left, pulls the next book from the shelf in front of her. She opens it, re-inks her stamp, which is kept in a box to her right, and presses it down on the front page of the new book. She likes the smell. When she goes to Mrs Orsi’s in the evening she has to wash the ink off before she eats, but she tries to delay this as long as possible to preserve its dark sweet residue on her hands.



There are great ordered caverns of books all around her, and she works through them shelf by shelf. She makes piles, flips the books over a certain way so that she can lift them back in the right order into their dusty dulled lines. Sometimes she has to clean the books, sometimes she has to move them, but today she is just stamping them with another new stamp of the Department.



The stamp is hers, so is the ink and the scraper. She keeps them in a box with her mark on it in the Assistant Librarian’s office, and no one else is supposed to use them. She suspects that some of the others used to, because she keeps her stamp very clean and sharp, and they do not.



If the stamps on the books are smudged they get into trouble. If the ink spills, if the books are torn in any way. If they work too slowly, if they work too hastily without concentrating. The Under Assistant checks, then the Under Assistant takes them to the office and they have to bow and apologise and get shouted at by the Assistant Librarian. Lissen, this girl with the clean stamp, has never been shouted at for those things, but the Assistant keeps her box in his room to make sure that the others do not use her stamp, and to see that the level of ink in the bottle is not changing too quickly.



The Assistant Librarian, Dr Addith, is very concerned that Lissen may be using her ink to write with. It was Dr Addith that caught Lissen writing, but now he seems worried about the writing, rather than angry like he was when he found her at midday break gently drawing on some scrap paper. He pulled her roughly to his office and sent Selyth, the Under Assistant, to the Librarian. Selyth came running back, her hair flying around her face, and Dr Addith made Selyth stay and watch Lissen while he went to meet the Librarian. Selyth watched Lissen very carefully, watched her thin, small body and her blank and confused face. Selyth is a very conscientious Under Assistant, serious about her place and very pleased that Dr Addith had trusted her to watch the lost girl. That’s what the name Lissen means, lost. The mark on Lissen’s box, that means ‘belonging to Lissen’.



Selyth, the name, didn’t mean anything directly, it was an old-name, because Selyth came from a High family and her name came from her aunt. Still, Selyth also had a mark that meant ‘belonging to Selyth’ written on her locker, except she knew that it was writing, not just a mark. Lissen was not supposed to know that marks and writing could be the same; Lissen was not supposed to understand about writing and she was absolutely not supposed to be writing at all. Especially in a Department library where there were specific people to write about specific things, like the libraries themselves, which is what Selyth wanted to write about.



Waiting in Dr Addith’s room, Lissen had been sitting very still and pale and Selyth, curious, got a better look at the redness of her bobbed hair and the tangle of lines that grew up from her collar to her ear. Right on her skin it was, under the scars, like stamp ink that never washed off. At first, everybody had been scared of it, the writing on the lost girls’ skin. But then Dr Addith had explained it wasn’t really writing, or at least not writing that they could understand, so it didn’t really count. Some of the workers were still scared, and when Selyth had been out in the city with Lissen she saw that many people were frightened by the dark marks and Lissen’s bright hair, as well as the scars, but Selyth wasn’t anymore. Lissen was no harm to anyone, and although she looked strange, Selyth remembered her High birth and her devotion to understanding and made the effort not to be afraid of things she didn’t know, and not to act like a common worker.



Selyth’s Aunt had said those things at the dinner table the first time Selyth had been allowed home after Lissen had arrived, and the thin voice often echoed in her mind.



But still, Lissen didn’t get to leave the Libraries much anymore, for all the confusion and stories it caused.



********





Edited by: bluemote at: 11/1/04 9:01 am
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Re: The Dark Matter: New AU Fic

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Mon Nov 01, 2004 8:58 am

Hi ya Bluemote :wave Did I miss something?? Cause...I was waiting for an update of Into The Stars...waiting patiently in fact....But all of the sudden there's a sequel?? Did I miss the ending of into the stars? :yikes Also, Im really excited about this one it seems very interesting.





xoxo

Emms



In the future there will be a revolutionary technology that will enable us to turn into fishes at will.



--- Me

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Re: The Dark Matter: New AU Fic

Postby tarawhipped » Fri Nov 05, 2004 5:40 pm

One brief chapter and you have thoroughly hooked me! I haven't the slightest idea what's going on, but your brief character descriptions are intriguing, and the atmosphere you've created is intense. Is there a lot of fog? I sensed fog...and Metropolis-style architecture, but maybe it's just me. I hope you continue with this soon, and in the meantime, I'll just run off and read Into the Stars, 'k? *waves & runs off*



-Cameron



What should I be but just what I am? - Edna St.Vincent Millay

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Re: The Dark Matter: New AU Fic

Postby Grimlock72 » Mon Nov 08, 2004 12:03 pm

Errrmm.... this is severly confusing; if this is a sequel to the unfinished (and un-updated for months) story Into The Star... should I read this or wait for Into The Stars to finish ??



As for this chapter, using ink and stamps... doesn't sound very SciFi to me. Tara seems rather angry for some unknown reason. She's definitly not the friendly and shy witch here, refreshing change (since by her initial description anyone would probably guess it to be Willow).



Based on Lissen's in-depth thoughts about her stamp and who uses it, I would guess it's either Willow or someone much like her. But the talk about not-supposed-to-write and such points much more to a medival setting.... which is confusing.



Yeah this story has a pretty setup, I just wonder if it will be finished (and thus should I continue to read it). I have a hard time forgetting unusual setups you see, so I keep remembering stories, some of which remain unfinished unfortunatly :cry .



Grimmy

--
"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

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The Dark Matter: Part 2 (and some explanations)

Postby bluemote » Tue Nov 09, 2004 10:08 am

Hello all,



Very, very glad you have been reading. Also, very, very sorry I have been so confusing.



So, an explanation… Into the Stars is, as yet, unfinished, because of a terribly gruesome block on my part, as well as moving to London and starting a PhD… for the moment, I can’t seem to get it finished, and so I thought I’d put down some of the ideas I was having for later in the story. However, I don’t think you need to have read Into the Stars, and if anyone thinks it would be better just to cut the link, I’d be happy to :)



Also, I had kind of hoped that the part at which Into the Stars ends lends itself to beginning something new. Perhaps I could add a post to let people know… What do any of you think? Does that make any sense?



Hope that helps, and that you all enjoy part two…



As for feedback, thanks so much for taking the time.



Emms thanks again :) hope the note above helps to explain a little, and sorry about having to wait patiently. But I’m glad you’re enjoying, and hopefully you’ll like the next bit. Also, please tell me when we can turn into fishes – I’ve always fancied being a guppy or something for a while… Thanks :)



tarawhipped/Cameron hurrah, I’m glad you’re hooked, and thanks so much for the feedback – it’s lovely of you. And I’m glad you mentioned the fog – I like fog, which is just as well considering I’m from Scotland :) *waves back* thanks again!



Grimmy Hello again ;) sorry again about the confusion – I hope the note above helps, and sorry that things got complicated. Thanks very much for your feedback though, and I hope you enjoy this next part. As for the setting, well, you’ll just have to wait and see – i’m thinking that not everything sci-fi will be shiny and metal, but only because I like the smell of ink too :) Thanks again, and sorry about the confusion. Please let me know if you think a note on the end of Into the Stars might clear things up a bit….



And now, with many more thanks again… Part 2.



The Dark Matter: Part 2

Title: The Dark Matter

Author name: bluemote

Email Address: ezboard please

Rating: PG13 at the moment

Disclaimer: I acknowledge that ME and JW own the characters of Willow and Tara.

Feedback: Yes, yes, yes. Please and thank you very much.

Summary: Very AU (Alternate Universe) fiction. A (very tenuous) kind of follow up to a previous fic I wrote, Into the Stars, although it’s not at all necessary to read that first, and, er, it's not actually quite finished.... Please see the note above :)



This one is set in a future kind of sci-fi world, but with magic, Willow and Tara have been separated by dramatic events and are finally to be reunited. Thoughts are in italics.



*****************

The Dark Matter: Part 2





The Head Professor opened the door. He, of course, had known the witch Tara wanted to see him, hence the appointment of Thomas as his decoy to assess the situation. He was, however, not quite prepared for the anger that was silently poured upon him as he entered his own rooms. He reached out his hand to introduce himself, careful not to follow the movements of Tara’s staff least his fear show.



‘Good evening my lady. I am P…’



‘I know. And I know she is here – in the libraries I gather. I need you to take me there immediately to meet Dr Nant, who shall show me to her.’



Professor Plenyth believed himself to be shrinking; the loom of the dark red carpet moving closer and closer as he felt the witch’s demands in his spine. He broke his gaze with effort to look up into her eyes. Despite his own talents in magic, his definite seniority in the College and the city, the hundreds of people who worked for him, followed him, read his writings - despite this, he could only nod. Turning, he led them from the room.



‘As you wish, my lady’



Tara followed, feeling her heart scrape as she moved into the corridors and remembered.



***************



The last time they had been together. It was cold and dark and they were both exhausted but buoyant with happiness at their own room, their own small bed, being together. They were clean, if bandaged, and Tara could remember clearly the great leap in her chest as Willow had entered the room and closed the door behind her, finally finished with the meetings and the hospital and the talking. Finally finished with the fighting, or so they had thought. She had turned to Tara, sitting on the bed, and her smile had been so free and pure Tara thought she was floating with happiness.



Later, they had been pressed together in the narrow bunk like one person, crammed together all arms and legs and warm skin and smiles in the dark. Later still, after, Willow had put her hand on Tara’s heart, although there was hardly room between them, but Tara felt the fingers hot and sure and then Willow had kissed her hard one last time before they finally were able to sleep and dream as they hadn’t for months.





**********************************

Tara could still taste the kiss as she waited behind in the entrance to the main hall for Dr Nant, the Head Librarian. Suddenly, she was being stiffly bowed to by a tall woman with sharply bobbed dark hair.



‘I am Dr Nant. We corresponded earlier I believe’ The woman’s voice was strained, but Tara was relieved by the straightforward manner. She nodded a silent reply.



‘I am afraid I am not the most important person for you to speak to regarding Lissen, I am merely here in my capacity of Head of the Libraries in order to receive you in the most appropriate manner. The Under Assistant, Dr Addith, is, as I’m sure you are aware, the most closely involved member of staff in this matter, and, as such, I should imagine you would want to speak with him first.’



Tara nodded again.



‘He is waiting for you in his office, I shall lead you there if this is acceptable’.



‘It is’.



*********



Another book-lined, wooden panelled office awaited Tara, filled with the bulk of the Assistant Librarian, Dr Addith and the slight figure of his assistant Selyth. Addith looked at her openly as she arrived, showing none of the fear of his colleagues. Instead, he offered her a chair and tea, and sent Selyth to fetch cups and water while her anger dimmed a little at his open face and messy robes.



‘She is here,’ he spoke openly once they were alone. ‘I’m sorry it has taken so long for you to be informed - if I had known earlier, I would have told you immediately.’



Tara relaxed a little.



‘I know.’ Her voice was low and she paused for a long while until she heard the rattle of cups in the corridor announcing the return of Selyth. She turned directly to face Addith, and instead of the blue ice he had glimpsed earlier, he saw her eyes soft and deep.



‘Thank you.’



She took a cup from Selyth, waited through the ritual of sugar and milk and formal introductions. Willow was near, and she felt she could be patient now, wait a few more minutes. She had not counted on the sudden exhaustion extinguishing the rage that had driven her here, the simple tangible relief of a small warm room and the concern in Addith’s voice.



‘My lady’ Addith was trying to catch her attention. ‘I feel, well, I think it would be best if I could explain the situation with Lissen a little before you see her’. He spoke cautiously as Tara gave him her attention.



‘I’m aware that she is not entirely…’



‘Well yes. I mean, she is much better than when we found her, amazing change really, but I don’t think she does remember what happened, or where she has been…And she is not….’



The Assistant paused, sighing.



‘Lissen is obviously remarkably bright, but it seems here that her personality has been somewhat altered, or forgotten. As I said, she has progressed enormously, but remains rather, well, simple. Child-like perhaps. We don’t know why, but she seems happy, which is the important thing at the moment.’



‘Yes’.



‘Still, it’s best that she is not upset, or frightened, as I’m sure you can understand. I am not aware of the details of her, or your background here, but it is obvious that she is recovering from some, ah, difficult…’



‘Yes, I understand.’

Addith shifted in his chair, pushing back straggles of curls from his face.



‘I think its best then if Selyth takes you to see her, as Lissen sees her everyday. And if I arrive, she may think she has done something wrong. We had thought perhaps that you could be here on a visit as an Advisor - it’s quite common here for the workers to take classes on morals and ethics and so on with a more senior member of staff. It is apparent that you are not from the College, so perhaps you could represent as a travelling…ah…’



‘Witch’. Tara finished the sentence for Addith, smiling slightly at his care in wording.



‘Yes. No offence meant of course. But yes, I thought perhaps that would be a good way for you to speak with Lissen at first, meet her and so on. She lives with an older woman, Orsi, who houses workers and visitors from the library and she has agreed that you may visit Lissen there if you wish.’



Addith paused and nodded at his assistant. The slight girl came forward to be introduced.



‘Selyth Nant’, she whispered, bowing, and Tara could see the resemblance between the young woman and the Head Librarian.



Addith stood, ‘Yes, well… Selyth can take you directly to the stacks and introduce you to Lissen. Depending on how that works out, you can come back here and wait for her to finish her work, or leave with her and Orsi. You are most welcome to ask me, or Selyth here, and questions that we can answer, and please do let me know if you need anything.’ He paused as Tara stood and brushed off her cloak.



‘I hope it goes well, my lady. If there’s anything I can do…’



‘Thank you Addith.’ Tara offered her hand and the Assistant took it gently. ‘You have been very… helpful, and I shall not forget that.’



The blonde witch moved to the door, where Selyth was hovering in the corridor. ‘I should like to go now, if you will lead me.’



Selyth nodded mutely as Tara prepared herself for a meeting she could barely anticipate.



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Re: The Dark Matter: Part 2 (and some explanations)

Postby Grimlock72 » Tue Nov 09, 2004 3:49 pm

Hmm... this is remarkably similair to Into the Stars... Willow being somewhat childlike, for another reason though. The fun part should be (have been:-) to see how Willow progresses from there to her normal exuberant self.



I'm not sure to what note you're referring at the end of Into The Stars. As I'm not aware of said note it's hard to tell if it would help to make the transition to this story.



I'm still wondering why (a) Tara is so angry and at who, (b) how they became seperated. Likely it was a rather severe incident for Willow to have lost most of her memory like that. Tara visiting her might trigger those into an avalanche, not entirely risk-free that.



I still don't see the need for Tara to be so not-nice to people she meets. She could have just asked nicely and they would have led her to Lissen all the same, why the angry behaviour ? (bravoure perhaps, if so to what end??)



Yep, lots of questions left... so please pretty please tell me you will finish this one... pleeeeeeaaaaseee ??? :lol



Grimmy

--
"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

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Re: The Dark Matter: Part 2 (and some explanations)

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Wed Nov 10, 2004 10:31 am

I didn't think Tara was so mean...A little tense maybe but not mean. but I definitely do agree that she has pent up anger or maybe its residual frustration...she's most likely just worried about Willow though...Im very curious to know what happened between the kiss in Into The Stars and now that would harm Willow so much. In the last story she was just beginning to be the Willow we all know and love, overcoming her past and all.... But now...it seems as if might have regressed...I hope its a nice case of amnesia and nothing more...maybe Tara can jog her memory...possibly with more kisses....(I hope) And I second GrimlockPlease please please finish this one....I don't think my little heart could take another great story left unfinished. :D



oh and.... as for being a guppy....Im sure you wont have to wait long... in fact they're already working on turning male fish into female fish...it's very promising... I let you know when the technology hits. Until then...



update soon...today would be good...5 minutes, even better :D

In the future there will be a revolutionary technology that will enable us to turn into fishes at will.



--- Me

Edited by: MissKittys Ball O Yarn at: 11/10/04 9:35 am
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Re: The Dark Matter: Part 2 (and some explanations)

Postby Grimlock72 » Wed Nov 10, 2004 12:08 pm



Additional question; if this story is indeed a sort of sequel to "Into the Stars".. won't reading THIS story spoil "Into the Stars" for us ???



Any random space-accident could presumably have caused Willow to loose her memory like this. But if that were the cause this could have been a new chapter of "Into the Stars"... which it isn't...



I'll guess we'll have to wait and see for that one....ah well :)



Grimmy

--
"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

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Re: The Dark Matter: Part 2 (and some explanations)

Postby tarawhipped » Fri Nov 12, 2004 6:55 pm

First off, I don't think you need to cut the link to Into the Stars. I just finished it, and even though it definitely leaves a big hole of what happened between then and now, it still helps as far as creating a background to the characters, history, etc...



I also was reminded of the younger Willow, seemingly lost in some sort of amnesia. I guess it can't be expected that just seeing Tara will snap her out of it, but maybe her healing powers will come in handy. She seems to command alot of fear and respect, so I'm guessing she's an even bigger badass than before. Hope to see more of this soon!



-Cameron



What should I be but just what I am? - Edna St.Vincent Millay

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The Dark Matter: Part 3

Postby bluemote » Wed Nov 17, 2004 6:16 am

hello all,



Thanks so much for all your feedback, and i hope that things are clearing up a bit :) This next part is a bit short, but my superviors are insisting i do some work, and so i'm having to use my computer for actual academic stuff...*sigh*



GrimmyThanks again, as ever, for your insightful comments. Tara's anger kind of appeared for me as I was drafting the outline of the story, and i hope it works. This new part should give a little more insight into her actions, but I doubt she will stay angry for very long. Hope the confusion with Into the Stars is clearing up, and hope that you are still enjoying. Thanks again!



MissKitty's Ball O YarnThanks for your comments and your enthusiasm. I think i kind of like the idea of Tara being angry here, although its not entirely in what we've seen of her character from the show. Thanks also for the fish info, i'm intrigued. Hope you enjoy!



TarawhippedThanks also for your feedback, and I'm glad you found the break between this and into the stars not too confusing. also hoping that Tara as a badass works :shock Thanks so much, and hope you enjoy this part :)



**************

The Dark Matter: Part 3



Following Selyth into the underground halls where Willow was working, Tara felt hypnotised by the high towers of books, the dim light, the twisting passageways leading downwards. There was perhaps a misty organisation to the whole, but Tara was confused by the heavy weight of so many books as she moved into the piles and slanting shelves that quickly grew from the main corridors.



The last time they had been together, those few dark hours hot and good.

The time after, the panic and searching until heavy dread that came to be a terrible knowledge.



Tara could not think of that time, it had dissolved into the fire and metal of the ship they had been on. But every second of the long search afterwards, the steel and swords and the cold staff in her hand, were clear in their despair. The things Tara had done scraped like rusty metal in her memory and rang out to remind her every minute with a sound like thin bells.



She had found dark words and used them without a moment of doubt. When the words seeped from her lips and into her dreams she did not let them go. She might need them, and so she swallowed them until she could not forget, using them again and again until they were part of her and growing.



The places she had been, beyond desperate, without even the thinnest thread of grey hope inside, where she had entered and left without helping those trapped behind because the person she had wanted to save was not there.



How different this was, an old and shambling place where an intricate search had discovered a place for hiding amongst ancient words forbidden to most of the population. In a city faintly bustling with ordinary people and a few scholars that was ignored by the wars. In a stone building full of small fires and twisting rooms, Willow was.



Willow was around the corner stamping books in a great library, quietly and without official note apart from the flicker of interest that had surrounded her literacy.



The flicker had reached the highest level of the Department, and eventually the University. From there, it had slowly entered Tara’s nest of information and lay quiet until one day she had seen it, glinting by chance. She should have known earlier, no, they should have told her when they knew, and she was sure they had known early. Anyone would know, anyone with half a brain would know, the fools. And yet they kept her here, hidden in the dust instead of reaching to her, telling her, letting her….



Enough! Willow was around the corner. My Willow, my…



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Re: The Dark Matter: Part 3

Postby Grimlock72 » Wed Nov 17, 2004 11:31 am

Oww... seems this start a fair bit AFTER _Into the Stars_ and we'll see via flashback what happened. Hmm... I guess I will have to wait and see then :)



Tara as a bad-ass is very new. I wonder how long that will hold up once she has found Willow though. I suspect she's using 'must find Willow' as an excuse to some extent. Tara using dark magic (words) is fairly unheard of, should be interesting. I like the idea myself, Tara not so much as goody-do-good witch, for sure she ain't one here :lol .



This: "they were part of her and growing." is a bit worrying however, reads like those magics are sticking to Tara sort of. That can't be good.



This sounds mighty selfish;

Quote:
The places she had been, beyond desperate, without even the thinnest thread of grey hope inside, where she had entered and left without helping those trapped behind because the person she had wanted to save was not there.




Not sure if thats the intend, but it doesn't exactly make Tara likeable at the moment. Combined with her barely below the surface anger, makes for a Tara we don't know very well... yet. Maybe Willow can make her relax and soften some, or a lot.



The outside world is still a mystery to me. It all sounds more like the middle-ages (stone-agy), with only selected people allowed to read and such. Not a good place for Willow, since she is female AND smart. That combination was rather frowned upon back then :) .



Tara seems mighty upset she wasn't informed earlier about an unknown woman working in a library who could read. That would indicate such people are rare, which doesn't match with the starbase they were on in _Into The Stars_... confuuuuuusing... :) .



Tara will have to use tact and kindness to get through to Willow. Based on earlier chapter I believe those skills haven't been used for a while. Should be interesting to see how that works out.



Grimmy

--
"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

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Re: The Dark Matter: Part 3

Postby tarawhipped » Thu Nov 18, 2004 6:36 pm

Now that's just teasing, giving us such a short update and ending it right before they meet. Of course, now I can't wait for the next one, so maybe it's just genius on your part.



I really like your Tara--so different from canon, but her number one priority is still Willow, so she's not completely unrecognizable. The idea of her using dark magic is especially intriguing. It fits the character you've created, and makes her that much more intimidating. Like Grimmy, I'm also wondering what effect being around Willow again will have on her currently somewhat frightening persona.



As for the world, it reminds me of several post-nuclear apocalypse books I've read: Riddly Walker and A Canticle for Leibowitz. In the first, pretty much all writing, and even language to a great extent, have been wiped out. In the second, groups of monks have sprung up to collect and maintain what little remains of the written record. So it's kindof futuristic and stone-agy (cribbing Grimmy again:wink ) at the same time.



Keep it coming!

:peace -Cameron



What should I be but just what I am? - Edna St.Vincent Millay

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re: Dark Matter

Postby Twisted Minstrel » Tue Nov 30, 2004 2:47 am

*sneaks in to the thread*



If I may interject here a moment....the only thing I find remotely confusing about this story is the setting. While the continuation from the previous story is there, it is also somewhat different and therefore a tiny bit of exposition to set the scene as it were might be helpful.



On the other hand, I enjoy that you launch right into the story without giving us all the details. I like piecing things together and making up the background in my own head. I like the mix of medevial academia and the bleak dystopian future; something we don't see often enough in serious fantasy. As I know you are of an academic nature, I can only guess how much of that library is fact or fiction...:p



I look forward to further installments of your adventure... ;)







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re: characterizations

Postby Twisted Minstrel » Wed Dec 01, 2004 12:02 am

I want to add, as it comes up quite often in fan fiction - I enjoy when writers toy a bit with the 'canon' version characterizations of Willow and Tara. In the series, Tara was barely fleshed out and not given as much depth as she might have been. Willow, while permanently adorable (the best description I ever read of her character pointed out that she could eat a live baby and the audience would still find her loveable), also had her dark side. I love when writers take a chance and draw them a little further out.



Especially in this story, which requires a little more of the reader; science fiction is often neither here nor there, but a sort of everywhere that takes in all possible (and wildly improbable) times and places and insists you accept it, as is. I think there is a great deal more here to be discovered.



In a way, this story reminds me a bit of something Pullmanesque, a bit of His Dark Materials in the combining of the antique with the futuristic - and, of course, two people at odds with (if not in flight from) the dangerous world around them.



Now enough of my ramble - get to work and add another chapter!



:wink

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re: Updates

Postby Twisted Minstrel » Wed Dec 08, 2004 8:13 pm

Hello Kittens...just to let everyone know, our beloved author has been down with tonsilitis this past week and not feeling very well, so please send some good thoughts her way and we might see an update soon.



Peace!





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cheese

Postby MissKittys Ball O Yarn » Wed Dec 08, 2004 8:23 pm

Awww get better soon bluemote! Tonsilitis is Yucky and no fun! *waving my fingers in the air* Im sending healing vibes your way.



xoxo

Emms

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Re: cheese

Postby Grimlock72 » Thu Dec 09, 2004 2:32 pm

I'm not very good at sending waves (good ones anywayz:) ) but I'll think healing thoughts for you :) :fallen :fallen



Grimmy

--
"You hurt Tara," Willow said too calmly. "The last one who tried that was a god. I made her regret it." -- Unexpected Consequences by Lisa of Nine

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Re: cheese

Postby Artemis » Sat Dec 11, 2004 9:59 am

I just caught up from the beginning. Tonsillitis, that's no good - get well soon :pray



This is a wonderfully intriguing story so far. Though the factual links to Into The Stars are thin on the ground at the moment - nothing contradictory of course, but little detail - the feel and mood of the writing is just as deep and full of meaning and emotion as the earlier story that I can't help thinking of them as one.



Tara's certainly changed, but then we only have little clues as to what she's been through - I'm guessing that she's been changed by her experiences, but she's still Tara at heart. It seems like what she needs most is that child-like quality that Willow - memory or no - has always managed to hold onto. I'm really fascinated to see how things play out once they're reunited. Willow naturally will have to rediscover herself, but it seems to me that the same is true of Tara. It's like she's remoulded herself in order to carry on her search, suppressing parts of herself in the process. Now that she's found Willow it might be a difficult process to rediscover who she is when she's not driven by that single purpose.



I was delighted to read this far, and I hope you'll be updating soon. And hopefully, the block with Into The Stars might be lifted before too long? Whichever it is, I'll be looking forward to it.



Is it okay if I add this story to Through the Looking-glass, alongside Into The Stars?

Chris Cook

Through the Looking-glass

A Willow and Tara for every world.

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