Fic: You say the most beautiful things

[umadamber]

They are so cute with the blushing and Tara looking after Willow aww!!



I'm going to bed now to hopefully have lovely W/T filled dreams like this

Willow: Oh, um. Various sounds of hesitation.
Tara: She was just a friend.
Willow: Friends are nice.

[tommo]

I love the ideas you're presenting in this fic. It's all so innocent and yet so mature at the same time. That's a good contrast you're building there.



You might want to look at your paragraphing a bit; it's easier for the reader when the narrative isn't in huge chunks like that, especially if there's speech. It places an emphasis on the dialogue that I think is really important in this fic. Also, Tara's stutter is easier to read if you separate the letters or sounds that she stutters over. I generally try to look at fic from a reader's point of view, to cover the technical aspects. If you haven't done so yet, you might want to grab yourself a beta reader from the list, to ensure that there's someone you can discuss this kind of stuff with. I find them invaluable, even if it's just characterisation and plot that you're talking about.



This is a lovely story; it has a really romantic and ethereal air to it and you're adding to that atmosphere with every post. Lovely. Thanks.

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Darlin' theres no way out, nothing can help me now. Love's got a hold on my heart...

[snuggle79]

Wow, now that was a way to get together!

Really sweet! I'm all with the Awwwww

Awesome Update!

Tara:"Maybe we dreamed it."

Willow:"Right. Right. Wrong! (points at her head ) Different Brains." Tara:"Oh yeah."


Bitch! Witch! Ho!..mo!"

[LeatherQueen]

This is a lovely story. Their so tentative around each other but you can feel the passion in the air around them. Wonderful!

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"But when they're playing your song on the jukebox in Hell, you might as well dance." - K. Simpson


"Futile... like a FOX, baby!" - Tara in The Late Shift by wiccachica

[foreverpiper]

This is great, and sweet, and all other good things!

It's better to be pissed off than to be pissed on. - My mantra on a bad day.


And never let it be said that I left a Tara craving unsatisfied. - Willow in Wilderness

[The Rose24]

I just found this fic, and I must say, good job! It is unfortunate W/T meet under such frightening circumstances. I can't wait to see where you take our girls next.

Tara: My heart doesn't stutter.

Tara: Willow, I got so lost.
Willow: I found you. I will always find you.

Willow: Hi, um Tara. I was wondering maybe you want to go out some time for coffee? food? Kisses and gay love?

[hush30]

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She could feel Tara’s warm breath on her cheeks, their bodies separated by a few inches of air and goose bumps were emerging all over her skin. This was the best night of her life.

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You really do say the most beautiful things.

I also love how in part two they both shared the same dream. A very interesting concept and it really fits well with the strong connection that W/T have.

I am really enjoying this fic.

"I think this line is mostly filler" - Willow in OMWF

[spazz07]

Glad they finally got to meet each other and Tara being so tender and caring to a hurt Willow was cute. I loved it and can't wait to see their reletionship progress



Cheers

Nath

Isn't it funny how you feel your most tired five minutes before you have to get up.

[mollyig]

Tara didn't use magic to help herself when she initially came face to face with the demon, but when it hurt Willow she did.



They each seem to have such reverence for the other, and that's just lovely.

Adding up the total of a love that's true, multiply life by the power of two
Indigo Girls

[the vamp nurd]

be still my non beating heart [metpour]

Superstar with a twist?

[Bicola]

MissQuirky: It is definately the best night of Tara's life too, except for the whole being chased by a demon thing but that balanced out by the whole meeting Willow situation which i think is high on the "Best nights in my life" list. Thanks again for you great feedback.



umadamber: Thanks. After that post i also went because it was a terrible battle with my computer. It me so i attacked it with a chainsaw so obviously i won!Ha!(Stupid computer) So i've gone back to using a quill and ink because we still refuse to speck to each other.



tommo: Thanks Your comments (both constructive critism and um...not) mean a lot to me because i really enjoy your fics I did think the paragraphs were a bit too lengthy and my spell check went insane when i was writing Tara's stutter, unsuccessfully i might add. Anyway I will go and find me a beta reader, preferably a beautiful and wise woman with a dictionary and perhaps a whip.



Snuggle79: Thank you.



LeatherQueen: Gee thanks



Foreverpiper: Good things as in boobies and frapacino(i can't spell that word) and, and oh! Foreign television adverts!? (eg Japanese) I don't think that my fic would be as good as boobies and if it was, i'd be worried. Thanks



The Rose24: Frightening circumstances were needed to ensure doctor patient situations and very clear memories Thanks for reading!



Hush30: Your making me blush . Ands that something coming from a girl who said "How would you feel with a knob between your legs" in front of a girl she secretly likes and not realising her bold statement before it was too late to lie out of the situation. Long story, painful cringe moments. Thank you so much



spazz 07: I can't wait either! i really need to get myself a beta reader.



mollyig: Thank you. How i wish i was recently gay.



the vamp nurd: thats really weird, i was watching superstar before i wrote it (i was doing some character and body language research, im such an intellect). I had no good ideas for how i was going to get them to meet and it just evovled after i wrote the first few lines. I must have subconciously thought of superstar. Anyway, i talk to much, thanks for the stilling of your non beating heart.



Part 4 will be up, maybe today pending the whole computer arguement situation. thanks again

Don't look at me, I have nothing funny to say

[tommo]

Well I hope I wasn't too harsh; it's just that often a beta reader can make all the difference, if they're good enough.

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Anyway I will go and find me a beta reader, preferably a beautiful and wise woman with a dictionary and perhaps a whip.

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Right. And when you do find this woman, could you send her over my way perhaps? Thanks.

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Darlin' theres no way out, nothing can help me now. Love's got a hold on my heart...

[Bicola]

No you weren't harsh, helpful but not harsh. It's good that people tell me what i need improving so that i can get better. Have emailed the wonderful Darkwiccan about the beta offer and hopefully she will reply soon. I will ask her if she owns a whip.



Yes i will send Oxford, mistress of pain and correct spelling (so i will name her) to you as soon as i've finished. Mind you she might be a bit non verbal and tired but those are great qualities.



I like your new sig, it wouldn't happen to be from a Steps song now would it?

Don't look at me, I have nothing funny to say

[ally02]

You left it there!! *shakes Bicola by the shoulders* What are you trying to do to me?? Wooo okay I'm calm. Loved the update! It was like the Hush and Tabula Rasa all mixed into one. With the crashing into each other thing I mean, not the going back to her room and getting cleaned up thing, cos unfortunately, that never happened. Well more soon please



Aly xxxx



"I'm calling out....wont somebody out there hear my s.o.s...throw me a lifeline pleaaaasse...and save me!!"

Okay you can all blame Tommo for that!!

You all didnt happen to do a bunch of drugs did ya?

[Ginner WTluv]

Awww.... i'm totally loving this fic Bicola!! And i agree with ally (who needs to update her fic before i rip all my hair out ). It was like Hush and Tabular Rasa all rolled into one. Please update soon. Pretty please? With sugar on top? *cheers* S-T-O-R-Y, story time! Story time!



~ Jen

[xita]

I enjoyed the shared dream that so motivated them and excited them, it makes the gentle erotic cleaning up in Tara's dorm room so much more intense. It's making for a real intimate falling in love fic



A beta reader will really help with those organization issues that will make for easier reading, though Ruth is much more wise with this kind of thing though, so I'll just say thanks and look forward to the update!

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Childie -"Not all girls are raving bloody lesbians, you know!"

George - "That's a misfortune of which I am perfectly well aware."

The Killing of Sister George

[Bicola]

Sorry no update at the moment but there will be soon hopefully. I writing part 4 at the moment and after its been looked over by someone much wiser and more intelligent than me (eg my beta) i will post it.



ally02: How i love to tease *sigh* Ah Steps. The best of British pop music, after S Club Juniors of course. It's refreshing to see 8 under 14's talking about falling in love. "Tragedy! When the feelings gone and you can't go on it's tragedy!"



Ginner Wtluv: Aly writes fanfic? Yay! I will go and search...oh and before i go: thank you



xita: Gee thanks . I agree, Ruth is the Big Knowledge Woman and definately wears the smarty pants when it comes to writing which is great. . I love your sig, so true. How i wish there were no such things as hetrosexuals, it would make things a lot easier i can tell you



I will now go write and play my new bongos and teach my friend to play acoustic guitar all at the same time.

Don't look at me, I have nothing funny to say

[the vamp nurd]

Superstar was a cool ep tho'.



"My heart doesn't not beat, but I feel warm. You wouldn't know that. You're dead." Christina [see Red Wolf White Wolf].



"You're only dead cause you want to be." Vamp Willow.



"I'm more alive that you'll be."

[Bicola]

Hi, sorry STILL no update, but I'm working on it Part 4 should be done soon if i can find my way out from under this pile of coursework.



Thanks again



Bicola

Don't look at me, I have nothing funny to say

[Bicola]

Just posting to say i will have chapter 4 up this weekend!*fingers crossed*



I apologise for not updating for weeks but im incredibly lazy and mean and i had writers block but now im back baby!



(you realise this is a shameless way to bump my fic up from page 6 to 1 cos y'know you haven't posted when your fic is on page 6. But i am gonna post don't worry, and Xita don't beat me for bumping!)