Alright let's do some replies to feed back shall we? (and then shall we dance?)
mollyig - Yep. Very rarely do i actually title my poems. makes me feel like i'm labeling them and i know i don't care for labels, so why would my poetry?
Re:Poem #1-- Conviction was really something i was shooting for on this. Glad you liked my use of unyielding. I find it to be an incredibly powerful word when used in the right context.
Re: Poem #2-- Again, you nailed what i had hoped to convey.
time together isn't always seen as an intimate thing, but i find that even the simplest moment can be the most intimate when they are with the right person. the line that you liked, i actually thought about getting rid of, i didn't know if it worked there. glad to see that it apparently did.
Thank you for the feedback. coming from you it is truly appreciated.
Tara22- My dear, i consider any compliment from a such a wonderful poet(ie:YOU!) to be high praise indeed. in fact after i do the feedback here, i intend to swing into your thread and get me some of your lovely writing. yum. glad to hear that you were perhaps inspired here. that is by far, the greatest praise i could recieve. as for the poem, yep, i like to transfer emotion that can't always spoken into the written word. presents a fun challenge at times.
Tulipp - Nice catch! the short lines were meant to be read exactly as that, short breaths. and that is one of my favorite bits there as well. as for reading more poetry on the board? READ IT!!! many of the lovely ladies posting feedback in this thread are phenomenal poets themselves. read their work. mine is quite humble in comparison. always water the poets on the pens, we are a bit of a dying breed. Glad you liked this.
oh, btw, your writing is astounding as well, you really have quite a handle on our girls.
TheWhiz - Oh, I am so glad you liked this! I tend to have a hard time getting imagery right, so it's nice to hear that i found some.
I am thrilled that you have located some inspiration for yourself. If you ever run out, my muse is always available to you.
Laura - Yep, thought i was never gonna get sleep. but thankfully i did get the little nap in before running off with the wiccan. oh my dear, i am in no way amazing. i'm just me. it is you who inspires me to write remember?
Um... please don't spank me!
i can be a good dog! I'm writing as we speak. (poetry AND replies. Oy!) and remmeber, this is a poetry thread, it is much more realistic and, romantic. ok.
Aimee - Thank you darlin'. I'm glad you liked. I'm workin' on something new. Here's hoping you like it just as much. Take care and don't take any shit ok?
pacou - Thanks!
Glad you noticed the pattern in the 2nd one. I worked a loooong time on it. I think it's the only poem i've ever written that was a 5-6 page project.
ninjitsugrrl - Thank you! Again I must say that coming from such a wonderful poet, that is truly high praise. wow, such awesome writers are leaving me feedback.
Thanks, again.
Whew! that was much work, but i figure if people take the time to leave me feedback, i should at least give you well thought out responses, yes?
I am currently working on something new. mayhap it will be up this evening. (or in the morning if the muse decides to keep me up again
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*woof*
I will go put some clothes on, ok.
Oh sweet Cheez-Its yes!
i rather liked being a flaming o!
-Viv- 
)but now that I do I love these lines! 
I've only just found your thread.....*stamps foot on floor* "Why didn't anyone tell me it was here??" Your poetry is amazing, I loved your last one the best though. Can't stop long, it was great to talk to you the other day....scary, but great