Hi everyone! Here are the replies to feedback left on the previous chapter.
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beanie
haha. what a coinky-dink. I just starting reading this story on the through the looking glass archive and spent the ENTIRE night (not really, but let's pretend) wondering when the story would be updated. Then BAM, I log in, and it's a miraculous thing really.
I love when things like that happen!
All the complimentary things I had going in my mind while I was reading your story were basically said by all those preceding me. But, what's the harm in reiterating praise?
None. No harm at all.
I thought these sentences were a brilliant way to start off the chapter. I don't know if it was deliberate on your part (though I'll hazard a guess and say it was) the candle symbolism was a nice touch. You managed to pretty much sum up an entire chapter with the image of a candle.
I can say without a doubt that it was indeed deliberate. I love symbolism and I use it a lot, such as the trees; the represent the possibility for stability and growth while in opposition, the Shintys temporary dirt "houses" represent their inability to take hold of that stability to use it for the good of their people.
The description of the sleep shirt was also eye-catching. The relationship comment . . . duude. Then the progression of this moment where first Tara's mind flits to the boundaries of her Shinty life, and then she is comforted by the deep breathing of Willow's sleeping form. It was just all so . . . so . . . MAGICAL!
Thank you
btw, if you didn't get it from this entirely too lengthy post, YOU ROCK MY PURPLE SOCKS. Full stop dude.
And thank you again
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TeddyHaving experienced the unease of being in an unfamiliar culture, I can say you captured it very well in this chapter. One is never quite sure what will or will not offend. The general awkwardness in actions and the hesitancy were well written.
Thank you. I've never been in an unfamiliar culture myself, but I tried to put myself into that situation mentally. It's good to know I came up with something that sounded and felt right.
Also, I must say I'm very impressed with Cave clan explanation for Tara's stutter. It was very unique and creative. Again, your eye for small details makes this story memorable to me.
Awwe, thanks again sweetie. I knew that I wanted Tara to stutter (cause it's just so
her personality) but I also knew that since she didn't have an abusive family I would have to come up with a new explaination. The Cave Clan explaination just seemed natural so I went with that.
In this chapter, the sense of longing that Tara has in wanting to connect to the world outside of her culture really struck me.
I'm gald.....because I feel a journey approaching. I'm thinking something long and on foot...and just right for working out any conflict that might arise between them (have I said too much?)

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CrazyTaraWitchI loved the last two updates Emms, they were fabulous
i really enjoyed Tara's thoughts in this last chapter
keep up the good work!
Thanks sweetie, I'm glad you're still liking the story.
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AnnaI like when they were apart, each one thought of the other and now that they're together neither can think what to say. Kind of funny how that works.
yep...very funny.
Once again your descriptions are so colorful, I can totally see Willow debationing about the dirty trousers.
Thank you. Descriptions are my life!
And it's interesting how Tara has dreamt about "breaking free" and moving away from her people. I guess with her mom being ill she can't very well leave right now.
You are definitly right about that. Besides I don't think Tara is the type of person to leave when she knows that there will be people depending on her in the near future. She knows she can't leave...but that doesn't stop her from fantasising about it. (I think we've all done a little of that at some point in our lives)
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tarawhippedHi Emmy! I've been meaning to stop by for the last oh 8 or so chapters and tell you how much I'm enjoying this, but just now managed to get caught up on updates.
Hi Cam!

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I love the world you've created....you manage to do so much with just a few words and phrases to make it seem completely different and real. As usual, your writing is visually stunning without skimping on the character developement and dialogue.
Thank you.
I get the impression that Tara's people couldn't have been the ones to cause Willow's parents' deaths, but then who did?
Sorry....that information is top secret!
I love the pacing of W/T's relationship to each other...very very slow, though Willow's clearly allowing herself to trust Tara somewhat. I hope it doesn't all go to hell when Tara finds out Willow really IS a spy and Anya is proven right. Of course, that way lies angst, which is always fun to read (when it's not painfully heartbreaking, and then it's even better!).
Isn't Anya being right a sign of the Appocalypse?
Part of me hopes that Willow renounces her vengeance and decides to shack up for life with her new pal, but I have a feeling her absence is not going to go unnoticed for long by Buffy et al. Oh, the impending drama!!! Love it!
I think you are absolutely right!....
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ArtemisSuch a lovely, low-key chapter - there was so much going on, but all in silence and thought. And in the end it all came down to a touch - I liked that. Tara memorising Willow's skin
*dreamy sigh* Doesn't it always come down to a touch?
You describe the Shinty Folk in a very interesting way, making them very attractive in some ways - having a very relaxed approach to personal space and interactions (yay for not being repressed )
I couldn't agree more. In fact, I wish our society could be more relaxed and trusting when it comes to personal space and interactions.
yet there's the spectre of Tara's unhappiness in the role that's been set for her among her people. It seems pretty evident that, whatever trials and tribulations happen along the way, Willow is going to have to give up the way of life she follows now if she wants to be with Tara - now I'm wondering if the reverse is also true.
I think you are right on both accounts. Each of them is going to have to give up something if they want to be together. Tara loves her people, but she craves stability (which all the running away and moving that they do doesn't provide her) On the other hand Willow's people are extreemely stable, but they lack that intamacy between them that Tara's people have with eachother. I think as time goes by, Willow, on the other hand is going to find out that she really does need the kind of intamacy in her llife that the Shinty have and that she could possibly do with a little less order in her life. I guess they'll just have to meet in the middle.

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Safuega I am thoroughly enjoying this new world you have created for Willow and Tara. I particularly like the contrast between your Willow and Tara. For instance, your Tara is eager to expand her horizons, while your Willow is determined not to expand hers. It makes for great angsty conflict. Yay!
yes but, they both have a little bit of what the other needs, and that tends to soften the angst a little.
Also, I don't really see Tara's people as the brutal enemies Willow holds them to be, but memory is a fickle thing, and the memory of a traumatized child even more so. I suspect that Willow is in for a world of hurt if and when she realizes that her whole existence has been based on a faulty assumption/belief.
I think you are absolutely right. And who will be there to help her through that trying time? hehe *wink wink*
Thank you so much for leaving feedback sweetie!
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HensterCould you maybe let them kiss? A sneaky kiss .... maybe one of them wakes up and gives the other a little kiss on the cheek or shoulder....ok i know it isn't the time for that yet... how about a hug there is no harm in that right??
you must be patient henny! hehe I promise I will get to the kissing....but just not anytime soon. (okay...maybe soon, but you will not know when it is going to happen

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So what will happen next Em.... do tell....I'm impatient...I can't help it.
Okay...hold on, I'll tell everything! No....what am I doing?? I can't tell!!

You'll just have to wait and see.
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IreneHola mi vida…como estas? I’m so sorry about the late feedback…computer problems…I’ve admitted it to the County General Computer Hospital. I’m sure my baby will be up and running in no time. Meanwhile my beautiful, lovely, and generous sister has allowed me the use of her little Dell…for a small fee of course…so here I am, better late than never I suppose.
Thank god for sisters huh??

Computer problems suck...you think if you take care of them...feed them....love them...give the a name...they'll run forever. But they never do. *sigh*
Oh Emms this explanation to Tara’s stutter is so lovely. We are so programmed to equating Tara’s stutter with her shyness-nervousness. So much to say, but the inability to find the correct way to express her self whether by trying to find the right words or phrasing those words together without getting “word salad”. Simply delightful. Then again…the spiritual man didn’t or couldn’t have known that Tara might also stutter when she’s in the presence of true love…hmmm?
Thank you sweetie. I think the spiritual man might known something...
And I for one would NOT…I repeat NOT…want to know of any cultures that sleep with shoes on…not that I’m prejudiced, it’s just that sleeping in dirt is not of the good.
I completely agree.
Okay…from now on…me…who is Irene…will be saying “On the morrow” all the time. I love it!!! I’m adding this phrase to my quote book…Oh, but I should ask first. Emms? May I add this phrase to my quote book? Pretty please, with sugar dumplings and cupcakes on top?
Well....as long as there are suger dumplings and cupcakes on top....Okay.

Please...say it as much as you want. But I don't think I can take credit for making it up. I'm not sure, but I must have heard it somewhere before, at some random point in my life.
Askew is an understatement…don’t you think? More like…upside down, in and out, and round and round. You know…I can see that Tara wants to remain loyal and dutiful to her people…but in the end, homegirl is just gonna have to decided what will make her happy in life (coughwillowcough). And sometimes that means upsetting others, mostly family.
I agree. But Tara's reason for staying goes beyond duty...she really loves her people, and it makes a difference that she hasn't experienced abuse from them. She wants to be with the Shinty, but at the same time she wants to see what the rest of the world has to offer.
In no way would Tara intentionally hurt her people, but she can’t spend the rest of her life trying to please others, while making herself miserable…what kind of life is that? I’m sure the Shinty could find a suitable replacement for her if she decides to leave…couldn’t they?
I don't know....something tells me the Shinty are pretty set in their ways when it comes to traditional matters. I think it would be a real mind bender for them to even consider selecting someone else to be their leader........someone who is terribly unhappy in their current postition *cough cough Buffy cough* shows up and demonstrates that they have what it takes to be the shinty leader...... there are definite possibilities in that area.
The most intimate thing between one human being and another is “touch”. It can sooth, it can convey feelings and thoughts without saying a word, it can heal, and it can relieve stress. It’s obvious that Tara’s contact with Willow’s arm was having some kind of affect on herself. Why did she want to memorize the feel of Willow’s skin? Only you Emms would be able to answer that for us.
I like to think I'm an expert of the art of baby massage, having raised up eight or so babies into kindergarden-hood, and I can definitly say that the need for healthy touching is something that is naturally present in newborns. And the fact that your son still remembers (even if he doesn't remember the exact happening) to this day, only goes to show how deeply rooted that bond with you is. One of my babies (she's five now) when she was a baby, every day before naptime I would rub her back and she would fall asleep. And to this day, she won't go to sleep at night unless one of her parents come in and rub her back before bed.
now...to keep things on topic. I can say, that I think Tara has that same need, but she knows that not everyone feels the same way. Also, she's a little hindered by her feelings for Willow, so that makes coming right out and being overly touchy-feely more difficult.
Thank you so much for the wonderful feedback sweetie, and I hope your computer feels better soon.
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Cyd!I love this story. It is engrossing. It is vivid. It is unique.
The beginnings of their relationship are written so...um delicately magical I guess. I'm not exactly sure how to describe it. The depth of detail you put into nonverbal actions is wonderful.
Like so many others I eagerly await the ensuing conflict that you have already suggested but at the same time I just want to see them flow gently closer without it. Thanks so much for this.
Thank you so much.
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xoxo
Emms